Alright guys. I don't want to creep you too much. Are you sitting comfortably? Here are my creepy-pastas:
Once, there was a guy called Herobrine. I hope you've heard of him. He came from... Red, brown and green fog. And then, he threw a bomb down my chimney. BOOM! the bomb exploded. To reveal... that red, brown and green fog. Herobrine was duplicating...
That was left on a cliffhanger. There will be more soon...
I don't mean to be rude (although I am 100% aware that I will come off that way) but that was not even close to creepy. First of all you are taking content from an existing creepypasta (Herobrine, which 95% of use have already heard of and are tired of hearing about), second of all it is way too short and not well detailed.
Also this was posted in the wrong section. Fan Art or the Art section of OT would be correct I believe.
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Once, there was a guy called Herobrine. one of the worst beginnings to a creepy pasta? Sure.
I hope you've heard of him. Ok?
He came from... Herobrine origin?
Red, brown and green fog. Fail... Why fog? Why Multicolored fog?
And then, he threw a bomb down my chimney.
Wait, your chimney? Also, How did he get a bomb? Needs more description...
BOOM! the bomb exploded. It... Exploded? Thats it? the house didn't shake, the walls didn't crack.
To reveal... From where is it revealing? did something come out of the bomb?
That red, brown and green fog. The fog... the fog? Why fog!?!?
Herobrine was duplicating... Duplicating... More of him... Maybe they will kill each other.
Thats the end? Not even a cliffhanger, it didn't say really anything.
I am honestly not sure if I'm supposed to take this seriously or not. To me it seems a bit like a play on the typical "err mah geerd I saw Hurroburrn!" stories...
Hopefully I'm right and I didn't just annihilate everything the author hopes and dreams. My apologies if that's the case.
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ModeratorAlso this was posted in the wrong section. Fan Art or the Art section of OT would be correct I believe.
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Hopefully I'm right and I didn't just annihilate everything the author hopes and dreams. My apologies if that's the case.