Some errors, but I can easily overlook them. Especially because my own writing has menacing, evil errors as well. XD
Anyways... please post ASAP.
Or you will die!
Not really...
Umm...
I'm just kind of on the edge, finding out exactly who Ordelia is (sounds like it's derived from ordeal... nice) and how/why she 'cursed the land'.
**If you write past tense (easiest and smoothest), keep it past tense. If you write present tense, keep it present tense.
(Present tense = 'has' instead of 'had' and 'is' instead of 'was'.)
(Past tense = ... the opposite. XD)
Nice prologue, though.
Holds me on edge.
Why is it that everyone else is better at their raw writing than I am?
Word usage, I'm fine. Plot, I'm fine. Characters, I'm fine.
Raw underlying writing? I'm not so good.
Maybe I'm too literal and take too few things for granted... XD
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OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
Some errors, but I can easily overlook them. Especially because my own writing has menacing, evil errors as well. XD
Anyways... please post ASAP.
Or you will die!
Not really...
Umm...
I'm just kind of on the edge, finding out exactly who Ordelia is (sounds like it's derived from ordeal... nice) and how/why she 'cursed the land'.
**If you write past tense (easiest and smoothest), keep it past tense. If you write present tense, keep it present tense.
(Present tense = 'has' instead of 'had' and 'is' instead of 'was'.)
(Past tense = ... the opposite. XD)
Nice prologue, though.
Holds me on edge.
Why is it that everyone else is better at their raw writing than I am?
Word usage, I'm fine. Plot, I'm fine. Characters, I'm fine.
Raw underlying writing? I'm not so good.
Maybe I'm too literal and take too few things for granted... XD
I think yours is good and i use your story against my sis becuz one of your main charators name is clara and in doctor who there is a girl named clara and that will be useful so thx [my sis annoys me so much]
i'm not good with past tence but i'll fix it and i have to rewrite all three chapters i did earlier becuz they didn't go with the prologue i made up on the spot and they were stupid
Some errors, but I can easily overlook them. Especially because my own writing has menacing, evil errors as well. XD
Anyways... please post ASAP.
Or you will die!
Not really...
Umm...
I'm just kind of on the edge, finding out exactly who Ordelia is (sounds like it's derived from ordeal... nice) and how/why she 'cursed the land'.
**If you write past tense (easiest and smoothest), keep it past tense. If you write present tense, keep it present tense.
(Present tense = 'has' instead of 'had' and 'is' instead of 'was'.)
(Past tense = ... the opposite. XD)
Nice prologue, though.
Holds me on edge.
Why is it that everyone else is better at their raw writing than I am?
Word usage, I'm fine. Plot, I'm fine. Characters, I'm fine.
Raw underlying writing? I'm not so good.
Maybe I'm too literal and take too few things for granted... XD
Yeah, I had this small problem before too. When I was much younger. It will seem as if it is a typo if you keep changing the past, present and future tenses unnecessarily. Same for third person perspectives and in character point of views. Gotta watch out for that.
i was thinking that and i no there would be spelling errors since i did this on notepad [worst way of typing a book] i'm going to change that soon like in a few hours when i post the story, and i didn't want to give to much away so you can get to know her in the story but i knew i would have to change it
I type all my chapters on an iPhone. Not a single one was written on my computer.
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Would you like to know the atomic structure of a piece of bread?
SHAME! I HATE doing that.
It makes me feel as though I'm copying some other work of fiction.
I may plan a chapter or two ahead, but that's it.
All I know is that I have three four possible endings for my story currently, all in my head.
Whichever one I remember will be the one I use!
Yeah... a really bad way to write.
BUT! It's EXCITING!!
And... um...
Last time I used an organizer, I wrote fourteen pages (7,500) words into a story, got bored, left it, and... well, now I have that organizer to remind me about how it was supposed to go.
I will feel forever guilty now. D;
((I got bored of it because I knew where it was going. If I don't know where it is going, it's like I'm reading the book at the same time as you are, trying to figure out what all the secrets and hidden fun stuffs are. 'Hidden fun stuff' hehhe...))
I think yours is good and i use your story against my sis becuz one of your main charators name is clara and in doctor who there is a girl named clara and that will be useful so thx [my sis annoys me so much]
... Wait, what do you do? I'm confused.
D;
POST ALREADY >.<
Awfully long post you got there about on the spot writing and organizing.
Meh... it wasn't that long.
You should've seen this rant I went on. It was about anthropomorphs, zoomorphs, and the art of being turned into one/the other. And then I tackled all of the obvious issues, as well as going on to bring up the less obvious issues.
That was actually not that long either.
Never mind.
XD
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OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
MadScientist writes: The Frozen Pheonix. You should really check it out before the chapters go too far. I started reading Immortus's work when he finished his 27th Chapter. I read until 28. It's a pretty good story. I'm reading Book of Dreams too. I'm wondering why I haven't read it in the first place. Oh, the places we'll go.
Geronimo? Like, Stilton? Wow, I haven't read or heard that since 2nd Grade... Isn't she (Geronimo is her writing "pen pal name" and her name is Elizaveth or something) a "ghost writer?" Not a lot of people know about her... Anyway, I'll be reading the Chapter when it comes out soon.
Anyways... please post ASAP.
Or you will die!
Not really...
Umm...
I'm just kind of on the edge, finding out exactly who Ordelia is (sounds like it's derived from ordeal... nice) and how/why she 'cursed the land'.
**If you write past tense (easiest and smoothest), keep it past tense. If you write present tense, keep it present tense.
(Present tense = 'has' instead of 'had' and 'is' instead of 'was'.)
(Past tense = ... the opposite. XD)
Nice prologue, though.
Holds me on edge.
Why is it that everyone else is better at their raw writing than I am?
Word usage, I'm fine. Plot, I'm fine. Characters, I'm fine.
Raw underlying writing? I'm not so good.
Maybe I'm too literal and take too few things for granted... XD
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
I think yours is good and i use your story against my sis becuz one of your main charators name is clara and in doctor who there is a girl named clara and that will be useful so thx [my sis annoys me so much]
i'm not good with past tence but i'll fix it and i have to rewrite all three chapters i did earlier becuz they didn't go with the prologue i made up on the spot and they were stupid
Yeah, I had this small problem before too. When I was much younger. It will seem as if it is a typo if you keep changing the past, present and future tenses unnecessarily. Same for third person perspectives and in character point of views. Gotta watch out for that.
I type all my chapters on an iPhone. Not a single one was written on my computer.
TT2000, you are genius.
Really?
I plot most everything i write out...
:?
Goes in way to many directions if i don't.
I just type out what will happen in each chapter
so i don't lose myself.
(Typically what happens in my other tries.)
I write all of my chapters wherever I can. It's fairly chaotic.
It's also why I tend to randomly update.
T_T
SHAME! I HATE doing that.
It makes me feel as though I'm copying some other work of fiction.
I may plan a chapter or two ahead, but that's it.
All I know is that I have
threefour possible endings for my story currently, all in my head.Whichever one I remember will be the one I use!
Yeah... a really bad way to write.
BUT! It's EXCITING!!
And... um...
Last time I used an organizer, I wrote fourteen pages (7,500) words into a story, got bored, left it, and... well, now I have that organizer to remind me about how it was supposed to go.
I will feel forever guilty now. D;
((I got bored of it because I knew where it was going. If I don't know where it is going, it's like I'm reading the book at the same time as you are, trying to figure out what all the secrets and hidden fun stuffs are. 'Hidden fun stuff' hehhe...))
#Grammatical-failures
Good job!
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
... Wait, what do you do? I'm confused.
D;
POST ALREADY >.<
I WANNA READ MORE!
[CAPS RAGE]!
Meh... it wasn't that long.
You should've seen this rant I went on. It was about anthropomorphs, zoomorphs, and the art of being turned into one/the other. And then I tackled all of the obvious issues, as well as going on to bring up the less obvious issues.
That was actually not that long either.
Never mind.
XD
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
My first App. was in the infancy of the RP. He was too overpowered.
T_T
You write stories!? Why was I not aware of this!?
XD
No. Really. I didn't know. I need to look at your stories now. T_T
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."