“Boom!” A large explosion thundered behind me nearly throwing me from my steed. “Boom!” This one was mercifully further away and my horse gained speed once more. I turned my head trying to catch a glimpse of my pursuers but saw only clouds of smoke.
My body tensed as I turned forward again. Ahead I saw a large hole spreading out on both sides of the path. They had chased me to a ravine! I realized in horror. Determined I pressed my horse further on.
Behind me, I heard the clomping of new hooves and the twangs of bows. I glanced quickly back and saw skeletal forms following. I cried out as one of their arrows struck me. My horse pressed on as I tried to staunch the flow of blood from the side of my chest.
My vision began to double, as the ravine seemed to swallow us. Over it we flew, my horse and i. Masters of all time, we could fly! Dark shapes floundered behind us as they toppled into the gap. However, I was sure I would come out of it fine.
Suddenly the wall of the ravine loomed up in front of me. I let loose a cry of terror as we crashed into the wall and fell to the bottom of the gorge. We fell for what seemed as though it were an eternity. I held onto my horse for dear life, as we plummeted.
Finally, we crashed into the bottom of the gorge I cried out as I drug myself from my now dead horse. Around me, the shadows were high; I rummaged in my pack and grabbed a piece of meat. Chewing on it, I glanced through the dark shadows that surrounded the area I had fallen into.
I saw a dark shadow move; I grabbed a torch from my pack and lit it. I cried out in despair when I saw where I had fallen. Around me were vast hordes of creatures. As they charged me my last thought was; “A man with sight among the blind is a king, A man with a candle in the darkness is a target”
Please give feedback. I can stand criticism.
(Espacially on grammar)
I didn't notice this until just now. You ought to make a "Dejers's Short Stories Compilation Thread" for all of these instead of posting them in separate topics. And also get an avatar so I can distinguish you from the other avatar-less people in the Literature subsection.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
I didn't notice this until just now. You ought to make a "Dejers's Short Stories Compilation Thread" for all of these instead of posting them in separate topics. And also get an avatar so I can distinguish you from the other avatar-less people in the Literature subsection.
Sounds like an interesting idea...
I will think about it.
Sounds like an interesting idea...
I will think about it.
Well mostly for convenience. I wouldn't normally suggest it if you hadn't already made one but it seems like you have so many different stories that I think it would be a good idea.
. . . Speaking of good ideas, someone should make a Minecraft creepypasta compilation thread called "Creeperpasta". I don't know why I thought of that just now but it seems like a good idea. One more for the drawing board then.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
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Dejers Garth
My body tensed as I turned forward again. Ahead I saw a large hole spreading out on both sides of the path. They had chased me to a ravine! I realized in horror. Determined I pressed my horse further on.
Behind me, I heard the clomping of new hooves and the twangs of bows. I glanced quickly back and saw skeletal forms following. I cried out as one of their arrows struck me. My horse pressed on as I tried to staunch the flow of blood from the side of my chest.
My vision began to double, as the ravine seemed to swallow us. Over it we flew, my horse and i. Masters of all time, we could fly! Dark shapes floundered behind us as they toppled into the gap. However, I was sure I would come out of it fine.
Suddenly the wall of the ravine loomed up in front of me. I let loose a cry of terror as we crashed into the wall and fell to the bottom of the gorge. We fell for what seemed as though it were an eternity. I held onto my horse for dear life, as we plummeted.
Finally, we crashed into the bottom of the gorge I cried out as I drug myself from my now dead horse. Around me, the shadows were high; I rummaged in my pack and grabbed a piece of meat. Chewing on it, I glanced through the dark shadows that surrounded the area I had fallen into.
I saw a dark shadow move; I grabbed a torch from my pack and lit it. I cried out in despair when I saw where I had fallen. Around me were vast hordes of creatures. As they charged me my last thought was; “A man with sight among the blind is a king, A man with a candle in the darkness is a target”
Please give feedback. I can stand criticism.
(Espacially on grammar)
I didn't notice this until just now. You ought to make a "Dejers's Short Stories Compilation Thread" for all of these instead of posting them in separate topics. And also get an avatar so I can distinguish you from the other avatar-less people in the Literature subsection.
I will think about it.
Well mostly for convenience. I wouldn't normally suggest it if you hadn't already made one but it seems like you have so many different stories that I think it would be a good idea.
. . . Speaking of good ideas, someone should make a Minecraft creepypasta compilation thread called "Creeperpasta". I don't know why I thought of that just now but it seems like a good idea. One more for the drawing board then.