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I entered this story for a contest on Planet MC along time ago, just want to share it here.
The judge, TheEnderCat5, ended up getting banned from PMC but privately he said I won.



. On the last five days of this contest, I literally wrote like 2 sentences. Don't judge my writing. Here we go.... *takes a deep breath*


This was my first contest. None of this, ever happened. So don’t comment with “OMG I don’t believe you!” All of the characters are real, though.

Click here to read my story:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hPsYgYejaYeTdu7KPGbrpxCPT-6nupD918SIdCiqz0M

Don't judge me.




Tags:
Story, Endercat5, Druxe


Credit:
I thank EnderCat5 for encouraging me through the way for my first contest.

Looks like, sounds like and reads like a 10-year-old wrote this.

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Looks like, sounds like and reads like a 10-year-old wrote this.

The reason for that is that the judge wanted it to be very humorous so I made it dumb but in a funny way.

Don't judge you and yet you share this story on this forum? Truly you must know this is the interwebs? We will judge you and your story nonetheless.

So the/or a judge told you what they wanted in your story? Then got banned from the said organization that was conducting the contest? And then later confides that you won but didn't? Judging from your story, the other stories submitted for this contest must have been atrocious. Didn't really find it entertaining or funny. Sort of sad that I will never get the minutes I spent reading that with a small hope that there was redemption at the end, back.

Hi, I'm kmany, self-appointed critic.

Well it's bad. But not unsavable. I've seen much worse. It's not quite as confusedly terrible as Order of the Stone and deluded in what quality is. Nor is it quite as pedantically unoriginal, self-congratulatory and lazy as something like A Scripted Let's Play [A "NEW" WAY OF STORYTELLING]. Both of which are stories I'd give a solid 1/10. This I'd give 3/10 or 4/10 to be fair to you.

I can tell most of the times that it is making a concerted effort to be dumb, instead of Wizmark's pretending that its a satire of bad fanfictions whilst also claiming that its something deep and meaningful. So I will give you credit for being honest. The prose also isn't awful (most of the time) and to be honest even the dialogue isn't even all that terrible.

But the problem is that a lot of it feels soulless and lacking in real effort, or at least understanding of what it takes to give writing personality. I suggest reading some of the other stories around atm, such as Bruvvy's work, Ninty's thing, Mister Blak's "My Wonderful Apprenticeship", Asen's "Book of Dreams", if you want to learn how to give your prose a bit more life, or if you want to look into humour I'm the only one who seems to do much in that these days (Fall and a Rise: A Vanillacraft Tale). There's also the fact that we have no idea what anything looks like. Half of the time it sounds like a description of your game, the rest it sounds like its trying to work with real people.

The dialogue, whilst passable also lacks any personality as well. The characters all sound the same. Whilst they don't have to be well-defined masterpieces, but some basic characteristics would be nice.

Overall, could be worse but could be a lot better.

I don't know why people don't like it. I think it's great! I didn't read all of it since its quite big but the bit I read was good!