Okay. I like stuff. Though one thing that had me bothered for quite the time: Errr, you write monstrous sentences. sc1020 has the same problem in my opinion, though not as much I think. Try breaking down the sentences, otherwise your characters seem to speak like this: Wellwhatdowehavehereinteresting !
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Would you like to know the atomic structure of a piece of bread?
You ARE talking to Zeiustepali, right? I just don't know who you are talking to, I feel like you are trying to cook up a conversation with a brick wall or a half eaten sandwich. With ham. And cheese.
You ARE talking to Zeiustepali, right? I just don't know who you are talking to, I feel like you are trying to cook up a conversation with a brick wall or a half eaten sandwich. With ham. And cheese.
I am talking to Zeiustepali. And yes, I am not particularly good in making conversations.
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Would you like to know the atomic structure of a piece of bread?
I see the Valkyrie Queen isn't a major part of the story
Yeah, she isn't, however, there's going to be one last thing that Syn gets before he is taken by Rift. And it will be awesome. And as for him killing the maker of all the chaos (AKA The Ancient sun god) You'll have to see. Tip: Involves purple and blue (Or was it cold?) Aerclouds.
Yeah, she isn't, however, there's going to be one last thing that Syn gets before he is taken by Rift. And it will be awesome. And as for him killing the maker of all the chaos (AKA The Ancient sun god) You'll have to see. Tip: Involves purple and blue (Or was it cold?) Aerclouds.
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Oh cool chapter man this story is interisting try to have a conversation with a brick wall means you probably need to go to a cylcolagical intatution
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I see the Valkyrie Queen isn't a major part of the story
I am talking to Zeiustepali. And yes, I am not particularly good in making conversations.
TT2000, you are genius.
Yeah, she isn't, however, there's going to be one last thing that Syn gets before he is taken by Rift. And it will be awesome. And as for him killing the maker of all the chaos (AKA The Ancient sun god) You'll have to see. Tip: Involves purple and blue (Or was it cold?) Aerclouds.
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TF2 is the only game where you can, potentially, die to a shovel being wielded by a man in a wizard hat, parachuting around, defying physics, and on fire.
The Quickest Way To A Mans Heart Involves A Steady Hand,Pliers,And A Healthy Set Of Incisors
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