ok then. i also thought it would make you laugh to talk very formally to you on the forum. i know it made me laugh when i thought about it. so from now on i am going to talk in old english on this post when i do. Does this irk thou? :mellow.gif:
Thanks for all the support guys. .AT: I haven't stopped, I'm just re-writing chapter III. I realized that most of it didn't fit with chapter IV, so I'm re-writing the new character and part of the story line to be better.
SDIAN: When I was like 6, I would improvise games with my friends, and they would turn out so good, that I actually could make a story out of it. That's the part I'm re-writing, but I'll add it in later.
you know what talking in old english is hard so i am going to take back my earlier statement. can i have magic powers and my power level is over 9000? just kidding but can i be like a very stealthy guy? :biggrin.gif: :biggrin.gif: :biggrin.gif: :biggrin.gif: :biggrin.gif: :laugh.gif: :laugh.gif: :laugh.gif: :laugh.gif: :laugh.gif: :laugh.gif:
i have 1
chapter 1
"AGHHH...my head"said sgt.jarjar3."****ING INCOMING ENEMY MILLITIA" YELLED pvt.Tankinator. "copy that" said cpl.minxe 'WTF'said jarjar "where am i....i remember a bang then WHAM blackness"
"ahhhh yes u are awake sir"said minxe. "ohhhh i remember now" said jarjar." sir!" said tankinator. "yes pvt oh uh yea pvt u are now a copral like minxe"said jarjar "yes"said minxe and tankinator. "oh yea uh the enemy have cut us off from the main unit" we don't make it back we are screwed" said minxe "i know!" said jarjar. "wait that cannon" said jarjar pointing at a anti-infantry cannon. "i know it just a dispencer but those 1's are long ranged soif we use that we can take out the enemy blocking us from main army"said jarjar."thats............thats just ****ing good"said tankinator. "hey guys" said pvt.steve and behind him 50 other pvts."well **** me" said jarjar. *BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM*"HOLY ****"said minxe "TNT OH ****"said steve. "GEEEEEETTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT DOWNNNNNNNNNNNNNN"said jarjar *BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM
In chapter 1 paragraph 2 line 3, "One I had the pick" is that suppose to be; 'Once' I had the pick ?GREAT JOB btw, It would make a epic minceraft movie script!
Hey guys, I'm so sorry I haven't added an update. I haven't been on the forum for a few months. I'll have to get back on that soon. Thanks for all the thumbs up.
i have 1
chapter 1
"AGHHH...my head"said sgt.jarjar3."****ING INCOMING ENEMY MILLITIA" YELLED pvt.Tankinator. "copy that" said cpl.minxe 'WTF'said jarjar "where am i....i remember a bang then WHAM blackness"
"ahhhh yes u are awake sir"said minxe. "ohhhh i remember now" said jarjar." sir!" said tankinator. "yes pvt oh uh yea pvt u are now a copral like minxe"said jarjar "yes"said minxe and tankinator. "oh yea uh the enemy have cut us off from the main unit" we don't make it back we are screwed" said minxe "i know!" said jarjar. "wait that cannon" said jarjar pointing at a anti-infantry cannon. "i know it just a dispencer but those 1's are long ranged soif we use that we can take out the enemy blocking us from main army"said jarjar."thats............thats just ****ing good"said tankinator. "hey guys" said pvt.steve and behind him 50 other pvts."well **** me" said jarjar. *BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM*"HOLY ****"said minxe "TNT OH ****"said steve. "GEEEEEETTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT DOWNNNNNNNNNNNNNN"said jarjar *BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM
Holy Fricking Christ.
This is one of the worst writings I've ever seen. Minxe, you are great, 9/10.
Bad-English-Guy up above, you are horrible.
A hint to improve your writing. Slang isn't for stories. How many stories have you read that has someone saying "O, u r stupid! STFU IDIOT!" - oh wait, I just remembered that you don't read.
I've bought you some starting kindergarten books. Try to read them with a responsible adult. If you fail, the letter 'A' makes an ahhh/ay sound. Oh wait, you can't read this, so maybe I actually have to come and tell you.
I can get you a great English teacher, but I wouldn't be surprised if it doesn't help.
(PS: the decimal point in your IQ does not mean that you are super smart. If you moved it over three times, then it would mean you have the IQ of a small arachnid. Oh, I meant spider, I'm sorry for using long words. By the way, the IQ means that you are very special. Very special, in an intellectual way.)Minxe, keep up the great work. I would re-read some of the chapters though, saw some spelling errors there.
I forget where exactly, but other than those, it's great.
Good suspense.
Would appreciate it if you edited the other chapters into your first post. That way we don't have to scroll through the (eventual) 200 pages from between chapter one and chapter forty five.
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OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
Minxe, keep up the great work. I would re-read some of the chapters though, saw some spelling errors there.
I forget where exactly, but other than those, it's great.
Good suspense.
Would appreciate it if you edited the other chapters into your first post. That way we don't have to scroll through the (eventual) 200 pages from between chapter one and chapter forty five.
All right, I'll do that. I tend to write at night, so I'm not spelling it too perfectly.
If you're talking to me, my answer is "I will most definitely NOT stop. One thing I like to do is write, and I will not stop liking it because it's fun, and it will not stop being fun, and I will not stop doing things I like, so I will NOT stop." If you're talking to that guy who tried to write something, yes, please do.
9/10 because I want more.
Suggestions: When he comes back to life or whatever, add unfamilar charaters like a villager person or a farmer people like that.
Maybe have him start a village?
Also add wolfs, they haven't got mentioned yet. oh and maybe ocelots.
SDIAN: When I was like 6, I would improvise games with my friends, and they would turn out so good, that I actually could make a story out of it. That's the part I'm re-writing, but I'll add it in later.
P.S: I'm ALWAYS open for suggestions.
chapter 1
"AGHHH...my head"said sgt.jarjar3."****ING INCOMING ENEMY MILLITIA" YELLED pvt.Tankinator. "copy that" said cpl.minxe 'WTF'said jarjar "where am i....i remember a bang then WHAM blackness"
"ahhhh yes u are awake sir"said minxe. "ohhhh i remember now" said jarjar." sir!" said tankinator. "yes pvt oh uh yea pvt u are now a copral like minxe"said jarjar "yes"said minxe and tankinator. "oh yea uh the enemy have cut us off from the main unit" we don't make it back we are screwed" said minxe "i know!" said jarjar. "wait that cannon" said jarjar pointing at a anti-infantry cannon. "i know it just a dispencer but those 1's are long ranged soif we use that we can take out the enemy blocking us from main army"said jarjar."thats............thats just ****ing good"said tankinator. "hey guys" said pvt.steve and behind him 50 other pvts."well **** me" said jarjar. *BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM*"HOLY ****"said minxe
is that to me
On Minecraft 24/7!
Holy Fricking Christ.
This is one of the worst writings I've ever seen.
Minxe, you are great, 9/10.
Bad-English-Guy up above, you are horrible.
A hint to improve your writing. Slang isn't for stories. How many stories have you read that has someone saying "O, u r stupid! STFU IDIOT!" - oh wait, I just remembered that you don't read.
I've bought you some starting kindergarten books. Try to read them with a responsible adult. If you fail, the letter 'A' makes an ahhh/ay sound. Oh wait, you can't read this, so maybe I actually have to come and tell you.
I can get you a great English teacher, but I wouldn't be surprised if it doesn't help.
(PS: the decimal point in your IQ does not mean that you are super smart. If you moved it over three times, then it would mean you have the IQ of a small arachnid. Oh, I meant spider, I'm sorry for using long words. By the way, the IQ means that you are very special. Very special, in an intellectual way.)Minxe, keep up the great work. I would re-read some of the chapters though, saw some spelling errors there.
I forget where exactly, but other than those, it's great.
Good suspense.
Would appreciate it if you edited the other chapters into your first post. That way we don't have to scroll through the (eventual) 200 pages from between chapter one and chapter forty five.
OnceInALongTime: "You confuse me, Mage. Amazability should be a word so I could describe your words."
All right, I'll do that. I tend to write at night, so I'm not spelling it too perfectly.
If you're talking to me, my answer is "I will most definitely NOT stop. One thing I like to do is write, and I will not stop liking it because it's fun, and it will not stop being fun, and I will not stop doing things I like, so I will NOT stop." If you're talking to that guy who tried to write something, yes, please do.
Suggestions: When he comes back to life or whatever, add unfamilar charaters like a villager person or a farmer people like that.
Maybe have him start a village?
Also add wolfs, they haven't got mentioned yet. oh and maybe ocelots.