Very cool. I have some suggestions though
What I would like to see: Maybe a chapter from a different point of view, from a different person, possibly a new charater. Be cool to add jungles or any mob like a cat or dog.
Make chapters a bit longer, as thats what they're lacking is length.
I'm not a proffessional writer I just read a lot.
P.S Love the story for now
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Hey guys it me. yea i know what u are thinking "Where da hell is the new chapter" but the thing is, im very court up in school work (Hate school) and im very stressed because of a science, maths, science, English and R.E exams. so the scrolls of life is my last priority right now sorry. but i assure u when my tests and exams are over i WILL and i mean WILL get around to finishing the chapter. thank u for your attention
Guys im soo sorry something stuffed up in my story and completely messed up chapter 4 im soo sorry. i fixed it now. please tell me if there is an error like that again. =)
You are not allowed to bump. It's against the rules here in MCF.
If you make an update to your thread. You can post what you did in the update.
If you want to talk to people in your thread, you edit your last post. (Although, if the last post was an update, I typically make a new one for talking, to avoid confusion.)
Also, I didn't read your story as I found far too many grammatical mistakes and inconsistencies. It was.. hard on my eyes to read. I also skimmed through the last page, and notice you type like this.
im so sorry u guys. i didnt write anything for u but i promise i will soon!
If you are a damn author, WRITE AS ONE. Use proper grammar for EVERYTHING you write. Whether it is facebook, blogging, forum posts, twitter, gaming, everything. Use proper grammar. If you don't, you'll slack off and make the same mistakes in your stories. If you want to be a succesful author, you have to not only be an author while writing the story, but also be an author whenever you are writing. Period. Your story has many views, yes. But that doesn't mean that they are all loving it.
You have a very good concept, yes. But you can't write for the life of you. If English is not your first language, then it's totally acceptable. However; I saw you taking English class in school, and assume it to be your primary language. If you were any other language, you most likely would've been taking classes in that language.
I'm sorry for being blunt, but I strongly dislike this story. Fix up the grammar mistakes, and it could very well be an excellent story.
Also, I did go back and read it. Chapter 3 is too short. Perhaps that could be the prologue instead. A chapter should never be just dialogue. Or you can find some way to add other things into chapter 3.
Hey guys it me. yea i know what u are thinking "Where da hell is the new chapter" but the thing is, im very court up in school work (Hate school) and im very stressed because of a science, maths, science, English and R.E exams. so the scrolls of life is my last priority right now sorry. but i assure u when my tests and exams are over i WILL and i mean WILL get around to finishing the chapter. thank u for your attention
True hopes are one that rebuild a man.
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What I would like to see: Maybe a chapter from a different point of view, from a different person, possibly a new charater. Be cool to add jungles or any mob like a cat or dog.
Make chapters a bit longer, as thats what they're lacking is length.
I'm not a proffessional writer I just read a lot.
P.S Love the story
What do u mean by Bleh
EDIT: actually iv been righting it for 5 days.
EDIT: should i start a blog?
http://darthcreepersblogofmaigcandwonders.blogspot.com.au/
You are not allowed to bump. It's against the rules here in MCF.
If you make an update to your thread. You can post what you did in the update.
If you want to talk to people in your thread, you edit your last post. (Although, if the last post was an update, I typically make a new one for talking, to avoid confusion.)
Also, I didn't read your story as I found far too many grammatical mistakes and inconsistencies. It was.. hard on my eyes to read. I also skimmed through the last page, and notice you type like this.
im so sorry u guys. i didnt write anything for u but i promise i will soon!
If you are a damn author, WRITE AS ONE. Use proper grammar for EVERYTHING you write. Whether it is facebook, blogging, forum posts, twitter, gaming, everything. Use proper grammar. If you don't, you'll slack off and make the same mistakes in your stories. If you want to be a succesful author, you have to not only be an author while writing the story, but also be an author whenever you are writing. Period. Your story has many views, yes. But that doesn't mean that they are all loving it.
You have a very good concept, yes. But you can't write for the life of you. If English is not your first language, then it's totally acceptable. However; I saw you taking English class in school, and assume it to be your primary language. If you were any other language, you most likely would've been taking classes in that language.
I'm sorry for being blunt, but I strongly dislike this story. Fix up the grammar mistakes, and it could very well be an excellent story.
Also, I did go back and read it. Chapter 3 is too short. Perhaps that could be the prologue instead. A chapter should never be just dialogue. Or you can find some way to add other things into chapter 3.
and thank you for the advice
That's what I mean.