do you know how hard hands are? >.o you try it LLOL
Alright, alright. But still, they are weird. XD It's okay though! The rest of the body has been improved very much.
(I still expect that you find out how to draw hands. That would make your drawings perfect. Good luck!)
Okay, I'll cut you some slack. ;D
The 3rd and 4th girls had relatively good hands. (I just noticed that the fourth one has a REALLY skinny right arm.)
Yeah. The wrist does seem to make the biggest problem.
The fingers was probably because you put them in front of the hand which makes a pretty hard perspective to draw.
Cursed, my internet is being slow and then occasionally getting my hopes up by loading the page layout fast but not loading the whole thing. It's strange because I once had the whole page displayed very weirdly without the background. Other times it loads the background but cuts off part of the comments. >_<
lol i know what you mean it happens all the time and im like nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo cuz its annoying.
boy, im hungry o-o'' havnt eaten since this morning.two peaces of a peach 0-o
lol i know what you mean it happens all the time and im like nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo cuz its annoying.
boy, im hungry o-o'' havnt eaten since this morning.two peaces of a peach 0-o
Wut. Even I can't go through a day with just that, and I go by everyday with the least amount of food possible...or a bit more. I don't really like eating. If I could always have the nutrition I needed, that would be so awesome. Another thing that would be preferred with that is not losing weight. That would be freaky.
Edit: AH! Posting this was regular speed but when viewing it, it slowed again! D:<
Teresa slapped Mark? I cannot recall that event.
Oh wait. I do. She slapped the hand. Meh.
I like the coloring.
Edit: I watched the video. I think the hair brightening is more like, white, then color over with the color. I believe you just put white. I think.
BTW Chibi, that rp has started. You should go sumbit your bio.
Note: I'm elaborating more on the negatives, because all the positives have been reiterated several times already. And you learn more from negatives :wink.gif:
Finally read one of your stories.
Positives: Very well written, entertaining, and emotions are portrayed beautifully.
Now to the negatives. I can't help but feel that their love is unrealistically strong. They're a bit too obsessive, to the point where it's actually kinda scary and I have to worry about their mental health. If I'm coming off a bit too harsh, consider the fact that there's portion of the story they're happily killing people without any regard for the loss of life they're inflicting simply because the hearts in their eyes are so blinding. This would be alright if their reasons for loving each other weren't so....meh.
Here's why:
Mark's obsessive attraction stems from two superficial things:
-He's inexperienced, and she's the first one to show him attention, which makes him clingy
-She's uber-hawt; even the evil tower men seem to think so. Think about it. The story would be a billion times more meaningful if Teresa were super ugly
Teresa's obsessive attraction stems from:
-His relentless obsession for her
-He must be pretty hawt too, if miss home-wrecker is jumping on him at first glance.
These somewhat trivial reasons are masked by the one good overarching reason: they need each other for survival. Their love isn't completely misguided because surviving together made them trust each other fully. I give you points for that one. But even then, survival could do that to anyone.
The way they grow an attraction for eachother, the way that they can both skillfully beat everything up, and the way Mark is so shy gives this story a very familiar feeling. A feeling that this story is less of a story and more of a fantasy one would draw up when feeling lonely. All the elements are there.
It's got that almost nonsensical quality of irresistible companionship complete with a "hero saves the princess" kind of thing that makes it almost juvenile when considered as a story. The reason this isn't a failure is your ability to describe the emotion and feelings of the character. This is where you excel. One can only wish to have the same kind of relationship that is shared between Mark and Teresa.
What I'm trying to say is, this excels as a dreamy tale to fantasize about, but falls short as an actual story.
The way they grow an attraction for eachother, the way that they can both skillfully beat everything up, and the way Mark is so shy gives this story a very familiar feeling. A feeling that this story is less of a story and more of a fantasy one would draw up when feeling lonely. All the elements are there.
It's got that almost nonsensical quality of irresistible companionship complete with a "hero saves the princess" kind of thing that makes it almost juvenile when considered as a story. The reason this isn't a failure is your ability to describe the emotion and feelings of the character. This is where you excel. One can only wish to have the same kind of relationship that is shared between Mark and Teresa.
What I'm trying to say is, this excels as a dreamy tale to fantasize about, but falls short as an actual story.
Alright, you got me. I am a bit...anti-social/pessimistic.
Yes, this story does have a happy ending and yes, it is a fantasy. Very much so.
Yeah. It is dreamy. Horribly. I guess that's what happens when you think negatively but try to make a happy story. O_O
Um yeah. I did make them kill people. I probably should have thought of that. -Facepalm-
And yes, I may have not addressed the fact that they are obsessed with each other.
...Frostbite is seriously going to fail because of me. God dammit.
And...I'm just accepting your criticism. I should probably address each point but...a bit tired right now. Sorry.
...I'm sorta rambling. I'll just submit this post now.
Wazzup! Im Back, Just Read #3, and I just imagined how many people just got boners...... And i bet your one of them while you were writing it :3 Nah Im Kidding jesonomi, nice stuff man. Im gonna start writing my story a bit more, so watch for updates fool!
Boners from kissing and a guy's bulge. I don't even...what kind of person...I don't...what?
ANYWAY: I think I'll go back to romance after finishing up my current story.
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Retired StaffAlright, alright. But still, they are weird. XD It's okay though! The rest of the body has been improved very much.
(I still expect that you find out how to draw hands. That would make your drawings perfect. Good luck!)
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Retired StaffOkay, I'll cut you some slack. ;D
The 3rd and 4th girls had relatively good hands. (I just noticed that the fourth one has a REALLY skinny right arm.)
Yeah. The wrist does seem to make the biggest problem.
The fingers was probably because you put them in front of the hand which makes a pretty hard perspective to draw.
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Retired StaffLol.
Cursed, my internet is being slow and then occasionally getting my hopes up by loading the page layout fast but not loading the whole thing. It's strange because I once had the whole page displayed very weirdly without the background. Other times it loads the background but cuts off part of the comments. >_<
boy, im hungry o-o'' havnt eaten since this morning.two peaces of a peach 0-o
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Retired StaffWut. Even I can't go through a day with just that, and I go by everyday with the least amount of food possible...or a bit more. I don't really like eating. If I could always have the nutrition I needed, that would be so awesome. Another thing that would be preferred with that is not losing weight. That would be freaky.
Edit: AH! Posting this was regular speed but when viewing it, it slowed again! D:<
http://art3.server01.sheezyart.com/image/236/2361127.png heres another one
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Retired StaffThanks! :3
O_O It's good, but do you make all hair shine like that? O_O
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Retired StaffTeresa slapped Mark? I cannot recall that event.
Oh wait. I do. She slapped the hand. Meh.
I like the coloring.
Edit: I watched the video. I think the hair brightening is more like, white, then color over with the color. I believe you just put white. I think.
BTW Chibi, that rp has started. You should go sumbit your bio.
Finally read one of your stories.
Positives: Very well written, entertaining, and emotions are portrayed beautifully.
Now to the negatives. I can't help but feel that their love is unrealistically strong. They're a bit too obsessive, to the point where it's actually kinda scary and I have to worry about their mental health. If I'm coming off a bit too harsh, consider the fact that there's portion of the story they're happily killing people without any regard for the loss of life they're inflicting simply because the hearts in their eyes are so blinding. This would be alright if their reasons for loving each other weren't so....meh.
Here's why:
Mark's obsessive attraction stems from two superficial things:
-He's inexperienced, and she's the first one to show him attention, which makes him clingy
-She's uber-hawt; even the evil tower men seem to think so. Think about it. The story would be a billion times more meaningful if Teresa were super ugly
Teresa's obsessive attraction stems from:
-His relentless obsession for her
-He must be pretty hawt too, if miss home-wrecker is jumping on him at first glance.
These somewhat trivial reasons are masked by the one good overarching reason: they need each other for survival. Their love isn't completely misguided because surviving together made them trust each other fully. I give you points for that one. But even then, survival could do that to anyone.
The way they grow an attraction for eachother, the way that they can both skillfully beat everything up, and the way Mark is so shy gives this story a very familiar feeling. A feeling that this story is less of a story and more of a fantasy one would draw up when feeling lonely. All the elements are there.
It's got that almost nonsensical quality of irresistible companionship complete with a "hero saves the princess" kind of thing that makes it almost juvenile when considered as a story. The reason this isn't a failure is your ability to describe the emotion and feelings of the character. This is where you excel. One can only wish to have the same kind of relationship that is shared between Mark and Teresa.
What I'm trying to say is, this excels as a dreamy tale to fantasize about, but falls short as an actual story.
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Retired StaffAlright, you got me. I am a bit...anti-social/pessimistic.
Yes, this story does have a happy ending and yes, it is a fantasy. Very much so.
Yeah. It is dreamy. Horribly. I guess that's what happens when you think negatively but try to make a happy story. O_O
Um yeah. I did make them kill people. I probably should have thought of that. -Facepalm-
And yes, I may have not addressed the fact that they are obsessed with each other.
...Frostbite is seriously going to fail because of me. God dammit.
And...I'm just accepting your criticism. I should probably address each point but...a bit tired right now. Sorry.
...I'm sorta rambling. I'll just submit this post now.
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Retired Staff...Is O_O bad? I honestly cannot say that I planned it. In one try. And the stop thing would mean that you don't care about life.
Anyway, thanks.
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Retired StaffANYWAY: I think I'll go back to romance after finishing up my current story.