In the beginning, there was dirt; from this dirt came stone; within this stone grew coal, iron, and soon diamond. With these tools, Steve made great things, to be viewed by all... But wouldn't it like, really suck, if Steve never finished his magnum opus? So, I'm back.
I'm zuned1. I wrote the two most viewed stories on this sub-forum, and poured my life into it. I'm 18; when I first started them, I was only 13. My life's changed a lot since then; my mother passed a way little more than a year ago; I'm a lot more happy in my life. But no matter how I changed, I always remember this part of my life. So, I'm here to work on this all over again. I will continue where I was in Vagrants, as I remember what I wanted to do with the plot.
I hope my writing style hasn't changed too much, or at least not for the worse. If you want to follow me writing it, after I write the first chapter and submit this post I'm gonna go stream some writing on twitch! Follow me on Twitter @zuned11 or on Twitch zuned11! The more support I get, the more I'll keep writing! I'm busy, but if demand is there I'll do it!
Resurrection of the Mine
It's been a while since I left off, isn't it? Well, for those who don't remember, I'm Alex. I'm currently in a foreign kingdom, with my girlfriend and kidnapped princess Camie. We were at the inn when we left off, and Julia had just woken up.
We walked into our room at the inn, and one glance told me it all.
"What the hell are you doing sleeping with her?!" Julia shouted. "She's been trying to kill us this whole time! This isn't the first time either, you douche!"
"I wasn't sleeping with her! And you have to hear me out! She was possessed by her crown, which the king's been forcing her to wear! She never had free will. She's been a slave to the king's will this whole time. Oh, and it has seductive powers! She can influence other's minds! She can explain the whole thing, right Camie?" I explained. I added that seduction bit myself, gotta cover my own trail, yeah?
"Yes, Julia. Alex tells the truth. I was possessed by the crown, forced to do actions against my own will. I did not enjoy what I did, but when I had to make action, I was not in control of my decisions, whether it be torturing you or seducing Alex. And I ask that you put it aside, and that we can try to take down the King. I have Alex's support, I will be trying, and with your help, I believe we can take him down. But if you're against us, we will surely fail."
"Fine, but only if you aren't allowed to sleep in the same room as my Alex," Julia begrudgingly agreed. Camie nodded her agreement. I got Julia some food and we sat down to plan. "We're two soldiers and a brat. What would we even do to storm this castle?" As Julia spoke between bites of bread, I started to draw a plan on a paper. Camie glanced at my work, and dismissed it. "We can't just dig under the wall, and even if we did there are guards along the wall to keep watch inside and outside. Even if you get into the castle yard, there's only one entrance, save for windows. And the watchtowers watch the windows as well, so that won't work. We can't blow a hole in the wall, for the obvious noise issue."
"Well, thanks for that, Ms. Positive. What do you propose then?" Julia asked. "Sounds like it's impossible to get in without being noticed."
"There's a rumor of a master thief in this town. No one knows if he exists, there's just a calling card left when valuables are stolen. The thief always leaves a J in redstone in place of the stolen good. No one knows how they do it, only that no one has ever seen the thief. We could see how they do it? Maybe they'll help us. They've stolen from places more secure than the castle." Camie's idea was very far-fetched, chasing after a ghost. But we had no other ideas. "Sure," I said. "How do we lure the thief out then?"
"I think I've got a plan..." Said Julia. "Camie, where'd you lose your crown?"
"I lost it when we fell into the lake. When I awoke, I didn't have it, so that's the only place it could be. Why?"
"We're gonna bait the thief with your evil little crown."
With our plan in mind, we set out to work. We had to set up the crown and get the thief to know about it. So we'd found a big auction taking place, and set about making our ware known. Julia went around asking normal merchants and friends if they knew of a special golden crown with a rare red gem in it. She did this for a week leading up to the biggest auction in the whole kingdom; rumors of a rare crown were spreading like wildfire, everyone wanting to get in on the fortune it would provide, despite not being worth a relative dime. Camie set about making the wealthy informed, sending letters to the elite class, inquiring if they knew where she could obtain the crown.
And I set about to do what I do best: fight. Underground fighting rings weren't impossible to find, and they were lucrative if you knew what you were doing. Having taken down a great evil once before, most of these guys were nothing. Why was I fighting? I was in charge of fundraising for the auction. It was fun, beating up a few dudes here and there. Bet it on myself and double my money, since no one would bet on a random nobody.
It didn't take long for the day of the auction. Julia had sourced our outfits; I got a nice suit, and Camie and Julia had some beautiful dresses. We were getting ready in the Inn, putting our outfits on as we prepared for the thief.
I took a small dagger and put it inside my coat, just in case. I finished and left my room, and headed to Julia's. I walked in and was met with an unhappy surprise.
"Hey, what the hell?!" Shouted Camie. I'd walked into the wrong room, and at the worst of times. "Ah, ****, I'm so sorry! I'll just go, sorry..." I said, blushing.
"Well, if you'd asked, I would've still let you in." I blushed as I exited the room, and went to find Julia's.
"Julia, are you ready?" I asked. She came out in a gorgeous red wool dress. "Yeah, but where am I meant to hide my knife? I don't exactly have pockets." I showed her where she could keep it in her waistband, we got Camie, and went off.
The auction went relatively smooth. I bought a relic sword using my extra fight money, and waited until our turn. Then, the crown appeared on stage. Gasps were heard around the room as people were in shock about the crown. The auctioneer at the stand announced, "This is the rare Crown of Grivinia, given to us anonymously on the condition that it must be auctioned as a gift to families who have lost blood in the army," and then started the bidding. It started at a moderate value, but in order to escalate the value, I had been tasked to keep betting on it until no one else would. I repeatedly bet against other high class citizens, until eventually, I actually won. My win hadn't been a part of the plan, but it helped.
After the auction, I was approached and asked what I'd like to do with the crown. I told them to hold it at the auction house for a while until I could collect it safely, knowing that the security here was not the best. We had laid the bait, and now just had to wait for the thief to take it. Me, Julia and Camie would wait out the thief, and catch him in the theft.
Chapter 3 soon! Please stay tuned! Follow my Twitch or Twitter for updates!
Well, allow me to be the first to give you a hearty welcome back to the Lit section Zuned. I'm kmandy, fellow author, self-appointed jackass critic and one of those involved in the Convergence crossover project.
I'll be honest, I'm probably one of the few in this section who hasn't taken a look at Vagrants or 100 Days yet, but this seems a pretty decent place to start. And as of the first two chapters I'm hooked. You've established many of the key elements well enough for me to understand just about what happened. The prose is well written and your descriptions are good when used. The Dialogue also feels surprisingly natural for a Minefic.
Also, I have to give you props on the characters. Many Minefics do fall short in this aspect, forgetting to give their heroes defined personalities, instead focusing on plot and action. I myself fell into this trap in the first stretch of my own stuff. However, in the first two chapters, you've established your characters really well. It's also surprisingly rare to see a flawed protagonist. And by flawed I mean, dishonest and somewhat violent. I tried to do something similar, but it was... less subtle per say. It's just really refreshing to see a flawed protagonist, that we're supposed to sympathise with and root for, whose daily routine doesn't consist of plotting the assassinations of his friends, raving like a lunatic to no one, embarking on pointless revenge campaigns and knee-capping puppies in his spare time.
But yeah, a really strong return to the sub-section mate. 8.5/10 easily. Look forward to seeing more from you.
Would be great if you could check out some of my stuff too. #Ihavenoshame
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Thats great! Welcome back, but I swear to god, you kill Julia, you may find yourself in a similar situation with me, girl gotta do what she gotta do. One more thing to the fellow readers, I got a feeling book 1 and the evil king at the end, may be this king! Camie being his plan! Stay alert round that jerk!
"He seemed familiar, no thats impossible!"-Alex book 2, kings first meeting! YEAH WE JUST WENT THERE
Thx, and good idea, but I have another piece to add to the puzzle, he wants Alex's powers! And, going on, He may make Julia his tool, to get alex near the king, some can kill him and take da powas So ya your right I think
P.S think they will find the evil kings sold book here? Also it's a sea society so it makes sense with the fishermen
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Holy **** no way. I remember reading this YEARS ago and ABSOLUTELY falling in love with the story as it was pretty much the first of its kind. I can't believe you're continuing!!! This makes me so incredibly happy! I've always been a huge fan of the story and I absolutely can't wait to see where the story goes