SO let me start by apologizing... if this is in the wrong place I am sorry but I was not sure where else to put it. Our gaming community is in the process of developing rules for our own server that would create a solid PvP system utilizing the Tekkit lite mod. We also plan to implement the towny mod and the lockette mod. Our ideas concerning how we might do this are explained below.
First, we have to have factions. This wouldn't be a mod but something run out of our own community forums. There will be a brief period of factional applications and as long as your faction satisfies certain requirements ( number of members, location, name etc. ) your leader will be granted a town by the towny mod and you can found.
Warfare and slavery - there is not much on warfare as that will come out of implementation. We will edit the rules as we go but the main elements of the rules rise out of the results of warfare. First, we will likely have to set goals for the conquest of a faction. Likely you will have to shut down their power systems and breach their walls. Once a factions is conquered they have two options.
First, they can openly submit to slavery. During a period of slavery their town will be a supplying a steady source of raw materials of the victors' choice. Likely no more than three to keep it fair. The enslaved will have to build up weapons and resources secretly before they can incite a rebellion. In order to successfully overthrow their oppressors they will have to keep the enemy out of their town for a period of half an hour.
The second option is a little better. They can sue for sovereignty of their faction and pay off their would-be oppressors with whatever three resources they want. Under this system the victors can request items resources or anything ( within reason) . The benefit for the conquered is that they get to rebuild their town amd stay out of slavery. In slavery they can only supply materials.
These are only some basic ideas and the concept itself is in alpha... barely. Anysuggestions would be appreciated.
Step 1 : Go to mods
Step 2 : get Technic
Step 3 : after ridiculously easy install enjoy hours mining new metals as tin and copper, make electrically powered machines get energy from any of the numerous power sources like solar, geothermal and nuclear. Use new construction blocks like marble. Use new techniques like micro-slicing blocks into nifty borders and wall paper. Enjoy the ridiculous magic abilities and items. Cross breed plants, brew rum and beer. If you need more convincing .... jetpacks and lasers.
Some classic stories in here. My scariest moment was when they did the new update with the endermen and I went up to the top of my house at night to work on it. It was raining and I heard a weird noise - you know those weird ones that the endermen make - and I snap my crosshairs on an enderman. He looks at me and I just readied my sword, but he just stood there. I was all like wtf ....? so I went back to work and the ****er appears right behind me. Thinking I would escape, I ran back into my house but it was too high and he kept appearing around me. I killed him but it was a major freak out moment.
I have a unit test this thursday so I am probably not going to be posting again until friday. I have a lot of studying to do. I hope you are all enjoying this story so far!
This is a neat story. Interesting take on Endermen. I feel bad for him. There are a couple places that this story is tough to read. I will post again after class. Check out my story when you get the chance!
Have you ever generated a world only to end up on an island in the middle of the ocean with maybe a tree or two? I know that this type of map used to be a throw away for me, but recently I came up with a challenge based on this type of map. It occurred to me that pretty much everything I needed was on this island. Food, shelter and mines. Granted the mines were DEEP and tough to get to, but that made it more interesting.
CHALLENGE : You start on an island. You are not allowed to leave the island in a boat. Too easy. You can use anything on the island or under the island.
WIN FACTOR : Build a really bad ass building on said island.
ATM this doesn't have a lot to go on but it is late and I get up in a few hours, so I will add more tomorrow.
SEED: -7666811884770059745
This is just the seed that I found, but you can use other island seeds that meet the requirements.
Seed requirements : You have to start on an island in the middle of an ocean biome. Standing on the ocean-level surface of the island, there cannot be any other landmasses visible
This is pretty good so far, but you would do well to revise your work.. When Dill is explaining to Rick what happened with him and Ryan, you put Rick a few times where I am certain you meant Ryan. Other than a few accidental omissions and mistypes, this is pretty good. The grammar needs some honing in a couple spots, but again, it is still enjoyable and a well-paced story. +1 for some writing talent : )
If you wouldn't mind checking out my fan fiction story, I would greatly appreciate it. If you like the first entry, you can check out the rest of it on my blog via the link in my signature. Thanks a lot!
There are some grammatical errors here and maybe a few spelling errors but this is definitely a good read. For it being your second language, I am impressed by how much the ability in this piece raises the standard of fan fiction on this forum. I am going to keep reading through. I can go more into depth about grammar and such if you would like. Should you so desire, shoot me a PM and I will oblige you.
Also, if you would check out my fan fiction I would be very grateful. If you like it, you can find the rest of it on my blog via the link in my signature. A reply with feedback or just a kind word for a bump would be appreciated! Thanks! +1 for english-as-a-second-language win!
Pretty good so far, I am enjoying it even though I have only gotten through chapter one. Your use of dialogue to break up the exposition is good and you have a nice mixture. One of my lit teachers once said that a story is like neapolitan ice cream : you have to have equal amounts vanilla, chocolate and strawberry you have a good ice cream. Likewise, a good story has a good combination of dialogue and expository (non-dialogue) prose. Your weakness lies in your use of vocabulary, colloquial speech and redundant and contradictory language.
"I felt a slight presense as we were walking, like as if we were being followed."
'Like as if' is a redundant colloquialism. Like and as if both refer to one thing that is similar to something else. 'as if we were being followed' makes it less jerky.
"Sounded like footprints near the trees."
Ok, footprints are the inanimate indentation left by a footfall or footstep. Footprints do not make a noise, foot steps and foot falls do.
"Shes got what most people would say the 'perfect hourglass body'."
Cliches. They are typically indicative of, not meant as an insult, lazy writing. You know what she looks like but rather than saying something like "the supple curvature of her hips and bosom accentuated the femininity of her strong body" you went to something that, yes, we already have a cultural context for as 'perfect hourglass body'. Go poetic. We want you to be descriptive, that is why we are reading this book. Go to town! Overall I would say that this story is interesting and fun. I like your descriptions such as " I woke up on a sunny day, where the skies were clear, an occasional cloud or two and that nice summer breeze you get that just makes it that much better." Painting a picture of what you want us to see is better than talking about what you want us to see ( as with the perfect hourglass figure ). Show us don't tell us. I hope this feedback was helpful. I am not trying to be salient, just trying to help out another writer! BTW, if you have the free time, check out my fan fiction. It is called a writer's journal. I only have the first entry up in the thread. The rest is on my blog which you can get to via the link in my signature. ttfn! +1 for a fledgling writer : D !
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First, we have to have factions. This wouldn't be a mod but something run out of our own community forums. There will be a brief period of factional applications and as long as your faction satisfies certain requirements ( number of members, location, name etc. ) your leader will be granted a town by the towny mod and you can found.
Warfare and slavery - there is not much on warfare as that will come out of implementation. We will edit the rules as we go but the main elements of the rules rise out of the results of warfare. First, we will likely have to set goals for the conquest of a faction. Likely you will have to shut down their power systems and breach their walls. Once a factions is conquered they have two options.
First, they can openly submit to slavery. During a period of slavery their town will be a supplying a steady source of raw materials of the victors' choice. Likely no more than three to keep it fair. The enslaved will have to build up weapons and resources secretly before they can incite a rebellion. In order to successfully overthrow their oppressors they will have to keep the enemy out of their town for a period of half an hour.
The second option is a little better. They can sue for sovereignty of their faction and pay off their would-be oppressors with whatever three resources they want. Under this system the victors can request items resources or anything ( within reason) . The benefit for the conquered is that they get to rebuild their town amd stay out of slavery. In slavery they can only supply materials.
These are only some basic ideas and the concept itself is in alpha... barely. Anysuggestions would be appreciated.
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Step 2 : get Technic
Step 3 : after ridiculously easy install enjoy hours mining new metals as tin and copper, make electrically powered machines get energy from any of the numerous power sources like solar, geothermal and nuclear. Use new construction blocks like marble. Use new techniques like micro-slicing blocks into nifty borders and wall paper. Enjoy the ridiculous magic abilities and items. Cross breed plants, brew rum and beer. If you need more convincing .... jetpacks and lasers.
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Have you ever generated a world only to end up on an island in the middle of the ocean with maybe a tree or two? I know that this type of map used to be a throw away for me, but recently I came up with a challenge based on this type of map. It occurred to me that pretty much everything I needed was on this island. Food, shelter and mines. Granted the mines were DEEP and tough to get to, but that made it more interesting.
CHALLENGE : You start on an island. You are not allowed to leave the island in a boat. Too easy. You can use anything on the island or under the island.
WIN FACTOR : Build a really bad ass building on said island.
ATM this doesn't have a lot to go on but it is late and I get up in a few hours, so I will add more tomorrow.
SEED: -7666811884770059745
This is just the seed that I found, but you can use other island seeds that meet the requirements.
Seed requirements : You have to start on an island in the middle of an ocean biome. Standing on the ocean-level surface of the island, there cannot be any other landmasses visible
Post your progress!
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If you wouldn't mind checking out my fan fiction story, I would greatly appreciate it. If you like the first entry, you can check out the rest of it on my blog via the link in my signature. Thanks a lot!
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Also, if you would check out my fan fiction I would be very grateful. If you like it, you can find the rest of it on my blog via the link in my signature. A reply with feedback or just a kind word for a bump would be appreciated! Thanks! +1 for english-as-a-second-language win!
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"I felt a slight presense as we were walking, like as if we were being followed."
'Like as if' is a redundant colloquialism. Like and as if both refer to one thing that is similar to something else. 'as if we were being followed' makes it less jerky.
"Sounded like footprints near the trees."
Ok, footprints are the inanimate indentation left by a footfall or footstep. Footprints do not make a noise, foot steps and foot falls do.
"Shes got what most people would say the 'perfect hourglass body'."
Cliches. They are typically indicative of, not meant as an insult, lazy writing. You know what she looks like but rather than saying something like "the supple curvature of her hips and bosom accentuated the femininity of her strong body" you went to something that, yes, we already have a cultural context for as 'perfect hourglass body'. Go poetic. We want you to be descriptive, that is why we are reading this book. Go to town!
Overall I would say that this story is interesting and fun. I like your descriptions such as " I woke up on a sunny day,
where the skies were clear, an occasional cloud or two and that nice summer breeze you get that just makes it that much better." Painting a picture of what you want us to see is better than talking about what you want us to see ( as with the perfect hourglass figure ). Show us don't tell us. I hope this feedback was helpful. I am not trying to be salient, just trying to help out another writer! BTW, if you have the free time, check out my fan fiction. It is called a writer's journal. I only have the first entry up in the thread. The rest is on my blog which you can get to via the link in my signature. ttfn! +1 for a fledgling writer : D !