The Meaning of Life, the Universe, and Everything.
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Long ago before the Red Invasion, before life ever came to our world, two beings came together out of the pure energy coursing through the very fabric of the universe. This energy was called mana, and the beings were Enirboreh and Steve. At this time, the world was a blank canvas, void of structure and meaning. The two beings became weary of this nothingness. Being born of mana, they began to shape the mana of the universe into physical things; planets, stars, life itself. And so, Earth was created. Steve and Enirboreh began to grow tired of one another, so they began creating companions of their own. Steve made sheep, pigs, cows and many other pleasant creatures. Enirboreh was however not skilled in the creation of life. He grew jealous of Steve’s creations and started to mutate and reshape them. Zombie-Pigmen and skeletons came into existence.
Steve saw what Enirboreh had done to his creations and made the ultimate life form, the Steves. He infused his own mana into the first Steves, Arken and Evla. Enirboreh tried to manipulate the Steves, but found the mana within them was protecting them. He began to become angry at his failure to manipulate Steve’s Steves so he sent his mutations to destroy Arken and Evla. Steve knew this would happen and taught Arken and Evla how to defend themselves. Arken was granted the vast knowledge of the material world and made extremely strong armor. Evla was granted the knowledge of mana manipulation and enchanted this armor. Arken and Evla fought off all that Enirboreh could throw at them.
Enirboreh became furious and began construction of even more horrifying creatures, however this would take many years for him to complete. During this time, Arken and Evla made a life for themselves. They had many children who were taught the arts of their parents. Life continued peacefully for several hundred years. The Steves had built a wondrous world for themselves. There were many cities and towns, but the greatest of all was Arkevlan, or “Genesis City” in Ancient Stevish. The city was so large, you could not see from one side to another when standing on it’s walls. The streets were lined with shops, theatres, gardens, houses and many more buildings. The streets were made of the most fertile soil on Earth that glowed slightly green and gave the city an aura of peace. There was a massive colosseum that lay in the heart of Arkevlan. Games of strength, intellect, and endurance took place daily in this massive arena. The Steves were happy.
This happiness would not last however. Enirboreh had constructed legions of corrupt creatures. He had also created the nether and the end worlds which he used to fuel his army; and so, Enirgor’den, the day of many deaths, came. Enirboreh unleashed his legions on Arkevlan. Steve had seen the armies approaching and readied the city. Iron golems sprang to life out of the very earth outside of the city walls. Steve himself appeared in the city ready to defend his creations. Enirboreh was surprised to see Steve helping his creations directly and decided to join the battle himself. As dusk approached, the battle began. The Steves fought alongside the iron golems for many hours until each side’s numbers had whittled down to only a few hundred. This is when Enirboreh and Steve stood face to face with one another. The anger in Enirboreh had drove the color from his eyes, and his new power had made them glow ever so slightly. Direct opposites from each other but equal in power, they charged. When their swords connected, a flash of light erupted enveloping the entirety of the battlefield.
After the light dissipated, Enirboreh and Steve were nowhere to be found. All that remained were the shards of their swords at the place of collision. Seeing their leader vanish, the legions of Enirboreh retreated just as fast as they had arrived. A wounded soldier had been laying only inches from where the two had collided. After the swords had shattered, a piece of Steve’s sword landed on his leg. His wounds instantly healed. The soldier did not know what had caused this anomaly and began to stand up. As he stood, he touched a shard of Enirboreh’s sword and his wounds instantly re-opened. He fell back to the ground in pain. He picked up the piece of Steve’s sword again and his wounds healed. As he stood this time, he was careful to avoid touching Enirboreh’s sword. He told his people of the shards and at this news, people began to come and take Steve’s shards for themselves.
As more and more of Steve’s shards were removed, the land on which Enirboreh’s shards lay became corrupted. The land became dry and the vegetation died. The most fertile soil in all of the earth became sand. The Steves did not realize the source of this corruption and before long, the city of Arkevlan was in ruins. Most of the populus left the city, those who stayed became disfigured and their mental states decayed. These are known as the Grunbor, or lost ones.
This day became known as Enirgor’den and thus, the corrupted planes came to be.
Interesting and well written, however, you need to break it into multiple paragraphs.
I am curious as to where those names came from, did you come up with them or did you find them?
Steve and Enirboreh are unlikely to arise in the same language, and the fact that the all the other names are more similar to Enirboreh than Steve makes Steve stick out in an unpleasing manner. Something to consider.
Steve and Enirboreh are unlikely to arise in the same language, and the fact that the all the other names are more similar to Enirboreh than Steve makes Steve stick out in an unpleasing manner. Something to consider.
Read Enirboreh backwords. Also, I made the names up myself.
Steve saw what Enirboreh had done to his creations and made the ultimate life form, the Steves. He infused his own mana into the first Steves, Arken and Evla. Enirboreh tried to manipulate the Steves, but found the mana within them was protecting them. He began to become angry at his failure to manipulate Steve’s Steves so he sent his mutations to destroy Arken and Evla. Steve knew this would happen and taught Arken and Evla how to defend themselves. Arken was granted the vast knowledge of the material world and made extremely strong armor. Evla was granted the knowledge of mana manipulation and enchanted this armor. Arken and Evla fought off all that Enirboreh could throw at them.
Enirboreh became furious and began construction of even more horrifying creatures, however this would take many years for him to complete. During this time, Arken and Evla made a life for themselves. They had many children who were taught the arts of their parents. Life continued peacefully for several hundred years. The Steves had built a wondrous world for themselves. There were many cities and towns, but the greatest of all was Arkevlan, or “Genesis City” in Ancient Stevish. The city was so large, you could not see from one side to another when standing on it’s walls. The streets were lined with shops, theatres, gardens, houses and many more buildings. The streets were made of the most fertile soil on Earth that glowed slightly green and gave the city an aura of peace. There was a massive colosseum that lay in the heart of Arkevlan. Games of strength, intellect, and endurance took place daily in this massive arena. The Steves were happy.
This happiness would not last however. Enirboreh had constructed legions of corrupt creatures. He had also created the nether and the end worlds which he used to fuel his army; and so, Enirgor’den, the day of many deaths, came. Enirboreh unleashed his legions on Arkevlan. Steve had seen the armies approaching and readied the city. Iron golems sprang to life out of the very earth outside of the city walls. Steve himself appeared in the city ready to defend his creations. Enirboreh was surprised to see Steve helping his creations directly and decided to join the battle himself. As dusk approached, the battle began. The Steves fought alongside the iron golems for many hours until each side’s numbers had whittled down to only a few hundred. This is when Enirboreh and Steve stood face to face with one another. The anger in Enirboreh had drove the color from his eyes, and his new power had made them glow ever so slightly. Direct opposites from each other but equal in power, they charged. When their swords connected, a flash of light erupted enveloping the entirety of the battlefield.
After the light dissipated, Enirboreh and Steve were nowhere to be found. All that remained were the shards of their swords at the place of collision. Seeing their leader vanish, the legions of Enirboreh retreated just as fast as they had arrived. A wounded soldier had been laying only inches from where the two had collided. After the swords had shattered, a piece of Steve’s sword landed on his leg. His wounds instantly healed. The soldier did not know what had caused this anomaly and began to stand up. As he stood, he touched a shard of Enirboreh’s sword and his wounds instantly re-opened. He fell back to the ground in pain. He picked up the piece of Steve’s sword again and his wounds healed. As he stood this time, he was careful to avoid touching Enirboreh’s sword. He told his people of the shards and at this news, people began to come and take Steve’s shards for themselves.
As more and more of Steve’s shards were removed, the land on which Enirboreh’s shards lay became corrupted. The land became dry and the vegetation died. The most fertile soil in all of the earth became sand. The Steves did not realize the source of this corruption and before long, the city of Arkevlan was in ruins. Most of the populus left the city, those who stayed became disfigured and their mental states decayed. These are known as the Grunbor, or lost ones.
This day became known as Enirgor’den and thus, the corrupted planes came to be.
I am curious as to where those names came from, did you come up with them or did you find them?
Steve and Enirboreh are unlikely to arise in the same language, and the fact that the all the other names are more similar to Enirboreh than Steve makes Steve stick out in an unpleasing manner. Something to consider.
Read Enirboreh backwords. Also, I made the names up myself.