Since others before me have already addressed the "I" abuse problem, all I can say is that the only way to fail at writing is to not write at all, and that using multiple paragraphs really help the eyes while reading. Good job so far!
Have you ever been in a classroom with that one person that just won't stop tapping their pencil? It starts to irritate you after a while doesn't it? The same thing happens with repeating the same word numerous times. I'm not saying that this passage is bad, it just stands out. Here's how I would suggest rewriting it:
I was guessing the sign meant an enderman general that works for the enderdragon or something. Going outside,i was surprised that there were no endermen around. I hopped down the mountain and started walking west. After a while, the trees around me thinned out, and I entered some sort of desert. In the distance, I saw some sort of temple ruins in the distance. I walked there slowly. When i made it there...
Other than that, fantastic story! Keep up the great work.
Edit: oops, I noticed that Dnarok addressed this bit a few posts ahead of me. Well, good luck with your editing.
Sorry bout that ill fix it up
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ill fix that creeper thing... And thanks!
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And im really sorry I wont be working on this any more
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