This is my first Minecraft Fanfiction, so bear with me. This fanfic basically gives a storyline to Minecraft, however I do change gameplay mechanics. New chapters every week!! (When I'm not grounded)
Prologue
"Let's send these Endermen to the Nether." yelled a knight under the hire of the Village Elder. The other knight nodded in agreement as the first of the Endermen came. It teleported right in front of the first knight, however he was ready. He quickly splashed the contents of his water bottle all over the Enderman. The Enderman let out an inhuman screech, clutching it's face. The knight gutted the Enderman with his Iron Sword. The Enderman then exploded into a shower of purple sparks.
Late into the night, the village was almost overwhelmed. However as the last knight stood, ready to face the hoards upon hoards of purple eyed monstrosities, it began to rain. The knight let out a cheer, then was quickly turned deaf as the legion of Endermen began to scream. Purple sparks lit up the night sky.
Meanwhile, on a beach, a shipwrecked adventurer of the Bermuda Triangle slowly regained consiousness. His name was Steve.
Chapter 1: HISSSSSSS
Steve looked around, wondering where he was. One second he was steering his ship into the Bermuda Triangle, the next he was drowning in a whirlpool. Now he was on a beach with a dense jungle in front of him. He looked behind him. An archepeligo of small islands in the sea greeted him, and on one of the islands a White-Eyed man stared at him. Steve rubbed his eyes and looked again, not beliving what he saw. When he opened his eyes however, the man was gone. Steve thought he was hallucinating. However truly learned he was not when a hiss was emitted from a creature behind him. The green being had creeped up on him.
It was not pleased it's Endermen had failed in getting the Ender Pearls from the Priest in the Village. Only two or three Endermen had come back, one holding a block of gold. It's master was pleased by the gift, and that was the only Enderman that did not die by It's wrath. More Endermen procceded to be created in that dimension, as It's life force depended on Endermen.
Chapter 2: Shipwrecks and Spiders
Steve turned quickly and looked at the thing behind him, and saw it bulge and glow. As he tried to take a step, it exploded, causing Steve to be thrown against a tree. His vision clouded red. When Steve's vision cleared, he stared at the crater the green kamikazi had left. As he stood up for a further inspection, a crudely made arrow wizzed past is head, lodging itself into the tree trunk behind him. Steve quickly clambered up the tree, arrows narrowly missing him. He came to rest on a high branch, scanning the forest for his asailant. His eyes came to rest on a skeleton holding a bow.
"Oh my GOD!" Steve shouted out loud, causing the skeleton to draw back it's bow in his direction. However the skeleton looked unsure of itself. Steve then came to the realization that the skeleton could not see him through the leaves. He balenced on that branch for five minutes until, finally, the skeleton relaxed it's draw. Then, careful not to alert the skeleton, Steve shifted into a comfortable position. Realizing that it had become night as he had waited out the skeleton, he drifted off to sleep.
***
"What do you mean you can't go to the Overworld," It demanded harshly, "I don't care if it's raining get out there and find that Human from OtherWorld."
The Enderman screeched a reply.
"You do not need to know why I want the Human. Just bring it to me."
The Enderman let out a howl and teleported to the Overworld.
"I hope Master Herobrine is right, and that human really is a threat." It said to itself silently after it's minion had gone.
***
Steve woke up soaking wet. It had rained over night. The shock of the day before frightend him. As he looked over to the skeleton, it was now in the crater. And burning in the sunlight. Now Steve looked to his right. He saw a shipwreck only an hour's hike from his position. But when he looked to his left, the only thing he saw was the face of a ticked off, gigantic, spider.
As a start, this isn't too bad. I really didn't notice any grammatical errors, and it seems you have a pretty solid concept.
The only thing I'd like to see is much more content. Flesh it out, and you've really got something here.
Gotta love fanfics; always an interesting experience all around!
As a start, this isn't too bad. I really didn't notice any grammatical errors, and it seems you have a pretty solid concept.
The only thing I'd like to see is much more content. Flesh it out, and you've really got something here.
Gotta love fanfics; always an interesting experience all around!
Have to agree. It is really nice, but it feels like a baseline for a plot. Try to use more descriptions- describe how you move, how you talk, your surroundings, the creatures around you, how you feel... Make me be there.
Here is my favourite metaphor I like to use with writing- imagine you are a painter. You trying to paint a picture, and the paper (computer, iPhone, whatever you use) is your canvas, and instead of paints you use words! And the reader is like the gallery, or a museum, for paintings, and you need to try and paint an amazing picture for it. Try to paint an amazing picture in the reader's mind.
Right, keep writing. This has so much potential. G'luck, and hoping to see more
Chapter 2 up now! Probably going to post chapters now whenever I feel like writing them. But you should not have to wait more than a week for a chapter.
Prologue
Late into the night, the village was almost overwhelmed. However as the last knight stood, ready to face the hoards upon hoards of purple eyed monstrosities, it began to rain. The knight let out a cheer, then was quickly turned deaf as the legion of Endermen began to scream. Purple sparks lit up the night sky.
Meanwhile, on a beach, a shipwrecked adventurer of the Bermuda Triangle slowly regained consiousness. His name was Steve.
Chapter 1: HISSSSSSS
It was not pleased it's Endermen had failed in getting the Ender Pearls from the Priest in the Village. Only two or three Endermen had come back, one holding a block of gold. It's master was pleased by the gift, and that was the only Enderman that did not die by It's wrath. More Endermen procceded to be created in that dimension, as It's life force depended on Endermen.
Chapter 2: Shipwrecks and Spiders
"Oh my GOD!" Steve shouted out loud, causing the skeleton to draw back it's bow in his direction. However the skeleton looked unsure of itself. Steve then came to the realization that the skeleton could not see him through the leaves. He balenced on that branch for five minutes until, finally, the skeleton relaxed it's draw. Then, careful not to alert the skeleton, Steve shifted into a comfortable position. Realizing that it had become night as he had waited out the skeleton, he drifted off to sleep.
***
"What do you mean you can't go to the Overworld," It demanded harshly, "I don't care if it's raining get out there and find that Human from OtherWorld."
The Enderman screeched a reply.
"You do not need to know why I want the Human. Just bring it to me."
The Enderman let out a howl and teleported to the Overworld.
"I hope Master Herobrine is right, and that human really is a threat." It said to itself silently after it's minion had gone.
***
Steve woke up soaking wet. It had rained over night. The shock of the day before frightend him. As he looked over to the skeleton, it was now in the crater. And burning in the sunlight. Now Steve looked to his right. He saw a shipwreck only an hour's hike from his position. But when he looked to his left, the only thing he saw was the face of a ticked off, gigantic, spider.
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Despite Chapter 1 Herobrine is not the main antagonist and will only be mentioned and appear at times. He will not play a major role in the story.
Oh and feel free to comment and point out grammatical errors my nonexistant readers.
The only thing I'd like to see is much more content. Flesh it out, and you've really got something here.
Gotta love fanfics; always an interesting experience all around!
Listen to Immortus' nice words and you'll be a rising star some day. Keep improving, you have a long way.
Thanks everyone!!! Advice is truly appreciated. Thank you.