I'll try to have another scene out by tomorrow. I'm also going to be adding a few new things to the story, notably creating a short and vague summary that I'm putting in every scene just after the title of the scene to describe what it's about, and changing the "Chapters" to "Scenes" to fit the Victorian stage play theme better.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
I'll try to have another scene out by tomorrow. I'm also going to be adding a few new things to the story, notably creating a short and vague summary that I'm putting in every scene just after the title of the scene to describe what it's about, and changing the "Chapters" to "Scenes" to fit the Victorian stage play theme better.
If only I had a good Victorian banner for the story. I'm thinking of making a title picture at some point. For now I'll stick to writing the story, but perhaps later I can get one.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Actually, I have some more stuff to arrange before me and my parents move so I can't guarantee a new scene being out today.I started Scene IV though, and I might have it out tomorrow or a few days after that. Sorry, but moving has been more stressful than I thought it would be and there are still things I have to do.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Just finished reading Scene 1. Awesome work, I like your style. Will start reading Scene 2 soon
And thanks for the explanation, I'm new to this Steampunk stuff as well.
Also, "steampunk" is basically a theme where modern or futuristic technology is achieved through Victorian means. For example, as Aetherships being made of wood even though they're spaceships.
Just finished reading Scene 1. Awesome work, I like your style. Will start reading Scene 2 soon
And thanks for the explanation, I'm new to this Steampunk stuff as well.
Thanks for reading and taking the time to tell me what you think of my story! Steampunk is one of my favorite genres, but it's vastly underrated on the Literature subsection, and I wanted to write a story with a unique concept as its basis.
I do have to ask though, when you say you finished Scene I and are going to read Scene II soon, did you read the Overture? I don't mean to insult your intelligence by asking but if you didn't you really should read that before commenting on anything else. It sets up the basis for the story. Based on the fact you knew the story was set in a steampunk universe, I'm going to assume you did. I just want to be sure though. Again, thanks for writing a comment.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Thanks! I haven't had a lot of time to write recently because there's been a lot of stuff to pack and move before moving houses, a lot of people have wanted to talk to me before I move and I've been writing a "goodbye" e-mail to my friends, but I'm excited to write it. No promises, but I'll try to have it finished sometime this week.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
I finally finished Scene IV: Antique Illusions. Again, there's more exposition than action but I really want to establish Vikram, his family and Horatio as characters before having them do anything. The next scene will take place in Vikram's laboratory, however, which is probably going to be more exciting. I hope you enjoy.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Would you say it's fixed now? I think it is but I'm not entirely sure.
Edit: I'm pretty sure it's fixed. If anyone sees anything broken please post and notify me so I can fix it.
Did you seriously read all/part of the scene without any paragraphing asanetargoss? That must have been hard. And I agree, Vikram is becoming a more interesting character. I want to expand on his briefly mentioned relationship with his sister Janysse later as well.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Would you say it's fixed now? I think it is but I'm not entirely sure.
Edit: I'm pretty sure it's fixed. If anyone sees anything broken please post and notify me so I can fix it.
Did you seriously read all/part of the scene without any paragraphing asanetargoss? That must have been hard. And I agree, Vikram is becoming a more interesting character. I want to expand on his briefly mentioned relationship with his sister Janysse later as well.
I read all of it without paragraphing. It wasn't hard, though.
I read all of it without paragraphing. It wasn't hard, though.
Perhaps 'hard' isn't the right word. More 'frustrating'. But okay. I tried to add in a little humor here and there, though I'm not sure how much I succeeded. I've always wanted to use a false bookcase that leads to a secret passage in one of my stories.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
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I'll try to have another scene out by tomorrow. I'm also going to be adding a few new things to the story, notably creating a short and vague summary that I'm putting in every scene just after the title of the scene to describe what it's about, and changing the "Chapters" to "Scenes" to fit the Victorian stage play theme better.
If only I had a good Victorian banner for the story. I'm thinking of making a title picture at some point. For now I'll stick to writing the story, but perhaps later I can get one.
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Retired StaffAnd thanks for the explanation, I'm new to this Steampunk stuff as well.
Thanks for reading and taking the time to tell me what you think of my story! Steampunk is one of my favorite genres, but it's vastly underrated on the Literature subsection, and I wanted to write a story with a unique concept as its basis.
I do have to ask though, when you say you finished Scene I and are going to read Scene II soon, did you read the Overture? I don't mean to insult your intelligence by asking but if you didn't you really should read that before commenting on anything else. It sets up the basis for the story. Based on the fact you knew the story was set in a steampunk universe, I'm going to assume you did. I just want to be sure though. Again, thanks for writing a comment.
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Retired StaffAlright, just making sure you did. Thanks! I'm currently writing Scene IV and it should be finished soon.
p.s Have you read the story?
What story? My own story . . . ?
Thanks! I haven't had a lot of time to write recently because there's been a lot of stuff to pack and move before moving houses, a lot of people have wanted to talk to me before I move and I've been writing a "goodbye" e-mail to my friends, but I'm excited to write it. No promises, but I'll try to have it finished sometime this week.
Story 2 up from bottom.
Oh yeah. Sorry, I forgot about that. but yeah, I read it when you first posted it. You used the words pretty well. It was a bit short though.
You don't have to if you don't want to. it was a good story, it was just a little short.
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Curse PremiumAlso, it looks like the forums broke your paragraph spacing.It seems you're already working to fix it.Thanks! And yeah, I just realized that. Good thing I write all of my work in Google Docs before copy and pasting it here. I'll fix it.
Edit: I'm pretty sure it's fixed. If anyone sees anything broken please post and notify me so I can fix it.
Did you seriously read all/part of the scene without any paragraphing asanetargoss? That must have been hard. And I agree, Vikram is becoming a more interesting character. I want to expand on his briefly mentioned relationship with his sister Janysse later as well.
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Curse PremiumI read all of it without paragraphing. It wasn't hard, though.
Perhaps 'hard' isn't the right word. More 'frustrating'. But okay. I tried to add in a little humor here and there, though I'm not sure how much I succeeded. I've always wanted to use a false bookcase that leads to a secret passage in one of my stories.