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I was walking in the forest looking for minecrafters to terrorize. Oh my name is Herobrine by the way. And this is my story on how i vanished from the world. Anyway,It was a beautiful sunny day outside. I wandered a bit and I found a house with a mine nearby. I entered the mine and found a cave, I walked inside the cave and blocked the entrance. Then I waited. After a while I saw small crack appear on the rock wall. It got bigger until the block broke. A face of a minecrafter popped out. I guessed his name was Steve judging by his name tag. I expected him to attack me but he just blocked the entrance and ran away. I didn't think it mattered much. I found an exit in the cave and left the mine. It was night now. There were monsters crawling everywhere. I didn't really care since monsters were more afraid of me then i was with them. I walked around the land and saw 2 tall black figures with purple eyes. They were known as endermen. They were strong but not to me. The only trouble I had with them was if they were in pairs. I walked down a small hill down to a village. I felt something bad. Something bad was about to happen. I turned around and saw some endermen huddled in a corner. I stared at them which I shouldn't have done. They got up and more started coming. They started to slowly walk towards me. I wasn't afraid. But there were so many and gradually more started to come. I started to walk a bit faster. Then went into a jog. Then I ran so fast. I ran as fast as I ever could. There were hundreds of endermen which I thought was impossible! I ran but every where I turned and another enderman was there! They teleported all around me. I was surrounded. I looked around for some way for me to escape. There was none. The endermen slowly walked closer to me in the dark forest. There was only one thing I could do. I ran and slid under one of the endermen. I felt pain on my wrist as i got up. I didn't have time. I ran as fast as I could and hid in one of the villages houses. I waited until morning and when I looked at my wrist. I realized something. One of the endermen actually bit me. There seemed to be some blackish purple skin around my wrist where I was bitten. I couldn't see it but I knew something. It was spreading and I was turning into an enderman.
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Chapter 2The Escape
I woke up and opened the door. It was morning now. There were some endermen still there which was odd. I had to find a way to escape when I noticed that there was a second floor! That was weird since I never noticed that before. I didn't really mind much but the thing that really bothered me was that, there was more enderman skin that was slowly spreading. It covered my whole left hand now. I had to find a way to stop it! I climbed the ladder that took me to a second floor then a roof. I scanned the surrounding area and realized that there were a lot of endermen surrounding the whole village. I never thought that this was even possible in the daylight. I was confused and I needed to find answers. First things first, I needed to escape. I looked around and the only way was to jump off the roof. But this wasn't a movie, if I jumped I would fall and die, also if I even did survive the endermen would kill me. I thought for a while... and a little longer... Then I got it! Yes! I got a piece of bread! I ate it delightfully as I thought about the escape. I searched around the house a bit and found a chest. Inside was some orange cloth, a wooden sword and a saddle. I thought a bit more as i munched on the bread. Then I got my idea. It was insane but if it worked I would be happy. Very happy. I got the saddle and walked outside in plain sight. I was about to get devoured by an enderman but I knew what I would do. I jumped and landed on the enderman. Then I got the saddle and placed it firmly on the endermans head. I actually sat on the saddle and the enderman got crazy. He teleported everywhere and tried to get me off. This felt kind of awkward but finally the enderman teleported outside of endemen lines. and I jumped off and ran. I ran up a big mountain jumping frantically. Finally I reached the top surprised to see a mystic cave. I didn't want to enter it but it was the only safe place from the endermen.
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Chapter 3 The Cave
The cave was huge. And very roomy. I walked through it inspecting and stuff. I found some ancient runes which I swear i seen before but I couldn't remember. That was weird I didn't seem to remember anything since 3 years back. I just remember waking up and having fun haunting people. I continued through the cave. I noticed some drawings. One of a baby that looked like me with the same white eyes. But it couldn't be me. That drawing looked as if it was made thousands of years ago. I finally reach a huge rock wall with a hole in it. And a sign above the hole that said " Deposit orange cloth". Now that was one of the biggest coincidence that had ever happened. I had just found some orange cloth in the village. It's like some sort of presence seemed to make orange cloth appear in the village and I never actually noticed this cave before out of all the times I wandered around. I remember being here a ton of times without a cave. Something lead me here. I threw the orange cloth inside the hole and waited. A secret passage opened up near me. I cautiously entered it. On the wall were some ancient words that I actually could understand. I don't know how I knew these words but they just popped in my head. It said something about The Curse Of The Enderman and some other cheesy stuff. I walked to the end of the room and saw a glowing chest. I slowly opened it and found a diamond sword that was glowing purple. It was enchanted.with Sharpness MMMMMMMMMMI (10,001). I grabbed the sword and put it in my backpack. Another door opened to my left and I entered. Inside was 3 pictures with 3 doors underneath each one. The sign said "Choose the path". One picture showed Someone with wealth and fortune. He was swimming in gold and had a huge mansion. The second picture showed someone ruling everyone and the person had lots of power over everyone. The third and last picture showed someone with neither wealth nor power with a small house and a small family. He was happy. I was going to pick the one with wealth and fortune when I remembered something that i remembered faintly from a long time ago. "power nor wealth will buy you happiness don't be selfish and I'll give you a cookie". I didn't know what I was thinking but I entered the 3rd door. There was a small room with a button at the end. I pressed the button and I shimmered and teleported at the entrance of the cave where i deposited the orange cloth. Instead of a hole was an orange robe on a hook and a sign next to it that said "This will slow down the curse, Good Luck". I wore the robe and realized that my whole left arm was like an endermans and my right hand was like an endermans to.I felt a bit weaker on my left side but when i put on the robe i could feel the enderman side slow down by a lot but it was still moving. I pulled down the hood on the robe and headed out.
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Chapter 4 Xarnoth
Before i left the cave there was a sign saying "You must go west and fight the general Xarnoth in order to continue on your way" I was guessing the sign meant an enderman general that works for the enderdragon or something.Going outside, I was surprised that there were no endermen around. I hopped down the mountain and started walking West. After a while the trees around me thinned out, and I entered some sort of desert. In the distance I saw some sort of temple ruins. I walked there slowly. When i made it there.There was a big coffin with ancient writing that said "Release him, Fight him" .The rest i didn't understand but i took out my sword and slowly removed the lid of the coffin. There was a dead enderman lying there but he was wearing armor and had a sword by his side. I was about to stab it, when it suddenly teleported behind me and hit me on the head with the butt of his blade. I fell down and rolled over to face him. He tried to stab me but i deflected it with my blade. He kept teleporting around me and i got confused. Then he spoke. "Hello little creature I am Xarnoth general of the endermen. I am the strongest of them all!" He said in a deep voice. I used this as a chance to attack him. I tried to stab his leg but it was too skinny and i missed. He laughed. And smacked me on the head. I went flying and hit a pillar that cracked. That was it! if i could make the 4 pillars around the ruins crash on him, then he would die! He smacked me again and my sword clattered out of my hand. I reached for it desperately, but Xarnoth kicked it out of my reach. He laughed wickedly then i saw the crack in the pillar and what I had left. I took out my wooden sword. Xarnoth laughed. " What is that going to do! It will break at the touch of my skin!". He laughed more. I raised the sword. Then jabbed it in the pillars crack. The pillar started to crumble and Xarnoth dodged it just in time but he went to another pillar which I threw my sword at. The sword hit a crack and the pillar crumbled and fell on Xarnoth. Some sort of purple ball of electricity ran around the ruins of the pillar then smashed in to me. I felt weaker and I fell. Xarnoth was standing over me. "Did you forget that ENDERMEN CAN TELEPORT!? Fool". He brought up his sword and I accepted my fate, I would die here and now. Then the weirdest thing happened. A flying pig raced down and smacked Xarnoth in the face. So hard that he went flying far away. But I didn't think that was the last of him. I slowly got up. I went over to my sword and picked it up. I never noticed the pig still standing there. "um you can go now super pig". I said. But the pig just stood there. when i walked to the west it followed me. I guess I might need him sooner or later. I named him Fred. Yeah that's a suitable name. Okay so i defeated Xarnoth i guess but i didn't know what to do next. I started inspecting the ruins and realized that it was night. Endermen popped out of every corner and came at me. Only one thing left to do. I jumped on Fred and told him to find a safe home for the night. Good thing i have a pet flying pig!
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Fred soared through the air. We didn't see any shelter anywhere. We traveled for a long time. Fred started to slow down. He couldn't fly much longer. We flew for about 7 more seconds before Fred dropped out of the sky. Luckily we crashed in to a tree which fell over and we were even more lucky when we saw the temple next to us. Some shelter at last. Me and Fred found a door and we went inside. I closed the door behind me. We walked inside slowly. There was more ancient writing on the walls. I touched another picture of a baby with white eyes. It was the exact same one as last time. I continued through the temple. Finally we saw a big door, and on the right wall was a sign that said "survive the traps and you will prevail". Just when i finished reading it. I teleported to the starting of the hall and the big door was at the end. I knew I had to be careful. There could be traps anywhere. I cautiously threw a rock at the floor in front of me. It exploded. I needed to find a way past. Fred couldn't fly over with me because he was too tired and the ceiling was to low. Then I saw it. some places had to pressure plates on them. I jumped to an empty spot. Then another one. Then I jumped again but my foot slid and a bunch of arrows popped out of the wall. luckily, I jumped to the other free space right before the arrows pierced me. I looked back and Fred was following. I jumped on another free space. (or so i thought) But that was actually a thinner pressure plate. I got ready to explode but the Fred jumped and pushed me to the next free space. And he exploded. I stared there in horror with flying everywhere. Now i was mad. I easily jumped the rest of the spaces. Expect one which had a flamethrower built in the wall. I jumped to the end but i burned my foot. I walked to the door. And it opened up slowly. Inside was a person on a chair. He looked like me but was older. And didn't have the same white eyes. "Hello young one I was waiting" . He said. "My name is Joe. And I am your father". He looked up and I saw that his eyes were pure black. "Frankly you were once a god but you strayed from the path and killed people for a living". I thought about that. I don't really think that was possible. That this man cant be my dad. I had no parents. "Then you became a War Lord and started to destroy towns and kill people. "We couldn't stop you. All we could do was make you loose your memory and bestow a curse upon you. Yeah this is kinda cheesy. Anyway I'm trying to help you. Your goal is to kill some guy named Notch to destroy the curse. First you need 3 items from 3 places. These 3 items are rocks. of 3 elements. You have to go straight north then south then east. After you get all of them you must return to this temple. Good job my son, when you grow up you will be a true evil lord". And just like that he vanished. That was quite awkward and weird. I guess i'll have to find these 3 rocks and go to the land of Notch. Okay so i guess this is the next step to learn about my past.
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I found an exit to the left. It was night but i still felt sorrow. I headed north without Fred. It was lonely. I walked for miles and miles and kilometers. My legs were in deep pain. There was snow everywhere now and it was snowing. "yes,yes grow weaker, stop and rest. Yes good". Bob spoke in my mind. My vision was blurry from the half side of me that was enderman. I could only see clearly through my only eye. The other half of my vision used to be purple but now it's blank. Probably it was being seen by Bob. I walked north in pain. Bob kept tempting me to stop and take a rest but i wouldn't. I walked for a few more hours then I collapsed. The Next Day. I slowly opened my eyes. I was in a small cottage. There was a note next to me. It said. "I brought you here to save you from the weather. Before you go off to the North Stone i recommend that you grab some winter clothes from the closet. From Anonymusguythatwashelpingyouonyourjourneytobecomeanevillord". I grabbed some clothes and put them on. But when i wore them, they just dissapeared into thin air. Probably the curse. I walked outside in the cold. It was almost night. I had to find the North Stone now. I walked straight North again. It was freezing cold. I treaded a few miles and saw a small white building. It looked old. I knew this was it. I slowly entered the old ruins. Inside was a path way that took me straight to another door. On the wall in ancient writing it said "Pass the 10 tests of strength and you ma get the stone" . Seemed easy enough. I walked one step then about 30 skeletons appeared in front of me. Okay now this didn't seem as easy anymore. I took out my diamond sword and yelled. "FOR FRED THE AWESOME FLYING PIG!!!". And I charged them which i shouldn't have done. As i ran all the skeletons fired at me. I dodged most of them but got scraped on my leg. I thought i did pretty well, when an arrow pierced my left arm. I screamed in agony. But the wound seemed to heal pretty quick. "you must not die or i will die with you". Said Bob in my head. He seemed to help me a lot. He teleported me behind the skeles. "attack them now fool!". I slashed my sword across the skeletons. They dissoveled, opening the next door. I cautiously entered. On the wall it said "The next test of strength requires reflex, speed, and agility". I thought about that for a sec. Then I noticed small slits in the wall. I cautiously stepped on and arrows from all sides came at me. Quickly i stepped back. there were so many arrows. I couldn't crawl underneath because of the arrows on the bottom of the wall. I needed Bob. "I will give you an Enderman's speed use it wisely fool". I felt myself gain a bit power. I sped in and arrows came from all sides. I grabbed some that were about to hit me in the face. But forgot the ones on the bottom. "Fool! I will heal you but just teleport to the other side. Idiot". Bob said in my head. I never thought about that. Another wave of arrows came and i just teleported to the other side. That was easier then I thought. But I spoke to soon. flame throwers popped in from the celing and the side walls. I was about to get burned but I ducked for cover. Finally the flames stopped and I reached the door. It slowly opened up and I stepped inside ready for the next challenge. ______________________________________________________________________________ Chapter 7 North Part 2 Inside was a roomy room which had lots of room. I saw some holes in the ceiling. I wondered what that was for. I walked in the middle and looked up. I really regreted it. 3 slimes popped out of the hole and 1 landed on my face. They were all huge. I rolled back and managed to get the slime off my face. I drew my sword, and when I stabbed, the blade just sunk inside the slime. I pulled my sword back, and nothing seemed to happen to the slime. 2 slimes came up behind the other one. "They die by fire idiot! Get some flame FOOL!" Bob yelled in my head. Then I remembered the flame throwers and I retreated back to the room behind me. The slimes came right at me at top speed. I dodged them just in time and the slimes landed on the flame thrower targets. The flame threw and the slimes burned. I walked to the other exit in slow motion. When I reached there and opened the door, a hand came out and punched me in the face. I fell backwards into the slime room. "HEY THATS NOT NICE!!" I yelled. I grabbed my sword and stabbed whatever was in there. When I entered, I realized there were zombie pigmen ready to devoure me. I held on my sword tight. There were about 20 and more to come. On the sides were some pigs and the ceiling was open. When I looked up, it was raining and lightning was flashing everywhere. Some time, a lightning bolt would hit a pig and it would become a pigman. I had to stop it. First thing I did was slice a bunch of pigs, so more won't come. Then I started to slice the pigmen. That was weird. More pigs seemed to spawn on the side. "OMG FOOL can't you see the dispensers on the side shooting pig eggs!? IDIOT!" Bob yelled in my head. Oh then I saw them on the side. I threw my sword at one of them. The dispenser crackled and broke. I ran up to it, grabbed my sword and ran to the other one. I stabbed the second dispenser with all my might. It cracked and shattered, spilling some pig eggs. Then i finished off the rest of the pigmen, and the next door opened. Inside was completly dark. Then I heard a Sssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss. and duck for cover. I heard an explosion behind me. Then I noticed the tons of green figures with 4 legs all around the big room. This was going to be extremly hard. I had no armor and they can explode. I didn't know how to stop all of them. There were so many surrounding me. I charged at one of them, but it just exploded and I went flying back and smacked a wall. creepers came closer and closer to me. this was probably the true end of me. I just hoped that Fred was living peacefully. Then I got it! Yes! I had some pig eggs with me. I grabbed one and smacked it on the floor. A pig popped up. I did this reapeatedly. Then the pigs ran up to the creepers, and then the creepers exploded all around me. I was just outside of range so I didn't die from the thousands of explosions. Thankfully I was safe. Or so I thought. More creepers popped out of no where and closed in on me. "you know, you can teleport now" Bob spoke in my mind. OH YA! I nearly forgot about that. I teleported behind the creepers then back to my old spot. I kept doing this and i confused all the creepers. Then one managed to knock me to the ground. It was standing over me ready to explode. Well this was it I was going to die right here and right now. Or was I?
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Edit: Chapter 4 is out be sure to read it!
Edit 2: it won't be finished for a while so it would be better to make a seperate video for each chapter and everytime i finish a chapter you can add another video. Thanks!
Anyway i might be adding a few pics or small chance of videos to the story. But first if someone could tell me how to upload a pic...
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Chapter 5 is out be sure to check it
And Magic_Mat you can start making seperate vids for each chapter since it will be a while until im done the whole thing
'Tis a good story, indeed. However, it my serious hatred of the use of 'i' over 'I', which in conversation is fine, but in Fan-Fics, it's quite the problem maker. I like the idea, don't get me wrong, but... yeah.
That, and if you were to put five sentences in a row, 3/5 of the time it starts with 'I', and it gets redundant.
Past all that, it's a good story. You may not deserve a diamond, but you get this : :-( ):
'Tis a good story, indeed. However, it my serious hatred of the use of 'i' over 'I', which in conversation is fine, but in Fan-Fics, it's quite the problem maker. I like the idea, don't get me wrong, but... yeah.
That, and if you were to put five sentences in a row, 3/5 of the time it starts with 'I', and it gets redundant.
Past all that, it's a good story. You may not deserve a diamond, but you get this : :-( ):
yeah I was editing my work earlier and noticed this problem. The thing is i'm to lazy to fix it since there are so many mistakes. But i will pay attention to that when I go on with the story. So don't worry about that
Great story! The premise of it is very unique and interesting.
Your writing is clearly improving as you progress through the chapters, so good job on that as well!
I would, however, like to make a few suggestions.
Reading over this passage, I noticed that every sentence began with "I".
I was guessing the sign meant an enderman general that works for the enderdragon or something. I went outside and i was surprised that there were no endermen. I hopped down the mountain and started walking to the west. I entered some sort of desert and continued. I saw some sort of temple ruins in the distance. I walked there slowly. When i made it there...
Have you ever been in a classroom with that one person that just won't stop tapping their pencil? It starts to irritate you after a while doesn't it? The same thing happens with repeating the same word numerous times. I'm not saying that this passage is bad, it just stands out. Here's how I would suggest rewriting it:
I was guessing the sign meant an enderman general that works for the enderdragon or something. Going outside,i was surprised that there were no endermen around. I hopped down the mountain and started walking west. After a while, the trees around me thinned out, and I entered some sort of desert. In the distance, I saw some sort of temple ruins in the distance. I walked there slowly. When i made it there...
Other than that, fantastic story! Keep up the great work.
Edit: oops, I noticed that Dnarok addressed this bit a few posts ahead of me. Well, good luck with your editing.
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Chapter 2 The Escape
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Chapter 3 The Cave
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Chapter 5 The Temple
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Chapter 6 North Part 1
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Chapter 7 North Part 2
Inside was a roomy room which had lots of room. I saw some holes in the ceiling. I wondered what that was for. I walked in the middle and looked up. I really regreted it. 3 slimes popped out of the hole and 1 landed on my face. They were all huge. I rolled back and managed to get the slime off my face. I drew my sword, and when I stabbed, the blade just sunk inside the slime. I pulled my sword back, and nothing seemed to happen to the slime. 2 slimes came up behind the other one. "They die by fire idiot! Get some flame FOOL!" Bob yelled in my head. Then I remembered the flame throwers and I retreated back to the room behind me. The slimes came right at me at top speed. I dodged them just in time and the slimes landed on the flame thrower targets. The flame threw and the slimes burned. I walked to the other exit in slow motion. When I reached there and opened the door, a hand came out and punched me in the face. I fell backwards into the slime room. "HEY THATS NOT NICE!!" I yelled. I grabbed my sword and stabbed whatever was in there. When I entered, I realized there were zombie pigmen ready to devoure me. I held on my sword tight. There were about 20 and more to come. On the sides were some pigs and the ceiling was open. When I looked up, it was raining and lightning was flashing everywhere. Some time, a lightning bolt would hit a pig and it would become a pigman. I had to stop it. First thing I did was slice a bunch of pigs, so more won't come. Then I started to slice the pigmen. That was weird. More pigs seemed to spawn on the side. "OMG FOOL can't you see the dispensers on the side shooting pig eggs!? IDIOT!" Bob yelled in my head. Oh then I saw them on the side. I threw my sword at one of them. The dispenser crackled and broke. I ran up to it, grabbed my sword and ran to the other one. I stabbed the second dispenser with all my might. It cracked and shattered, spilling some pig eggs. Then i finished off the rest of the pigmen, and the next door opened. Inside was completly dark. Then I heard a Sssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss. and duck for cover. I heard an explosion behind me. Then I noticed the tons of green figures with 4 legs all around the big room. This was going to be extremly hard. I had no armor and they can explode. I didn't know how to stop all of them. There were so many surrounding me. I charged at one of them, but it just exploded and I went flying back and smacked a wall. creepers came closer and closer to me. this was probably the true end of me. I just hoped that Fred was living peacefully. Then I got it! Yes! I had some pig eggs with me. I grabbed one and smacked it on the floor. A pig popped up. I did this reapeatedly. Then the pigs ran up to the creepers, and then the creepers exploded all around me. I was just outside of range so I didn't die from the thousands of explosions. Thankfully I was safe. Or so I thought. More creepers popped out of no where and closed in on me. "you know, you can teleport now" Bob spoke in my mind. OH YA! I nearly forgot about that. I teleported behind the creepers then back to my old spot. I kept doing this and i confused all the creepers. Then one managed to knock me to the ground. It was standing over me ready to explode. Well this was it I was going to die right here and right now. Or was I?
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I can post it on this thread if you want
Edit: Chapter 4 is out be sure to read it!
Edit 2: it won't be finished for a while so it would be better to make a seperate video for each chapter and everytime i finish a chapter you can add another video. Thanks!
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And Magic_Mat you can start making seperate vids for each chapter since it will be a while until im done the whole thing
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That, and if you were to put five sentences in a row, 3/5 of the time it starts with 'I', and it gets redundant.
Past all that, it's a good story. You may not deserve a diamond, but you get this : :-( ):
yeah I was editing my work earlier and noticed this problem. The thing is i'm to lazy to fix it since there are so many mistakes. But i will pay attention to that when I go on with the story. So don't worry about that
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Your writing is clearly improving as you progress through the chapters, so good job on that as well!
I would, however, like to make a few suggestions.
Reading over this passage, I noticed that every sentence began with "I".
Have you ever been in a classroom with that one person that just won't stop tapping their pencil? It starts to irritate you after a while doesn't it? The same thing happens with repeating the same word numerous times. I'm not saying that this passage is bad, it just stands out. Here's how I would suggest rewriting it:
I was guessing the sign meant an enderman general that works for the enderdragon or something. Going outside, i was surprised that there were no endermen around. I hopped down the mountain and started walking west. After a while, the trees around me thinned out, and I entered some sort of desert. In the distance, I saw some sort of temple ruins in the distance. I walked there slowly. When i made it there...
Other than that, fantastic story! Keep up the great work.
Edit: oops, I noticed that Dnarok addressed this bit a few posts ahead of me.