some famous, worldwide, bestselling authors have some chapters only two (or less) pages long! HA!
Yes. I didn't say anything about it being bad, did I? Haha, personal stuff. Anyway, the only ones I've read with less than two pages are, so far, when I was in 1st Grade, Geronimo Stilton or something like that.
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Besides that, the chapter is soooo suspenseful. Can't wait for it to be finished. Haha, there, see that? That, my friend, is called pressure. In the light of the subject, you have five seconds.
Adventures of Prince Fang: Finding His Feelings
Chapter I: The Different One
The Prince walked all around the red sand. His black boots walking ever so silently. His violet checkered shirt didn't make a sound as it ruffled when he moved. His teal skin stuck out obviously against the red sky and ground. The intruder was here. Just like the others. The foolish others. How would they ever think they would spot him? The first was the most foolish. The man with brown hair and teal shirt. Yet when he was done, it was red. He smiled. A cold, freezing smile. He,had his black bedrock gauntlets with him, and they morphed into a black bow-blade. His father needn't know about this. The Prince would handle this. This was to easy. The back was turned, studying something out of his sight. He walked ever so fast and silent, the Prince closing in on this foolish adventurer. He was here to kill his Father. Just like all the others. But he would not let them. He would never let anyone hurt his Father. No matter how strange his Father was. He was right behind the adventurer. He raised his bow and notched his arrow. His fingers slowly preparing to release. Then the adventurer turned around.
The Prince's eyes were white, with black pupils and red in the center. These eyes never showed surprise, dismay, or any emotion of confusion for that matter. Yet his eyes widened with shock. The black of his eyes almost completely covered the red, so it looked like a black hole. Endless an infinite. As the adventurer turned around, something was wrong. This adventurer was stronger. He could sense his powerful aura. Instead of the usual stone helmet, this was a deep violet. It completely covered his face. And his armor was the same as his helmet. Deep violet. An endless void. But the Prince was a master of the void. His bow was made of the substance right at the void. The roof of his palace. The bottom of the up.
No matter. He would take care of this. He released the bow string. The bedrock point whistled as it flew to her head. It would be over in a second.
The Prince knew that there was no escape. Yet, somehow, a split second before the bow hit the adventurer, he seemed to vanish. Glowing purple and sparkling, then becoming translucent. Then, transparent. Until, the adventurer was gone.
Immediately, the Prince knew this day was going to be different. Never had he encountered an adventurer of this power. No one had ever escaped his first shot.
As he thought this, a tingling at the back of his neck alerted him. His instincts kicked in. He ducked, just as an Ender Stone sword whistled over him.
"Close." The Prince thought. "And no one has ever gotten as close as that."
The Prince tumbled, got on his feet, and his bow blade melted back into his gauntlets, then the gauntlets produced two quick and stealthy daggers. He struck as fast as lightning, with the nimbleness of a particularly nimble monkey who has just graduated in top nimble monkey in nimbleness class (-Pandemonium [comic]). Yet, the adventurer had somehow managed to evade his attack. No one had ever escaped him. The Prince was growing impatient. But he knew what would stop the adventurer.
The Prince focused and closed his eyes. He let something that looked like dry skin fall to the ground from his arm. Then another. Then another. Until, there was a tornado of red grains swirling around his arms. He opened his eyes. The tornado got more concentrated. He shot it at the adventurer. Swirling red grains, known as...
"Soul sand." The adventurer said, in a surprisingly high, alarmed voice. He tried to teleport, but his form flickered.
The Price grinned. The mortals thought all it did was slow you down. But it did much more. It prevented ways of travel, such as running, flying, mine carts, and teleporting.
So just as the Prince shot fis arrow, the adventurer dove to avoid it. But in doing so, he fell. The mask/helmet fell off. The Prince stared in confusion and curiosity at the face of the adventurer. This face was different. A small, delicate nose. Small lips. Long, ebony black hair with purple streaks. He was a.... female.
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Yes. I didn't say anything about it being bad, did I? Haha, personal stuff. Anyway, the only ones I've read with less than two pages are, so far, when I was in 1st Grade, Geronimo Stilton or something like that.
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Besides that, the chapter is soooo suspenseful. Can't wait for it to be finished. Haha, there, see that? That, my friend, is called pressure. In the light of the subject, you have five seconds.
You said it's a "tad bit short." Plus, it's written by Michael Scott, who makes books for 12 +
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Good story, Like the tension and cliffhangers, though some of the writing seemed a bit off.
Name: Ostatni ('Last' in polish)
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Abilities: Shade run, mimics the movements of Ostatni in a different spot from where he is. the mimic, can be bigger or smaller than Ostatni.
Bio: Ostatni is a child of the void, (My term for powerful creatures that shouldn't exist.) He is powerful, but unfocused. His powers are very volatile. Has little to no family, and very few friends. Frequents the nether.
Oh! Shocker, it's a girl! Also, I can still add a character, can't I?
Name: Blake V. Moore.
Age: 20.
Gender: Male.
Specie: A mix of Human and Enderman.
Appearance: Blake has spiky, white hair and peach skin. Although, some parts of his skin break out into small patches of Enderman skin. His eyes are purple. He is rather tall for his age. He wears an Enderstone chest plate over a gray t-shirt. He wears dark black jeans and sneakers. Otherwise, wears full Enderstone armor.
Abilities: He uses void powers, which he inherited because of his ender essence. He uses the void to turn into his different weapons.
Weapon: Uses daggers or a bow and arrow. Sometimes a sword. Made of obsidian.
Oh! Shocker, it's a girl! Also, I can still add a character, can't I?
Name: Blake V. Moore.
Age: 20.
Gender: Male.
Specie: A mix of Human and Enderman.
Appearance: Blake has spiky, white hair and peach skin. Although, some parts of his skin break out into small patches of Enderman skin. His eyes are purple. He is rather tall for his age. He wears an Enderstone chest plate over a gray t-shirt. He wears dark black jeans and sneakers. Otherwise, wears full Enderstone armor.
Abilities: He uses void powers, which he inherited because of his ender essence. He uses the void to turn into his different weapons.
Weapon: Uses daggers or a bow and arrow. Sometimes a sword. Made of obsidian.
I'll add him if Oncie, in the story, falls in love with him!
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I'll add him if Oncie, in the story, falls in love with him!
I don't know anyone in real life named Blake, so go ahead. It's your story. I'd like to see how you're going to write that. Plus, I made Blake a cool dude, so far, I see no downside other than you being in control of every action he does and word that comes out of his mouth.
Okay! good luck in your relationship with Blake! So, how do you feel about you being 16 and falling in love with a 19 year old guy? Who just so happens to curse (not in the book, though) who looks like a punk?
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Name : Edward Hughes
Age : 17
Gender : Male, The Casual Minecraftian
Appearance : Short aqua blue hair and brown eyes. A fair skin tone. He is shorter than most men but makes it up for agility. He equips on a light set of leather equipment.
Weapon : A custom-made bow of iron, gold, diamond, mostly wood and special fletched strings for powerful shots. Arrows are crafted by hand, stone or iron tips with fine feathers at the end. Always kept close to him as a weapon he loves most.
Abilities : Heightened senses, Enhanced hearing, Decent parkour, Decent climbing but his most powerful weapon, enhanced conciousness. He has the abilities of a normal acrobat, but able to react twice as fast. In critical situations, adrenaline can kick in and his perks are all boosted to beyond normal minecraftian recognitions.
Bio : Originally a normal bowman that seeked a normal life. When he took the test to pass his archery examination, the examiners obtained reaults beyond what they expected. When Edwars fired the shot, it killed the boar, 60m away, instantly... and shockingly, through the eye. Now driven away from home when believed to be one of the prophecies, Edward seeks to complete what he started to just go back home.
Name : Edward Hughes
Age : 17
Gender : Male, The Casual Minecraftian
Appearance : Short aqua blue hair and brown eyes. A fair skin tone. He is shorter than most men but makes it up for agility. He equips on a light set of leather equipment.
Weapon : A custom-made bow of iron, gold, diamond, mostly wood and special fletched strings for powerful shots. Arrows are crafted by hand, stone or iron tips with fine feathers at the end. Always kept close to him as a weapon he loves most.
Abilities : Heightened senses, Enhanced hearing, Decent parkour, Decent climbing but his most powerful weapon, enhanced conciousness. He has the abilities of a normal acrobat, but able to react twice as fast. In critical situations, adrenaline can kick in and his perks are all boosted to beyond normal minecraftian recognitions.
Bio : Originally a normal bowman that seeked a normal life. When he took the test to pass his archery examination, the examiners obtained reaults beyond what they expected. When Edwars fired the shot, it killed the boar, 60m away, instantly... and shockingly, through the eye. Now driven away from home when believed to be one of the prophecies, Edward seeks to complete what he started to just go back home.
I'll put him in.Along with Blake and Ostinanti.
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"The devil enters our mind when it's not guarded."
Yes. I didn't say anything about it being bad, did I? Haha, personal stuff. Anyway, the only ones I've read with less than two pages are, so far, when I was in 1st Grade, Geronimo Stilton or something like that.
Submit Character entries! Please share this, Magmar, Stevefox74, and Oncie.
You said it's a "tad bit short." Plus, it's written by Michael Scott, who makes books for 12 +
"The devil enters our mind when it's not guarded."
Stop cliff-hanging!!
It's unbearable!!
(In other words, can't wait for more chapters)
What- what is written by Michael Scott? Isn't he a fictional character in "The Office" played by Steve Carell?
Name: Ostatni ('Last' in polish)
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Abilities: Shade run, mimics the movements of Ostatni in a different spot from where he is. the mimic, can be bigger or smaller than Ostatni.
Bio: Ostatni is a child of the void, (My term for powerful creatures that shouldn't exist.) He is powerful, but unfocused. His powers are very volatile. Has little to no family, and very few friends. Frequents the nether.
"The devil enters our mind when it's not guarded."
Name: Blake V. Moore.
Age: 20.
Gender: Male.
Specie: A mix of Human and Enderman.
Appearance: Blake has spiky, white hair and peach skin. Although, some parts of his skin break out into small patches of Enderman skin. His eyes are purple. He is rather tall for his age. He wears an Enderstone chest plate over a gray t-shirt. He wears dark black jeans and sneakers. Otherwise, wears full Enderstone armor.
Abilities: He uses void powers, which he inherited because of his ender essence. He uses the void to turn into his different weapons.
Weapon: Uses daggers or a bow and arrow. Sometimes a sword. Made of obsidian.
I'll add him if Oncie, in the story, falls in love with him!
"The devil enters our mind when it's not guarded."
"The devil enters our mind when it's not guarded."
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"The devil enters our mind when it's not guarded."
"The devil enters our mind when it's not guarded."
Name : Edward Hughes
Age : 17
Gender : Male, The Casual Minecraftian
Appearance : Short aqua blue hair and brown eyes. A fair skin tone. He is shorter than most men but makes it up for agility. He equips on a light set of leather equipment.
Weapon : A custom-made bow of iron, gold, diamond, mostly wood and special fletched strings for powerful shots. Arrows are crafted by hand, stone or iron tips with fine feathers at the end. Always kept close to him as a weapon he loves most.
Abilities : Heightened senses, Enhanced hearing, Decent parkour, Decent climbing but his most powerful weapon, enhanced conciousness. He has the abilities of a normal acrobat, but able to react twice as fast. In critical situations, adrenaline can kick in and his perks are all boosted to beyond normal minecraftian recognitions.
Bio : Originally a normal bowman that seeked a normal life. When he took the test to pass his archery examination, the examiners obtained reaults beyond what they expected. When Edwars fired the shot, it killed the boar, 60m away, instantly... and shockingly, through the eye. Now driven away from home when believed to be one of the prophecies, Edward seeks to complete what he started to just go back home.
Actually the Prince was changing languages. That's why it said "he tried again...". HE.
"The devil enters our mind when it's not guarded."
I'll put him in.Along with Blake and Ostinanti.
"The devil enters our mind when it's not guarded."
I'm not sure i get what you mean. ????????
"The devil enters our mind when it's not guarded."