I don't like to apply characters very often - it's like giving someone a really good idea... for free.
My story is currently extremely open ended, no idea how to get from point A to point B. I just know where the two points are located, relative to each other. And so, I form my stone path and hew the mountains and chop the trees that stand between me and my goal: the creation o-
I don't like to apply characters very often - it's like giving someone a really good idea... for free.
My story is currently extremely open ended, no idea how to get from point A to point B. I just know where the two points are located, relative to each other. And so, I form my stone path and hew the mountains and chop the trees that stand between me and my goal: the creation o-
Now where would the fun in that be? Go away.
I suppose that's true. Unless, of course, you made a really, really bad character and gave that to somebody. Also, what is the mountains thing a metaphor for?
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Mountains = problems that my characters face/things to be decided and hurtles to vault over (or plow through.)
So are the trees, but those are the minor points.
... Perhaps I am... nah.
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OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
Mountains = problems that my characters face/things to be decided and hurtles to vault over (or plow through.)
So are the trees, but those are the minor points.
... Perhaps I am... nah.
Okay then. Well Zeuistepali said he might post a character application so at least there's that to look forward to in regards to that.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
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Well, from reading a bit of the wikipedia page for steampunk, I got that it's metal and steam and other bits...
And, I have something for you. It's called a character.
Name (Try to think of something Victorian): Raymond (Used a name generator, hope that's okay...)
Description: Raymond, as an explorer, had a small ship that could go at great speeds and could doge easily. Often exploring hostile planets, he made a railgun (Will be described). Eventually he made upgrades to his ship and gun, but on a planet, he was fighting a number of hostile creatures, and one clawed him in the eye, damaging it. Once he had docked into a planet that was colonized, he told some repairmen to repair his ship, as a few small asteroids had scraped it, then he went off to a doctor, and got a targeting interface and a repair to his left eye, the one that had been damaged. He continued his adventures, and also found various ores and things like that, until coming to a stop at earth, where he stayed for a while. (Or wherever this story is based on)
Appearance: Dark brown hair, hazelnut eyes, slightly pale due to traveling through solar systems, not a very large nose, again, not very large ears, but they're around the size of a normal persons, as for clothes, he wears a long sleeve shirt with an emblem of a ship flying through an asteroid field on the right side, just plain fabric on the other, the shirt is a dark blue, with golden fabric (Not actually gold, just a shiny yellow essentially) overlaying designs on it. He wears normal blue jeans, and black shoes with slight shock absorbers to cushion a fall.
Tools/Weapons(Once again, think steampunk here): A railgun that can compress energy into a bullet, then fire it, six rounds at a time, it has a slight charge up time, the more it charges however, the more it hurts, it has three modes: Rapid fire, which it can fire all six rounds in quick succesion, Heavy impact, which it fires at a slow pace, but the shots pack more punch, good for taking down armored enemies, and Explosive, which it fires at a pace in between Rapid and Heavy, but the explosion is quite weak, and can't really do anything other than dent metal, unless it's at full charge and a full round burst, which is self explanitory, it also has a sharpened bottom, so that he doesn't have to carry a sword around, the handle also switches between two positions which are optimal for the two hurting parts, however it can still fire whatever position the handle is in. As for it's look and function, it's made of a darkened iron and a slightly different color gold than the default minecraft texture pack, more closer to Painterly's (At least, the one in the Yogbox modpack, I have no real idea if the items are customizable, and I don't know how to describe it so... :/) Anyway, it has a chamber with six holes, similar to a revolver's but bigger, and all of the holes have a small tube in which they get moved into the main barrel. As for what the barrel looks like, let me see if I can just...
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Essentially, that's the shape of the barrel, but maybe a little smaller and the rails (The small things inside of it.) down a little, but that's his weapon.
Planet of Origin: En-Delta Evoron, A planet that was terraformer and colonized recently, and started a pilot's academy.
Time of Origin(This refers to year and era, and can be outside the current time as there is time travel involved): The present, or whenever the main character is or whenever you want.
Allegiances(Good, evil or neutral): Good.
Other: Feel free to edit this, but the gun may be nerfed or changed, but I request you keep it a railgun, and his appearence and name stay the same, but if you don't like the name feel free to change it. And the description may be changed too.
Well, from reading a bit of the wikipedia page for steampunk, I got that it's metal and steam and other bits...
And, I have something for you. It's called a character.
Name (Try to think of something Victorian): Raymond (Used a name generator, hope that's okay...)
Description: Raymond, as an explorer, had a small ship that could go at great speeds and could doge easily. Often exploring hostile planets, he made a railgun (Will be described). Eventually he made upgrades to his ship and gun, but on a planet, he was fighting a number of hostile creatures, and one clawed him in the eye, damaging it. Once he had docked into a planet that was colonized, he told some repairmen to repair his ship, as a few small asteroids had scraped it, then he went off to a doctor, and got a targeting interface and a repair to his left eye, the one that had been damaged. He continued his adventures, and also found various ores and things like that, until coming to a stop at earth, where he stayed for a while. (Or wherever this story is based on)
Appearance: Dark brown hair, hazelnut eyes, slightly pale due to traveling through solar systems, not a very large nose, again, not very large ears, but they're around the size of a normal persons, as for clothes, he wears a long sleeve shirt with an emblem of a ship flying through an asteroid field on the right side, just plain fabric on the other, the shirt is a dark blue, with golden fabric (Not actually gold, just a shiny yellow essentially) overlaying designs on it. He wears normal blue jeans, and black shoes with slight shock absorbers to cushion a fall.
Tools/Weapons(Once again, think steampunk here): A railgun that can compress energy into a bullet, then fire it, six rounds at a time, it has a slight charge up time, the more it charges however, the more it hurts, it has three modes: Rapid fire, which it can fire all six rounds in quick succesion, Heavy impact, which it fires at a slow pace, but the shots pack more punch, good for taking down armored enemies, and Explosive, which it fires at a pace in between Rapid and Heavy, but the explosion is quite weak, and can't really do anything other than dent metal, unless it's at full charge and a full round burst, which is self explanitory, it also has a sharpened bottom, so that he doesn't have to carry a sword around, the handle also switches between two positions which are optimal for the two hurting parts, however it can still fire whatever position the handle is in. As for it's look and function, it's made of a darkened iron and a slightly different color gold than the default minecraft texture pack, more closer to Painterly's (At least, the one in the Yogbox modpack, I have no real idea if the items are customizable, and I don't know how to describe it so... :/) Anyway, it has a chamber with six holes, similar to a revolver's but bigger, and all of the holes have a small tube in which they get moved into the main barrel. As for what the barrel looks like, let me see if I can just...
___
| _ _ |
|___ |
Essentially, that's the shape of the barrel, but maybe a little smaller and the rails (The small things inside of it.) down a little, but that's his weapon.
Planet of Origin: En-Delta Evoron, A planet that was terraformer and colonized recently, and started a pilot's academy.
Time of Origin(This refers to year and era, and can be outside the current time as there is time travel involved): The present, or whenever the main character is or whenever you want.
Allegiances(Good, evil or neutral): Good.
Other: Feel free to edit this, but the gun may be nerfed or changed, but I request you keep it a railgun, and his appearence and name stay the same, but if you don't like the name feel free to change it. And the description may be changed too.
Wow! I didn't expect you to put so much detail! Thanks for making a character application! Accepted. I'll have to give him a last name, maybe change the bullets from energy to Redsteam but otherwise leave the railgun unchanged (I like the idea of it) and change his occupation slightly (maybe instead of just an explorer a kind of vigilante-explorer, because at the time I want him to enter he'll be following some space pirates), but other than that it's fine.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
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Alright, sounds good to me, all I wanted on the railgun to not be changed is it's form and way of attacking, and all the other things are fine. Can't wait for the next chapter thingy!
Alright, sounds good to me, all I wanted on the railgun to not be changed is it's form and way of attacking, and all the other things are fine. Can't wait for the next chapter thingy!
I'm about halfway done with chapter one. I'll try to have it up soon!
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Wow! I didn't expect you to put so much detail!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Thanks for making a character application! Accepted. I'll have to give him a last name, maybe change the bullets from energy to Redsteam but otherwise leave the railgun unchanged (I like the idea of it) and change his occupation slightly (maybe instead of just an explorer a kind of vigilante-explorer, because at the time I want him to enter he'll be following some space pirates), but other than that it's fine.
... WHAT?!
My brain just broke.
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OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
Well I expect it from myself, I don't often expect it from everyone else. I should, but stuff like "To Be Named" has trained me not to. But when people do have a lot of detail it's always a pleasant surprise.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
My pickaxe has rarely been drenched in the blood of a good ol' ore vein, so here I go.
Lol.
I agree with you. It's why I try to stay away from many of the stories on the Literature subforum - so stupid and... they make my head hurt/I want to give them good feedback but I CAN'T JUST KNOWINGLY JUMP INTO THE LAVA LAKE OF CONCENTRATED FIRE AND HEAT!
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OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
My pickaxe has rarely been drenched in the blood of a good ol' ore vein, so here I go.
Lol.
I agree with you. It's why I try to stay away from many of the stories on the Literature subforum - so stupid and... they make my head hurt/I want to give them good feedback but I CAN'T JUST KNOWINGLY JUMP INTO THE LAVA LAKE OF CONCENTRATED FIRE AND HEAT!
Well the thing is most of them are from writers who could be good in the future if you tell them how to improve. Very few of them are just plain idiocy. That's why I completely take apart and analyze most of the stories I review in an objective way. If you're having trouble giving a good review, just pretend you're writing "An Angry Critique of the First Published Minecraft Fanfic" about the story you're reviewing but don't be as infuriated as the the author of that.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Well the thing is most of them are from writers who could be good in the future if you tell them how to improve. Very few of them are just plain idiocy. That's why I completely take apart and analyze most of the stories I review in an objective way. If you're having trouble giving a good review, just pretend you're writing "An Angry Critique of the First Published Minecraft Fanfic" about the story you're reviewing but don't be as infuriated as the the author of that.
You're not even going to ask about my metaphors? T_T
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OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
You're not even going to ask about my metaphors? T_T
Well I kind of assumed the "lava lake of fire" you were referring to was the terrible grammar and bad writing of some of the stories in the Literature subsection. Was it not?
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Correct! But what did I mean by... whatever I wrote in the first sentence?
Um . . . perhaps you don't very often criticize writers on the Literature subsection because it isn't very nice but now that you've seen an opportunity you may as well? I don't know.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
Feel free to leave your comments. Or criticisms, I suppose, if they're constructive. Almost anything really, unless it's an outright threat. In that case I'd prefer you put it in a private message.
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I don't like to apply characters very often - it's like giving someone a really good idea... for free.
My story is currently extremely open ended, no idea how to get from point A to point B. I just know where the two points are located, relative to each other. And so, I form my stone path and hew the mountains and chop the trees that stand between me and my goal: the creation o-
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
I suppose that's true. Unless, of course, you made a really, really bad character and gave that to somebody.
So are the trees, but those are the minor points.
... Perhaps I am... nah.
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
Okay then. Well Zeuistepali said he might post a character application so at least there's that to look forward to in regards to that.
And, I have something for you. It's called a character.
Name (Try to think of something Victorian): Raymond (Used a name generator, hope that's okay...)
Description: Raymond, as an explorer, had a small ship that could go at great speeds and could doge easily. Often exploring hostile planets, he made a railgun (Will be described). Eventually he made upgrades to his ship and gun, but on a planet, he was fighting a number of hostile creatures, and one clawed him in the eye, damaging it. Once he had docked into a planet that was colonized, he told some repairmen to repair his ship, as a few small asteroids had scraped it, then he went off to a doctor, and got a targeting interface and a repair to his left eye, the one that had been damaged. He continued his adventures, and also found various ores and things like that, until coming to a stop at earth, where he stayed for a while. (Or wherever this story is based on)
Appearance: Dark brown hair, hazelnut eyes, slightly pale due to traveling through solar systems, not a very large nose, again, not very large ears, but they're around the size of a normal persons, as for clothes, he wears a long sleeve shirt with an emblem of a ship flying through an asteroid field on the right side, just plain fabric on the other, the shirt is a dark blue, with golden fabric (Not actually gold, just a shiny yellow essentially) overlaying designs on it. He wears normal blue jeans, and black shoes with slight shock absorbers to cushion a fall.
Tools/Weapons(Once again, think steampunk here): A railgun that can compress energy into a bullet, then fire it, six rounds at a time, it has a slight charge up time, the more it charges however, the more it hurts, it has three modes: Rapid fire, which it can fire all six rounds in quick succesion, Heavy impact, which it fires at a slow pace, but the shots pack more punch, good for taking down armored enemies, and Explosive, which it fires at a pace in between Rapid and Heavy, but the explosion is quite weak, and can't really do anything other than dent metal, unless it's at full charge and a full round burst, which is self explanitory, it also has a sharpened bottom, so that he doesn't have to carry a sword around, the handle also switches between two positions which are optimal for the two hurting parts, however it can still fire whatever position the handle is in. As for it's look and function, it's made of a darkened iron and a slightly different color gold than the default minecraft texture pack, more closer to Painterly's (At least, the one in the Yogbox modpack, I have no real idea if the items are customizable, and I don't know how to describe it so... :/) Anyway, it has a chamber with six holes, similar to a revolver's but bigger, and all of the holes have a small tube in which they get moved into the main barrel. As for what the barrel looks like, let me see if I can just...
___
| _ _ |
|___ |
Essentially, that's the shape of the barrel, but maybe a little smaller and the rails (The small things inside of it.) down a little, but that's his weapon.
Planet of Origin: En-Delta Evoron, A planet that was terraformer and colonized recently, and started a pilot's academy.
Time of Origin(This refers to year and era, and can be outside the current time as there is time travel involved): The present, or whenever the main character is or whenever you want.
Allegiances(Good, evil or neutral): Good.
Other: Feel free to edit this, but the gun may be nerfed or changed, but I request you keep it a railgun, and his appearence and name stay the same, but if you don't like the name feel free to change it. And the description may be changed too.
*Insert signature here*
Wow! I didn't expect you to put so much detail! Thanks for making a character application! Accepted.
*Insert signature here*
I'm about halfway done with chapter one. I'll try to have it up soon!
... WHAT?!
My brain just broke.
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
Well I expect it from myself, I don't often expect it from everyone else. I should, but stuff like "To Be Named" has trained me not to.
Lol.
I agree with you. It's why I try to stay away from many of the stories on the Literature subforum - so stupid and... they make my head hurt/I want to give them good feedback but I CAN'T JUST KNOWINGLY JUMP INTO THE LAVA LAKE OF CONCENTRATED FIRE AND HEAT!
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
Well the thing is most of them are from writers who could be good in the future if you tell them how to improve. Very few of them are just plain idiocy. That's why I completely take apart and analyze most of the stories I review in an objective way. If you're having trouble giving a good review, just pretend you're writing "An Angry Critique of the First Published Minecraft Fanfic" about the story you're reviewing but don't be as infuriated as the the author of that.
You're not even going to ask about my metaphors? T_T
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
Well I kind of assumed the "lava lake of fire" you were referring to was the terrible grammar and bad writing of some of the stories in the Literature subsection. Was it not?
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
Um . . . perhaps you don't very often criticize writers on the Literature subsection because it isn't very nice but now that you've seen an opportunity you may as well? I don't know.
I do, however, use initialism (sometimes. XD)
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
Oh. I like acronyms when they spell new words, but maybe that's just me being whimsical.
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
I believe you mean "Yes. Yes that is." Man being a Grammar Nazi is so tiring . . .