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Hello my name is Notch. I have a brothee named Hero. Hero and I live together in a small home. "Notch what are you doing?" Hero asked. "Im working on a game." i replied. I knew what he was thinking, 'Another game? Great, great' "You know i will finish this one." i said. "We will see." he said. I scowled. 'He never thinks that i will finish it...' i muttered. "So, whats the game called?" he asked. "Do you really want to know?" i asked. He nodded. "Minecraft." i said. he chuckled. "whats so funny?" i asked. "Oh nothinf. The name just sounds funny." he said. "the title is exactly what it sounds loke. You craft, you mine, and you build." i told him. "well good luck on your 'minecraft' game." he said as he walked to his bed. I cursed under my breath. I went back to programming. i didnt sleep for 3 days straight. "why dont you quit making that game and get some sleep?" Hero asked. "I cant, im on the most important part." I told him. "and what is that?" he asked. "The whole worlds and the portals." i said. "of course. just dont work too much." he said. "ill try." i said sighing. That night I fell asleep at my desk. a small voice echoed in my head. "heh heh..." it chuckled. "iNotch... heh. heh... i will curse you.. your gamr is taking overg your life... you want ir finisher so? i will finish it... and i will curse you and your brother in to the world of your game!!!" it screamed. "Notch!!!" hero screamed. "What?!" i screamed. "What in the name of sanity is that?!" he asked pointing to a purple square.I gaped. I touched th e outerline of the portal. "It- its just like the portal in my game!!" i said. "So your game did this?!" he asked. then i remembered my dream, and the voice. "no." i said, "i had a dream. a dream of a voice. It said it would curse me." i said. "But i never thought that it would really!" i said. Hero stuck his hand through the portal. It sucked him in. "Hero!" i screamed. I jumped through the portal. I fell through a giant void. As i was falling i saw mirrors of different dimensions. I looked down. Through the giant mirror was the world of my game.'Im going to crash!' i thought. I. crashed right through the mirror. I opened my eyes. I was falling high in the sky. Next to to me falling was Hero. His arms were crossed. He was unconsious. My eyes suddenly closed. But then opened just as i was about to hit the ground. "Holy ****!!!" I yelled. There was a small river next to the ground. I grabbed Heros hand and tried to swing towards the water. Luckily we landed in the water. I pulled Hero out of the water on to shore. He sat up. "Looks like we are going to need to be more careful than usual." he said. I nodded.
TO BE CONTINUED!!!
-Dark Angel (a.k.a Moon Stone)

pretty good story so far. Heck this story could explain the herobrine creepypasta. My only criticism is the grammar, you should re-check it to make sure it's correct. Other than that I say that you should continue this it may turn into something good.

Off-Topic: would you mind checking out my story and giving it some feedback, i could use some more viewers and more feedback. link is in my sig

Meh. Generic-esque, and badly written. The idea can sometimes carry a story when writing fails, but this is lacklustre is both components.

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Meh. Generic-esque, and badly written. The idea can sometimes carry a story when writing fails, but this is lacklustre is both components.

Wow... I knew from the freaking START this story would fail EPICLY... so now I'm going to rewrite it. I already started, so TIME TO FINISH >:biggrin.gif:

Quote from Dark-Angel

Wow... I knew from the freaking START this story would fail EPICLY... so now I'm going to rewrite it. I already started, so TIME TO FINISH >:biggrin.gif:

I'll be working on this more and fixing it soon, I've been really busy lately..

Oh my ****ing god



This is so awful



Someone please burn it