Just a heads up, the chapters in the base like this one will be quite heavy on background information and exposition. I do this now because I need it to set up for some things later, because it wouldn't make sense to explain how something works in the middle of the action.
Ambigious, chewing on some bread, said with a/his half-full mouth: “Wow, Fire. That’s a lot of information for breakfast.” Not sure if this is right or not. If it is right please tell me.
A squadron of short, wingless demons wearing formal suits was(were) in the process of serving them breakfast.
These both might not be incorrect but I'd like to learn if they aren't. I really enjoy the way you've settled down and added some explanation. I also noticed you tend to avoid abbreviations, like we're would've(etc.), in your text. Is this by choice or just the natural way you right? Where I live everyone uses them all the time so it's become part of my subconscious. Anyway enjoy how dedicated you are! Keep up the good work.
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The important thing is not how long you live... It's what you accomplish with your life. While I live, I want to shine. I want to prove that I exist. If I could do something really important... That would definitely carry on into the future. My spirit will always live on. And so if I were to disappear... I think that all I have accomplished will go on. That would mean that it's living. Right?- Grovyle
"Although man kind will always look onward, yearning for more, searching for new boundries, only to break through them, With the understanding that this world is one in which we all share, comes the responsibility of knowing the decisions we make today will have a lasting impact on the generations of tommorow." - Civ 5 BNW opening cinematic
Ambigious, chewing on some bread, said with a/his half-full mouth: “Wow, Fire. That’s a lot of information for breakfast.” Not sure if this is right or not. If it is right please tell me.
A squadron of short, wingless demons wearing formal suits was(were) in the process of serving them breakfast.
These both might not be incorrect but I'd like to learn if they aren't. I really enjoy the way you've settled down and added some explanation. I also noticed you tend to avoid abbreviations, like we're would've(etc.), in your text. Is this by choice or just the natural way you right? Where I live everyone uses them all the time so it's become part of my subconscious. Anyway enjoy how dedicated you are! Keep up the good work.
I do believe that leaving out "a/his" in the first one is correct, it's a minor thing really. It may be one of those things that is correct either way. Regarding the demons, the "was" is refering to the squadron, which is singular. That *should* be correct as well.
Regarding the abbreviations, I only abbreviate for things that are audibly different from their long forms (it's, don't...), in speech they sound almost like their long forms, I just don't like how things like "would've" look in text form.
Oh so your intelligent, powerful, and rich now huh.
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The important thing is not how long you live... It's what you accomplish with your life. While I live, I want to shine. I want to prove that I exist. If I could do something really important... That would definitely carry on into the future. My spirit will always live on. And so if I were to disappear... I think that all I have accomplished will go on. That would mean that it's living. Right?- Grovyle
"Although man kind will always look onward, yearning for more, searching for new boundries, only to break through them, With the understanding that this world is one in which we all share, comes the responsibility of knowing the decisions we make today will have a lasting impact on the generations of tommorow." - Civ 5 BNW opening cinematic
With it comes a fairly large update to the formating of the post. All the informationstuff and links are now in the OP and the chapters are in the other posts. I also figured out how to get MCF to make an empty line after spoilers... it's by putting a dot with a fontsize of 1 after the spoiler...
You also should really check out the Convergence since the first few chapters are out now.
Have some magic, folks. I'll try to get another one out as soon as possible, maybe even in a few days. I would really appreciate some feedback on the story in general, like some things that are unclear so I can clear them up.
The delay was caused by a mixture of having a lot of exams, then having a week of doing absolutely nothing, being busy with the Convergence and some other things. But now I'm back. I'll try to crank out a chapter as often as I can, let's see how it goes.
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So, here is chapter 50. It's kind of a milestone honestly.
I also have to inform you that I will be on holiday for the next two weeks. After that I won't work on a new chapter immediately but once again polish existing chapters.
All previous chapters have been cleaned up once again, I fixed some consistency issues and also removed some things that just didn't fit where they were because they for example interrupted a fast paced scene.
And as you might have noticed, I have a new avatar! My sister has been putting a lot of work into a new drawing of Fire. The link to the full picture is here.
I thought that I could break up the exposition avalanche that are the base chapters with a bit more action. The base section will also probably come to an end soon.
Read all of the chapters (up to 53 for now). I love the book, the idea is great and. Btw I read all of it in 6 hours of one day
Hey, thanks for reading. I know how it is to find some piece of content and then just consume it all in one go and it makes me kinda proud to be producing that kind of response.
Another chapter is coming soon.
Chapter 43 is out now (finally).
Just a heads up, the chapters in the base like this one will be quite heavy on background information and exposition. I do this now because I need it to set up for some things later, because it wouldn't make sense to explain how something works in the middle of the action.
Have fun reading ^^
Ambigious, chewing on some bread, said with a/his half-full mouth: “Wow, Fire. That’s a lot of information for breakfast.” Not sure if this is right or not. If it is right please tell me.
A squadron of short, wingless demons wearing formal suits was(were) in the process of serving them breakfast.
These both might not be incorrect but I'd like to learn if they aren't. I really enjoy the way you've settled down and added some explanation. I also noticed you tend to avoid abbreviations, like we're would've(etc.), in your text. Is this by choice or just the natural way you right? Where I live everyone uses them all the time so it's become part of my subconscious. Anyway enjoy how dedicated you are! Keep up the good work.
The important thing is not how long you live... It's what you accomplish with your life. While I live, I want to shine. I want to prove that I exist. If I could do something really important... That would definitely carry on into the future. My spirit will always live on. And so if I were to disappear... I think that all I have accomplished will go on. That would mean that it's living. Right?- Grovyle
"Although man kind will always look onward, yearning for more, searching for new boundries, only to break through them, With the understanding that this world is one in which we all share, comes the responsibility of knowing the decisions we make today will have a lasting impact on the generations of tommorow." - Civ 5 BNW opening cinematic
Victory Yell
https://youtu.be/fqSyibSPq5w?t=4m46s
Other Stuff
https://gfycat.com/DismalJoyfulCaribou#
I do believe that leaving out "a/his" in the first one is correct, it's a minor thing really. It may be one of those things that is correct either way. Regarding the demons, the "was" is refering to the squadron, which is singular. That *should* be correct as well.
Regarding the abbreviations, I only abbreviate for things that are audibly different from their long forms (it's, don't...), in speech they sound almost like their long forms, I just don't like how things like "would've" look in text form.
Also, thanks for the feedback on the lore parts.
Okay, here is chapter 44, and it's double length. Why? Because I simply didn't want to break the section up into two chapters.
Have fun reading ^^
Oh so your intelligent, powerful, and rich now huh.
The important thing is not how long you live... It's what you accomplish with your life. While I live, I want to shine. I want to prove that I exist. If I could do something really important... That would definitely carry on into the future. My spirit will always live on. And so if I were to disappear... I think that all I have accomplished will go on. That would mean that it's living. Right?- Grovyle
"Although man kind will always look onward, yearning for more, searching for new boundries, only to break through them, With the understanding that this world is one in which we all share, comes the responsibility of knowing the decisions we make today will have a lasting impact on the generations of tommorow." - Civ 5 BNW opening cinematic
Victory Yell
https://youtu.be/fqSyibSPq5w?t=4m46s
Other Stuff
https://gfycat.com/DismalJoyfulCaribou#
And traumatized and missing most emotions
I should probably add some info about that, right? It's a collaboration project with multiple of the big authors from the literature subsection.
And Chapter 45 is out.
With it comes a fairly large update to the formating of the post. All the informationstuff and links are now in the OP and the chapters are in the other posts. I also figured out how to get MCF to make an empty line after spoilers... it's by putting a dot with a fontsize of 1 after the spoiler...
You also should really check out the Convergence since the first few chapters are out now.
Anyways, have fun reading ^^
Chapter 46 is out.
Not much to say here, I'll try to get another one out as soon as possible.
Have fun reading ^^
Chapter 47 is out now.
Have some magic, folks. I'll try to get another one out as soon as possible, maybe even in a few days. I would really appreciate some feedback on the story in general, like some things that are unclear so I can clear them up.
Have fun reading ^^
Chapter 48 is out (finally)
The delay was caused by a mixture of having a lot of exams, then having a week of doing absolutely nothing, being busy with the Convergence and some other things. But now I'm back. I'll try to crank out a chapter as often as I can, let's see how it goes.
Have fun reading ^^
Chapter 49 is out now!
It's another Jack chapter, I thought that it would be good to break up the main story a bit again.
Have fun reading ^^
Guess what, I hadn't been on this website for months and when I come back, the first alert I see is this thread coming alive again!
(Although I definitely lost where I was)
It technically was never really dead, just comatose. But anyway, nice to see you back.
So, here is chapter 50. It's kind of a milestone honestly.
I also have to inform you that I will be on holiday for the next two weeks. After that I won't work on a new chapter immediately but once again polish existing chapters.
Have fun reading ^^
Chapter 51 is out now!
All previous chapters have been cleaned up once again, I fixed some consistency issues and also removed some things that just didn't fit where they were because they for example interrupted a fast paced scene.
And as you might have noticed, I have a new avatar! My sister has been putting a lot of work into a new drawing of Fire. The link to the full picture is here.
Have fun reading ^^
Here is chapter 52 (somewhat) on time.
Not much else to say really...
Have fun reading ^^
Chapter 53 is out now.
I thought that I could break up the exposition avalanche that are the base chapters with a bit more action. The base section will also probably come to an end soon.
Have fun reading ^^
Read all of the chapters (up to 53 for now). I love the book, the idea is great and. Btw I read all of it in 6 hours of one day
Must do social experiment.
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Don't take my Minecraft name seriously. It is a joke that has entertained lots of people and hopefully you too.
Hey, thanks for reading. I know how it is to find some piece of content and then just consume it all in one go and it makes me kinda proud to be producing that kind of response.
Another chapter is coming soon.