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I find it interesting that just before 'How to NOT Live Forever' was taken down, this was put up.

I ask you this: Was the name 'How Not to Survive' based on 'How to NOT Live Forever'? Or is it just coincidence brought into suspicion due to the fact that I am in my Manic Bipolar Phase currently?
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I find it interesting that just before 'How to NOT Live Forever' was taken down, this was put up.

I ask you this: Was the name 'How Not to Survive' based on 'How to NOT Live Forever'? Or is it just coincidence brought into suspicion due to the fact that I am in my Manic Bipolar Phase currently?
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I think HNTL4ever was in the back of my head for a few days. The origional series name was "How Not to Survive in the Wild 101" I removed the 101 and changed it to the name of chanpter one. Think of it as half-tribute to HNTL4ever.

So sad that it's gone. D;

Anyways... I find your writing style fairly unique (and freakishly similar to mine when I was younger.)

I found a lot of punctuation errors... but you have a good prologue. My head hurts too much to read this currently.

PS: Please don't say things like 'It was a small dungeon. Scratch that it was the largest dungeon he had ever seen.' --> did you even write that? <-- because it's improper grammar (Scratch that (comma)), and can be worded to sound much better.
Take "The dungeon cell that he awoke in was tribute to the complex's tremendous size, as the cell stretched, easily, thirty meters high and twenty wide. It was, however, rather narrow (relatively speaking) as it's width took up a meager seven meters." Or something like that. Then you go on to describe how dark it is, what the stone looks like, what the guards look like, etc.

And invent your own lingo, don't call creepers 'creepers' call them 'Dyno-Men' on account of their explosive capabilities. Yes, bad example, but I'm just saying... if this is from the point of view of something that exists inside of this world that you have created, you do not want to use Real Life words to describe In Story creatures.

Take Endermen. For those of you that remember, I call them 'Tall Men' in my story. Really stupid, but it suits them and makes it seem more professional. Of course, common words like 'zombie' that everyone knows can be easily used in a story without making the story seem... stupid.

Thanks for reading this, ~.~

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So sad that it's gone. D;

Anyways... I find your writing style fairly unique (and freakishly similar to mine when I was younger.)

I found a lot of punctuation errors... but you have a good prologue. My head hurts too much to read this currently.

PS: Please don't say things like 'It was a small dungeon. Scratch that it was the largest dungeon he had ever seen.' --> did you even write that? <-- because it's improper grammar (Scratch that (comma)), and can be worded to sound much better.
Take "The dungeon cell that he awoke in was tribute to the complex's tremendous size, as the cell stretched, easily, thirty meters high and twenty wide. It was, however, rather narrow (relatively speaking) as it's width took up a meager seven meters." Or something like that. Then you go on to describe how dark it is, what the stone looks like, what the guards look like, etc.

And invent your own lingo, don't call creepers 'creepers' call them 'Dyno-Men' on account of their explosive capabilities. Yes, bad example, but I'm just saying... if this is from the point of view of something that exists inside of this world that you have created, you do not want to use Real Life words to describe In Story creatures.

Take Endermen. For those of you that remember, I call them 'Tall Men' in my story. Really stupid, but it suits them and makes it seem more professional. Of course, common words like 'zombie' that everyone knows can be easily used in a story without making the story seem... stupid.

Thanks for reading this, ~.~

You're welcome, boy I can't tell you how many people have told me the EXACT SAME thing as you just did and how much I'm working on it for chapter three.

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Yeah... I tend to talk in a 'mean' way when grading/critiquing other's work. It took me forever to write that in a way that didn't seem as though I was all 'LAWL! YOUR WRITING SUCKS! IT GAHVES MA A HEADACHE!' because it doesn't suck. However... I have some sort of undiagnosed OCD with grammar or something, I can't read a story (or I just can't stand to read a story) if I notice more than, say, four grammatical errors per chapter.

I also HATE stories that update less than a Word Document page worth of words.

HATE THEM! BURN THEM!

*Behind* what?

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Yeah... I tend to talk in a 'mean' way when grading/critiquing other's work. It took me forever to write that in a way that didn't seem as though I was all 'LAWL! YOUR WRITING SUCKS! IT GAHVES MA A HEADACHE!' because it doesn't suck. However... I have some sort of undiagnosed OCD with grammar or something, I can't read a story (or I just can't stand to read a story) if I notice more than, say, four grammatical errors per chapter.

I also HATE stories that update less than a Word Document page worth of words.

HATE THEM! BURN THEM!

Didm't come across mean at all. I know I need to work on it, and I am. Chapter three is VERY descriptive compared to everything else.

Name: Engelbert
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Inventory: Bow, 48 arrows, 128 piles of redstone dust, 32 stone
Bio: An Enderman, he lives in a taiga with a cave inside it. He lures humans deep into the cave, filled with devious traps, until they are lost, starving, nearly dead. He then kidnaps them, traps the in a cell within an undiscovered stronghold, never to be seen again. He does this for the Endermen, but even they are creeped out by Engelbert.
Real or Dream? Real
Appearance: He wears a fur coat that goes down to the bottom of this ankles, a fur hat, and a white wool scarf. The only feature of his visible are his blood red eyes, glowing in the dark night sky, clustered with snowflakes.
Good or Evil? Evil
Personality: Engelbert is extremely murderous, using his bow to shoot anything that is alive other than his fellow endermen in his sight. He is silent, rarely speaking at all. Nothing else is known about his personality, for anyone that has seen him has either been killed or captured into the stronghold.

From 1 to 10, how descriptive?

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Name: Engelbert
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Inventory: Bow, 48 arrows, 128 piles of redstone dust, 32 stone
Bio: An Enderman, he lives in a taiga with a cave inside it. He lures humans deep into the cave, filled with devious traps, until they are lost, starving, nearly dead. He then kidnaps them, traps the in a cell within an undiscovered stronghold, never to be seen again. He does this for the Endermen, but even they are creeped out by Engelbert.
Real or Dream? Real
Appearance: He wears a fur coat that goes down to the bottom of this ankles, a fur hat, and a white wool scarf. The only feature of his visible are his blood red eyes, glowing in the dark night sky, clustered with snowflakes.
Good or Evil? Evil
Personality: Engelbert is extremely murderous, using his bow to shoot anything that is alive other than his fellow endermen in his sight. He is silent, rarely speaking at all. Nothing else is known about his personality, for anyone that has seen him has either been killed or captured into the stronghold.

Accepted, expect him to appear in book two.

Chapter three is FINALLY out!

Character application:

Name: N.A
Age: Doesn't matter but pretty old
Gender: It's an it
Inventory: Rose and all that stuff an iron golem has
Bio: An iron golem at a village. Extremely dedicated to protecting the villagers. An accident happened at the village and now the golem attacks anyone who goes near the village
Real of dream?: Real
Appearance: Old and rusty and stuff
Good or evil?: Good at first but turns evil after an accident at the village
Personality: Machine-like with artificial personality

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Character application:

Name: N.A
Age: Doesn't matter but pretty old
Gender: It's an it
Inventory: Rose and all that stuff an iron golem has
Bio: An iron golem at a village. Extremely dedicated to protecting the villagers. An accident happened at the village and now the golem attacks anyone who goes near the village
Real of dream?: Real
Appearance: Old and rusty and stuff
Good or evil?: Good at first but turns evil after an accident at the village
Personality: Machine-like with artificial personality

Denied, unless you're fine with it being some sort of urban legend, and I need a name. "Old and rusty and stuff," means I could make him some random old rusty junk.

Work on Chapter four started, will introduce Alex.

IMPORTANT ANNOUNCEMENT!!
Chapter four won't come out for awhile as I'm going on vacation on Saturday.

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IMPORTANT ANNOUNCEMENT!!
Chapter four won't come out for awhile as I'm going on vacation on Saturday.

Vacations are good. Have Fun!!!

Character Application:

Name: Grant
Age: Early twenties
Gender: Male
Species: Miner
Inventory: Iron pickaxe, lots of bread, iron, coal, bow, limited number of arrows, torches
Bio: When Grant's village was attacked by zombies, Grant barely escaped, and he has a scar to prove it. Grant is skilled at surviving in the wilderness and is always looking for a friend. Grant spent most of his teenage years hiding out in mines and caves. Now, he travels the world, looking for a place to fit in.
Real or dream? Real
Good or evil? Good
Appearance: Leather tunic, iron boots, scar on forehead, black hair

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Character Application:

Name: Grant
Age: Early twenties
Gender: Male
Species: Miner
Inventory: Iron pickaxe, lots of bread, iron, coal, bow, limited number of arrows, torches
Bio: When Grant's village was attacked by zombies, Grant barely escaped, and he has a scar to prove it. Grant is skilled at surviving in the wilderness and is always looking for a friend. Grant spent most of his teenage years hiding out in mines and caves. Now, he travels the world, looking for a place to fit in.
Real or dream? Real
Good or evil? Good
Appearance: Leather tunic, iron boots, scar on forehead, black hair

Species?
Accepted, I don't know how to fit him in just yet, though.

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Species?
Accepted, I don't know how to fit him in just yet, though.

Species: Human/Miner

Nice story so far.

I lol'd when I saw 'Species: Miner'

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Unless Miners are somehow genetically dissimilar to humans in a major way, they shouldn't be a new species... ((I realize you know this, just leading into my next sentence...))

"Let's go exterminate those darn Miners, Dan, they're taking my lawn over!"

Yeah... imagine that...
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