As I expected, Chromiiee was on a balcony giving a speech. "..leaving two of us dead. But we fought back. Kyle and I killed the two soldiers of Grecinder. Ah, Revan is here. Now we can make a decsion for the War council." Chromiiee says. "Kyle and I have voted for war, Revan. Annabel has foolishly voted for peace. No retaliation. What do you vote?"
"Chromiiee, go to my house. Tell me what happened, and I will decide." I say. We walk to my house where he tells me the story.
"About five hours ago, Kyle, Johnathan, my friend Aaron, and I were in my office of town hall. Two Grecindarians walked in. Kyle had talked to them about peace between our two cities, because that is his job. The two then pulled out swords and fought Johnathan and Aaron. They were both killed. I had rushed forward and killed them both." Chromiiee says. "They killed them. They killed them to get to s. So we shall kill them to get to Flaw. By the end of the week, Flaw shall be dead. If you vote yes."
"Fine. But only for Johnathan. Not for your blood lust." I tell him. We got to the square and tell them arm up with what they could. Some of us had iron armor and swords. Others had leather armor and bows. Some of the poorest carried only picks and axes. We went to Spawn Plaza and quietly marched toward Grecinder. We entered the port and saw people living their lives. I saw Artimer sitting in the middle by a giant tree. This tree must have been old. It was fifty feet tall. It made the area seem small. Our group of forty went forward. Guards saw us and shouted out. Some people fled to the real town. The guards followed.
Artimer walked up to us. "What the nether do you think you're doing here. Walking into our town." he yelled.
"You attacked us." said Kyle. People shouted "yeah" in behind us.
"And what do you plan to do?" Artimer asked.
"Kill you all." Chromiiee shouted and ran forward.
"STOP" shouted a voice. out of a building came a young man. He was no more than eighteen. "You shall not kill Art. Run to town, Art." he said and Artimer listened.
"You must be Flaw the 10th." Chromiiee says. "Your father and I were great friends." he says laughing.
"You are Chromiiee. You murdered him." Flaw says.
"Yes. And I won't murder you. But Strutter will. Go kill him Steven." Chromiiee says. Strutter walks forward to Flaw. He raises his sword. And he drops it. He falls down with a knife in his heart. Flaw has a blood painted smile on his face. He quickly takes another knife and throws it at Annabel. It enters her skull, killing her instantly. I rush forward. I swing at his head. I miss but swing it around once more. His head lands just a second before the body, The war was about to begin. Their second leader was dead. We would not be forgiven.
Chapter 12: To the Tree
We heard screams. Yells. We turned to see soldiers charging at us. And I was actually surprised. Leading the charge was Artimer and Windridest, which I expected. But next to them was Miza. Yes the Miza. On the side of Grecinder. Chromiiee told us to take cover in houses. We were outnumbered two to one. Miza and Kyle ran at each other to fight. Artimer jumped at me to attack. Chromiiee begins to take on Windridest. Our soldiers met with the soldiers of Grecinder.
Artimer started to use his sword. I countered his sword. He climbs onto a nearby house. The house is made of cobble and looks stable enough to hold me weight. I climb onto the house. Artimer charges to push me off the building. I dive out of the way, and he falls off. He lands in the water surrounding the island the tree is on. He climbs back up. "Sorry Art. I can't really allow you to be awake. I hold you in great respect." I say. I kick him in the head. He falls again and lands on his head. He lays unconscious.
Chromiiee had the battle with Windridest under control. He was easily blocking and countering every attack. He finally used one of the attacks to his advantage. He swings his sword, so Windridest couldn't swing again. He slides the sword down and disarms Windridest. "Time to die." Chromiiee says.
He raises his sword, but he is thrown off the building. Miza stands and points her sword at Chromiiee, who still lays on the ground. I run and jump onto the building were they had fought and push Windridest off. I jumped on Miza and took her to the ground. "Run to the tree." I shout at Chromiiee. We get up and run toward the tree. We saw Kyle laying on the ground, and we help him up.. Chromiiee, Kyle and I climb the ladder in the tree. It leads to a three rooms on top. It's a tree house.
Chapter 13: Top of the Tree
We were on the top floor when when Miza got up. I had pushed her slammed her head onto the ground. Our last few soldiers were fighting with the large force of Grecinder that was still alive. One of the soldiers killed his combatant. He ran to Miza. She threw he sword into him. It flew into his shoulder, and he collapsed. She pulled the sword out and beheaded him. She ran and got Windridest up. They went to get Artimer. They grab the first rung of the ladder.
"We got to do something." I say. They would reach us in about a minute.
"You got a bow, right?" Kyle says
"Yeah. I can shoot them." I say almost with joy. I take my bow and take aim. I let the first arrow drop. It misses. I take another shot. It hits Windridest in the shoulder. He drops off the tree and splashes into the water. While he was falling he hit Artimer and knocked his sword off his back. Miza and Artimer, who now has no sword, keep climbing.
"Just give me the bow." Chromiiee shouts.
"Fine. Here" I say as I hand him the bow. He takes my arrows and turns to shoot down the ladder. But he is hit in the face with the hilt of Miza's sword. She had climbed up. She runs and charges Chromiiee into the wall. The tree violently shakes.
While Miza is distracted fighting Chromiiee, I run to Kyle. "We need to keep Artimer away. from Chromiiee" He agrees and we look down the ladder. He had just got off on the first of three floors. He slde down the ladder and get into the small, wooden room. Large branches were turned into pillars. He must have been hiding behind one. We started to check behind them.
I heard kyle yell something and I ran to him. Artimer was grabbing the sword from Kyle's hand. They both let go and it was thrown out the window. I run out with the only sword. When I get close to him, he grabs my arm. With the other hand he slams my head into the pillar. I fall over, and he takes the sword from me. He chucks it out the window.
"I want to be fair after all." he says.
"Were two people against you." I say.
"You can't win" Kyle says.
"Well when you talk like that.... Fine. I guess I'll be off." he says. He smashes his elbow into a pillar. He runs over to the window and jumps out.
"What the.." I say. It is all I can. The room suddenly explodes taking out half of the room. The tree lost the support of the rooms. The bottom floor that we were on begins to fall out. I run to the ladder for something to hold on. Kyle isn't fast enough. He falls out of the room and into the water. I see that he manages to swim to the roads of the port. I climb up the ladder into the room where Chromiiee and Miza were fighting. When I enter that room, the room before us gives out. It crashes to the ground.
"Goodbye Chromiiee. You have been a thorn in my side for to long." Miza says. She puts her sword on Chromiiee's neck. He is bleeding out of his shoulder. His knee is badly cut. He has small scars on his face. I have to save him. I have no sword. So I decided to reenact my saving of Kyle from so long ago. I charge at Miza, and as with last time in Paradise, she is caught of guard. The room collapses as I grab her.
The room splashes into the water. It instantly fills with water. I let Miza go and grab Chromiiee. I drag him as I swim to the window. I get out of the window and manage to pull Chromiiee through. I then start to lose my breath. My lungs feel empty. I need to take air in. I kick harder still having my grip on Chromiiee. I let him go and push him to the surface. I open my mouth and water flows in. My vision begins to go dark. Suddenly I am up on the surface. kyle is pounding on my chest.
"Stop." I yell. "I'm better." I get up and take a deep breath. "How's Chromiiee?" I ask.
"Okay. He got some bandages for his wounds. I have Windridest tied up. Artimer ran back to town." he said. “But what about you? Your armor is damaged.”
“How?” I ask.
“Your helmet is destroyed along with the ice packs.” He says. Sure enough he is right. The ice packs that helped keep me alive after being destroyed by lava were gone.
“I can celebrate later. You said we have Windridest?”
“Yeah. He couldn’t move after the fall. He seems to have broken his legs in the fall.” Chromiiee says. His hood is off revealing his light brown hair. His nose is covered in dry blood. Bandages cover gashes on his cheeks. “Is it good we have Windridest?”
"Yes. I have an idea." I say with a smile on my face.
Chapter 14: Surrender
Both of our forces were small to begin with. The full scale battle had destroyed us. We had only five of our forty men. But we had one thing that could help. I hoped my plan would work. We got our small group ready to move. I have Chromiiee carry the "weapon" I planned on using in a wool bag we found in a house.. This would work. It would have to. We got to the gates of town. "The doors been upgraded since I was last here." Kyle says. "It went form iron to obsidian,"
"I, Revan, request entrance to the town. I come for negotiations." I yell over the wall. The door slides open. I walk in and see the town. It has most of the houses on a hill over looking a quarry. On the edge of the quarry is a bridge. Houses are dug into the cliff providing more room. I walk onto the square. Six soldiers run up to me. The all point swords toward me.
"Miza and Artimer are to be brought here now. Understand?" I yell to one of the soldiers. He runs into town. A minute late, Miza and Artimer are here. "Now. I would like to ask for you to surrender." I say.
Art runs and pushes me to the ground. "You come to Grecinder, kill two of our leaders, and expect us to surrender." he yells. "You have made me the leader of a destroyed town with no hope of recovery. You have killed my brother."
"Brother?" I say. I did not know of any brother.
"Windridest. My brother. He is dead because of you and Chromiiee. And Kyle. He is a traitor."
"Windridest? Well that makes things much easier. Bring Chromiiee into town." I order.
"Miza, go get him. No one else is allowed." Artimer says. Miza walks off to the door. After a minute or so, Miza and Chromiiee, who had the bag in his hands, entered the square.
"Well, surrender time." I say.
"Why?" Artimer asks. "Why should his presence change anything. Miza would have killed him, and she can do it again." he says.
"Do you want your brother to live?" I ask.
"He is dead you *******." Artimer says. He pulls out his sword and aims it at my throat. "Do not mock my pain. My family is dead."
"He isn't. Chromiiee, the bag. Empty it." I command. Chromiiee dumps the bag. Out slumps a body. The body is still breathing. The body is Windridest. He is still tied and gagged. I walk over and pull the gag out. I take out my sword and put it in from of his back. "Surrender." I order. Artimer and his men put down thier swords. Even Miza puts hers down. Chromiiee and Art go to town hall for negotiations. In the end, we succeed. Grecinder belonged to Pandora. Art became the head of town, but we ordered him around. Grecinder was finally ours. But this battle marked the end of Civcraftia. The land would only last a few more months.
Chapter 15: The Mistake
Chromiiee and I got houses overlooking the quarry. Kyle was sent home to tell people about the battle and to take up leadership. Chromiiee went to do his favorite hobby. Terrorizing the people of Grecinder. He murdered people. He even burnt down the oldest building, a temple. I tried to help the people. I rebuilt the temple, although it went from focusing on Notch to Diamond Shovels.
I also became the public relations. I was one of the few things preventing retaliation. I became, as close as possible, friends with Atrimer. I did understand the problems he was facing. Miza had given up hope with him due to his surrender. In fact the whole of Pompeii had lost faith in him. He had lost to the Pandorians. But I put that aside. And so did Artimer. We would talk and try to keep more people from dieing. It was one conversation that led to the end of the town.
It even seems to have led to the end of Civcraftia.
We had had the town for a few months. Winter was upon the town. Spawntown, Paradise, Pompeii, and Pandora were well to the south of Grecinder. The winters in Grecinder were harsher than Pandora. The cold didn’t affect me, due to the need of cold I had had for around two years, but it did affect Chromiiee. He rarely left his house, and he asked me to gather large amounts of wood for fires.
I decided one day to go to the market for wood. While in the town square I saw Artimer. I went up and said hello.
“Hey. What are you doing?” he asked.
“Getting wood for Chromiiee.” I say. I tell him about how it was colder here than elsewhere.
“I would let him freeze. He destroyed the temple my great great grandfather built with Flaw the 6th.” He says.
“I helped rebuild it. Besides you should have picked a better deal when we were negotiating. Maybe say half the town instead of the full. Give him part you don’t care about and keep the part you like.” I say. “I mean you had basically won. Any more battle and we would have died.”
“Yeah. It’s to late now. But I think I have an idea. I’ll see ya later.” He says.
“No. You won’t. After I deliver the wood to Chromiiee I am going back to Pandora. Kyle probably ruined something up by now.” I say. He laughs at this and leaves. I take the cart to Spawn Plaza and walk to Pandora. I go home to take a nice nap.
Chromiiee and I got houses overlooking the quarry. Kyle was sent home to tell people about the battle and to take up leadership. Chromiiee went to do his favorite hobby. Terrorizing the people of Grecinder. He murdered people. He even burnt down the oldest building, a temple. I tried to help the people. I rebuilt the temple, although it went from focusing on Notch to Diamond Shovels.
I also became the public relations. I was one of the few things preventing retaliation. I became, as close as possible, friends with Atrimer. I did understand the problems he was facing. Miza had given up hope with him due to his surrender. In fact the whole of Pompeii had lost faith in him. He had lost to the Pandorians. But I put that aside. And so did Artimer. We would talk and try to keep more people from dieing. It was one conversation that led to the end of the town.
It even seems to have led to the end of Civcraftia.
We had had the town for a few months. Winter was upon the town. Spawntown, Paradise, Pompeii, and Pandora were well to the south of Grecinder. The winters in Grecinder were harsher than Pandora. The cold didn’t affect me, due to the need of cold I had had for around two years, but it did affect Chromiiee. He rarely left his house, and he asked me to gather large amounts of wood for fires.
I decided one day to go to the market for wood. While in the town square I saw Artimer. I went up and said hello.
“Hey. What are you doing?” he asked.
“Getting wood for Chromiiee.” I say. I tell him about how it was colder here than elsewhere.
“I would let him freeze. He destroyed the temple my great great grandfather built with Flaw the 6th.” He says.
“I helped rebuild it. Besides you should have picked a better deal when we were negotiating. Maybe say half the town instead of the full. Give him part you don’t care about and keep the part you like.” I say. “I mean you had basically won. Any more battle and we would have died.”
“Yeah. It’s to late now. But I think I have an idea. I’ll see ya later.” He says.
“No. You won’t. After I deliver the wood to Chromiiee I am going back to Pandora. Kyle probably ruined something up by now.” I say. He laughs at this and leaves. I take the cart to Spawn Plaza and walk to Pandora. I go home to take a nice nap.
Amazing story, well done. I am suprised such a great journey actually became a "book." Good work, very well writen. Definitly will be checking back constantly for updates. There are a few spelling errors, but no one cares too much about them :tongue.gif:
Amazing story, well done. I am suprised such a great journey actually became a "book." Good work, very well writen. Definitly will be checking back constantly for updates. There are a few spelling errors, but no one cares too much about them :tongue.gif:
Do you truly like the story or do you like reading about your dwarven self?
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Anyway, it's good to see you try to improve :smile.gif:
Here's a thought exercise I always do: Try to forget all the knowledge that you've made up about your work's setting. Then read your work. Does it still make sense without the information that only you know?
Thanks for the tip. I will try that later and get my sister, who knows very little about Civcraft, to try it.
And thanks for helping me earlier with the one post and all.
Hope I didn't double post this. It didn't appear when I last attempted to post it. Anyway, I have finished the first book. I have been busy with school and my family, so I have posted little lately. I hope to return to adding a chapter or 2 daily, but I don't know if I will. If you see any errors or missing details or information, please inform me so I can fix it. Also just leave feedback so I can get a feel of the approval, or disapproval, this series receives.
Anyway, I can't find the copyright information, so unless you instruct me there I'm making a movie out of this.
You would have to be in it bro, you're the main character. THE NARRATOR.
Ha. There were only like 5 spelling errors all near the end. They all have been fixed(I think).What you saw were grammatical errors that have hopefully all been fixed.
Anyway, I am back from my long time since posting. And I'm here to ask a question. I see that I have had 400+ readers. But I only have 12 replies. 7 from me. 2 from friends. 1 from someone I don't know. And only the two from Goomba were of any help. So I want to ask why no one comments. Is it too long that people can't/won't read it? Is it so terrible that no one can even say a positive aspect of it? If someone could tell me why, I would appreciate it.
Finally. I finished two chapters.(about) And I secretly set the scene for the next story. Sshh.
Ps. Hey Chromiiee. And I edited book two chapters 4 and 8? I think those two. Added more detail and some dialogue for them.
Hey to the few people who will read this. After a month (so sorry guys, I just haven't felt like writing) I completed a hole, get it,chapter. Although I, foolishly, started a new book that I will rotate working on with this. It is about Steve and his adventures. Although I didn't say it there, I am loosely basing it off "Hercules The Legendary Journeys". Anyway here is a link. http://www.minecraft...#entry14706930.
Also check this out for other fanfics and help for writing them. http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/1157761-minefic-story-list-writing-help-for-minecrafters/
Hey to the few people who will read this. After a month (so sorry guys, I just haven't felt like writing) I completed a hole, get it,chapter. Although I, foolishly, started a new book that I will rotate working on with this. It is about Steve and his adventures. Although I didn't say it there, I am loosely basing it off "Hercules The Legendary Journeys". Anyway here is a link. http://www.minecraft...#entry14706930.
Also check this out for other fanfics and help for writing them. http://www.minecraft...0#entry14706930http://www.minecraft...0#entry14706930
I'm guessing you were supposed to link those two to Minefic? Anyway, I wish to add your story to Minefic. Sounds good? I'm guessing you know the drill.
I'm guessing you were supposed to link those two to Minefic? Anyway, I wish to add your story to Minefic. Sounds good? I'm guessing you know the drill.
Yeah. That second link was supposed to be to the Minefic, but copy and paste are not my friends. And I will send you the information for this. And this time I will successfully add the links for the format.
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Yeah. That second link was supposed to be to the Minefic, but copy and paste are not my friends. And I will send you the information for this. And this time I will successfully add the links for the format.
Done with chapter 7. As I said on my other book, I am wanting to finish these stories. This still has a long way to go and probably not even half way done. I will try to upload several chapters a day. I should be faster because A. I seem to be writing more, and B. School only has 4 more days. I hope to add another chapter for both books tonight, but I can't promise it.
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Yep. I did it. Two chapters in one day. Chapter 8 is done. This story will be done in no time. Except it won't. I still got three wars. A new map to write about. Other servers to write about, and an extra book about a group after that. This has still got a while to go.
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As I expected, Chromiiee was on a balcony giving a speech. "..leaving two of us dead. But we fought back. Kyle and I killed the two soldiers of Grecinder. Ah, Revan is here. Now we can make a decsion for the War council." Chromiiee says. "Kyle and I have voted for war, Revan. Annabel has foolishly voted for peace. No retaliation. What do you vote?"
"Chromiiee, go to my house. Tell me what happened, and I will decide." I say. We walk to my house where he tells me the story.
"About five hours ago, Kyle, Johnathan, my friend Aaron, and I were in my office of town hall. Two Grecindarians walked in. Kyle had talked to them about peace between our two cities, because that is his job. The two then pulled out swords and fought Johnathan and Aaron. They were both killed. I had rushed forward and killed them both." Chromiiee says. "They killed them. They killed them to get to s. So we shall kill them to get to Flaw. By the end of the week, Flaw shall be dead. If you vote yes."
"Fine. But only for Johnathan. Not for your blood lust." I tell him. We got to the square and tell them arm up with what they could. Some of us had iron armor and swords. Others had leather armor and bows. Some of the poorest carried only picks and axes. We went to Spawn Plaza and quietly marched toward Grecinder. We entered the port and saw people living their lives. I saw Artimer sitting in the middle by a giant tree. This tree must have been old. It was fifty feet tall. It made the area seem small. Our group of forty went forward. Guards saw us and shouted out. Some people fled to the real town. The guards followed.
Artimer walked up to us. "What the nether do you think you're doing here. Walking into our town." he yelled.
"You attacked us." said Kyle. People shouted "yeah" in behind us.
"And what do you plan to do?" Artimer asked.
"Kill you all." Chromiiee shouted and ran forward.
"STOP" shouted a voice. out of a building came a young man. He was no more than eighteen. "You shall not kill Art. Run to town, Art." he said and Artimer listened.
"You must be Flaw the 10th." Chromiiee says. "Your father and I were great friends." he says laughing.
"You are Chromiiee. You murdered him." Flaw says.
"Yes. And I won't murder you. But Strutter will. Go kill him Steven." Chromiiee says. Strutter walks forward to Flaw. He raises his sword. And he drops it. He falls down with a knife in his heart. Flaw has a blood painted smile on his face. He quickly takes another knife and throws it at Annabel. It enters her skull, killing her instantly. I rush forward. I swing at his head. I miss but swing it around once more. His head lands just a second before the body, The war was about to begin. Their second leader was dead. We would not be forgiven.
Chapter 12: To the Tree
We heard screams. Yells. We turned to see soldiers charging at us. And I was actually surprised. Leading the charge was Artimer and Windridest, which I expected. But next to them was Miza. Yes the Miza. On the side of Grecinder. Chromiiee told us to take cover in houses. We were outnumbered two to one. Miza and Kyle ran at each other to fight. Artimer jumped at me to attack. Chromiiee begins to take on Windridest. Our soldiers met with the soldiers of Grecinder.
Artimer started to use his sword. I countered his sword. He climbs onto a nearby house. The house is made of cobble and looks stable enough to hold me weight. I climb onto the house. Artimer charges to push me off the building. I dive out of the way, and he falls off. He lands in the water surrounding the island the tree is on. He climbs back up. "Sorry Art. I can't really allow you to be awake. I hold you in great respect." I say. I kick him in the head. He falls again and lands on his head. He lays unconscious.
Chromiiee had the battle with Windridest under control. He was easily blocking and countering every attack. He finally used one of the attacks to his advantage. He swings his sword, so Windridest couldn't swing again. He slides the sword down and disarms Windridest. "Time to die." Chromiiee says.
He raises his sword, but he is thrown off the building. Miza stands and points her sword at Chromiiee, who still lays on the ground. I run and jump onto the building were they had fought and push Windridest off. I jumped on Miza and took her to the ground. "Run to the tree." I shout at Chromiiee. We get up and run toward the tree. We saw Kyle laying on the ground, and we help him up.. Chromiiee, Kyle and I climb the ladder in the tree. It leads to a three rooms on top. It's a tree house.
Chapter 13: Top of the Tree
We were on the top floor when when Miza got up. I had pushed her slammed her head onto the ground. Our last few soldiers were fighting with the large force of Grecinder that was still alive. One of the soldiers killed his combatant. He ran to Miza. She threw he sword into him. It flew into his shoulder, and he collapsed. She pulled the sword out and beheaded him. She ran and got Windridest up. They went to get Artimer. They grab the first rung of the ladder.
"We got to do something." I say. They would reach us in about a minute.
"You got a bow, right?" Kyle says
"Yeah. I can shoot them." I say almost with joy. I take my bow and take aim. I let the first arrow drop. It misses. I take another shot. It hits Windridest in the shoulder. He drops off the tree and splashes into the water. While he was falling he hit Artimer and knocked his sword off his back. Miza and Artimer, who now has no sword, keep climbing.
"Just give me the bow." Chromiiee shouts.
"Fine. Here" I say as I hand him the bow. He takes my arrows and turns to shoot down the ladder. But he is hit in the face with the hilt of Miza's sword. She had climbed up. She runs and charges Chromiiee into the wall. The tree violently shakes.
While Miza is distracted fighting Chromiiee, I run to Kyle. "We need to keep Artimer away. from Chromiiee" He agrees and we look down the ladder. He had just got off on the first of three floors. He slde down the ladder and get into the small, wooden room. Large branches were turned into pillars. He must have been hiding behind one. We started to check behind them.
I heard kyle yell something and I ran to him. Artimer was grabbing the sword from Kyle's hand. They both let go and it was thrown out the window. I run out with the only sword. When I get close to him, he grabs my arm. With the other hand he slams my head into the pillar. I fall over, and he takes the sword from me. He chucks it out the window.
"I want to be fair after all." he says.
"Were two people against you." I say.
"You can't win" Kyle says.
"Well when you talk like that.... Fine. I guess I'll be off." he says. He smashes his elbow into a pillar. He runs over to the window and jumps out.
"What the.." I say. It is all I can. The room suddenly explodes taking out half of the room. The tree lost the support of the rooms. The bottom floor that we were on begins to fall out. I run to the ladder for something to hold on. Kyle isn't fast enough. He falls out of the room and into the water. I see that he manages to swim to the roads of the port. I climb up the ladder into the room where Chromiiee and Miza were fighting. When I enter that room, the room before us gives out. It crashes to the ground.
"Goodbye Chromiiee. You have been a thorn in my side for to long." Miza says. She puts her sword on Chromiiee's neck. He is bleeding out of his shoulder. His knee is badly cut. He has small scars on his face. I have to save him. I have no sword. So I decided to reenact my saving of Kyle from so long ago. I charge at Miza, and as with last time in Paradise, she is caught of guard. The room collapses as I grab her.
The room splashes into the water. It instantly fills with water. I let Miza go and grab Chromiiee. I drag him as I swim to the window. I get out of the window and manage to pull Chromiiee through. I then start to lose my breath. My lungs feel empty. I need to take air in. I kick harder still having my grip on Chromiiee. I let him go and push him to the surface. I open my mouth and water flows in. My vision begins to go dark. Suddenly I am up on the surface. kyle is pounding on my chest.
"Stop." I yell. "I'm better." I get up and take a deep breath. "How's Chromiiee?" I ask.
"Okay. He got some bandages for his wounds. I have Windridest tied up. Artimer ran back to town." he said. “But what about you? Your armor is damaged.”
“How?” I ask.
“Your helmet is destroyed along with the ice packs.” He says. Sure enough he is right. The ice packs that helped keep me alive after being destroyed by lava were gone.
“I can celebrate later. You said we have Windridest?”
“Yeah. He couldn’t move after the fall. He seems to have broken his legs in the fall.” Chromiiee says. His hood is off revealing his light brown hair. His nose is covered in dry blood. Bandages cover gashes on his cheeks. “Is it good we have Windridest?”
"Yes. I have an idea." I say with a smile on my face.
Chapter 14: Surrender
Both of our forces were small to begin with. The full scale battle had destroyed us. We had only five of our forty men. But we had one thing that could help. I hoped my plan would work. We got our small group ready to move. I have Chromiiee carry the "weapon" I planned on using in a wool bag we found in a house.. This would work. It would have to. We got to the gates of town. "The doors been upgraded since I was last here." Kyle says. "It went form iron to obsidian,"
"I, Revan, request entrance to the town. I come for negotiations." I yell over the wall. The door slides open. I walk in and see the town. It has most of the houses on a hill over looking a quarry. On the edge of the quarry is a bridge. Houses are dug into the cliff providing more room. I walk onto the square. Six soldiers run up to me. The all point swords toward me.
"Miza and Artimer are to be brought here now. Understand?" I yell to one of the soldiers. He runs into town. A minute late, Miza and Artimer are here. "Now. I would like to ask for you to surrender." I say.
Art runs and pushes me to the ground. "You come to Grecinder, kill two of our leaders, and expect us to surrender." he yells. "You have made me the leader of a destroyed town with no hope of recovery. You have killed my brother."
"Brother?" I say. I did not know of any brother.
"Windridest. My brother. He is dead because of you and Chromiiee. And Kyle. He is a traitor."
"Windridest? Well that makes things much easier. Bring Chromiiee into town." I order.
"Miza, go get him. No one else is allowed." Artimer says. Miza walks off to the door. After a minute or so, Miza and Chromiiee, who had the bag in his hands, entered the square.
"Well, surrender time." I say.
"Why?" Artimer asks. "Why should his presence change anything. Miza would have killed him, and she can do it again." he says.
"Do you want your brother to live?" I ask.
"He is dead you *******." Artimer says. He pulls out his sword and aims it at my throat. "Do not mock my pain. My family is dead."
"He isn't. Chromiiee, the bag. Empty it." I command. Chromiiee dumps the bag. Out slumps a body. The body is still breathing. The body is Windridest. He is still tied and gagged. I walk over and pull the gag out. I take out my sword and put it in from of his back. "Surrender." I order. Artimer and his men put down thier swords. Even Miza puts hers down. Chromiiee and Art go to town hall for negotiations. In the end, we succeed. Grecinder belonged to Pandora. Art became the head of town, but we ordered him around. Grecinder was finally ours. But this battle marked the end of Civcraftia. The land would only last a few more months.
Chapter 15: The Mistake
Chromiiee and I got houses overlooking the quarry. Kyle was sent home to tell people about the battle and to take up leadership. Chromiiee went to do his favorite hobby. Terrorizing the people of Grecinder. He murdered people. He even burnt down the oldest building, a temple. I tried to help the people. I rebuilt the temple, although it went from focusing on Notch to Diamond Shovels.
I also became the public relations. I was one of the few things preventing retaliation. I became, as close as possible, friends with Atrimer. I did understand the problems he was facing. Miza had given up hope with him due to his surrender. In fact the whole of Pompeii had lost faith in him. He had lost to the Pandorians. But I put that aside. And so did Artimer. We would talk and try to keep more people from dieing. It was one conversation that led to the end of the town.
It even seems to have led to the end of Civcraftia.
We had had the town for a few months. Winter was upon the town. Spawntown, Paradise, Pompeii, and Pandora were well to the south of Grecinder. The winters in Grecinder were harsher than Pandora. The cold didn’t affect me, due to the need of cold I had had for around two years, but it did affect Chromiiee. He rarely left his house, and he asked me to gather large amounts of wood for fires.
I decided one day to go to the market for wood. While in the town square I saw Artimer. I went up and said hello.
“Hey. What are you doing?” he asked.
“Getting wood for Chromiiee.” I say. I tell him about how it was colder here than elsewhere.
“I would let him freeze. He destroyed the temple my great great grandfather built with Flaw the 6th.” He says.
“I helped rebuild it. Besides you should have picked a better deal when we were negotiating. Maybe say half the town instead of the full. Give him part you don’t care about and keep the part you like.” I say. “I mean you had basically won. Any more battle and we would have died.”
“Yeah. It’s to late now. But I think I have an idea. I’ll see ya later.” He says.
“No. You won’t. After I deliver the wood to Chromiiee I am going back to Pandora. Kyle probably ruined something up by now.” I say. He laughs at this and leaves. I take the cart to Spawn Plaza and walk to Pandora. I go home to take a nice nap.
Chromiiee and I got houses overlooking the quarry. Kyle was sent home to tell people about the battle and to take up leadership. Chromiiee went to do his favorite hobby. Terrorizing the people of Grecinder. He murdered people. He even burnt down the oldest building, a temple. I tried to help the people. I rebuilt the temple, although it went from focusing on Notch to Diamond Shovels.
I also became the public relations. I was one of the few things preventing retaliation. I became, as close as possible, friends with Atrimer. I did understand the problems he was facing. Miza had given up hope with him due to his surrender. In fact the whole of Pompeii had lost faith in him. He had lost to the Pandorians. But I put that aside. And so did Artimer. We would talk and try to keep more people from dieing. It was one conversation that led to the end of the town.
It even seems to have led to the end of Civcraftia.
We had had the town for a few months. Winter was upon the town. Spawntown, Paradise, Pompeii, and Pandora were well to the south of Grecinder. The winters in Grecinder were harsher than Pandora. The cold didn’t affect me, due to the need of cold I had had for around two years, but it did affect Chromiiee. He rarely left his house, and he asked me to gather large amounts of wood for fires.
I decided one day to go to the market for wood. While in the town square I saw Artimer. I went up and said hello.
“Hey. What are you doing?” he asked.
“Getting wood for Chromiiee.” I say. I tell him about how it was colder here than elsewhere.
“I would let him freeze. He destroyed the temple my great great grandfather built with Flaw the 6th.” He says.
“I helped rebuild it. Besides you should have picked a better deal when we were negotiating. Maybe say half the town instead of the full. Give him part you don’t care about and keep the part you like.” I say. “I mean you had basically won. Any more battle and we would have died.”
“Yeah. It’s to late now. But I think I have an idea. I’ll see ya later.” He says.
“No. You won’t. After I deliver the wood to Chromiiee I am going back to Pandora. Kyle probably ruined something up by now.” I say. He laughs at this and leaves. I take the cart to Spawn Plaza and walk to Pandora. I go home to take a nice nap.
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
Do you truly like the story or do you like reading about your dwarven self?
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Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
Thanks for the tip. I will try that later and get my sister, who knows very little about Civcraft, to try it.
And thanks for helping me earlier with the one post and all.
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
So. Many. Spelling Errors.
Anyway, I can't find the copyright information, so unless you instruct me there I'm making a movie out of this.
You would have to be in it bro, you're the main character. THE NARRATOR.
By the way, thanks for 331 views.
PS. What spelling errors?
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
Ha. There were only like 5 spelling errors all near the end. They all have been fixed(I think).What you saw were grammatical errors that have hopefully all been fixed.
Anyway, I am back from my long time since posting. And I'm here to ask a question. I see that I have had 400+ readers. But I only have 12 replies. 7 from me. 2 from friends. 1 from someone I don't know. And only the two from Goomba were of any help. So I want to ask why no one comments. Is it too long that people can't/won't read it? Is it so terrible that no one can even say a positive aspect of it? If someone could tell me why, I would appreciate it.
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
Ps. Hey Chromiiee. And I edited book two chapters 4 and 8? I think those two. Added more detail and some dialogue for them.
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
Also check this out for other fanfics and help for writing them. http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/1157761-minefic-story-list-writing-help-for-minecrafters/
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
I'm guessing you were supposed to link those two to Minefic? Anyway, I wish to add your story to Minefic. Sounds good? I'm guessing you know the drill.
Yeah. That second link was supposed to be to the Minefic, but copy and paste are not my friends. And I will send you the information for this. And this time I will successfully add the links for the format.
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
This time...with links..?
My heart..
I've never felt so ALIVE!
Thank you!
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia
Book series (Fanfic) of adventure in the land of Civcraftia