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This took a loooonnng time to write so positive criticism will be appreciated. Please feel free to tell me what you think about

it. Do i need to change it? And please tell me your ideas on what the "to be continued" part should continue.

THE ORE MYSTERY:

Detectives, don't wake up early.

But the mystery.

That's coming for me...

Well you'll just have to see.

There I was, counting sticks, needing more,

about to go to the store.

I heard a knock on the door,

There were I could see, was an ore...

An ore mystery, An ore mystery,

It was up to me,

As everyone could see,

What a detective I can be.

I grabbed my torch,

And ran to the porch.

I needed to be wise,

But to my surprise.

The picture of the robber...

Was my very own, brother.

All of my thrills.

Turned into chills.

I ran to the town hall.

But the picture on every wall,

Was my horror.

I turned to the mirror.

We looked so identical,

What if everyone guessed, If everyone knew.

They'd have their very own stew,

With a bit of rumor to chew.

I knew what I had to do,

But where could I find my first clue.

I waited for every faded light.

Knowing what was right.

I was ready to fight,

So that very night.

I went to his house,

As quiet as a mouse.

An ore mystery, an ore mystery.

It was up to me,

As everyone could see,

What a detective I could be.

I found the ore in a chest,

But where was the rest...

I went to his bed...

And there I found him dead.

Tell me what you think

It was but I changed it a bit.