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Name: Zyran
Age: 24
Species: Nether Demon (see bio)
Gender: Male
Allegiance: Good
Inventory: An iron sword he found by the skeleton of a human eaten by a Nether Demon.
Bio: A traitor to his kind, the Nether Demons, an ancient warrior race of the Nether. The Nether Demons are winged creatures who await unsuspecting humans to either bring to their lairs to eat alive or to torture them before dropping them into the lava lakes. Zyran, at age 20, decided that his kind were ruthless, evil savages (he was told from the very start that they did "what was necessary"). He decided to live a peaceful life and fled. He now awaits by the Nether Portal (Nether Demons cannot go through Nether Portals) for a human, to warn about his kind and to protect them against all forces of the Nether.

Name: Azros
Age: 102
Species: Nether Demon
Gender: Male
Allegiance: Evil
Inventory: Nothing. He prefers to attack with his bare claws.
Bio: Azros, first and leader of the Nether Demons, is probably right under the level of the Wither in difficulty to defeat. Unlike the other Nether Demons, he has let his claws grow. His claws are tough as diamond and incredibly strong. When battling ranged attackers, he tends to stay high in the air, dodging the attacks. Then, when they least expect it, he swoops down like an eagle, slashing through projectiles with his claws and attacking when he's close. When fighting a melee opponent, he blocks sword attacks by crossing his claws together then doing a backflip (he has wings, so this is easy) to avoid the next sword swing and then easily attacking the opponent before they can strike again. Also, with melee opponents, he will tend to fly around, confusing his target so he can easily swoop down again and attack his opponent.



I also plan on doing a neutral, non-nether demon character soon.

I like both of them, added

Picture is the same as profile minecraft name Natra_Emieca
Name: Natra Emieca (Nat for short)
Age:1000, 22, and 10
Species: Man? Ender? Creeper? the mystery of the hybrid creature
Gender:male
Allegiance: Subject to change
Inventory: Enderpearls, TNT and levers, and an old Sword by the name "Emieca's Blade
Bio: There once was a Great Knight named Natra only 22 he had brought much glory to his kings name under the red cross, But all that is good does not always last and an Enderman(who's name is not known) of 1000 years old came upon the village. Fearing it the king ordered the top Knights of the red cross. Rentar who's skills lie with the bow, Makar a mage of great power, and Natra a Skilled with his familys sword the "Emieca's blade". First to Battle was Rentar but he could not lay a single shot on the creature as it seemed to move faster then the eye Rentar blinked and the Endermen slayed him. Second to battle was Makar his fire, potions, and redstone did little to stop the creature and he was wounded. Quickly Natra came and fended the creature away from Makar. Natra grabbed the Enderman and as he did the Enderman teleported It was here that Natra saw the void and became one with the Enderman but he and the enderman became a red enderpearl that fell upon the ground far from the kingdom. A Creeper Age 10(a long time for one to live given their reputation) found the pearl, hungry he was and mistaking it for a fruit he swallowed it. Then the transformation occurred. Taking the Shape of Minecraftian, The Skin of Enderman, and The Face of Creeper. Three brains forever in battle for control neither rules the mind for more the three days before another takes control. Natra fights between the urge to protect, to Blowup the construction of all good folk, and to Attack People who look at him. One will in the end take control for better....or worse.

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Picture is the same as profile minecraft name Natra_Emieca
Name: Natra Emieca (Nat for short)
Age:1000, 22, and 10
Species: Man? Ender? Creeper? the mystery of the hybrid creature
Gender:male
Allegiance: Subject to change
Inventory: Enderpearls, TNT and levers, and an old Sword by the name "Emieca's Blade
Bio: There once was a Great Knight named Natra only 22 he had brought much glory to his kings name under the red cross, But all that is good does not always last and an Enderman(who's name is not known) of 1000 years old came upon the village. Fearing it the king ordered the top Knights of the red cross. Rentar who's skills lie with the bow, Makar a mage of great power, and Natra a Skilled with his familys sword the "Emieca's blade". First to Battle was Rentar but he could not lay a single shot on the creature as it seemed to move faster then the eye Rentar blinked and the Endermen slayed him. Second to battle was Makar his fire, potions, and redstone did little to stop the creature and he was wounded. Quickly Natra came and fended the creature away from Makar. Natra grabbed the Enderman and as he did the Enderman teleported It was here that Natra saw the void and became one with the Enderman but he and the enderman became a red enderpearl that fell upon the ground far from the kingdom. A Creeper Age 10(a long time for one to live given their reputation) found the pearl, hungry he was and mistaking it for a fruit he swallowed it. Then the transformation occurred. Taking the Shape of Minecraftian, The Skin of Enderman, and The Face of Creeper. Three brains forever in battle for control neither rules the mind for more the three days before another takes control. Natra fights between the urge to protect, to Blowup the construction of all good folk, and to Attack People who look at him. One will in the end take control for better....or worse.

I like the general idea, likely to appear, but maybe not in the role you would expect

On another note, expect Chapter 3 in around 10 minutes.

Chapter 3 is here! Plenty of action in this one

I think that you should have thought about the testing of the prophecy, and put it into chapter 3, instead of leaving us hanging.It really disappointed me

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I think that you should have thought about the testing of the prophecy, and put it into chapter 3, instead of leaving us hanging.

It really disappointed me

It was meant to be a cliffhanger ending. All shall be explained in chapter 4

Interesting story. I like your origins story for the world. At first, I was almost expecting something clichéd. But you changed it up well enough to come across as REALLY original and its probably the best MC origins story I've read that uses the traditional "Notch good because reasons and Herobrine really evil because other reasons" set up. I especially like the way you set up the humans and pigmen as rivals and have Herobrine as more of a dark manipulator, instead of the dark... person who devotes himself to tormenting one person for no apparent reason. So real kudos to you.

Looking forward to where you go with this. Really sad I didn't find it before.

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Interesting story. I like your origins story for the world. At first, I was almost expecting something clichéd. But you changed it up well enough to come across as REALLY original and its probably the best MC origins story I've read that uses the traditional "Notch good because reasons and Herobrine really evil because other reasons" set up. I especially like the way you set up the humans and pigmen as rivals and have Herobrine as more of a dark manipulator, instead of the dark... person who devotes himself to tormenting one person for no apparent reason. So real kudos to you.

Looking forward to where you go with this. Really sad I didn't find it before.

Thanks a lot, I really appreciate the praise

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I like the general idea, likely to appear, but maybe not in the role you would expect

On another note, expect Chapter 3 in around 10 minutes.

You can change anything and for any role as you wish if you choose to use it

Name: Unknown
Age: Unknown
Species: Unknown
Gender: Male
Inventory: Subject to change
Allegiance: Neutral
Bio: A mysterious knight who Steve and Cubie meet later on in the series. He tells him only part of the story (intro), and says, "You will learn the rest in due time, then disappears. He will return later on in the series to train Steve, who will later find out that the figure is Jeb.

I like it, but I think it would be better if you revised it. Cuz in the first 2 chapters, you use "I", in the third chapter you use "Steve".

Name: Harold (aliases The Don, The King, The one-handed don/king)
Age: Unknown. Believed to be at least 70.
Species: Testificate, infected arm
Gender: Male
Allegiance: (good/evil/neutral) Neutral. Often swings evil and occasionally commits random acts of kindness.
Inventory: A golden sword, hoe and a stack of rotten flesh.
Bio: (As detailed as possible!) Steve and Cubie come across him in the Nether, running some pigmen remnants from an old nether forteress, where he holds them briefly before an important point in their quest. Runs the trade in nether warts and blaze powder to the overworld. Yet he dresses in a tattered old villager's robes and carries only old tattered items, believing himself to be a man of the people, or a "modest lord" as he puts it. He in reality has piles of gold and emeralds. Anything of worth he owns is either laid at least 2 metres away from his usual path of movement or piled upon four frail-looking slaves who accompany him everywhere. You make up your mind on his reasoning for it, if its addressed at all. His right hand seems decayed, like it belongs to the undead. He seems to have a strange fascination with magma cubes.

His hand ties into his backstory. Back before the Ether was tainted he was a spice trader, travelling with his brother, wife and daughter. They survived the creation of the Nether through a deus ex machine and began to wander the wastes, unable to return. Then his brother went mad, attempted to seduce Harold's wife and got rejected. He then killed the wife, and opened the doors of the shelter they were holed up in to a group of rabid pigmen they were hiding from. This resulted in him dying and Harold's daughter being bitten. She in turn bit Harold's hand.

Going insane Harold decided to tourniquet the wound entirely, unable to bring himself to cut it off. He then entrapped his daughter and brought her to the nether fortress within which Harold currently resides. The infection is still creeping up Harold's arm gradually, slowed only by Harold moving the tourniquet up his arm every now and then. He is currently half-way up the fore-arm.

Well that was long and rambly.

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Name: Harold (aliases The Don, The King, The one-handed don/king)
Age: Unknown. Believed to be at least 70.
Species: Testificate, infected arm
Gender: Male
Allegiance: (good/evil/neutral) Neutral. Often swings evil and occasionally commits random acts of kindness.
Inventory: A golden sword, hoe and a stack of rotten flesh.
Bio: (As detailed as possible!) Steve and Cubie come across him in the Nether, running some pigmen remnants from an old nether forteress, where he holds them briefly before an important point in their quest. Runs the trade in nether warts and blaze powder to the overworld. Yet he dresses in a tattered old villager's robes and carries only old tattered items, believing himself to be a man of the people, or a "modest lord" as he puts it. He in reality has piles of gold and emeralds. Anything of worth he owns is either laid at least 2 metres away from his usual path of movement or piled upon four frail-looking slaves who accompany him everywhere. You make up your mind on his reasoning for it, if its addressed at all. His right hand seems decayed, like it belongs to the undead. He seems to have a strange fascination with magma cubes.

His hand ties into his backstory. Back before the Ether was tainted he was a spice trader, travelling with his brother, wife and daughter. They survived the creation of the Nether through a deus ex machine and began to wander the wastes, unable to return. Then his brother went mad, attempted to seduce Harold's wife and got rejected. He then killed the wife, and opened the doors of the shelter they were holed up in to a group of rabid pigmen they were hiding from. This resulted in him dying and Harold's daughter being bitten. She in turn bit Harold's hand.

Going insane Harold decided to tourniquet the wound entirely, unable to bring himself to cut it off. He then entrapped his daughter and brought her to the nether fortress within which Harold currently resides. The infection is still creeping up Harold's arm gradually, slowed only by Harold moving the tourniquet up his arm every now and then. He is currently half-way up the fore-arm.

Well that was long and rambly.

Interesting, definitely one of the better applications I've seen. Approved!

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I like it, but I think it would be better if you revised it. Cuz in the first 2 chapters, you use "I", in the third chapter you use "Steve".

Oh, I meant to fix that, must have forgot, sorry I'll go change that.

Such victory! Very successful! Wow!

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Such victory! Very successful! Wow!

Such feedback. Very helpful. Thanks!

Just released chapter 4! Also added the rest of the chapters in the book in the Chapters section.

Hi it's me TheRealBlueCreeper(forgot my old account's password) I came to say that this story is really great! I hope you keep doing them:D

Plz make more Steve! It's amazing!

Name: Keokun
Age: Infinite
Species: Other
Gender: Male
Allegiance: Evil
Inventory: Blade of Evil infused Obsidian.
Bio: Before Notch. Before Herobrine. Keokun is Evil itself, Evil personified. He sees Notch and Herobrine as weak playthings, and prefers not to interact with them, thinking them too low for him. Keokun takes an interest in Steve and watches over him, trying to decide whether to support or ignore him. He is met by Steve and Cubie when they are exploring the Nether, and he makes himself invisible to them.

Hey guys, sorry I've been on hiatus for basically forever. I'm considering three courses of action for this story.

1. Completely reboot it
2. Stop writing
3. Continue as normal