In this i am going to be presenting a new version of the story every couple of weeks.
Here is the first one.
I floated serenely purveying my endless universe. Around my form it revolved i watched as it danced in all its ways. Within my chest flutter danced pleading to be free. With a shudder i released it and the world shook as it broke in two.
Another world, another plan. One i hope will not be dashed on the grass. I watched as it evolved, Slowly then in great leaps. At the apex of its creation the urge struck once more.
Mindlessly i ripped my new world apart. My breath came in deep gasps as i destroyed the world yet again. Away i wandered through the formless void. For ages i wandered, Wondering why my life was this way "Am i only meant for Destruction!" I screamed helplessly into the void.
I looked down and began to create again. This world i gave the ability to survive. I thought of all the ways i could destroy it and taught the beings on it how to survive.
I watched as they quickly evolved, Suppresing my urges. After a stretch of time the began to disperse into the void. Their ships were crude but they could possibly survive. As i watched the final wave depart i felt the old urge rise up inside me.
It was white-hot with anger. It destroyed the remnants of the world but it new that i had won. It banished me far away inside myself and began the long hunt.
I really don't know how to comment towards this, give a criticism or anything. Of doubtful sources, I can say this is good. However, it requires minimal improvements. They aren't important, but they make everything better.
I really don't know how to comment towards this, give a criticism or anything. Of doubtful sources, I can say this is good. However, it requires minimal improvements. They aren't important, but they make everything better.
Dejers Garth
In this i am going to be presenting a new version of the story every couple of weeks.
Here is the first one.
Another world, another plan. One i hope will not be dashed on the grass. I watched as it evolved, Slowly then in great leaps. At the apex of its creation the urge struck once more.
Mindlessly i ripped my new world apart. My breath came in deep gasps as i destroyed the world yet again. Away i wandered through the formless void. For ages i wandered, Wondering why my life was this way "Am i only meant for Destruction!" I screamed helplessly into the void.
I looked down and began to create again. This world i gave the ability to survive. I thought of all the ways i could destroy it and taught the beings on it how to survive.
I watched as they quickly evolved, Suppresing my urges. After a stretch of time the began to disperse into the void. Their ships were crude but they could possibly survive. As i watched the final wave depart i felt the old urge rise up inside me.
It was white-hot with anger. It destroyed the remnants of the world but it new that i had won. It banished me far away inside myself and began the long hunt.
Love feedback and criticism!
It is an evolutionary story. It will change over time. Influenced either by my mood or by your comments.
Think of it as a minecraft creation story. The second version is a lot more detailed already.