Woah, one of the first stories I've seen, or maybe the first, that does not take place in Minecraftia. It is kind of freaky how everything is turning Minecraft-ish. Well, you are affecting the reaction of this person, good job.
I will PM a link to my other story.
It doesn't take place in MC, NOR does it have ANYTHING to do with MC.
XD
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OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
And about the excessive capitals, unless they are special things, such as... oh, a 'Corn', referring to someone that can... maybe... use psychic powers, I would not have all of that stuff capitalized. By 'stuff', I mean 'Growing', 'Things', and a whole bunch of other random words in the first chapter.
Been working on that. You shouldnt find many miscapitalized words after Chapter 7.
Dejers I think you are an alien... (One who can travel inter-dimensionally... And you were flipping through dimensions and you stumbled into Mike's dimension... And now is the part where i call you on the carpet for stealing their story...) I would know because i am one of those alieans...
CONFESS!!!!
And maybe Mike will forgive you... And Mike says "If anything you are the Savage."
Dejers I think you are an alien... (One who can travel inter-dimensionally... And you were flipping through dimensions and you stumbled into Mike's dimension... And now is the part where i call you on the carpet for stealing their story...) I would know because i am one of those alieans...
CONFESS!!!!
And maybe Mike will forgive you... And Mike says "If anything you are the Savage."
Yes you may speak to my lawyer about that.
Look Into the pretty lights...
We arent aliens...
You Arent an alien...
You will donate to Dejers because he is awesome...
I get a headache when I see something in a story that I don't like. I can't even proofread longer stories because they hurt me too much. That's why I've yet to read many of the stories on the Literature Subforums.
That's also why I make really, really small edits for the first three/four paragraphs, quit, then come back to it. Takes me forever and it gives me a migraine. XD
I made so many typos there... I blame it on my headache.
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OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
I get a headache when I see something in a story that I don't like. I can't even proofread longer stories because they hurt me too much. That's why I've yet to read many of the stories on the Literature Subforums.
That's also why I make really, really small edits for the first three/four paragraphs, quit, then come back to it. Takes me forever and it gives me a migraine. XD
I made so many typos there... I blame it on my headache.
This other story that I was attempting to edit. Currently, my headache is gone, but my urge to read your story is also diminished. I feel like purely roleplaying right now. Sigh.
You could be an amazing writer - if you fixed your grammatical issues. And, sometimes, your detailicular issues.
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OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
This other story that I was attempting to edit. Currently, my headache is gone, but my urge to read your story is also diminished. I feel like purely roleplaying right now. Sigh.
You could be an amazing writer - if you fixed your grammatical issues. And, sometimes, your detailicular issues.
Well i can't get much worse... Can i?
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(Finding pictures...)
(Private messaging owners...)
(Dying of boredom!!!)
I will PM a link to my other story.
It doesn't take place in MC, NOR does it have ANYTHING to do with MC.
XD
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
Chapter 9,
Chapter 10,
And Chapter 11 released!
Been working on that. You shouldnt find many miscapitalized words after Chapter 7.
I thought it would be cool to have a dragon spring...
Will release next chapters... Sunday i think.
Twelve,
Thirteen,
And Fourteen released.
WELCOME TO THE CLUB.
fifteen,
sixteen,
and seventeen
Released.
nineteen,
and
twenty Released.
CONFESS!!!!
And maybe Mike will forgive you... And Mike says "If anything you are the Savage."
Twenty-one,
Twenty-Two,
Twenty-Three.
Yes you may speak to my lawyer about that.
We arent aliens...
You Arent an alien...
You will donate to Dejers because he is awesome...
EVERYONE IS HAPPY!!!
Twenty-four,
Twenty-five,
Twenty-six.
Is anyone still reading this??
Thank you for reading this.
Feedback is welcomed
It will be more psychological though.
That's also why I make really, really small edits for the first three/four paragraphs, quit, then come back to it. Takes me forever and it gives me a migraine. XD
I made so many typos there... I blame it on my headache.
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
You could be an amazing writer - if you fixed your grammatical issues. And, sometimes, your detailicular issues.
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."