i thought it was really good, but it would probably make more sense if i were to read the other stories first
yeah, though to be honest the story that preludes it is not even close to being finished. you can read how far it's come if you'd like, though! i'll try to put up the next chapter (and get rid of the depressing news message i left up last update) tonight!
Heeehehheh. I have decided to sever the connection between this story and Cubic Fire. Thus, anything that happens in this story that it said happens in Cubic Fire, may not actually happen in Cubic Fire. Hooray, for no more spoilers! XD
there is one flaw: not in your writing but in the plot of the song, if it was a real kingdom the queen and any children of the king would have ecaped with a guard escort
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"Noting is really ever forgotten. Not really." -The Doctor
Thanks! Yeah, I've noticed that (correct me if I'm wrong) nobody ever goes after a fan fiction unless you have a shiny banner for it and/or you're famous enough that people see it when you post. Another sub-forum specifically for stories would be nice.
You know, I really hate it how good writers like us haven't been payed attention to. Right now its all just banners and signatures and stuff. Not meaning to insult, those are Art after all, but shouldn't writing have another Sub-forum. We are kinda getting neglected.
Anyway, I've skimmed through Act I and I can say it's a good read. Keep it up!
I don't even have a banner [i haven't finished but i wouldn't have one for my story any way] and i don't even no what a banner would be and no nos about me
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"Noting is really ever forgotten. Not really." -The Doctor
there is one flaw: not in your writing but in the plot of the song, if it was a real kingdom the queen and any children of the king would have ecaped with a guard escort
If you watched the video, the Queen and The Child were not able to, all the guards were already dead. They were all occupied, because the best option would be to fight to save the Queen and Child instead of dying then and there with the Queen and Child. Anyway, the King was bringing them to safety, but a Creeper killed them. Such a sad story...
Oh, you're here as well! I finally saw the replies to Enderman Eyes and decided to check if this one had replies as well, heheh.
This story is the reason why Immortus was able to predict Lupi's appearance in Cubic Fire, though hopefully I can stray the two apart now a bit easier. It's a bit confusing tying my own lore with itself like that, considering it's grown like ivy. A few differences now include:
Rathina's personality, the Bluestone (previously it was not able to speak or be anything but a tool for Herobrine), and Lupi. Not telling what's different about that, though, since it'd be spoilers.
This was really good! I was surprised at how nice it was!
I personally would have changed a few things, but then again, I love to write.
You should keep this up. I couldn't have done better even if I changed some of it!
Is there a story that is placed before Act 1 and Act 2? Like on how the Fallen Kingdom was founded/Tyrones fight with Herobrine?
Keep up this amazing work!
This was really good! I was surprised at how nice it was!
I personally would have changed a few things, but then again, I love to write.
You should keep this up. I couldn't have done better even if I changed some of it!
Is there a story that is placed before Act 1 and Act 2? Like on how the Fallen Kingdom was founded/Tyrones fight with Herobrine?
Keep up this amazing work!
-MLP_Fanatic
Technically my larger fanfic, Cubic Fire, is what precedes this, but a while back I decided that the link would be severed due to me not quite liking how some of the lore required me to write. This is simply a weird sort of crossover between my characters and the music video.
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thanks!!!!! i've got the links to my other two fanfics up there too, if you'd like to read any more of stuff i write.
yeah, though to be honest the story that preludes it is not even close to being finished. you can read how far it's come if you'd like, though! i'll try to put up the next chapter (and get rid of the depressing news message i left up last update) tonight!
I don't even have a banner [i haven't finished but i wouldn't have one for my story any way] and i don't even no what a banner would be and no nos about me
I wuv zis story!
TT2000, you are genius.
This story is the reason why Immortus was able to predict Lupi's appearance in Cubic Fire, though hopefully I can stray the two apart now a bit easier. It's a bit confusing tying my own lore with itself like that, considering it's grown like ivy. A few differences now include:
Rathina's personality, the Bluestone (previously it was not able to speak or be anything but a tool for Herobrine), and Lupi. Not telling what's different about that, though, since it'd be spoilers.
The king from fallen kingdom was named Baron!
Great Story!
I personally would have changed a few things, but then again, I love to write.
You should keep this up. I couldn't have done better even if I changed some of it!
Is there a story that is placed before Act 1 and Act 2? Like on how the Fallen Kingdom was founded/Tyrones fight with Herobrine?
Keep up this amazing work!
-MLP_Fanatic
Technically my larger fanfic, Cubic Fire, is what precedes this, but a while back I decided that the link would be severed due to me not quite liking how some of the lore required me to write. This is simply a weird sort of crossover between my characters and the music video.