Well... um... I don't see a wide selection of answers in the poll so I'll just feedback as a comment.
I didn't quite understand this video. I mean... was there an actual plot? Humour? Problems? Conclusion to anything? Well... no, there is not. Since it didn't have anything of that sort, I honestly has a hard time finding any entertainment value to this video.
Maybe next time have a purpose to the character, and a plot that makes sense?
I also recommend you leave your comments (0:10) out of the video (or at least at the end), and instead use the 'leave a message' feature when uploading. It shouldn't take 40 seconds for the actual video to begin.
Well... um... I don't see a wide selection of answers in the poll so I'll just feedback as a comment.
I didn't quite understand this video. I mean... was there an actual plot? Humour? Problems? Conclusion to anything? Well... no, there is not. Since it didn't have anything of that sort, I honestly has a hard time finding any entertainment value to this video.
Maybe next time have a purpose to the character, and a plot that makes sense?
I also recommend you leave your comments (0:10) out of the video (or at least at the end), and instead use the 'leave a message' feature when uploading. It shouldn't take 40 seconds for the actual video to begin.
EDIT: It was supposed to be the daily life of me, a average gamer.
Thank you for the feedback. I will attempt to make more quality content now.
Such as "leave a comment below". I needed that feedback.
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As a first time viewer of your work, I have to agree with EngelBV on the plot aspect.
The one thing that left me a bit confused was the continuity with the stairs. He goes down one flight. Two. Then the emerges into the new room coming up the stairs? Perhaps he went half way down the next flight and then stopped because he smelled the breakfast? If so, you should show the character when that type of realization happens.
Also, make sure that your actor knows which direction they should be going, and if they run into a wall, don't be afraid to run another take! If the lack of coordination was intended, make sure to give an apparent cause, otherwise it just looks sloppy.
Don't be afraid to try something a little bit bigger next time!
As a first time viewer of your work, I have to agree with EngelBV on the plot aspect.
The one thing that left me a bit confused was the continuity with the stairs. He goes down one flight. Two. Then the emerges into the new room coming up the stairs? Perhaps he went half way down the next flight and then stopped because he smelled the breakfast? If so, you should show the character when that type of realization happens.
Also, make sure that your actor knows which direction they should be going, and if they run into a wall, don't be afraid to run another take! If the lack of coordination was intended, make sure to give an apparent cause, otherwise it just looks sloppy.
Don't be afraid to try something a little bit bigger next time!
Thank you for the feedback (so much!)
It's been a while (about 9 months) since my last machinima. I'll try to make more quality videos and agree to make more takes! I will also try to take about, eh, some more minutes to make a storyline
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I didn't quite understand this video. I mean... was there an actual plot? Humour? Problems? Conclusion to anything? Well... no, there is not. Since it didn't have anything of that sort, I honestly has a hard time finding any entertainment value to this video.
Maybe next time have a purpose to the character, and a plot that makes sense?
I also recommend you leave your comments (0:10) out of the video (or at least at the end), and instead use the 'leave a message' feature when uploading. It shouldn't take 40 seconds for the actual video to begin.
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EDIT: It was supposed to be the daily life of me, a average gamer.
Thank you for the feedback. I will attempt to make more quality content now.
Such as "leave a comment below". I needed that feedback.
The one thing that left me a bit confused was the continuity with the stairs. He goes down one flight. Two. Then the emerges into the new room coming up the stairs? Perhaps he went half way down the next flight and then stopped because he smelled the breakfast? If so, you should show the character when that type of realization happens.
Also, make sure that your actor knows which direction they should be going, and if they run into a wall, don't be afraid to run another take! If the lack of coordination was intended, make sure to give an apparent cause, otherwise it just looks sloppy.
Don't be afraid to try something a little bit bigger next time!
Thank you for the feedback (so much!)
It's been a while (about 9 months) since my last machinima.
I'll try to make more quality videos and agree to make more takes!
I will also try to take about, eh, some more minutes to make a storyline