Okay guys. Chapter II is coming up sometime somewhat soon. Thanks to those of you who are following this topic. If you like the story, it would be greatly appreciated if you gave me a +1. Thanks guys.
This is really good! I am an aspiring author myself, so take it from me. Very nicely written and well done, with a compelling storyline. The only criticism I have is that there are some grammar and spelling mistakes and the characters need to be a little more developed. 9.5/10!
Really? You think it's that good? Oh wow! Thanks man! I'll go back and check the grammar and spelling. Also, I'll try to develop the character a little more. Thanks again for the input.
I was going to rate it 1 to bug you.... But I was mentioned so I'm going to give it a two, Just to annoy you. :tongue.gif:I know a change. You should have aboba get stabbed repeatedly through the chest by Notch's evil twin (Oh thats herobrine) then I should start bleeding, fall onto a rock face, have my intestines fall out, the get strung off a plank from a mineshaft. (being hung by my own bloody intestine.)
Such a lovely and compelling story. i enjoy all literature. i am flattered that i am a character in your story. but can i use a bow as my preferred weapon instead of a sword. that is what i usually use anyhow.
Hmm... That's interesting. So you act all formal here, but then you just go and tell me when you see me at school? That reminds me of someone, but I'm not quite sure who...
You might eventually get to use a bow, but for my story, I'll have you using a sword, most, if not all of the time. Sorry tank.
The Entrappers
generation. Social experiment.
You might eventually get to use a bow, but for my story, I'll have you using a sword, most, if not all of the time. Sorry tank.
How did you think of the friendly creeper idea!?