Your writing is good, but my perfectionism is gnawing at me as I read it.
It's possible that I'm being over-critical, but you need to learn the difference between 'then' and 'than'. Just reading the Prologue, I can see multiple times that you've used 'then' when it should be 'than'. It's not a massive mistake, but still one that probably shouldn't be there when the rest of your writing is that good. It just lowers the otherwise high level of writing.
If you don't mind me asking, how old are you?
Thank you for pointing that out. Typos will be fixed.
its in a lot of different places. Astrid is in Skyrim and How to Train Your Dragon. its extremely hard to be the only person to have ever used a name.
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WELL DONE SOME MORE. read the chapters i missed out on since last time.
Well, I was almost done typing chapter five but then my internet crashed .The chapter might be out later today or possibly tomorrow...
I apologize for the inconvenience.
Stories encompassing Herbrine are very hard to make good. People try to be original and sway too far from what he originally was. He has no followers, no minions and no army. He's not even a physical being.
Now, I know I said "classical Herobrine" was better, but creating a slight derivation on that concept opens up such a broad field for you it's amazing. I suggest you try to fix up your story now before it's too late, or just start fresh.
Thank you for pointing that out. Typos will be fixed.
http://www.planetminecraft.com/project/the-legend-of-minecraftia/
its in a lot of different places. Astrid is in Skyrim and How to Train Your Dragon. its extremely hard to be the only person to have ever used a name.
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WELL DONE SOME MORE. read the chapters i missed out on since last time.
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I apologize for the inconvenience.
Now, I know I said "classical Herobrine" was better, but creating a slight derivation on that concept opens up such a broad field for you it's amazing. I suggest you try to fix up your story now before it's too late, or just start fresh.
Oh, and have you ever heard of paragraphs?