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Very awesome! Can't wait to see more of this :smile.gif:.

Just got done reading up to current chapter and I have to say this a very good story.
Keep it coming.

Oh, haha. I fail :tongue.gif:

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I just read it. Your technique is very nice. The only major thing that detracted from the experience (aside from typos) was your dialogue placement. Dialogue is generally made into its own paragraph for each change of speaker. Sometimes, you had Elder talk in one of Charle's paragraph, and didn't tag it. I was confused until I read a bit further.

Hmmm, alright, I'll do that. Something seemed odd to me as well, I think that is it. But I recall some books having entire conversations in single paragraphs; what I had always done is make a paragraph when it changes topics.

Anyone else have a viewpoint?

Quote from Epicphail »

I just read it. Your technique is very nice. The only major thing that detracted from the experience (aside from typos) was your dialogue placement. Dialogue is generally made into its own paragraph for each change of speaker. Sometimes, you had Elder talk in one of Charle's paragraph, and didn't tag it. I was confused until I read a bit further.

I did not have this at all 0-0

Hmmmmm...

Would anyone be interested if I started a RPG?

As in, this RPG: (I am currently running it atm, I can do two at once no problem.)
http://forums.wesnoth.org/viewtopic.php ... 35951cc813

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Quote from Epicphail »

I just read it. Your technique is very nice. The only major thing that detracted from the experience (aside from typos) was your dialogue placement. Dialogue is generally made into its own paragraph for each change of speaker. Sometimes, you had Elder talk in one of Charle's paragraph, and didn't tag it. I was confused until I read a bit further.

I did not have this at all 0-0

You weren't confused by

"I... I have come to ask to live within Providence, and wish to do my best to aid your people, Elder." I said. "And how can you do this? If you remember, I exploded upon my attempt to talk to you before. How are you able to speak with me now?"

"With this." I said, taking the diamond from my belt. He looked at the glowing gemstone for a second, and seemed to be captivated by it's internal lights.

?

Bold text is Elder's sentence. I thought Charle was saying it.

And we had Roll to Dodge on this forum before. None of them ever got far though. Maybe you could make one that lasts.

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Hmmmmm...

Would anyone be interested if I started a RPG?

As in, this RPG: (I am currently running it atm, I can do two at once no problem.)
http://forums.wesnoth.org/viewtopic.php ... 35951cc813

I subbed for the one on wesnoth,
but please make one here.
If you do. Count me in. NOW =3

viewtopic.php?f=30&t=85003

There we are. Let's have some fun.

>=3

viewtopic.php?f=30&t=85003&p=1328141#p1328141

JOIN!
LOVELY GAME:
Play actively or don't play,
requires daily replies.

Heh, I don't think people would listen on this thread, especially since I posted the same link one post above you. >.<

Maybe because a lot of people get the email of a new message?
Well, It was worth a shot.
But after 3 hours kick them out please. Add illy (_illusionist)
Not sure if he would be active but I'll tell him (:

New chapter by week's end. =)

Awesome!
Love your stories!

*Gasp* Your incorporating the Empire into the story! :smile.gif: Does this mean that some of us players may make an appearance? The thought of my Merchant Neil appearing gives me the jitters. The good kind. I now really want to sell something to Charle. Badly.

Also, great new chapters. Liking em!

Good luck on the writin'.

Oh Nuuuu, RL issues...

Postponed till Wednesday at latest. =(

Im still happy about being the FIRST Minecrafter to show into the story. This means I am superior to all of you , now make me an Obsidian Pyramid 500x500 blocks wide. I would also Like the sides to be of pure diamond , you work 72 hours a week on minimum wage. Any questions?

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Im still happy about being the FIRST Minecrafter to show into the story. This means I am superior to all of you , now make me an Obsidian Pyramid 500x500 blocks wide. I would also Like the sides to be of pure diamond , you work 72 hours a week on minimum wage. Any questions?

Will we get cake?

On-topic:
I really enjoy your story, keep up the good work!

Quote from Sheip »

This means I am superior to all of you , now make me an Obsidian Pyramid 500x500 blocks wide. I would also Like the sides to be of pure diamond , you work 72 hours a week on minimum wage. Any questions?

If you are going to be egotistical, I will change the name. I don't take such things lightly, even as a joke.

I
Still
Love
This
Book
Keep
Writing
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