Guys im sooo sorry for how late this chapter is. ive just been in hospital with burns up my arm and its been hell trying to Wright and then ive also got to study for exams. sooo pleeease forgive me i promise chapter 4 will be released asap
Definitely an enjoyable read. There are a number of syntax errors that should be remedied, though. I can supply a personal review of this worked, if so desired. PM me if that is the case! Also, read my blog! : ) Thanks!
I am not trying to cause issues, but here is my review of this story, approved by the writer : ) The issues I am, of course, referring to is double-posting, but I am hoping this is ok : )
Although there are a number of grammatical mistakes in this work, it is very entertaining. Starting off with action like this pulls a reader in and it is clearly at the end of some event, so it leaves you wondering about the circumstances you've walked in on. Just a thought, I can't tell that something is wet from 200 feet up ; ) I can't touch it. No biggie though, as this guy has the brass balls to jump in and find out, LoL! The dialogue is not forced and flows naturally.
In chapter 3, we get the much loved enemy perspective. This is a dangerous move at times as it can humanize the enemy forces and minimize their threat. At times the scenery can be a tad campy, but the dialogue and intrigue covers for that. All in all, a fun read thus far. I look forward to reading more.
I am left rubbing my temples after this. It is confusing, and what bugs me is the spelling errors. I like the story, oh yes, but it was obviously rushed. Do not, and I mean do not rush chapters because people say 'Chapter n NOW!'. It leads to sloppy work, and commonly, plot holes and spelling errors. Just keep trying, you'll get it right soon enough.
Kudos to you.
guys just letting u know that seeming that this is a long weekend for me with the Melbourne cup and everything . Chapter 5 will be delivered by at least Tuesday .
guys we are so close to the 1000 mark cant wait.
P.S i am gonna wait for the 1000 mark on the story before i finish righting the chapter. i am doing this so i can try and get to 2000 words in this chapter.
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Although there are a number of grammatical mistakes in this work, it is very entertaining. Starting off with action like this pulls a reader in and it is clearly at the end of some event, so it leaves you wondering about the circumstances you've walked in on. Just a thought, I can't tell that something is wet from 200 feet up ; ) I can't touch it. No biggie though, as this guy has the brass balls to jump in and find out, LoL! The dialogue is not forced and flows naturally.
In chapter 3, we get the much loved enemy perspective. This is a dangerous move at times as it can humanize the enemy forces and minimize their threat. At times the scenery can be a tad campy, but the dialogue and intrigue covers for that. All in all, a fun read thus far. I look forward to reading more.
~hgn1
You just lost The Game.
Kudos to you.
P.S i am gonna wait for the 1000 mark on the story before i finish righting the chapter. i am doing this so i can try and get to 2000 words in this chapter.