Prologue:
it was a dull morning as usual i woke up ate garabed my pick in search for daiminds as usual but when i went to my mineshaft somthing wasnt right there were holes where i never dug before i thought maybee i just forgot ythat i dug those holes so i went in
1 of them but something wan't right when i got near to the end then i saw gold with nether rackon top of it and on that nether rack there was nether rack with a face that looked like mine but with no color or pupils i ran out of my mineshaftgrabbed my sword i knew it was herobrine i just knew it but nothing happened untill my dreams in my dreams he was atacking me with the purpled eyed men i herd of when i was a kid
dont be a jerk about it this is my first fan fiction
Prologue:
It was a dull morning as usual... I woke up, ate some steak, grabbed my pick in search for diamonds as usual but when i went to my mineshaft somthing wasn't right... There were holes where I never dug before... I thought maybe I just forgot that I dug those holes so I went in one of them but something wan't right...
When i got near to the end then I saw gold with netherrack on top of it, and on that netherrack there was netherrack with a face that looked like mine but with no color or pupils. I ran out of my mineshaft and grabbed my sword. I knew it was Herobrine. I just knew it, but nothing happened until my dreams... In my dreams, he was attacking me with the purple eyed men I herd of when I was a kid...
I just can't believe the low level of grammar. It even had the red line underneath yet you didn't pay attention. Proofread your stuff before you post. And herobrine does not control endermen. Plus, the spawner you described was the crappy one from the Herobrine mod. Not the one in the legends.
Prologue:
it was a dull morning as usual i woke up ate garabed my pick in search for daiminds as usual but when i went to my mineshaft somthing wasnt right there were holes where i never dug before i thought maybee i just forgot ythat i dug those holes so i went in
1 of them but something wan't right when i got near to the end then i saw gold with nether rackon top of it and on that nether rack there was nether rack with a face that looked like mine but with no color or pupils i ran out of my mineshaftgrabbed my sword i knew it was herobrine i just knew it but nothing happened untill my dreams in my dreams he was atacking me with the purpled eyed men i herd of when i was a kid
dont be a jerk about it this is my first fan fiction
I have to ask, is English your first language? The amount of grammatical errors in your story lead me to believe that either English is not your first language or you're very, very young. No adult man/woman whose first language is English would make this many mistakes (in addition to leaving out all forms of punctuation).
it was a dull morning as usual i woke up ate garabed my pick in search for daiminds as usual but when i went to my mineshaft somthing wasnt right there were holes where i never dug before i thought maybee i just forgot ythat i dug those holes so i went in
1 of them but something wan't right when i got near to the end then i saw gold with nether rackon top of it and on that nether rack there was nether rack with a face that looked like mine but with no color or pupils i ran out of my mineshaftgrabbed my sword i knew it was herobrine i just knew it but nothing happened untill my dreams in my dreams he was atacking me with the purpled eyed men i herd of when i was a kid
dont be a jerk about it this is my first fan fiction
I just can't believe the low level of grammar. It even had the red line underneath yet you didn't pay attention. Proofread your stuff before you post. And herobrine does not control endermen. Plus, the spawner you described was the crappy one from the Herobrine mod. Not the one in the legends.
Your response to his short story is good, but could use a few less capital letters.
I have to ask, is English your first language? The amount of grammatical errors in your story lead me to believe that either English is not your first language or you're very, very young. No adult man/woman whose first language is English would make this many mistakes (in addition to leaving out all forms of punctuation).