We woke up, my brother and I, in a grassy field. We had no clue where we were, or how we got there. My brother spotted a chest, surrounded by torches, a few feet in front of us. Inside, we found building materials, axes, and several apples. I decided the best thing to do was to explore the surroundings. We found a small desert nearby. There was a well. If there was a well, there must be some sort of civilization nearby. But there wasn't one. In the distance, we could see towering mountains. At once, I began scaling one. In no time, I was at the top. I could see everything. A cave system caught my eye. My brother returned with wood to build a shelter. As he began, I set out to explore the cave system. It was filled with coal and iron, but I had nothing to mine it with. Suddenly, I saw something moving! It was a green, decayed humanoid, like a zombie. It came at me, and I killed it with an axe. I decided it was time to go. I built my way out of the cave and hurried back to the mountain. The house was not finished, but it was livable. My brother and I made beds out of sheep's wool. As night fell, we went to sleep, still wondering about what was going on.
Day Two
The next morning, my brother continued building the house. I could not stop thinking about the cave . We both travelled there, this time with swords. But somehow, we got separated. Out of the darkness came a greenish creature, creeping towards me. That's what I'll call it, a Creeper. I ran out of there, only to find more horrible monsters: a giant spider and a skeleton with a bow and arrows. My brother came to my aid. The Creeper emitted a hissing noise and blew up. Astonished, we ran. After escaping from the monsters, we made it to the cave's exit. But suddenly, another Creeper came. It exploded. My brother was gone, dead. I ran back to the mountain, his body still at the cave. But at the mountain, he was there. He told me he was my brother's ghost. "You must go on," he told me. "I will be watching over you, always." And he was gone. That night, I went to sleep, hungry and depressed. Why did it happen? I hated whoever put us there. And if I ever escaped, he would pay!
Day Three
I spent all day wandering. I had to think. As I stood in front of a cave mouth, I heard the hissing. It made me think of my brother. I returned home, where a surprise was waiting. The house was finished and there was wood scattered at the door. My brother was looking after me after all. As the sun set, I made a tombstone out of cobble, to remember him. After that, I turned in for the night.
I am doing it in one post, I just put in days two and three.
The day's are kind of short,
With your explanations and writing
your days could be several paragraphs,
But you seem to be in a hurry.
slow down and think about your story.
it's good right now,
But it would be great if you
elaborated on the detail,
(Used Spoilers),
and watched your grammar.
Alright, let me get this straight. The reason days 1-3 came through so fast was because DreadMage and I started a new survival world. (I am the brother in the story.) Everything that DreadMage wrote down actually happened in our survival world. After each day, we exited the game and wrote down everything that happened. After 3 Minecraft days, we stopped and decided to put this on the forums. That's why the 3 days came out so fast.
(Yes, I am DreadMage's brother in real life, too.)
Alright, let me get this straight. The reason days 1-3 came through so fast was because DreadMage and I started a new survival world. (I am the brother in the story.) Everything that DreadMage wrote down actually happened in our survival world. After each day, we exited the game and wrote down everything that happened. After 3 Minecraft days, we stopped and decided to put this on the forums. That's why the 3 days came out so fast.
(Yes, I am DreadMage's brother in real life, too.)
Still detail would make it allot better.
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We woke up, my brother and I, in a grassy field. We had no clue where we were, or how we got there. My brother spotted a chest, surrounded by torches, a few feet in front of us. Inside, we found building materials, axes, and several apples. I decided the best thing to do was to explore the surroundings. We found a small desert nearby. There was a well. If there was a well, there must be some sort of civilization nearby. But there wasn't one. In the distance, we could see towering mountains. At once, I began scaling one. In no time, I was at the top. I could see everything. A cave system caught my eye. My brother returned with wood to build a shelter. As he began, I set out to explore the cave system. It was filled with coal and iron, but I had nothing to mine it with. Suddenly, I saw something moving! It was a green, decayed humanoid, like a zombie.
Day Two
The next morning, my brother continued building the house. I could not stop thinking about the cave . We both travelled there, this time with swords. But somehow, we got separated. Out of the darkness came a greenish creature, creeping towards me.
Day Three
I spent all day wandering. I had to think. As I stood in front of a cave mouth, I heard the hissing. It made me think of my brother. I returned home, where a surprise was waiting. The house was finished and there was wood scattered at the door. My brother was looking after me after all. As the sun set, I made a tombstone out of cobble, to remember him. After that, I turned in for the night.
More coming soon!
Though it would be nice to do it in one post,
I know you haven't made another yet but so many people do.
Thanks
The day's are kind of short,
With your explanations and writing
your days could be several paragraphs,
But you seem to be in a hurry.
slow down and think about your story.
it's good right now,
But it would be great if you
elaborated on the detail,
(Used Spoilers),
and watched your grammar.
Thats what i mean.
That wandering around could fill 5-8 paragraphs.
You have to put detail.
(Yes, I am DreadMage's brother in real life, too.)