First and foremost apologies for the wait. Our whitelist staff has been delayed by real life hurdles with Covid 19 but all the same it should not have taken this long. Your application is
Accepted!
I quite like your RP examples especially. They portray the character well and his approach to troubling situations, where his priorities lie, so forth. All seems in order and I am pleased to welcome you to the forum. Please refer to this post as you enter, as well as this one.
Well hello Architect Felos. It's been quite some time, hasn't it? This server, in my opinion, is well worth any efforts to get in. It has a large focus on character development. You'll feel right at home. While Aeonis was a lovely place, Saphriel is its superior in my opinion in a number of ways.
I personally found the struggle of Half-Elves the most interesting, with their battle against the racism of ancient traditions and overbearing Elven Houses of immense power. Right now each of the races are nice. We have a heavy Elven representation, not as many humans, very few Dwarves at present.
And thank you for the compliments, you are most kind.
In general the application was very brief, but it had decent lore inclusion. There is nothing wrong with the story itself, but the magic application is lacking. We require quite a bit more to see that talent granted.
The story is relatively fine but does not read easily. If you expand upon it it might be more acceptable, but the magic app is definitely lackluster. There are separate schools for illusion and light (holy) for one. The understanding of the amount o power a beginner would have is fine, but the whole thing needs some effort.
We look forward to a new attempt however. We feel that you can manage the adjustments.
Enjoyable app, decent lore inclusion, lovely character that should be fun in the setting and who I imagine will find a home in this world quickly. Also you know the difference between its and it's, so I can't help but approve the app.
Like Mutat3dBread above, it just needs more work. In this case the story is fine but we would like to see the rp examples worked out a bit better and more in depth. It's really the turning point for the app in this case. Ah, also notable is the age of the character, if you intend for him to teach other scouts he should probably be older. 28 is barely 19 compared to a human.
Still pending, still need more work on your back history. The style is fun to read, the character looks great, but we need more. This simply is not enough, work at it again. Small note, Dwelves have a massive child mortality rate, so a family that size is utterly unheard of. Just something to factor in, you can keep the large family.
This one was a bit borderline. It's good in essence, nearly there in spirit, but we require a bit more detail if you can manage. The lore inclusion is fine, though you should probably account for the presence of the war. Either way, I suggest bumping up his age a bit, 26 is roughly 18, unless that was your intent. Then by all means.
What I'd like to see is just a touch more work and effort. It really is at the razor's edge.
Lovely application, and we're glad that you included that the slavers posed as a mercantile company. Slavery has been illegal icly for time out of mind, but it does exist in some dark corners of society. Please keep in mind that there was a very long lasting war that would have served as backdrop to most of Rivan's life. Humorously he'll have missed the end of it during his time in the mines.
Please also note he will not in fact be a near master of the blade. That is earned in time, but he is obviously skilled.
We need you to expand upon the personality section on the biography please. There is a minimum of three paragraphs. You definitely are on the right track, simply add more and we foresee no problems. Apologies for the wait, we will take a look the moment the app hits the thread.
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First and foremost apologies for the wait. Our whitelist staff has been delayed by real life hurdles with Covid 19 but all the same it should not have taken this long. Your application is
Accepted!
I quite like your RP examples especially. They portray the character well and his approach to troubling situations, where his priorities lie, so forth. All seems in order and I am pleased to welcome you to the forum. Please refer to this post as you enter, as well as this one.
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Well hello Architect Felos. It's been quite some time, hasn't it? This server, in my opinion, is well worth any efforts to get in. It has a large focus on character development. You'll feel right at home. While Aeonis was a lovely place, Saphriel is its superior in my opinion in a number of ways.
I personally found the struggle of Half-Elves the most interesting, with their battle against the racism of ancient traditions and overbearing Elven Houses of immense power. Right now each of the races are nice. We have a heavy Elven representation, not as many humans, very few Dwarves at present.
And thank you for the compliments, you are most kind.
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MisterBlistah, your magic app is now accepted.
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Pending
This application is a mess. Format it properly and send it again please.
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Accepted but your magic application is Denied
In general the application was very brief, but it had decent lore inclusion. There is nothing wrong with the story itself, but the magic application is lacking. We require quite a bit more to see that talent granted.
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Denied
The story is relatively fine but does not read easily. If you expand upon it it might be more acceptable, but the magic app is definitely lackluster. There are separate schools for illusion and light (holy) for one. The understanding of the amount o power a beginner would have is fine, but the whole thing needs some effort.
We look forward to a new attempt however. We feel that you can manage the adjustments.
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Denied
Everything needs work. The concepts of the history are relatively fine but it needs fleshing out, and the rp examples need to be much expanded.
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Accepted
Enjoyable app, decent lore inclusion, lovely character that should be fun in the setting and who I imagine will find a home in this world quickly. Also you know the difference between its and it's, so I can't help but approve the app.
Server IP: 192.99.20.170:30352
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Website: http://therealmofsaphriel.enjin.com/home
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Pending
Like Mutat3dBread above, it just needs more work. In this case the story is fine but we would like to see the rp examples worked out a bit better and more in depth. It's really the turning point for the app in this case. Ah, also notable is the age of the character, if you intend for him to teach other scouts he should probably be older. 28 is barely 19 compared to a human.
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Still pending, still need more work on your back history. The style is fun to read, the character looks great, but we need more. This simply is not enough, work at it again. Small note, Dwelves have a massive child mortality rate, so a family that size is utterly unheard of. Just something to factor in, you can keep the large family.
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Pending
This one was a bit borderline. It's good in essence, nearly there in spirit, but we require a bit more detail if you can manage. The lore inclusion is fine, though you should probably account for the presence of the war. Either way, I suggest bumping up his age a bit, 26 is roughly 18, unless that was your intent. Then by all means.
What I'd like to see is just a touch more work and effort. It really is at the razor's edge.
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Accepted
Lovely application, and we're glad that you included that the slavers posed as a mercantile company. Slavery has been illegal icly for time out of mind, but it does exist in some dark corners of society. Please keep in mind that there was a very long lasting war that would have served as backdrop to most of Rivan's life. Humorously he'll have missed the end of it during his time in the mines.
Please also note he will not in fact be a near master of the blade. That is earned in time, but he is obviously skilled.
Server IP: 192.99.20.170:30352
Texture Pack: http://resourcepack.net/conquest-resource-pack/
Website: http://therealmofsaphriel.enjin.com/home
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Accepted
The personality section could still use some expanding, but your RP examples leave us confident in your ability. So please enjoy the server!
Welcome to Saphriel!
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Texture Pack: http://resourcepack.net/conquest-resource-pack/
Website: http://therealmofsaphriel.enjin.com/home
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Pending
We need you to expand upon the personality section on the biography please. There is a minimum of three paragraphs. You definitely are on the right track, simply add more and we foresee no problems. Apologies for the wait, we will take a look the moment the app hits the thread.
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Accepted
The changes you made have been deemed acceptable. Apologies for the wait!
Server IP: 192.99.20.170:30352
Texture Pack: http://resourcepack.net/conquest-resource-pack/
Website: http://therealmofsaphriel.enjin.com/home