Steve was in the end at last, and about to deafeat the enderdragon, than, all of the sudden, things changed. With Steve's last blow he had destroyed the evil enderdragon... and had forsaken himself
Endersteve
Where, am I. I am in the middle of some underwater, temple of some sort. There is some strange black stuff on my arm. There is no water in here, like an arc surrounding the place, a hollow in the middle of the ocean. I guess I'll swim out. OW! That hurts aaaahhhh!!!!! *Bwow*
Ah, that was strange. whatever happened, i think i better get inside, i can see a storm coming. SH SH SH FSH. c'mon dirt break. i got some coal some sticks, make a torch.. Yes light. Fthunk!. Alright, i got a nice little cottage,light, food, and a bed. I guess i shouldn't go outside the rain and all. alright time to look at myself in the mirror. Oh my god...
I'm a monster. A freaking monster. I have been infected during my visit to the end. Oh god, this is bad, reallly bad. I have a sudden urge, I don't know why, AAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *Bwow* *Bwow* *Bwow*
Steve was in the end at last, and about to deafeat the enderdragon, than, all of the sudden, things changed. With Steve's last blow he had destroyed the evil enderdragon... and had forsaken himself
Endersteve
Where, am I. I am in the middle of some underwater, temple of some sort. There is some strange black stuff on my arm. There is no water in here, like an arc surrounding the place, a hollow in the middle of the ocean. I guess I'll swim out. OW! That hurts aaaahhhh!!!!! *Bwow*
Ah, that was strange. whatever happened, i think i better get inside, i can see a storm coming. SH SH SH FSH. c'mon dirt break. i got some coal some sticks, make a torch.. Yes light. Fthunk!. Alright, i got a nice little cottage,light, food, and a bed. I guess i shouldn't go outside the rain and all. alright time to look at myself in the mirror. Oh my god...
I'm a monster. A freaking monster. I have been infected during my visit to the end. Oh god, this is bad, reallly bad. I have a sudden urge, I don't know why, AAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *Bwow* *Bwow* *Bwow*
"On a scale of one mile to Lord of the Rings, how far did you walk today?"
Right now it looks very jumbled.
Not just the jumbling, but any normal person wouldn't constantly be giving themselves a commentary on what's happening at every given second.
Then again... Steve isn't normal anymore.
Seriously, though, make the speech a bit more natural and less stiff.
"On a scale of one mile to Lord of the Rings, how far did you walk today?"
And the author hasn't been on since last year.
*Facepalm