That would be a teaser, not a prologue. A prologue is supposed to be an out of character introduction/mockup of what happened until now. One sentence does not suffice really. I can't judge your writing without a longer sample of your skills.
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Would you like to know the atomic structure of a piece of bread?
Agreed. Chapter 1 is really, really, really short. It isn't very descriptive, nor is it a chapter that would get you interested because it lacks excitement, etc... I hope I haven't offended you.
Chapter is still pretty short. Doesn't explain much nor very descriptive. You should add what things look, (smell if needed), (taste if needed), (hear if needed) and (feel if needed). Plus, we have no idea where they should be going. It is just too quick.
Two main characters are brothers (which is okay if it's the only similarity)
One finds a book that has the location of weapons.
That book says for another person to read another one of the books.
That other book mentions a hidden location
One of the weapons is contained in a meteor.
One character has gone missing.
The main villain appears to be the Wither.
Both characters revealed have the same names as characters from Shadows of Reality(Max and Jack)
The character application are almost the exact same things
Anyone else want to add to this?
The character application WAS the same thing, but then it was changed. I read all of the list above. Yes, you are right. Parts like the Wither being the main villain is just a coincidental similarity but them both being brothers named Max and Jack? Le what?
Oh! Oh! One more similarity! The character who goes missing went missing cause he went to fight the Wither. That makes 10! Anyone else want to add?
P.S. Gave this story a 1/10 due to forum plagiarism. The only reason I chose a favorite character was so I could submit my vote, so I just selected the first choice.
Oh! Oh! One more similarity! The character who goes missing went missing cause he went to fight the Wither. That makes 10! Anyone else want to add?
P.S. Gave this story a 1/10 due to forum plagiarism. The only reason I chose a favorite character was so I could submit my vote, so I just selected the first choice.
Yeah, this story really lacks majorly in all that is important.
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TT2000, you are genius.
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TT2000, you are genius.
This doesn't seems to be a story. It seems to be a teaser of some sorts.
I am still accusing tanksverylot of ripping off of my writing. There are two many similarities. I won't list them, cause I'll embarrass him D:
- Two main characters are brothers (which is okay if it's the only similarity)
- One finds a book that has the location of weapons.
- That book says for another person to read another one of the books.
- That other book mentions a hidden location
- One of the weapons is contained in a meteor.
- One character has gone missing.
- The main villain appears to be the Wither.
- Both characters revealed have the same names as characters from Shadows of Reality(Max and Jack)
- The character application are almost the exact same things
Anyone else want to add to this?The character application WAS the same thing, but then it was changed. I read all of the list above. Yes, you are right. Parts like the Wither being the main villain is just a coincidental similarity but them both being brothers named Max and Jack? Le what?
P.S. Gave this story a 1/10 due to forum plagiarism. The only reason I chose a favorite character was so I could submit my vote, so I just selected the first choice.
Yeah, this story really lacks majorly in all that is important.
TT2000, you are genius.