I think it was okay, but to be perfectly honest it seems too rushed. You introduced about twenty characters right away and just launched us into the story. Rushing is always a mistake that a lot of rookie authors do (me included) but don't think that just because it isn't action packed right away that it won't get popular. Overall I thought it was pretty cool, but if you write another story I suggest introducing less characters at a time and go into more depth about...well, everything.
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So sing a lonely song/Of a deep blue dream/Seven horses seem to be on the mark/Yeah, don't you love her/Don't you love her as she's walkin' out the door.
@littlebunse57 my fingers were tired. I'm gonna fix it tomorrow k?
@theCthulhu ...what? a BOOK? why not ask redworthy to make HIS story into a book? mine is too short! thanks anyway :biggrin.gif:
can i has banner?
not good wit art
i would though
@vale1000100 Thanks :tongue.gif:
So sing a lonely song/Of a deep blue dream/Seven horses seem to be on the mark/Yeah, don't you love her/Don't you love her as she's walkin' out the door.
@theCthulhu ...what? a BOOK? why not ask redworthy to make HIS story into a book? mine is too short! thanks anyway :biggrin.gif:
Keep up the good work.
Can't wait until The Enderman
If I helped you in any way at all please tell me how awesome I am, add me, or if you can't be stuffed don't do anything.
This proves that no one will read my threads. I spent an hour on this!
http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/869073-notchs-diary-the-history-of-minecraft/
But this is stupid, I'm advertising.
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Good job.
Steve isn't his roommate, bro. :biggrin.gif:
!#@$ the sentence on top... Yeah gonna fix it thanks
Thanks for the positive comments.
Working on the story now...
Considering I spent much of my time thinking up and typing the newest chapter.
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After all the hard work I put in? D: