As Chris ran across the plains in search of wood his curly brown hair blew in the wind. His black jacket and blue undershirt had the same orange crest design and his jeans were sandy from the beach. "Hey John any luck with wood?" said Chris. "Yeah i'm making a home wanna help?" said John. " WHAT!!!! for how long have you been making a house?!?!" Yelled Chris. John replied, 20 minutes, Just come help me." John had parted black hair with a striped T-shirt and had black pants. By sunset They had made a house, tools which included a wood sword,hoe,axe,and pickax. A green creature outside their house starting hissing.
This sounds like a good story! You get to hear the in-game player's view of the game.
Just a couple things though:
1) You should probably keep all of the chapters in one topic, so it's easier to read all of them, and reduces the amount of topics.
2) The chapters might need to be a little longer than a paragraph, but so far you are doing good
This sounds like a good story! You get to hear the in-game player's view of the game.
Just a couple things though:
1) You should probably keep all of the chapters in one topic, so it's easier to read all of them, and reduces the amount of topics.
2) The chapters might need to be a little longer than a paragraph, but so far you are doing good
This sounds like a good story! You get to hear the in-game player's view of the game.
Just a couple things though:
1) You should probably keep all of the chapters in one topic, so it's easier to read all of them, and reduces the amount of topics.
2) The chapters might need to be a little longer than a paragraph, but so far you are doing good
This sounds like a good story! You get to hear the in-game player's view of the game.
Just a couple things though:
1) You should probably keep all of the chapters in one topic, so it's easier to read all of them, and reduces the amount of topics.
2) The chapters might need to be a little longer than a paragraph, but so far you are doing good
It would be better if instead of scattering all the chapers to the wind, you should plop them down in one topic post. Preferably with spoilers, also your chapters are extremely short... More description and content is always possible, and advised.
This sounds like a good story! You get to hear the in-game player's view of the game.
Just a couple things though:
1) You should probably keep all of the chapters in one topic, so it's easier to read all of them, and reduces the amount of topics.
2) The chapters might need to be a little longer than a paragraph, but so far you are doing good
As Chris ran across the plains in search of wood his curly brown hair blew in the wind. His black jacket and blue undershirt had the same orange crest design and his jeans were sandy from the beach. "Hey John any luck with wood?" said Chris. "Yeah i'm making a home wanna help?" said John. " WHAT!!!! for how long have you been making a house?!?!" Yelled Chris. John replied, 20 minutes, Just come help me." John had parted black hair with a striped T-shirt and had black pants. By sunset They had made a house, tools which included a wood sword,hoe,axe,and pickax. A green creature outside their house starting hissing.
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http://www.minecraftforum.net/user/2393851-thegreyblade/ chapter 1
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Retired StaffJust a couple things though:
1) You should probably keep all of the chapters in one topic, so it's easier to read all of them, and reduces the amount of topics.
2) The chapters might need to be a little longer than a paragraph, but so far you are doing good
http://www.minecraftforum.net/user/2393851-thegreyblade/ chapter 1
http://www.minecraftforum.net/user/2393851-thegreyblade/ chapter 1
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