Hello there, this is my second novel, my first one was unfinished because people didn't like it much. Please leave feedback, and constructive criticism helps. Also, I got inspired to write this from something that happened in real life. That does not mean this is what happened.
BOOK 1
Realization of Steve
Chapter 1
After I finished breakfast I got my bag, and went off to school. Social Studies, Science, Math, Physical Education... All of it sucked, until I got to my extra class. It was a simple class where we just goofed off and did whatever. There were about 10 kids in the class total. I'm in 10th grade, so a small class was never to be seen. But in that class, let me tell you, was a girl, who I liked a lot. We were friends, I guess. We'd talk to each other, make jokes, laugh... I always look forward to that class. Everyone else in the class hated me, though. I lived alone, so socialization was never to be seen. I guess you could say I was "in love" with this girl, which I absolutely was. But the feeling wasn't mutual. I found that out the hard way...
Chapter 2
I was sitting in class on a rainy day, talking with the other kids about random stuff that didn't make any sense.
"Steve is gay, haha!" Said a kid that sat in front of me. I learn to ignore stuff like that. Suddenly, Julia, (A girl that I was planning on asking out.) said "L.O.L Steve is a faggot!" After I bought her a gift a few weeks back.
I just sat there silently, until everyone in the class started insulting me for no reason, the teacher is like mentally confused so he didn't do anything about it. I got angry, I started shouting. Me and Julia got in a giant argument about some nonsense. We were really good friends until then, and for some reason I knew she wasn't joking.
The bell rang and I ran to my next class, the last class of the day. One of my really good friends, Joshua was in that class. He sat near me. I brushed off the argument with Julia as if it were nothing.
After school, I went home as normal. Made some soup for dinner, played some video games, and went to sleep. The same thing repeated for the next few days. I figured it was enough. But sadly, there was nothing I could do about it. I got home from school, did the usual, and went to sleep.
Chapter 3
"What?" I said as I woke up, I wasn't at home... I sat up and looked around. Julia was pacing back and forth a few meters away from me. "What's going on?" I said as I stood up. I was sleeping on the ground.
"I thought the same thing," She replied. "I just woke up over here and freaked out."
"What do you mean?"
She didn't respond. I decided to look around a bit. After walking around for a short time, I saw Joshua sleeping on his face. "Wake up!" I shouted at him.
"AAAAAHHH! MONSTER!" He screamed.
"Calm down, it's just me!"
He stood up, "Where are we?" He sounded confused.
"I'm wondering the same thing."
Julia came walking up to us. "I think we've been kidnapped."
"Don't be silly, there's nobody else around except us three." I said to her.
"What do we do?" Joshua said.
"I've played a game like this... It was called Minecraft. We need to get wood from trees."
Julia sighed "Don't be talking about Minecraft again, you talk about it all the time."
I walked up to a tree and punched it with my fist "OW!" The wood shrinked. I picked it up and put it into my pocket. Joshua and Julia looked dumbfounded. "How did you do that?" They both said in unison.
"Magic." I smiled. A creeper started walking towards me. I punched it in the face. "Ssssssss"
"BACK UP!" I shouted at the others as I pushed them away. I jumped to the ground. BOOOM! The creeper exploded, launching green dust everywhere. "Bless you." I said right when Julia sneezed.
I made a crafting table, and 3 wooden swords. "Take these, you'll need them..."
Chapter 4
"Hyaa!" I shouted, my sword slashing into the rotten flesh of a zombie. We were in our newly made mine shaft.
"Over here!" Joshua shouted. I walked over to him and to my surprise, I saw a big chunk of diamonds. They were the shiniest and clearest diamonds I've ever seen, "Mine them!" Julia was excited. We walked further down the cavern. After walking for some time, we came upon an underground warehouse... I thought we were the only people in this forsaken world. "Woah," I said in awe.
"What are we waiting for?!" Joshua ran in. "Hellooo,"
"Calm down, bro!" I told him.
"Hello!? Anyone here?"
"Shut up!"
He looked at me. "Oh, right."
I turned to my left to see Julia sitting against a wall looking exhausted as ever. "Let's go in. Get up." I said to her.
"Shut up, I'll do what I want." She replied.
I sighed, "All three of us were somehow spawned on this island of sorts, we either have to work together, or leave each other for dead. You can pick. Lets go, Joshua." Me and Joshua walked into the warehouse silently.
"Wait up!" Julia came running behind us.
"That's what I thought." I mumbled under my breath.
As we walked in, it smelled of vomit and old socks. (I wasn't exaggerating.) "It reeks in here!" I said to the others.
"Oh jeez, I smell it too." Joshua replied.
"Yuck!" Julia also said, quite slowly.
We walked further in, it was like an underground base. The furnace looked as if it was used recently.
"What is this place?" Joshua said.
"I have no idea." I was confused at the idea that there were other people here. Julia just followed quietly.
An elderly man came out of a room with a sword in his hand, "I will kill you creepers!" He charged at us.
We screamed, "AAHHHH!!!"
He came to a stop. "You guys aren't creepers! What's going on?"
All three of us were out of breath, "Who. Are. You?" Joshua looked the most out of breath.
"Oh me? My name is Old Man Jones, you can call me Jones. What are you kids doing here?" The old guy said.
I replied, still out of breath, "I'm Steve. This is Joshua, and this is Julia-"
"I can introduce myself! Thank you very much!" Julia interrupted "I am Julia."
"Nice to meet you, Julia." Jones said.
I chimed in, "I thought us three were the only people here."
"I thought that too, until one day when I was exploring, I came across a town. It was called Archaelot. Turns out, this is like another world. I was spawned here about 21 years ago. I was 40. My family... My wife, 2 children, all my friends... I left behind when I got here. There was no way back. In fact, this has been happening a lot lately. A lot of kids have been spawning here. We don't know how, or why. Some people have been trying to research what has been going on... But we're still looking for an answer."
"Wow, 21 years." Julia said.
I walked around the room, "So you're sure there's no way out?"
"Not that we know of." Jones replied. He checked his watch. "Wow, it's night time already. Do you guys want to stay here for the night?"
"Sure." We all said together.
Chapter 5
As we were walking down a gravel path, at the edge of the horizon I saw a city. It was huge! There was a big gate at the entrance and a wall surrounding it.
"Wow!" I said under my breath as we walked in.
It was amazing, there were cathedrals, skyscrapers, statues, arenas. Near the entrance of the city there was a town hall, it was a gleaming white color. Near the side of it there was what looked like a shop, but i can't be sure. As we walked further into the city, the buildings got bigger and bigger.
"Over there is the PvP arena, it's where we would train for wars. It's quite dangerous but we have doctors there during training hours in case something goes wrong." Jones said, pointing to a huge colosseum. "And over here is the residential area." He pointed to a divine looking area with identical houses lined up in rows. Next to it was a big oval sized pool. "Over here is the city pool." Boy was the water clear!
"Oh my god I really want to jump into the pool right now." I said, sort of speaking for all of us, because we were all staring at it. There were fountains all around it. (No not the weird peeing ones.)
"Go ahead, you can only go in if you are a resident, or were invited by one. I'm a resident here, that warehouse you saw was my hidden base. It's where I do experiments."
"Sweet" Joshua said, running to the pool. Julia walked slowly to it, acting as if she didn't care, but I knew she did. Her eyes glowed as she looked at it as if she really wanted to get in.
"CANNONBALL!" Joshua screamed, jumping into the pool, splashing water everywhere. I thought I might aswell go for a swim. I ran to the pool and dived in. The water was cold and refreshing. I felt like I was in a paradise, the water felt so good. I never wanted to get out. All of a sudden I felt weird, as if I were hypnotized . I was having a flashback.
In the flashback, I was at school.
"Oh my god, Steve!" It was Julia. "Thank you so much!" she said.
"It was my pleasure." I replied. I had gotten her a gift for her birthday. The way she looked happy made me happy.
"Why did you get this for me?"
"I saw it in the store. I knew your birthday was coming up so I got it for you. I hope you like it."
"I love it!" She said excitedly. It was a shirt that I got her, an expensive one at that. I got it because i knew she would be happy. I never knew a week later she would hate my guts.
I felt amazing, just as amazing as I feel right now in the pool.
"Steve!" Julia shouted at me. I was back in the pool. "Why are you crying?"
I felt my face. "Oh, I wasn't crying, I had water in my eye." Phew! "Nice save." I thought to myself. We got out of the pool and dried off.
"It's getting dark, and you kids look cold," Jones walked up to us. "Why don't you three come to my house for some soup."
"Sure, I guess." I said as I dried off my dark brown hair.
Chapter 6
As we walked into the house, the fresh aroma of mushrooms rushed into my nostrils.
"Hello Anne." Jones said.
Anne was in the kitchen making something, whatever it was, it smelt amazing. Anne looked like the kind of woman you would see in a lush garden taking care of the flowers. She looked to be in her early twenties, with hazel colored hair and green glowing eyes.
"There you are!" She said, her voice was sweet, like maple.
"What is that smell?" Joshua said, "It smells delicious in here!" He walked towards Anne and sniffed the fresh steam rising from the pot.
"Mushroom stew." Anne said. Her voice was soft.
"YES! I'm starving!" I ran up to the pot with Joshua. Julia just stood next to Jones, unamused. "Come over here, Julia."
She stood there, sighed, and started walking towards us, silently. Anne got out some bowls and poured the stew. "Come on kids, sit down." She said, gently placing the bowls onto the table. I slowly sipped the soup. It tasted delicious. I fell asleep... I think. I was having another flashback.
I was sitting in class. "Steve is a FAG!" One of the kids said. I think his name was Michael. "Haha, Steve sucks!" Another kid said.
"Guys Shut up! What did Steve ever do to you?" It was Julia
"Hah, shut up, Julia! Stop standing up for the gay boy."
I looked towards Michael. "I'm not gay." I would've made up some clever comeback, but I wasn't in the mood. That night I remember staying up until 4 that night...
"Nice comeback." Michael said.
"Michael, stop it!"
I was staring down at my soup.
"Are you going to eat that?" Joshua said. I smirked.
I ate another spoonful. "So what brings you kids here?" Anne came up to us with her own bowl of stew.
Joshua replied, his mouth full of stew, "We came here from earth. For some reason all three of us woke up here."
Anne looked surprised. "That's the same way I got here. I've been here for a little over 4 months. Jones found this little city here, and I let him live with me. It all happened after I got fired from my job. I was evicted shortly after. I had to move in with my parents, but they died in a car crash a little bit after I moved in with them. I was by myself. One night I just went to sleep, and woke up in a field next to a cow. I found this city, and now I live here."
Julia almost fell asleep. She wasn't always this obnoxious, she was normally really happy and outgoing. Now since she's stuck in this place with me and Joshua, she looked depressed. I finished my stew and we were on our way. Me, Joshua, Julia, and Jones. He said something about this really cool cave that we needed to check out.
This is AMAZING you should make more!You could turn it into a animation or something when it's finished,make sure you don't stop as that would be disappointing.Can't wait to see the finished story. :wink.gif: :biggrin.gif:
This is pretty good. you definitely have a talent for writing but you seem to graze over details and use few descriptive words but all in all that actually seems to be what helps this story. Good job. Just remember though that not everyone shares your thoughts and if you don't give a some descriptions on how Steve comes to some of his decisions or a description on how the other characters looks other then "old" or "short" it may turn some away.
I like the idea so far. I can't wait to see where you take this.
This is pretty good. you definitely have a talent for writing but you seem to graze over details and use few descriptive words but all in all that actually seems to be what helps this story. Good job. Just remember though that not everyone shares your thoughts and if you don't give a some descriptions on how Steve comes to some of his decisions or a description on how the other characters looks other then "old" or "short" it may turn some away.
I like the idea so far. I can't wait to see where you take this.
That's all part of my plan to thicken the story a bit, all the main characters have a sense of mystery which will be unraveled as the story goes on, think of this as a summary to the long and tiresome adventure to come. :biggrin.gif:
Also, I'm so sorry guys, my laptop broke and I've been trying to repair it. I'm on my back-up computer right now, the hard drive failed in my laptop, I tried to erase the memory off of it, but I'm just purchasing another hard drive and it's on it's way. I'll make up for all of the chapters I missed tonight and tomorrow. :smile.gif:
Fixed my computer a few days ago, sorry for not updating. There's this big test that I've been studying for, it determines whether I go on to 9th grade or not.
I would love to see more this is a very good story.
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After I finished breakfast I got my bag, and went off to school. Social Studies, Science, Math, Physical Education... All of it sucked, until I got to my extra class. It was a simple class where we just goofed off and did whatever. There were about 10 kids in the class total. I'm in 10th grade, so a small class was never to be seen. But in that class, let me tell you, was a girl, who I liked a lot. We were friends, I guess. We'd talk to each other, make jokes, laugh... I always look forward to that class. Everyone else in the class hated me, though. I lived alone, so socialization was never to be seen. I guess you could say I was "in love" with this girl, which I absolutely was. But the feeling wasn't mutual. I found that out the hard way...
I was sitting in class on a rainy day, talking with the other kids about random stuff that didn't make any sense.
"Steve is gay, haha!" Said a kid that sat in front of me. I learn to ignore stuff like that. Suddenly, Julia, (A girl that I was planning on asking out.) said "L.O.L Steve is a faggot!" After I bought her a gift a few weeks back.
I just sat there silently, until everyone in the class started insulting me for no reason, the teacher is like mentally confused so he didn't do anything about it. I got angry, I started shouting. Me and Julia got in a giant argument about some nonsense. We were really good friends until then, and for some reason I knew she wasn't joking.
The bell rang and I ran to my next class, the last class of the day. One of my really good friends, Joshua was in that class. He sat near me. I brushed off the argument with Julia as if it were nothing.
After school, I went home as normal. Made some soup for dinner, played some video games, and went to sleep. The same thing repeated for the next few days. I figured it was enough. But sadly, there was nothing I could do about it. I got home from school, did the usual, and went to sleep.
"What?" I said as I woke up, I wasn't at home... I sat up and looked around. Julia was pacing back and forth a few meters away from me. "What's going on?" I said as I stood up. I was sleeping on the ground.
"I thought the same thing," She replied. "I just woke up over here and freaked out."
"What do you mean?"
She didn't respond. I decided to look around a bit. After walking around for a short time, I saw Joshua sleeping on his face. "Wake up!" I shouted at him.
"AAAAAHHH! MONSTER!" He screamed.
"Calm down, it's just me!"
He stood up, "Where are we?" He sounded confused.
"I'm wondering the same thing."
Julia came walking up to us. "I think we've been kidnapped."
"Don't be silly, there's nobody else around except us three." I said to her.
"What do we do?" Joshua said.
"I've played a game like this... It was called Minecraft. We need to get wood from trees."
Julia sighed "Don't be talking about Minecraft again, you talk about it all the time."
I walked up to a tree and punched it with my fist "OW!" The wood shrinked. I picked it up and put it into my pocket. Joshua and Julia looked dumbfounded. "How did you do that?" They both said in unison.
"Magic." I smiled. A creeper started walking towards me. I punched it in the face. "Ssssssss"
"BACK UP!" I shouted at the others as I pushed them away. I jumped to the ground. BOOOM! The creeper exploded, launching green dust everywhere. "Bless you." I said right when Julia sneezed.
I made a crafting table, and 3 wooden swords. "Take these, you'll need them..."
"Hyaa!" I shouted, my sword slashing into the rotten flesh of a zombie. We were in our newly made mine shaft.
"Over here!" Joshua shouted. I walked over to him and to my surprise, I saw a big chunk of diamonds. They were the shiniest and clearest diamonds I've ever seen, "Mine them!" Julia was excited. We walked further down the cavern. After walking for some time, we came upon an underground warehouse... I thought we were the only people in this forsaken world. "Woah," I said in awe.
"What are we waiting for?!" Joshua ran in. "Hellooo,"
"Calm down, bro!" I told him.
"Hello!? Anyone here?"
"Shut up!"
He looked at me. "Oh, right."
I turned to my left to see Julia sitting against a wall looking exhausted as ever. "Let's go in. Get up." I said to her.
"Shut up, I'll do what I want." She replied.
I sighed, "All three of us were somehow spawned on this island of sorts, we either have to work together, or leave each other for dead. You can pick. Lets go, Joshua." Me and Joshua walked into the warehouse silently.
"Wait up!" Julia came running behind us.
"That's what I thought." I mumbled under my breath.
As we walked in, it smelled of vomit and old socks. (I wasn't exaggerating.) "It reeks in here!" I said to the others.
"Oh jeez, I smell it too." Joshua replied.
"Yuck!" Julia also said, quite slowly.
We walked further in, it was like an underground base. The furnace looked as if it was used recently.
"What is this place?" Joshua said.
"I have no idea." I was confused at the idea that there were other people here. Julia just followed quietly.
An elderly man came out of a room with a sword in his hand, "I will kill you creepers!" He charged at us.
We screamed, "AAHHHH!!!"
He came to a stop. "You guys aren't creepers! What's going on?"
All three of us were out of breath, "Who. Are. You?" Joshua looked the most out of breath.
"Oh me? My name is Old Man Jones, you can call me Jones. What are you kids doing here?" The old guy said.
I replied, still out of breath, "I'm Steve. This is Joshua, and this is Julia-"
"I can introduce myself! Thank you very much!" Julia interrupted "I am Julia."
"Nice to meet you, Julia." Jones said.
I chimed in, "I thought us three were the only people here."
"I thought that too, until one day when I was exploring, I came across a town. It was called Archaelot. Turns out, this is like another world. I was spawned here about 21 years ago. I was 40. My family... My wife, 2 children, all my friends... I left behind when I got here. There was no way back. In fact, this has been happening a lot lately. A lot of kids have been spawning here. We don't know how, or why. Some people have been trying to research what has been going on... But we're still looking for an answer."
"Wow, 21 years." Julia said.
I walked around the room, "So you're sure there's no way out?"
"Not that we know of." Jones replied. He checked his watch. "Wow, it's night time already. Do you guys want to stay here for the night?"
"Sure." We all said together.
As we were walking down a gravel path, at the edge of the horizon I saw a city. It was huge! There was a big gate at the entrance and a wall surrounding it.
"Wow!" I said under my breath as we walked in.
It was amazing, there were cathedrals, skyscrapers, statues, arenas. Near the entrance of the city there was a town hall, it was a gleaming white color. Near the side of it there was what looked like a shop, but i can't be sure. As we walked further into the city, the buildings got bigger and bigger.
"Over there is the PvP arena, it's where we would train for wars. It's quite dangerous but we have doctors there during training hours in case something goes wrong." Jones said, pointing to a huge colosseum. "And over here is the residential area." He pointed to a divine looking area with identical houses lined up in rows. Next to it was a big oval sized pool. "Over here is the city pool." Boy was the water clear!
"Oh my god I really want to jump into the pool right now." I said, sort of speaking for all of us, because we were all staring at it. There were fountains all around it. (No not the weird peeing ones.)
"Go ahead, you can only go in if you are a resident, or were invited by one. I'm a resident here, that warehouse you saw was my hidden base. It's where I do experiments."
"Sweet" Joshua said, running to the pool. Julia walked slowly to it, acting as if she didn't care, but I knew she did. Her eyes glowed as she looked at it as if she really wanted to get in.
"CANNONBALL!" Joshua screamed, jumping into the pool, splashing water everywhere. I thought I might aswell go for a swim. I ran to the pool and dived in. The water was cold and refreshing. I felt like I was in a paradise, the water felt so good. I never wanted to get out. All of a sudden I felt weird, as if I were hypnotized . I was having a flashback.
In the flashback, I was at school.
"Oh my god, Steve!" It was Julia. "Thank you so much!" she said.
"It was my pleasure." I replied. I had gotten her a gift for her birthday. The way she looked happy made me happy.
"Why did you get this for me?"
"I saw it in the store. I knew your birthday was coming up so I got it for you. I hope you like it."
"I love it!" She said excitedly. It was a shirt that I got her, an expensive one at that. I got it because i knew she would be happy. I never knew a week later she would hate my guts.
I felt amazing, just as amazing as I feel right now in the pool.
"Steve!" Julia shouted at me. I was back in the pool. "Why are you crying?"
I felt my face. "Oh, I wasn't crying, I had water in my eye." Phew! "Nice save." I thought to myself. We got out of the pool and dried off.
"It's getting dark, and you kids look cold," Jones walked up to us. "Why don't you three come to my house for some soup."
"Sure, I guess." I said as I dried off my dark brown hair.
As we walked into the house, the fresh aroma of mushrooms rushed into my nostrils.
"Hello Anne." Jones said.
Anne was in the kitchen making something, whatever it was, it smelt amazing. Anne looked like the kind of woman you would see in a lush garden taking care of the flowers. She looked to be in her early twenties, with hazel colored hair and green glowing eyes.
"There you are!" She said, her voice was sweet, like maple.
"What is that smell?" Joshua said, "It smells delicious in here!" He walked towards Anne and sniffed the fresh steam rising from the pot.
"Mushroom stew." Anne said. Her voice was soft.
"YES! I'm starving!" I ran up to the pot with Joshua. Julia just stood next to Jones, unamused. "Come over here, Julia."
She stood there, sighed, and started walking towards us, silently. Anne got out some bowls and poured the stew. "Come on kids, sit down." She said, gently placing the bowls onto the table. I slowly sipped the soup. It tasted delicious. I fell asleep... I think. I was having another flashback.
I was sitting in class. "Steve is a FAG!" One of the kids said. I think his name was Michael. "Haha, Steve sucks!" Another kid said.
"Guys Shut up! What did Steve ever do to you?" It was Julia
"Hah, shut up, Julia! Stop standing up for the gay boy."
I looked towards Michael. "I'm not gay." I would've made up some clever comeback, but I wasn't in the mood. That night I remember staying up until 4 that night...
"Nice comeback." Michael said.
"Michael, stop it!"
I was staring down at my soup.
"Are you going to eat that?" Joshua said. I smirked.
I ate another spoonful. "So what brings you kids here?" Anne came up to us with her own bowl of stew.
Joshua replied, his mouth full of stew, "We came here from earth. For some reason all three of us woke up here."
Anne looked surprised. "That's the same way I got here. I've been here for a little over 4 months. Jones found this little city here, and I let him live with me. It all happened after I got fired from my job. I was evicted shortly after. I had to move in with my parents, but they died in a car crash a little bit after I moved in with them. I was by myself. One night I just went to sleep, and woke up in a field next to a cow. I found this city, and now I live here."
Julia almost fell asleep. She wasn't always this obnoxious, she was normally really happy and outgoing. Now since she's stuck in this place with me and Joshua, she looked depressed. I finished my stew and we were on our way. Me, Joshua, Julia, and Jones. He said something about this really cool cave that we needed to check out.
Writing chapter 5 now. :smile.gif:
I like the idea so far. I can't wait to see where you take this.
That's all part of my plan to thicken the story a bit, all the main characters have a sense of mystery which will be unraveled as the story goes on, think of this as a summary to the long and tiresome adventure to come. :biggrin.gif:
Also, I'm so sorry guys, my laptop broke and I've been trying to repair it. I'm on my back-up computer right now, the hard drive failed in my laptop, I tried to erase the memory off of it, but I'm just purchasing another hard drive and it's on it's way. I'll make up for all of the chapters I missed tonight and tomorrow. :smile.gif:
Keep up the good work.