Your writing is good, but my perfectionism is gnawing at me as I read it.
It's possible that I'm being over-critical, but you need to learn the difference between 'then' and 'than'. Just reading the Prologue, I can see multiple times that you've used 'then' when it should be 'than'. It's not a massive mistake, but still one that probably shouldn't be there when the rest of your writing is that good. It just lowers the otherwise high level of writing.
If you don't mind me asking, how old are you?
Thank you for pointing that out. Typos will be fixed.
I am using WebGL and I can't open spoilers, looked like the story for me as well.
Sorry about that. I had that problem before, but when I started using Google Chrome it stopped. If you have Chrome, I think that the spoilers would work on it.
Wow. I have been thinking about this same idea for some time. It really is an awesome idea that would make the game a lot more interesting. Maybe someone can make a mod...
I'm kind of thinking, since we already have zombies that mindlessly walk towards you and have no weapons, why not make your skeletal knight stronger? Give them a sword, and have them circle around the player, maybe even give them a jump attack that does extra damage if not dodged. I think they could be a great harder mob to beat that you could find in the overworld...just not as common as the rest.
I like the wanderer, too. But I would give him an iron sword.
I'm kind of thinking, since we already have zombies that mindlessly walk towards you and have no weapons, why not make your skeletal knight stronger? Give them a sword, and have them circle around the player, maybe even give them a jump attack that does extra damage if not dodged. I think they could be a great harder mob to beat that you could find in the overworld...just not as common as the rest.
I like the wanderer, too. But I would give him an iron sword.
Hmmm...That sounds like a great idea!
I wanted the skeletal knight to be holding a sword in the picture, but I couldn't figure out how to do that.
Your ideas for the skeletal knight sound awesome!
Yes, it's really well written.
No, Herobrine is not completely different.
There are two things that put me off Minecraft fan-fics.
1. Stories about Herobrine.
2. Stories about Endermen.
I see them too much to enjoy any story about them. Granted, your story is written exceptionally well and deserves far more credit than I give it.
But in the end, it's about Herobrine and Endermen.
I just don't see why so many people hate Herobrine. Is his name like a curse or something?
But if you don't like stories about Herobrine and endermen, then this isn't the story for you. It has plenty of endermen and quite a few things with Herobrine.
But still, thank you for reading!
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The next person thinks I am crazy. HEHEHEHEHEHE!!!!
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The next Person will post below me.
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Also, that music thing in the beginning of act 2 sounds vaguely familiar...
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Thank you for pointing that out. Typos will be fixed.
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Sorry about that. I had that problem before, but when I started using Google Chrome it stopped. If you have Chrome, I think that the spoilers would work on it.
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Hmmm...That sounds like a great idea!
I wanted the skeletal knight to be holding a sword in the picture, but I couldn't figure out how to do that.
Your ideas for the skeletal knight sound awesome!
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Thanks!
Chapter four will come out in a few days, assuming everything goes according to plan. I'm still working on it.
EDIT: Wow. I guess things didn't go according to plan, because it has been more then a few days. Don't worry, it should come out soon!
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I just don't see why so many people hate Herobrine. Is his name like a curse or something?
But if you don't like stories about Herobrine and endermen, then this isn't the story for you. It has plenty of endermen and quite a few things with Herobrine.
But still, thank you for reading!