It's a sequal only made due to popular demand, the writers doesn't care about the story itself. It's like a grammically and creative writing adept five year old wrote this.)
Wow. That was the most insulting thing i have ever heard. I am a writer myself and if i didn't pour myself into it and care about the story than i wouldn't be a writer and neither would anyone else. If you don't like it thats one thing. DON'T READ IT. He might have a few grammar errors that could be fixed but who doesn't? He can spell the word enderman, my 8 year old brother can't. Don't say that this guy doesn't pour himself into his writing. If he didn't i would know. This guy spends hour after hour writing it.
What's wrong with redstone dust? I have a stack a day and I don't see any proble-I NEED MORE REDSTONE! *runs away to find redstone* Seriously though, awesome sequel, seems very different from the first though.
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It's cliche and forced. Dani has NO backstory, Steve is just Infatuated because Swhe Wooks Pweete. How is THAT Cute? or funny?
Perhaps then you should look at the meaning of ADEPT (a highly skilled or well-trained individual) I am saying that I have seen this story way to many times, to the point of extreme annoyance. And just because It has End and Steve. you like it, If it had been written first, it would have been shat upon. This story is pathetic, and the first book was simple plotted, as if the owner didn't want to put creativity into it. And from those who say I am flaming, Is it illegal to express my own opinion in a Comment of the book's forum page itself? P.S If you wish to see a writer pour his heart TRULY into a story, perhaps you should click the banner below.
If you don't like it, then get out, and stop advertising your story. I honestly don't care that you are insulting the book. And, you even stuck around just to troll the second story.
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Check out my FINISHED story, End, which has over 14,000 views and over 250 comments! Read it already? Read the FINISHED sequel with 16,000 views, found in the description of End.
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The romance between Dani and Steve seems to be entered in a little too early, but there isn't much and we don't actually know if Dani might have a crush back on Steve so I can't really complain about that. All-in-all the story's great so far, my favorite part for now has to be when End learns about Steve's crush.
This story is as entertaining as the last one. I hope you keep writing even after this series is over (for however long that may be), I really like your style of writing. Do you happen to have a fanfiction.net account or any other stories anywhere?
I love the crush Steve has on Dani, and especially when End was making jokes about Steve's crush on Dani. XD Great job Dani and I hope that the romance continues. He is just on Redstone dust. lol
It's cliche and forced. Dani has NO backstory, Steve is just Infatuated because Swhe Wooks Pweete. How is THAT Cute? or funny?
Perhaps then you should look at the meaning of ADEPT (a highly skilled or well-trained individual) I am saying that I have seen this story way to many times, to the point of extreme annoyance. And just because It has End and Steve. you like it, If it had been written first, it would have been shat upon. This story is pathetic, and the first book was simple plotted, as if the owner didn't want to put creativity into it. And from those who say I am flaming, Is it illegal to express my own opinion in a Comment of the book's forum page itself? P.S If you wish to see a writer pour his heart TRULY into a story, perhaps you should click the banner below.
Hmmm, let me reword my last post.
My brother could pour his heart into a story and it turn out as a fail. As for your story, all i noticed was the big DISCONTINUED word, and although i read a little into it, i could tell it wasn't my kind of story. It was good, but not for me. People like this, and yes, although you are allowed to post your thoughts, don't repeat repeat repeat them over and over. EVERY story is good in some way to some people. You like intense writing, hoping for a 40 year old who spent their life in reading and is a pro. You said your a beginner at writing, and you did a great job. This person (most likely) is a beginner too. You like detailed writing, this guy doesn't. Yours would go well in a book, and this guys would go well on a forum page. And i repeat myself here, if you don't like it, than leave. He's not writing a book, so he doesn't need to make a Super Pro-Grand Master-Winner-Maxed Out-Lifetime Writer-Type story.
You can keep talking, just stop shoving it down our throats that hers is a fail. When your writing a book, simplicity is a bad thing, when your writing a forum page story, simplicity is the best thing you can do.
Crappy romance plot is CRAPPY. How people can consider this sophisticated is nothing but dumbfounding to me. It's a sequal only made due to popular demand, the writers doesn't care about the story itself. (I am not flaming however, as these are my actual thoughts. Meh, the first one wasn't really that good either. It's like a grammically and creative writing adept five year old wrote this.)
yes because what we need is just another loser who is probably a 10 year old kid who doesn't even appreciate a good book yes we totally need a 9 year old hater who apparently doesn't know what flaming is cause he says he doesnt do it then ... wait for it...HE FLAMES now doesnt your mommy always tell you *says in old granny voice* "if u dont have anything nice to say then dont say it" oh and if 1dani is a 5 year old then your moms 1 month pregnent dani prob has a sucsessful job where do u work? oh wait u cant ur only 10 i beat u had to scream and throw tantrums to even get minecraft because u didnt want do man up and save some money so stop whinning like a little baby just because it got better than urs i read ur book t was good i guess but if u were actuallyu a real writer u would continu the story just for the few people that wanted u to because u are supposed to apprerciate everybody who took the time to read ur story
yes because what we need is just another loser who is probably a 10 year old kid who doesn't even appreciate a good book yes we totally need a 9 year old hater who apparently doesn't know what flaming is cause he says he doesnt do it then ... wait for it...HE FLAMES now doesnt your mommy always tell you *says in old granny voice* "if u dont have anything nice to say then dont say it" oh and if 1dani is a 5 year old then your moms 1 month pregnent dani prob has a sucsessful job where do u work? oh wait u cant ur only 10 i beat u had to scream and throw tantrums to even get minecraft because u didnt want do man up and save some money so stop whinning like a little baby just because it got better than urs i read ur book t was good i guess but if u were actuallyu a real writer u would continu the story just for the few people that wanted u to because u are supposed to apprerciate everybody who took the time to read ur story
Just because someone is trolling doesn't mean you spit in their face. It creates a very long insult chain, which is a staple in the trolls diet. The best thing to do is adress the troll, be polite, and ignore every single word said by the troll afterwards. That will kill the troll and make it have to try and feed off another topic.BTW, great story 1Dani! lovin it so far!
Check out my FINISHED story, End, which has over 14,000 views and over 250 comments! Read it already? Read the FINISHED sequel with 16,000 views, found in the description of End.
Wow. That was the most insulting thing i have ever heard. I am a writer myself and if i didn't pour myself into it and care about the story than i wouldn't be a writer and neither would anyone else. If you don't like it thats one thing. DON'T READ IT. He might have a few grammar errors that could be fixed but who doesn't? He can spell the word enderman, my 8 year old brother can't. Don't say that this guy doesn't pour himself into his writing. If he didn't i would know. This guy spends hour after hour writing it.
If you don't like it, then get out, and stop advertising your story. I honestly don't care that you are insulting the book. And, you even stuck around just to troll the second story.
The romance between Dani and Steve seems to be entered in a little too early, but there isn't much and we don't actually know if Dani might have a crush back on Steve so I can't really complain about that. All-in-all the story's great so far, my favorite part for now has to be when End learns about Steve's crush.
This story is as entertaining as the last one. I hope you keep writing even after this series is over (for however long that may be), I really like your style of writing. Do you happen to have a fanfiction.net account or any other stories anywhere?
Hmmm, let me reword my last post.
My brother could pour his heart into a story and it turn out as a fail. As for your story, all i noticed was the big DISCONTINUED word, and although i read a little into it, i could tell it wasn't my kind of story. It was good, but not for me. People like this, and yes, although you are allowed to post your thoughts, don't repeat repeat repeat them over and over. EVERY story is good in some way to some people. You like intense writing, hoping for a 40 year old who spent their life in reading and is a pro. You said your a beginner at writing, and you did a great job. This person (most likely) is a beginner too. You like detailed writing, this guy doesn't. Yours would go well in a book, and this guys would go well on a forum page. And i repeat myself here, if you don't like it, than leave. He's not writing a book, so he doesn't need to make a Super Pro-Grand Master-Winner-Maxed Out-Lifetime Writer-Type story.
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yes because what we need is just another loser who is probably a 10 year old kid who doesn't even appreciate a good book yes we totally need a 9 year old hater who apparently doesn't know what flaming is cause he says he doesnt do it then ... wait for it...HE FLAMES now doesnt your mommy always tell you *says in old granny voice* "if u dont have anything nice to say then dont say it" oh and if 1dani is a 5 year old then your moms 1 month pregnent dani prob has a sucsessful job where do u work? oh wait u cant ur only 10 i beat u had to scream and throw tantrums to even get minecraft because u didnt want do man up and save some money so stop whinning like a little baby just because it got better than urs i read ur book t was good i guess but if u were actuallyu a real writer u would continu the story just for the few people that wanted u to because u are supposed to apprerciate everybody who took the time to read ur story
Just because someone is trolling doesn't mean you spit in their face. It creates a very long insult chain, which is a staple in the trolls diet. The best thing to do is adress the troll, be polite, and ignore every single word said by the troll afterwards. That will kill the troll and make it have to try and feed off another topic.BTW, great story 1Dani! lovin it so far!
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