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Quote from JulietFrenchGirl

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I quickly spin around when something, or someone, bumps into me from behind. A second later a voice commands me to show myself, emanating from nowhere. The voice seems familiar, but I can't put my finger on it. I realize that had it actually been one of the witch's minions, I would have been infected. Also, I figure a bandit would have little to gain here, as well as the fact that few bandits are able to use magic. I halt the spell that was bending light around me.

Quote from JulietFrenchGirl

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((I am looking forward to finding out your undoubtedly devious plan, Bobert.))

As I weasel past an infected in an alley, I find myself in the main plaza, behind the large tower. I consider climbing up the tower to the throne room, but the windows are closed and there is likely to be tighter security up there. Instead, I just checked for anyone by the door, and slowly opened it once I was sure no one was there to notice it. I slipped inside and began carefully treading up the stone staircase. Good thing too, a wooden staircase would likely creak.

Quote from JulietFrenchGirl

(Jtank are we right beside each other but both invisible so the other can't see our character?)

((We were at opposite ends of Dras-Leona. Concor had climbed up the wall on the south side and Arinola had climbed up the wall on the north side. My character did jump down though, and started heading towards the tower in the center of the city. Because of this (the tower being in the center, so both characters would arrive at roughly the same time) it would be quite possible for Concor and Arinola to either a. bump into each other or b. one to notice the other opening the door to the tower.))

Finally the city of Dras-Leona comes into sight, it's giant walls rising over the horizon. Impenetrable, certainly, but only from the ground. Just as I did in Melian, I pulled out the thin enchanted sticks, inserting them into the grooves between the bricks and pulling myself up. This time, I am sure to bend the light around myself before reaching the top. A few seconds later, I find I made a wise choice, as a guard walks by the spot I was pulling myself up onto. I freeze, as I have not muted myself. The guard did not notice though, and after he gets a safe distance away I climb up onto the battlements. A quick scan of the city reveals this one to be very much more populated than Melian, and the citizens to be a bit more lively. Clearly the witch keeps this city much more under control, it's banners torn down rather than left to rot, and fairly well tended gardens throughout the city. I suppose those that the witch infects must still eat, though probably very little due to their slow pace and forced lack of brain activity. I think I will allow my curiosity to get the better of me, I need to see what state the witch is in... It's possible she is being strained by the number of people she has infected. I leap down from the wall, slowing myself with a few words towards the bottom. Knowing the witch's god complex, she'll be in the tallest tower.

((How could this already be dying? We started out with a better developed plot that should give everyone plenty to do, and we have a bunch of people roleplaying... Is it just that everyone's getting prepared for finals or something?))

((Also, P-P-P-P-P-P-P-P-P-P-P-P-P-PAGECLAIM!!!!!!!!!!!!! lucky 13^th))

Quote from Snivy_3

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((That was a very good post Snivy, but Celobra isn't in a Desert at the moment. That's fine though, maybe it could be a small tribe of people or something. You're a creative guy, you'll come up with something. I personally haven't posted because Concor is traveling and more time must elapse before he can arrive at Dras-Leona, preferably at the same time as you guys (i.e. Celobra, Nathaniel, Arinola, and Fraener).))

Quote from xXAlbionXx

It looks really awesome but I would really like it if you could update it to 1.5.2.

We are currently working on some new features, as well as fixing textures, before we update. You could check if the current version works with 1.5.2, if you have not already, as sometimes mods will not break between minor updates.

Quote from Snivy_3

((Do you think it was better or worse than my original place holder that I was going to use which was a bacteria colony, welded by magic residue into a suit of armor, about 20 feet tall, that was enchanted, an slowly became MORE intelligent than your typical homo sapiens, and holding a grudge against t)).

((Snivy, I'm sorry if we seem like huge downers, but I'm fairly sure we can all agree that while the thing with the bacteria is interesting, neither of these ideas really belong in an Eragon roleplay. It's fine, good even, to come up with creative ideas and plots to make the roleplay more interesting, but the key to a good idea is that it seems like it would fit into the Eragon books. Other than your particularly creative ideas, I think there's only one thing that could be improved with your posts: they tend to be a little fragmented. I'll just take your last post, for instance, and try to make it a bit less fragmented:
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I heard a stomping sound-something large was headed my way. The reason I could tell it was my way was because it knocked down a pillar-and stormed through a wall in a turn of bad reflexes. I broke into a full speed run, heading towards a desert. I quickly became exhausted, as I hadn't eaten for several days. excluding a leaf, until I received a spontaneous burst of energy. I felt better, even if I was sweltering, and Raced around a river.
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I heard a stomping sound-something large that was headed my way. The reason I could tell it was headed my way was because it knocked down a pillar that then fell beside me (here, you didn't actually give a reason you could tell it was heading towards you. Saying that you could hear the wall falling closer to you would also work). I broke into a full speed run, heading towards a desert. I quickly became exhausted, as I hadn't eaten anything other than a leaf for several days. Suddenly, I received a spontaneous burst of energy. I felt better, even if I was sweltering, and raced around a river.))

((Also, good tips Ybj1))

Quote from Gales92

The only thing I don't like about the story of this RP is that Eragon came back.

((Yes, I noticed that too. However, the exact wording was that he would never stand in Alagaesia again, so it is technically possible for him to come back, but he would just not stand. I guess he could always be riding Saphira, or maybe he became crippled at some point (O.K., probably the first one). We could always just remove that part though, it's not vital that he came back, we could have just beat those riders without him.))

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((I take offense at that. I am rather good at posting for a person who has only been doing this for close to two years(I think). Plus you can only expect so much from a forum filled with people who's age ranges from 10-26 or so. I myself am only 15 yet I have a rather good grasp on what should be expect from people when it comes to posting.))

((Sorry about that, I should have made it clear there were some that were doing a very good job, such as yourself. I think that your posts are better than my own, to be honest, clearly you put a lot of effort into each. The same goes to you Bobert (as well as a few others).))

Quote from Teknonick

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((Yeah, I must say that the quality (or lack thereof) of posts on the old thread was definitely a main factor in my not posting so much. I was hoping that we would start fresh with this one and have good posts from the beginning, and not stop having good posts. That hasn't exactly happened so far.))

Quote from ybj1

(Recap please? Where are people?))

((Arinola (Juliet), Nathaniel (Bob), Celobra (KitKat), and Fraener (Kokolo) are all by Dras-Leona; Maosu and Anunir (Tek and Gales, respectively) are in Ceunon; Tiol (Soren) is also near Dras-Leona; Plasma (Snivy) is by Uru' Baen (I think); and Concor (myself) is just North-East of Melian. Why do I always end up being the geographer for these roleplays?))

It's an emoticon, it's supposed to represent a sideways cat face. : being the eyes and 3 being the mouth.

Quote from Gales92

((I am going to school soon so I won't be able to post anything. In the books Eragon wasn't meant to find sapphira, I currently forget the name of the person it was suppose to be but it was suppose to go to him. So in my eyes it was as if sapphira changed where she was going. It's been a long time since I read the books.))

((Ah, yes, I believe that Arya was trying to teleport Saphira's egg to Brom, but instead it ended up a bit off course, in The Spine, a few paces away from where Eragon was standing. Although it was not suggested, as far as I remember, that Saphira altered the course of the teleport, I think it's a fairly logical deduction that indeed, that could have happened.))

As I approach the city walls, I pull out two incredibly thin sticks, each enchanted to be able to support my weight. Not exactly a coincidence, that one of the few things I've made since I left my home and workshop would be an altered stick. Normally, I would just fly over the wall, but I think a less conspicuous entrance is in order. I drive one of the sticks into the cracks between the bricks in the wall, drive in the next one a bit higher, and begin the climb. A short while after, I am at the top of the wall. I quickly begin to bend the light around me with a few words, as I would be clearly visible standing on top of the wall. A quick look at the city shows how complete the witch's control over this area is. Bodies wander the streets, sans knowledge, sans goals, sans feeling. Homes lie in disrepair. Towers that were clearly once adorned in great banners, now stand stark, with threads of their banners left trailing in the breeze.

It is clear that what I suspected was true. The witch does not have the power to control all the people she possesses at once. This is good news, yet sad. Clearly, she cannot ever gain control of more land, and by extension people, or it is likely her control over these people will weaken, even break. And yet, I know it is not fair to let these people suffer so the rest can live without fear of domination. Alas, there is nothing I alone can do.

I hop down from the walls, and end the invisibility spell. I begin my journey to Dras-Leona, then throughout the land, back to my home in Ellesmera.

Quote from Teknonick

((I know Bawb. But BEFORE they decide to hatch, how do they know? :3))

((This was never really explained in the book, they just instinctively know (or perhaps it's a destiny type deal). They were never described as actually being conscious in the egg, Saphira, for instance, Eragon's dragon, simply hatched a few days after Eragon first touched the egg. For roleplay purposes, I think it would be fine to hatch right away though.))

I passed by a guardhouse earlier, which I thought was abandoned. It was not. The guard was there, on the floor, half rotted. He was obviously one of those who did not survive the possession of the witch. This only shows how important my goal was. Of course, I already knew she was dangerous, thinking back to my father, who had been infected shortly after the witch invaded Osilon. I kept running. Shortly after, the city of Melian came rising above the horizon. Almost there.