If I interpreted your message correctly and you meant that she can create fire from thin air that is not quite right. She used the bottled fire as a base and amplified it to kill the slime. I will explain this concept a bit more in a later chapter when it is actually relevant.
Somewhere on the 7th paragraph, it says "they had to avoid another carnivorous plat." Should be plant. Just thought I'd point that out. Great story by the way.
The important thing is not how long you live... It's what you accomplish with your life. While I live, I want to shine. I want to prove that I exist. If I could do something really important... That would definitely carry on into the future. My spirit will always live on. And so if I were to disappear... I think that all I have accomplished will go on. That would mean that it's living. Right?- Grovyle
"Although man kind will always look onward, yearning for more, searching for new boundries, only to break through them, With the understanding that this world is one in which we all share, comes the responsibility of knowing the decisions we make today will have a lasting impact on the generations of tommorow." - Civ 5 BNW opening cinematic
Somewhere on the 7th paragraph, it says "they had to avoid another carnivorous plat." Should be plant. Just thought I'd point that out. Great story by the way.
That's another post full, I hope that I'll be able to fit all of what is to come on the first page.
Have fun reading ^^
Wonderful as always! It's fun to see how you change along with your story. Whatever is coming it sounds pretty promising!
Spelling error around the part with the food machine. It says "He pulled a lever and he seat he was sitting." Forgot the T Also in the first sentence is leaded British English?
The important thing is not how long you live... It's what you accomplish with your life. While I live, I want to shine. I want to prove that I exist. If I could do something really important... That would definitely carry on into the future. My spirit will always live on. And so if I were to disappear... I think that all I have accomplished will go on. That would mean that it's living. Right?- Grovyle
"Although man kind will always look onward, yearning for more, searching for new boundries, only to break through them, With the understanding that this world is one in which we all share, comes the responsibility of knowing the decisions we make today will have a lasting impact on the generations of tommorow." - Civ 5 BNW opening cinematic
Wonderful as always! It's fun to see how you change along with your story. Whatever is coming it sounds pretty promising!
Spelling error around the part with the food machine. It says "He pulled a lever and he seat he was sitting." Forgot the T Also in the first sentence is leaded British English?
Fixed. In this case "leaded" is late-night english but I'm sure some linguist could tell you that in some form of english it is valid. Hehe.
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I have sort of a suggestion, maybe the ender field warp collapsing and causing some form of disaster, such as turning stone and dirt and grass into endstone? trees into pillars? I don't know if that's a decent idea, but... ender.
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I have sort of a suggestion, maybe the ender field warp collapsing and causing some form of disaster, such as turning stone and dirt and grass into endstone? trees into pillars? I don't know if that's a decent idea, but... ender.
Eh, I think an animal companion that one of the characters grows a bond with would be a nice heart-felt addition. Your idea sounds good but would need more details. I'm sure Fire could fix something up for you if that's what he has in mind.
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The important thing is not how long you live... It's what you accomplish with your life. While I live, I want to shine. I want to prove that I exist. If I could do something really important... That would definitely carry on into the future. My spirit will always live on. And so if I were to disappear... I think that all I have accomplished will go on. That would mean that it's living. Right?- Grovyle
"Although man kind will always look onward, yearning for more, searching for new boundries, only to break through them, With the understanding that this world is one in which we all share, comes the responsibility of knowing the decisions we make today will have a lasting impact on the generations of tommorow." - Civ 5 BNW opening cinematic
I have sort of a suggestion, maybe the ender field warp collapsing and causing some form of disaster, such as turning stone and dirt and grass into endstone? trees into pillars? I don't know if that's a decent idea, but... ender.
I should maybe have explained that better but it should become clear once I explain how magic works a little more. Ender is basically the "flavor" of magic that defines matter and physical laws, so an ender field warp is basically making more room in space much like a bag of holding holds more than its volume.
There will be an ender related disaster at one point though but somewhat differently than you might expect. There will also also plenty of examples for magic-related accidents that have happened in the past.
Chapter 41 is out now and it occupies yet another post.
Sorry for the delay, it was a mixture of being lazy, busy and out of inspiration. There also won't be a new chapter for a little as I'll be working on another polishing run through my story and I'll use those double spaces everyone's been telling me to use.
Just another update on when the next chapter will come out. I will be moving to a different city now and won't have any internet for the next week or a little longer, I will try my best to complete correcting the previous chapters and also write a new one but we'll see how much time I have exactly.
I have finally finished digging through all previous chapters and have corrected some more mistakes.
The thing that I also did was add a double space in front of every paragraph... only to find out that Minecraftforum removes those in the finalized post version.
I'll try to get a chapter up as often as possible but we'll see how much time I have.
Anyways, have fun reading ^^
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Just a small info update, there won't be any chapters in the next 11-14 days as I am going to be away with my family in that time.
That FreeZe can create a fire by air
If I interpreted your message correctly and you meant that she can create fire from thin air that is not quite right. She used the bottled fire as a base and amplified it to kill the slime. I will explain this concept a bit more in a later chapter when it is actually relevant.
'nother chapter is out, Chapter 37 to be precise.
This should have gone up a few days ago but due to some delays it hasn't, at least it is up now.
Have fun reading ^^
Done well so far, keep up the good work
Chapter 38 is released.
Have fun reading ^^
Somewhere on the 7th paragraph, it says "they had to avoid another carnivorous plat." Should be plant. Just thought I'd point that out. Great story by the way.
The important thing is not how long you live... It's what you accomplish with your life. While I live, I want to shine. I want to prove that I exist. If I could do something really important... That would definitely carry on into the future. My spirit will always live on. And so if I were to disappear... I think that all I have accomplished will go on. That would mean that it's living. Right?- Grovyle
"Although man kind will always look onward, yearning for more, searching for new boundries, only to break through them, With the understanding that this world is one in which we all share, comes the responsibility of knowing the decisions we make today will have a lasting impact on the generations of tommorow." - Civ 5 BNW opening cinematic
Victory Yell
https://youtu.be/fqSyibSPq5w?t=4m46s
Other Stuff
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Thanks for pointing that out.
Chapter 39 is out now.
Just FYI, the delay has been caused by a for real lightning strike frying our router. Anyway, moving on.
This is also the 131th post, so basically the only one I really had to secure for myself.
Have fun reading ^^
Alright, here is Chapter 40.
That's another post full, I hope that I'll be able to fit all of what is to come on the first page.
Have fun reading ^^
Wonderful as always! It's fun to see how you change along with your story. Whatever is coming it sounds pretty promising!
Spelling error around the part with the food machine. It says "He pulled a lever and he seat he was sitting." Forgot the T
Also in the first sentence is leaded British English?
The important thing is not how long you live... It's what you accomplish with your life. While I live, I want to shine. I want to prove that I exist. If I could do something really important... That would definitely carry on into the future. My spirit will always live on. And so if I were to disappear... I think that all I have accomplished will go on. That would mean that it's living. Right?- Grovyle
"Although man kind will always look onward, yearning for more, searching for new boundries, only to break through them, With the understanding that this world is one in which we all share, comes the responsibility of knowing the decisions we make today will have a lasting impact on the generations of tommorow." - Civ 5 BNW opening cinematic
Victory Yell
https://youtu.be/fqSyibSPq5w?t=4m46s
Other Stuff
https://gfycat.com/DismalJoyfulCaribou#
Would you mind?
Yes, of course.
That of course needs to be fixed,
but otherwise, great story so far!
Looking forward to more chapters!
Check out my channel, I'll occasionally upload videos.
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Fixed. In this case "leaded" is late-night english but I'm sure some linguist could tell you that in some form of english it is valid. Hehe.
Fixed.
It's really great to be able to rely on my readers for those minor mistakes I make.
I have sort of a suggestion, maybe the ender field warp collapsing and causing some form of disaster, such as turning stone and dirt and grass into endstone? trees into pillars? I don't know if that's a decent idea, but... ender.
Check out my channel, I'll occasionally upload videos.
https://www.youtube.com/channel/UClwcjDFL9HHMnqNWRLImbSw
Eh, I think an animal companion that one of the characters grows a bond with would be a nice heart-felt addition. Your idea sounds good but would need more details. I'm sure Fire could fix something up for you if that's what he has in mind.
The important thing is not how long you live... It's what you accomplish with your life. While I live, I want to shine. I want to prove that I exist. If I could do something really important... That would definitely carry on into the future. My spirit will always live on. And so if I were to disappear... I think that all I have accomplished will go on. That would mean that it's living. Right?- Grovyle
"Although man kind will always look onward, yearning for more, searching for new boundries, only to break through them, With the understanding that this world is one in which we all share, comes the responsibility of knowing the decisions we make today will have a lasting impact on the generations of tommorow." - Civ 5 BNW opening cinematic
Victory Yell
https://youtu.be/fqSyibSPq5w?t=4m46s
Other Stuff
https://gfycat.com/DismalJoyfulCaribou#
I should maybe have explained that better but it should become clear once I explain how magic works a little more. Ender is basically the "flavor" of magic that defines matter and physical laws, so an ender field warp is basically making more room in space much like a bag of holding holds more than its volume.
There will be an ender related disaster at one point though but somewhat differently than you might expect. There will also also plenty of examples for magic-related accidents that have happened in the past.
Chapter 41 is out now and it occupies yet another post.
Sorry for the delay, it was a mixture of being lazy, busy and out of inspiration. There also won't be a new chapter for a little as I'll be working on another polishing run through my story and I'll use those double spaces everyone's been telling me to use.
Have fun reading ^^
Just another update on when the next chapter will come out. I will be moving to a different city now and won't have any internet for the next week or a little longer, I will try my best to complete correcting the previous chapters and also write a new one but we'll see how much time I have exactly.
Hope u settle in nicely. Also, sometimes when u have no more ideas, read other people's stories too.
good luck 😉
Alright, after a long delay here is Chapter 42.
I have finally finished digging through all previous chapters and have corrected some more mistakes.
The thing that I also did was add a double space in front of every paragraph... only to find out that Minecraftforum removes those in the finalized post version.
I'll try to get a chapter up as often as possible but we'll see how much time I have.
Anyways, have fun reading ^^