A lot is going on in the world of Anerian Chronicles right now. We've ended our first main story arc, we've retaken the Capital City in an epic PvE event and now we have a contest of sorts for all of you builder types out there to show off what you can do. Just submit your app, get approved and you can jump right in!
Um hey guys sorry I haven't been on, but I've been working on lots of stuff like MC maps and things.
I hope I'm still whitelisted and you haven't forgotten about me. If so I'll try and be on soon and
be on for a while to get the hang of things on the server. Also if there's anyhting new that I have
to fill out I will. I'm so sorry it's taken me this long to play, but as I said I was working on some MC
maps. (I need a break from that stupid, annoying s#it!) I hope to be on soon I can't wait to see the
server and don't worry I'm bringing my skin!
Shawn Hallert shall be known to all of the islands and soon
even Aneria herself will know of his greatness!
Um hey guys sorry I haven't been on, but I've been working on lots of stuff like MC maps and things.
I hope I'm still whitelisted and you haven't forgotten about me. If so I'll try and be on soon and
be on for a while to get the hang of things on the server. Also if there's anyhting new that I have
to fill out I will. I'm so sorry it's taken me this long to play, but as I said I was working on some MC
maps. (I need a break from that stupid, annoying s#it!) I hope to be on soon I can't wait to see the
server and don't worry I'm bringing my skin!
Shawn Hallert shall be known to all of the islands and soon
even Aneria herself will know of his greatness!
Ah I remember you! Well I'll need the link of your app so I can see your username so I can whitelist you when you want me to.
You won't have to fill out anything but just send me a link of your app and I'll check it out.
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When I play Minecraft, it feels like a game... You dont say?
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): ias25_silver
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing another player into roleplay without giving them a time to think of a response. Like stabbed in head instead of slashed at head.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using out of game knowledge when playing as you character. Ie: making a potion when your character hasn’t been taught that.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Is when a person takes on the persona of a fictual or sometimes real person as if they WERE that person.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: no one
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: Only when after your RP battle they let themselves die and you claim victory and PvP is only allowed if the other agrees to it first.
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: When using parentheses or in private chat
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?:
Who is allowed to use magic?: mages
Who are the Fallen?:an old superstitious people, who prefer a peaceful way to settle a dispute rather than a violent one. They pass information down orally; this is how they keep their community together. They also live a simple life. They have a slightly higher aptitude for magic the a human. They have lived for years in seclusion.
When and how did our current government come to be?: Following the defeat of the old Linyera Monarchy in 167 A.R.(after rising) the Chancellort came to power in 169 A.R.
Who are the Order of Aradin?: Created in 37 A.R. (after rising), they are the protectors of the islands.
What are the Net and Essence? The Net catches fools who fall off the islands but takes all of there mundane items unless they have enough essence to spare their items. Essence(XP) is the less versatile but still useful version of the First Plane’s mana. It is still however need for the normal function of the plane.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: none, but I like acting IRL
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: None
Character Information
Name: Cyril “The Blood” (No Last Name)
Age:17
Class:ranger (possible paladin or alchemist)
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Chancellory
Physical description: (Human) Not very tall, but well-built and strong, white hair and blue eyes.
Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): At the age of 5 I (Cyril) orphaned. My village was attacked and my mother was told me to run. I ran far away but just enough so that I could watch what occurred. The force that attacked my village burned it to a crisp, leaving corpses everywhere. As I slowly walked back at night fall I went to see my house. When I reached my house all I could see were ashes and foot-prints. I broke into tears at the thought of what happened. And at that moment I vowed revenge for the attack and death of my beloved village. I didn’t even know if my widowed mother had survived. I began to slowly walk about the town and found the corpse of my best friend, Christopher. The monsters had killed my best friend, my “big brother”, he was the one who showed me how to enjoy life and now he was gone. At this thought I threw up at the site of his face. Where had once been a happy face was now multiple tears and wedges of bloodied face, in his hand was his old hunting knife with the blade broken. Whatever had attacked my village had been gruesome and had left none. I went to the outskirts of town to find the armory which hadn’t been touched by flames. But sadly it had been pillaged no weapons or armor remained. As I slowly walked back to my burnt house it began to snow as I took shelter in the rubble of my house I saw a small latch in the floor right next to the burnt staircase. As I opened the door a small rat crawled out on his fat belly and when I looked inside I saw in a bigger cut out area under the floor a longbow, 10 arrows, and a note. The note would be what shaped my life forever. It said, “Son, if you’re reading this it means you found my hatch. In this hatch is my bow and arrows. Your mother never knew this about me but I was one of the most wanted men in Chancellory. I don’t want you to follow in my footsteps but I want you to know……………….I AM NOT DEAD.” Those four words would change my life forever. And I knew I had to find my father whose name I had never known.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl. “You there! Yes, you two ruffians! Release that girl at once or I’ll be forced to maim you so that you can never harm another soul again!” one ruffian speaks, “go home you damn fool she ain’t you kid.” (I notch an arrow on my longbow.) “ I will say it once more, YOU HEATHS REALEASE HER AT ONCE!!” other ruffian, ”well ya got our attention and were gonna kill ya.” (I let loose two arrows before they can even react. One is shot in the calf and one in the chest.) “ I warned you.” (Picks up the now maimed one) “If you ever harm another maiden such as this one you see (whispers) I’ll personally put an arrow through you throat.” (Ruffian limps away carrying his now dead cohort.) “Are you ok my lady?” she speaks in a whisper, “T-T-T-thank you s-s-s-sir any moment later and I would’ve… (Gulps) “It’s ok now my child now run home to you mother.” (She nods then runs away)
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. “Well, my good man, what is this item you speak of that I must fetch? It must be important for that island is swarming with monsters and the like.” Old man speaks,” Well you see its this gold deposit my rival found and I want it for myself to be rish.” “Well, sir that’ll cost you for I now have to hire a laborer to accompany me.” Old man,” I can give ya 100 gold for the laborer and the payment.” “HAHAHAHAHAHAH……………Now my good man we both know my services are far more valuable than that make it 300 gold and we have a deal.” (I gaze at him with an eye of sheer evil) old man,” I-I-I-I can give ya 3oo hundred.” “NOW my good man it’s a deal!”
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. Beggar,” my good sir couyld you please spare me some food.” “I could my good man but I say whats in it for me?” beggar,” Well you can know you help and old man out.” “Fine here, but (man hungrily eats the pork) you must spread my name to all you see telling them of my kind deed.” “Yes Sir!”
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.( –side note: In this I made the bar tender the drunk.--) (I stand up knocking my stool I was sitting on over.) “YOU WELP do you even know who you are!” old woman,” Your mother was probably a nasty B**** is all I said. (Giggling from all the ale she had consumed) “WELL YOU….. (putting much charm into my voice) Madam might I say that you are looking lovely tonight.” Blushing,” Aww you don’t mean that does ya?” “ No madam you are a very nice woman may you show me to my room in this tavern?” “what room?” “This room I just paid for.” (Puts 10 gold pieces in her hand) “Ok deary follow me.” (As I walk behind her I slowly pull out my hunting knife.) (Bar tender screams) (I slowly walk out of room with my now bloody knife.) “Anyone else want to insult my mother?”
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. “Why hello there madam, my name is Cyril? And yours?” “Oh, why hello there you charming boy, my name is Pauline.” (She blushes after looking me up and down.) “Well my maiden may I walk you home?”(I flash a charming smile) “Why yes you may.”(As we walk I slowly slide my arm onto her bare shoulders she shivers by my cold hands) “Do you need a coat my lady? It is getting cold.” (I give her my jacket) “Why thank you my dear boy.”(Her eyes fill with the wanting of me so I pull her close) “Would my maiden want a kiss?” (Again I flash a smile to seal the deal) “Why yes I would.” (She bends down and locks lips with mine at this time I slowly move my hands up her back. At this she pulls closer to me and I reach her necklace. I slowly unclaspe it from her neck at the shift of weight I apply little pressure to her neck to make it un-notice able. I then move my hands down her hips and place the necklace in to my pocket.) (I end the kiss with a brief hug and release she blushes hard and asks for me to go away. I pocket the necklace and sell it.)
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? What is the currency in this server? I might’ve skipped over it but I didn’t see it.
Other notes: For the character sketch I submitted my MC skin. note: screenshot wouldn’t work (sorry bout that) so all I have is my template and I am currently making a different skin maybe a more evil ranger style one idk. (that and i used paranthese to show what my character was doing during the scenes ie necklace stealing part.) But hope you like my backstory.
noticed that the template didn't load will fix mc and post it A.S.A.P sorry.
A good first try but we have some issues that need addressing,
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: When using parentheses or in private chat
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?:
Who is allowed to use magic?: mages
For the first question you didn't mention the OOC chat channel that is public. You haven't stated whether or not you have read the primary lore of our server or agreed to RP in accordance with it and on the last question you have half of the needed answers, there's another type of spellcaster with a religious element to it that our lore mentions.
Name: Cyril “The Blood” (No Last Name)
Age:17
Class:ranger (possible paladin or alchemist)
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Chancellory
Physical description: (Human) Not very tall, but well-built and strong, white hair and blue eyes. Screen capture of your skin: file:///C:UsersSONGN~1AppDataLocalTempmsohtmlclip11clip_image002.png
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): At the age of 5 I (Cyril) orphaned. My village was attacked and my mother was told me to run. I ran far away but just enough so that I could watch what occurred. The force that attacked my village burned it to a crisp, leaving corpses everywhere. As I slowly walked back at night fall I went to see my house. When I reached my house all I could see were ashes and foot-prints. I broke into tears at the thought of what happened. And at that moment I vowed revenge for the attack and death of my beloved village. I didn’t even know if my widowed mother had survived. I began to slowly walk about the town and found the corpse of my best friend, Christopher. The monsters had killed my best friend, my “big brother”, he was the one who showed me how to enjoy life and now he was gone. At this thought I threw up at the site of his face. Where had once been a happy face was now multiple tears and wedges of bloodied face, in his hand was his old hunting knife with the blade broken. Whatever had attacked my village had been gruesome and had left none. I went to the outskirts of town to find the armory which hadn’t been touched by flames. But sadly it had been pillaged no weapons or armor remained. As I slowly walked back to my burnt house it began to snow as I took shelter in the rubble of my house I saw a small latch in the floor right next to the burnt staircase. As I opened the door a small rat crawled out on his fat belly and when I looked inside I saw in a bigger cut out area under the floor a longbow, 10 arrows, and a note. The note would be what shaped my life forever. It said, “Son, if you’re reading this it means you found my hatch. In this hatch is my bow and arrows. Your mother never knew this about me but I was one of the most wanted men in Chancellory. I don’t want you to follow in my footsteps but I want you to know……………….I AM NOT DEAD.” Those four words would change my life forever. And I knew I had to find my father whose name I had never known.
Regarding your biography, it's currently at 398 words when we have a minimum of 400. We need you to flesh it out a little more. We don't really know much about Cyril at this point. The backstory of his village being attacked comes off as cliche at the moment and we've stated explicitly your bio "cannot include loved ones being killed...unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner." I would like you to rewrite the biography and go into detail on Cyril. What is his personality like? What was his home life like? Can you go into detail more on his father being a wanted criminal? What was his relationship with his other family members like?
In addition, there are numerous grammatical errors throughout the biography and in character responses that interrupt the flow of the application. Usually in roleplay you write in the third person but you refer to Cyril in first-person quite often throughout the app.
Your app is missing the "Strengths and Weakness" section as well as the Character-Linking section and the Motivation section, I ask that you add these sections in as an incomplete application will never be accepted. The entire app form can be found on the original post on the first page.
Finally the skin you uploaded is not an actual image but the location of the image on your computer's hard-drive. You can visit tinypic.com or imgur.com to upload images for free and link to the image in your app instead.
Repost your app in a new post when you have made the changes. Best of luck to you!
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?:
Citizen of the Chancellory
Physical description:
Pale skin, Hair is messy and unkept, and is a deep shade of brown, almost a black. His eyes are deep green colour, and he has dark bags under them. He’s quite tall, and is moderately well-built. He is always seen wearing a dark green cloak, matching his eyes, which covers much of his face.
Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliché manner.):
Oakley was abandoned at the streets at the age of seven. His parents had tried saving Oakley releasing him to the streets, telling him to run away from the men attempting to burgle their home. His father fought valiantly against them, but being no warrior, he was killed, as was his wife. Oakley grew up, believing his parents abandoned him on the streets because they didn't have enough money to support another member of the family, never knowing what really happened on that day. Oakley was never taken in by any of the citizens, and was often treated roughly by the other children for smelling bad and having ripped clothes. He tried to ignore it at first, but the tormenting went on and on, for about six years, surviving offs only the fruits off the trees, until he began to really crack.
It was when Oakley was around the age of thirteen to fourteen that he began to fight back. The anger he bottled in from all the pain he had received, he has released. The children preyed on him became the prey. He thought with no mercy, a small punch thrown would end up with his opposition’s arm being broken, sometimes his own. He hated them; he hated the others, but most of all, he hated his parents for putting him here in the first place. So much so, he changed his name to what it is now, he has forced himself to forget his previous name. The reason he named himself Oakley was because of one reason only. When he was fifteen, he was kicked outside the walls, into the slums, as there were too many complaints from the children’s mothers, saying there children were being hurt by him. So, Oakley began to steal small things, sticks from bundles, string and flint from houses, until him able to make a small shoddy bow. But, Oakley knowing that beggars can’t be choosers used it anyways. He made this bow, this bow made of oak, so that he could take his anger out on other things, birds, cows, and pigs, anything that could be harmed. And this bow, this bow was his relief; it brought him happiness hurting things like he had been hurt. This is why he called himself, Oakley.
Oakley still began to steal, his clothes were getting way too small for him, and his pants were at his knees. So Oakley searched for something to wear, until he stumbled upon something that took his liking. A long, dark green cloak, which shields his face from wandering eyes, this cloak, he wears to this very day. Oakley was eighteen when he decided to return back into the capital, knowing after four years of theft, someone is bounded to notice his crimes. But he had changed, his face had turned pale and his eyes had bags from the sleepless nights, his cheekbones were high in his face. He looked so different from the boy he was only five years ago, and so, no one recognised that hooded character that had suddenly appeared in the capital.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation):
Oakley has no real goal, other than living a life where he isn’t endanger of being sent to jail, and wants to live a more normal life.
Strengths (Both physical and personality):
He knows how to emotionally and mentally harm someone, as he had himself. He is also able to slip into the shadows and go unnoticed in the crowd his cloak, and is very careful with what people say, often carefully analysing what they say before he responds.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.):
Phoenix is extremely poor and doesn’t have very good social skills, as he had been living alone for most off his life, his temper is also very short, as he was bullied as a child, and he is illiterate, as he had no education during his life, other than those seven years he had with his parents. Due to him being abandoned and bullied, he also has unstable mental health; he constantly gets flashbacks of his childhood. He is also extremely malnourished as he had little food to eat growing up.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.):
None.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
He stares at the girl and the men, and the scene reminds him of his childhood
He draws his bow, hidden under his cloak, and takes aim, and fires and arrow at one of the guards.
The other rushes over at his bleeding friend trying to help him, until he turns back to Oakley. But he had no one to turn back to.
Oakley was gone with the girl, blending in with the passing crowd. As soon as there safe, he leaves her.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
’’Hmm, I don’t care what the reward is, if you’re asking me to go to Bloodstone rather than yourself, I would think that it must be a dangerous place, possibly risking my life. And I, for one, don’t want to die.’’
Oakley brushes past the man abruptly, most likely causing him to fall over
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
Oakley chuckles as he passes the beggar.
’’I was a lot like you at one point old man. Except I was seventy years younger and knew how to take care of myself’’
Oakley chuckles a bit more then walks past the beggar.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
Oakley’s brow grows black
’’I can tell you are quite drunk from the slur in your voice’’
Oakley stands up from his chair
’’And, for all you know, I may not even has a mother, not that I’ll ever know. So, I won’t break your arm today, and keep your opinions to yourself… or next time’’
He moves his finger across his throat then walks out of the bar
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
Oakley stares at the beautiful necklace, but quickly pulls his gaze away, quickly dismissing the thought of theft.
’’I’ve already committed 4 years’ worth of theft. Better not risk it anymore.’’ He says under his breath.
He hurriedly passes the women, most likely startling her.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?
None at all.
Other notes:
This is my second character on the Anerian Chronicles. Here is a link to my first one: http://goo.gl/9kIhUY
Accepted:
CloudySkies / Over_Fractured:
Good application :). You are my IRL friend but I did use the same reviewing as I review everyone else, just to make it fair. But I did like the application and such. The strengths and weaknesses are balanced, the ICRs are good. The bio could use a tad bit more detail but it's still good enough to pass. If you have any questions feel free to contact any of the staff. You already know the website ;D.
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When I play Minecraft, it feels like a game... You dont say?
Accepted:
CloudySkies / Over_Fractured:
Good application . You are my IRL friend but I did use the same reviewing as I review everyone else, just to make it fair. But I did like the application and such. The strengths and weaknesses are balanced, the ICRs are good. The bio could use a tad bit more detail but it's still good enough to pass. If you have any questions feel free to contact any of the staff. You already know the website ;D.
He is missing almost all of his OOC questions. I am going to notify the staff about this, Most likly he will have to go back and post the OOC questions.
He is missing almost all of his OOC questions. I am going to notify the staff about this, Most likly he will have to go back and post the OOC questions.
Hey Minercraft901,
Don't worry about this.
Jaeden told me that the person we speak of has already been WLed on the server, and this is only a new character biography that he is creating. That's why he hadn't filled out most of the OOC questions, because he is already part of the community. Thank you for noticing though, but don't worry, we got this covered.
And please realize that we Whitelisters are ALSO staff. If you have something that is bothering you, please report straight to us, and not the rest of the staff. Whitelisting is our job, and any complaints about how we do it should be given straight to us.
Hey Minercraft901,
Don't worry about this.
Jaeden told me that the person we speak of has already been WLed on the server, and this is only a new character biography that he is creating. That's why he hadn't filled out most of the OOC questions, because he is already part of the community. Thank you for noticing though, but don't worry, we got this covered.
And please realize that we Whitelisters are ALSO staff. If you have something that is bothering you, please report straight to us, and not the rest of the staff. Whitelisting is our job, and any complaints about how we do it should be given straight to us.
Sorry for the inconvenience and also I had no idea it was Jaeden at the time. And I do know that WL's are part of the staff I just was not sure who to tell that was in the staff.
The Meaning of Life, the Universe, and Everything.
Join Date:
8/18/2011
Posts:
104
Minecraft:
WholeGrainWheat
Member Details
Deferred:
BOOMbox52 - I'm sorry, but I simply cannot grade this app until it is in a readable format. Please either edit the post with proper formatting or repost, but make sure that it no longer looks like that. Also, please post an actual screenshot of your skin. They are nice to have, and it only takes a few seconds on imgur.
Deferred:
SplinterZero / ZionSype:
Your application was fairly good overall. I just had a problem with the ICRs. There needs to be MUCH more detail in the ICRs. It recommends at least a paragraph on EACH one. But if you could fix these up according to your character with much more detail then that would be dandy! Hehe.
Thanks in advance and hope to see your next application!
~Jaeden
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When I play Minecraft, it feels like a game... You dont say?
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Yes, Mike Rahk (Tried using the "Charcter Linking Aid" but it just says "
You do not have sufficient access to view this page."
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Sir Clockwork
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yerp
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Power gaming is forcing rp on someone.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using ooc info rply.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: To take on the persona, history, and emotions of another person.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: None
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: Only if they agree
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: While using parentheses
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yerp
Who is allowed to use magic?: Only people who train with it.
Who are the Fallen?: They are the medori. The medori are a superstitious, natural people. They stayed away from the Chancellery, due to their knowledge of them. However, they recently became loosely tied allies.
When and how did our current government come to be?: 169 AR; at the fall of the former ruling government.
Who are the Order of Aradin?: A group of knights that were formed to protect the islands from monsters.
What are the Net and Essence? Net catches people who fall off the islands, and takes all their items, unless they have 3 lvls worth of experience. Essence is xp gathered from most basic tasks. It can be used to save your items from the net or can be canned in emeralds then sold.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: I have played on many rp serves and enjoy playing dnd-esq games.
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: Lord of the Craft not enough fun; Aurora Craft just got bored;
Character Information
Name: Leon the Wise
Age: 19
Class: Laborer
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Chancellory
Physical description: A tall silver haired youth. Skinny but not unhealthy. Pale. Grey misty eyes. Wears long , royal blue robes with a gold trim.
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Leon was born to two no name merchants. Although he was born with silver hair and grey eyes, his parents still loved him. He grew up surrounded by other children. The problem was, although he was the same age as them, they were all so much bigger! They were bigger and stronger for sure, but Leon was more agile and seemingly more intelligent. His parents brought in a decent income so they always had enough and then some. They saved up their money hoping to make of their son a great knight. However, this was not to be. When he was young, he took a liking to something quite odd. Books. Neither of his parents were great fans of books, yet that were his life; reading and collecting odd trinkets. Soon, all of his friends jokingly named him Leon the Wise as he always had his head in a book. By the age of 15 he decided he wanted to make a giant archive; a place to store all the knowledge in the world. He also decided to become a mage of sorts, and start a mage guild. He began to study books of knowledge that his parents reluctantly bought for him. Although he began to understand the basics of magic, he was still a long way off. After a while, his parents came to see his knowledge not as a curse but a gift. Sure, their son would not be a knight, but he could be so much more! They bought him more and more books until his room was filled to the brim with them. He worked alongside his parents during the day, helping them earn keep. By night he studied to light of small magical rocks. By the age of eighteen, he figured out that making a guild would be tough. First he would have to become a great mage. Then he would have to make tons of money to buy the necessary documents and land. Even after all that, he would still have to convince other freelance mages to join him. This drove him to work even harder. He would go days without coming out of his room, for studying. His skin became pale, and he grew skinny, although not unhealthy. He became so intoxicated in his studies, that a year passed and he was now 19. His parents, deciding he was ready, bought him a pair of beautiful blue and gold trimmed robes and sent him off to school. And that is where his story begins.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): My character’s goal is create a mage guild and “The Archives.”
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Extremely intelligent and dexterous.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): Is not very strong. Has a great fear of deep water. Is a money hoarder. Would do anything to save knowledge or books.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armored men harassing a young girl. You duck into an alley and watch the girl struggle. “Stop,” she screams and continues to punch and quick but is easily restrained. “Don worry little girl, we jus want to hab some fun,” says one of the men. As the streets are deserted, and no one else is around to help, you decide to have some fun. You pull out a spellbook you got from school, and start looking through it. “Mmmm let’s see,” you whisper. You land on a page with an electricity spell. “Perfect!” you think to yourself, “With that armor…” You begin casting the spell, aiming it at the man who just spoke. You fire and it shoots off towards him. Then you fire several more, and run out of mana. The first bolt hits the intended target knocking him to the ground and stunning him. The same happens for the rest. As the last bolt hits, you run out of the alley, grab the girl, and take off sprinting. After a time of talking at your small hovel, she sets off, this time with a dagger in hand, and quite the mindset about her.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. You think to yourself, “Do I really need this money?” You figure you don’t, and you aren’t much of an adventurer either. “No thank you sir; such a journey is not for one like me.” He looks at you pleadingly but you shake your head and walk away, deciding to live at least another day.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. Out of your pocket, you pull a small bun, wrapped in paper. As you hold it out to him, he stands up much more quickly then he should be able to. He grabs your throat and attempts to strangle you. You swiftly kick him in the shin and as he falls down, you pin him down with your foot. You look down at him and notice he was actually on of the local gang. You learn you’ll have to be more careful next time.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. He had been going this all night, to each man that entered the bar. Finally, you have had enough. “Tender?” “Yes?’ the bar tender answers. “Would you be too amiss, if that man left?” you ask with a twinkle in your eye. “Not at all, as he be driving way my customers. Hell I may eben pay you too.” He chuckles loudly as you stride over to the man. The man looks up. “Oi! Is you again. Ha, habent had enoubh? Well you moter dint eder.” As he says this you pull out your dagger and, with the hilt, hit him in the jugular. He is instantly out like a light. “That’s what you get..” The bartender still grinning and chuckling drags the man out of the establishment, with a roar of approval from those in the bar. You sit back down, and have a drink on the house. “What a good way to end the night!”
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. Although you’ve never tried stealing anything, you know you are quite agile and should be able to grab it. You walk up beside her and trip her. Then you make to help her up with one hand. With the other, you cut her necklace. She doesn’t notice and thanks you. Then she walks away, leaving you with your prize.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? Is this based on The Edge Chronicles?
The Meaning of Life, the Universe, and Everything.
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BlackAce111- Most of your Application was fine, including both OOC and IC parts. I was a bit upset you had a somewhat short Biography, but it was otherwise good. Your ICRs were not we were asking for though. You seemed to have gotten the idea, but you put it in the wrong format. Here's an example of how the ICRs should be done/look like:
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. *Ronja stands still for a moment, and then crouches down on her knees next to the man* “Aren’t you.. Ronja Raquita?” *He asks, his face stern and somewhat agitated. She shakes her head, trying to look down to hide her face, while rummaging through her sack* “No. No, I’m afraid I am not that woman.” *She hands the man a stale bread, and gets up in a rush, leaving him thankful but confused.*
This is my own example, but you should be writing up how your character would react to the situation in a similar manner to that. So you should write these ICRs up as if you were "Leon the Wise". Now I'd also like to quickly point out that in one of you ICRs you have the person use magic. This is not allowed unless you have gotten permission to be a mage/other user of magic before applying; Otherwise you must attend academy lessons once you have joined the server to do so. (You got the answer right in the OOC section of the App, so I was wondering if you misunderstood. It's alright though, just letting you know.) So there we have it. If you could try fixing up your ICRs, and keep what I've said in mind, I'm sure you'll make it through!
And no, to answer your question, this server is not based on The Edge Chronicles.
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Sir Clockwork
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yerp
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Power gaming is forcing rp on someone.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using ooc info rply.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: To take on the persona, history, and emotions of another person.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: None
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: Only if they agree
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: While using parentheses
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yerp
Who is allowed to use magic?: Only people who train with it.
Who are the Fallen?: They are the medori. The medori are a superstitious, natural people. They stayed away from the Chancellery, due to their knowledge of them. However, they recently became loosely tied allies.
When and how did our current government come to be?: 169 AR; at the fall of the former ruling government.
Who are the Order of Aradin?: A group of knights that were formed to protect the islands from monsters.
What are the Net and Essence? Net catches people who fall off the islands, and takes all their items, unless they have 3 lvls worth of experience. Essence is xp gathered from most basic tasks. It can be used to save your items from the net or can be canned in emeralds then sold.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: I have played on many rp serves and enjoy playing dnd-esq games.
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: Lord of the Craft not enough fun; Aurora Craft just got bored;
Character Information
Name: Leon the Wise
Age: 19
Class: Laborer
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Chancellory
Physical description: A tall silver haired youth. Skinny but not unhealthy. Pale. Grey misty eyes. Wears long , royal blue robes with a gold trim.
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Leon was born to two no name merchants. Although he was born with silver hair and grey eyes, his parents still loved him. He grew up surrounded by other children. The problem was, although he was the same age as them, they were all so much bigger! They were bigger and stronger for sure, but Leon was more agile and seemingly more intelligent. His parents brought in a decent income so they always had enough and then some. They saved up their money hoping to make of their son a great knight. However, this was not to be. When he was young, he took a liking to something quite odd. Books. Neither of his parents were great fans of books, yet that were his life; reading and collecting odd trinkets. Soon, all of his friends jokingly named him Leon the Wise as he always had his head in a book. By the age of 15 he decided he wanted to make a giant archive; a place to store all the knowledge in the world. He also decided to become a mage of sorts, and start a mage guild. He began to study books of knowledge that his parents reluctantly bought for him. Although he began to understand the basics of magic, he was still a long way off. After a while, his parents came to see his knowledge not as a curse but a gift. Sure, their son would not be a knight, but he could be so much more! They bought him more and more books until his room was filled to the brim with them. He worked alongside his parents during the day, helping them earn keep. By night he studied to light of small magical rocks. By the age of eighteen, he figured out that making a guild would be tough. First he would have to become a great mage. Then he would have to make tons of money to buy the necessary documents and land. Even after all that, he would still have to convince other freelance mages to join him. This drove him to work even harder. He would go days without coming out of his room, for studying. His skin became pale, and he grew skinny, although not unhealthy. He became so intoxicated in his studies, that a year passed and he was now 19. His parents, deciding he was ready, bought him a pair of beautiful blue and gold trimmed robes and sent him off to school. And that is where his story begins.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): My character’s goal is create a mage guild and “The Archives.”
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Extremely intelligent and dexterous.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): Is not very strong. Has a great fear of deep water. Is a money hoarder. Would do anything to save knowledge or books. Is very shy around girls.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armored men harassing a young girl.
*Leo approaches them. He notices that she is a childhood friend, Cairo, and the men are also his childhood bullies. She sees you and yells out* “Leo, please help me!” *Just then the others to notice him* “Well look who it is,” *says Butch, the leader.* “ I thought I left you drowning in a lake” *his eyes glint with evil. Leo looks at him and in reply* “Yes, you did. Just like your mom left you in the orphanage.” *Butch goes beet red and runs at him. Leo, knowing there is a wall behind him, steps out of the way at the last second. When Butch hits the wall, he falls back and lands on his back. His nose is gushing blood but he is knocked out. The others pick him up and start to drag him away. One stays behind and threatens* You got lucky dis time leo. Your wiseness ain gonna help you next time.” * As he walks away you go help Cairo up* “Thanks leo…. Would you walk me home?” * she asks. You nod your head in reply and beckon her to lead, not trusting your words. On the way there….. (Next rp part continues story)
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
*As Leo is walking Cairo home, a rather shifty looking man slips out of an alley way. Cairo yelps and hides behind you but the man holds up his hands as a sign of peace. “I just need some help please. You see I was out at de bloodstone and I dropped my favorite coin. If ye could go get it for me, I’ll pay ye…. 50 gold pieces?” * He grins and holds out a small bag. Leo rubs his chin appraisingly and wonder why this man loves the coin so much. However in the end he decides he need the money* “Sure I’ll take your job. Where is this coin that you left?” * The man points back into the alley he just came out of and tells Leo there is a map in his house down the alley. Leo looks down the alley, and as he is used to reading books in the dark, he notices something most men wouldn’t have; an armed thug, waiting in the shadows. Leo decides he doesn’t need the coin that much and says* “Actually, I need to get this one home first. However I will be back.” *The man frowns, obviously unhappy that Leo wouldn’t go now. However, he nods and waves you on, thankfully not attacking Leo and Cairo. He continues his walk through the deserted streets, Cairo now clinging to his arm, and Leo once again at a loss for words.*
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
*Leo just dropped off Cairo at her house, and she gave him some salted beef for all his trouble. He decides that he isn’t very hungry and that it would serve the man better than he. He holds out his hand to the man offering the beef.* “Here sir, take this.” * The man reaches up and takes the beef, takes a bite of it, and cries out.* “Oh thank you sir, oh thank you indeed. I thought I was going to die out here, cold and hungry. Here, it’s not much but its all I have.” * He hands Leo a book and he reads the title. It’s a First Edition Mosntrunomicon! It is so rare that it goes for 100,000 gold pieces! Leo decides, against his will that he can’t keep it; it is too rare. Instead he tells the man the value and gives it back. He then walks off, ready to get a drink at the local bar; the night has been too stressful.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
*This man has been going on all night about people’s mothers, and Leo decides he’s had enough. He walks over to the man and sits down.* “Whadya want eh?!’’ “Sir, I ask that you might calm yourself. It is obvious that you have had too much to drink, and you are disturbing everyone else.” *He looks you in the eyes and pulls out a dagger. Leo knows he could best him in a fight, but you were getting tired anyways. Leo put your hands up in submission, but the man stands up as Leo does, and jabs at him. Leo grabs the man’s wrist and crushes it with what strength he has. The man drops the dagger and cowers away. Leo feels pitty for the drunken brute, but is too tired to deal with any more of this. He walks away, leaving the man with whatever dignity he has left. What a strange night you think to yourself. What a strange night indeed*
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
*After the violent night Leo has had, the last thing he expects to see as he exits the bar is a beautiful woman walking by. Even less does he expect to see the beautiful necklace around her neck. He isn’t a thief by trade but knows he can easily take it. He slips up his hood and trips the woman. She cries out in pain as she hits the cobbled road. He extends his hand to help her up* “Oh mam, are you well? These damnable roads will trip you up quite well.” *She looks at him oddly and then curtsies.* “Yes good sir, I am well. And indeed these roads are treacherous. I must be off though,” *she gets up and continues on her way, leaving Leo with his prize. He had used his dagger to cut her necklace as he helped her up and she hadn’t even noticed! Although he is excited, he knows he must get home and get to bed, because school begins again tomorrow.
A lot is going on in the world of Anerian Chronicles right now. We've ended our first main story arc, we've retaken the Capital City in an epic PvE event and now we have a contest of sorts for all of you builder types out there to show off what you can do. Just submit your app, get approved and you can jump right in!
Apply today!
Thank you! :3
Also, like Kriegger said, we're in between arcs so now is the best time to apply!
I hope I'm still whitelisted and you haven't forgotten about me. If so I'll try and be on soon and
be on for a while to get the hang of things on the server. Also if there's anyhting new that I have
to fill out I will. I'm so sorry it's taken me this long to play, but as I said I was working on some MC
maps. (I need a break from that stupid, annoying s#it!) I hope to be on soon I can't wait to see the
server and don't worry I'm bringing my skin!
Shawn Hallert shall be known to all of the islands and soon
even Aneria herself will know of his greatness!
Ah I remember you! Well I'll need the link of your app so I can see your username so I can whitelist you when you want me to.
You won't have to fill out anything but just send me a link of your app and I'll check it out.
IGN: ias25
Real-Life Age: 15
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): ias25_silver
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing another player into roleplay without giving them a time to think of a response. Like stabbed in head instead of slashed at head.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using out of game knowledge when playing as you character. Ie: making a potion when your character hasn’t been taught that.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Is when a person takes on the persona of a fictual or sometimes real person as if they WERE that person.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: no one
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: Only when after your RP battle they let themselves die and you claim victory and PvP is only allowed if the other agrees to it first.
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: When using parentheses or in private chat
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?:
Who is allowed to use magic?: mages
Who are the Fallen?:an old superstitious people, who prefer a peaceful way to settle a dispute rather than a violent one. They pass information down orally; this is how they keep their community together. They also live a simple life. They have a slightly higher aptitude for magic the a human. They have lived for years in seclusion.
When and how did our current government come to be?: Following the defeat of the old Linyera Monarchy in 167 A.R.(after rising) the Chancellort came to power in 169 A.R.
Who are the Order of Aradin?: Created in 37 A.R. (after rising), they are the protectors of the islands.
What are the Net and Essence? The Net catches fools who fall off the islands but takes all of there mundane items unless they have enough essence to spare their items. Essence(XP) is the less versatile but still useful version of the First Plane’s mana. It is still however need for the normal function of the plane.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: none, but I like acting IRL
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: None
Character Information
Name: Cyril “The Blood” (No Last Name)
Age:17
Class:ranger (possible paladin or alchemist)
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Chancellory
Physical description: (Human) Not very tall, but well-built and strong, white hair and blue eyes.
Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): At the age of 5 I (Cyril) orphaned. My village was attacked and my mother was told me to run. I ran far away but just enough so that I could watch what occurred. The force that attacked my village burned it to a crisp, leaving corpses everywhere. As I slowly walked back at night fall I went to see my house. When I reached my house all I could see were ashes and foot-prints. I broke into tears at the thought of what happened. And at that moment I vowed revenge for the attack and death of my beloved village. I didn’t even know if my widowed mother had survived. I began to slowly walk about the town and found the corpse of my best friend, Christopher. The monsters had killed my best friend, my “big brother”, he was the one who showed me how to enjoy life and now he was gone. At this thought I threw up at the site of his face. Where had once been a happy face was now multiple tears and wedges of bloodied face, in his hand was his old hunting knife with the blade broken. Whatever had attacked my village had been gruesome and had left none. I went to the outskirts of town to find the armory which hadn’t been touched by flames. But sadly it had been pillaged no weapons or armor remained. As I slowly walked back to my burnt house it began to snow as I took shelter in the rubble of my house I saw a small latch in the floor right next to the burnt staircase. As I opened the door a small rat crawled out on his fat belly and when I looked inside I saw in a bigger cut out area under the floor a longbow, 10 arrows, and a note. The note would be what shaped my life forever. It said, “Son, if you’re reading this it means you found my hatch. In this hatch is my bow and arrows. Your mother never knew this about me but I was one of the most wanted men in Chancellory. I don’t want you to follow in my footsteps but I want you to know……………….I AM NOT DEAD.” Those four words would change my life forever. And I knew I had to find my father whose name I had never known.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl. “You there! Yes, you two ruffians! Release that girl at once or I’ll be forced to maim you so that you can never harm another soul again!” one ruffian speaks, “go home you damn fool she ain’t you kid.” (I notch an arrow on my longbow.) “ I will say it once more, YOU HEATHS REALEASE HER AT ONCE!!” other ruffian, ”well ya got our attention and were gonna kill ya.” (I let loose two arrows before they can even react. One is shot in the calf and one in the chest.) “ I warned you.” (Picks up the now maimed one) “If you ever harm another maiden such as this one you see (whispers) I’ll personally put an arrow through you throat.” (Ruffian limps away carrying his now dead cohort.) “Are you ok my lady?” she speaks in a whisper, “T-T-T-thank you s-s-s-sir any moment later and I would’ve… (Gulps) “It’s ok now my child now run home to you mother.” (She nods then runs away)
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. “Well, my good man, what is this item you speak of that I must fetch? It must be important for that island is swarming with monsters and the like.” Old man speaks,” Well you see its this gold deposit my rival found and I want it for myself to be rish.” “Well, sir that’ll cost you for I now have to hire a laborer to accompany me.” Old man,” I can give ya 100 gold for the laborer and the payment.” “HAHAHAHAHAHAH……………Now my good man we both know my services are far more valuable than that make it 300 gold and we have a deal.” (I gaze at him with an eye of sheer evil) old man,” I-I-I-I can give ya 3oo hundred.” “NOW my good man it’s a deal!”
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. Beggar,” my good sir couyld you please spare me some food.” “I could my good man but I say whats in it for me?” beggar,” Well you can know you help and old man out.” “Fine here, but (man hungrily eats the pork) you must spread my name to all you see telling them of my kind deed.” “Yes Sir!”
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.( –side note: In this I made the bar tender the drunk.--) (I stand up knocking my stool I was sitting on over.) “YOU WELP do you even know who you are!” old woman,” Your mother was probably a nasty B**** is all I said. (Giggling from all the ale she had consumed) “WELL YOU….. (putting much charm into my voice) Madam might I say that you are looking lovely tonight.” Blushing,” Aww you don’t mean that does ya?” “ No madam you are a very nice woman may you show me to my room in this tavern?” “what room?” “This room I just paid for.” (Puts 10 gold pieces in her hand) “Ok deary follow me.” (As I walk behind her I slowly pull out my hunting knife.) (Bar tender screams) (I slowly walk out of room with my now bloody knife.) “Anyone else want to insult my mother?”
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. “Why hello there madam, my name is Cyril? And yours?” “Oh, why hello there you charming boy, my name is Pauline.” (She blushes after looking me up and down.) “Well my maiden may I walk you home?”(I flash a charming smile) “Why yes you may.”(As we walk I slowly slide my arm onto her bare shoulders she shivers by my cold hands) “Do you need a coat my lady? It is getting cold.” (I give her my jacket) “Why thank you my dear boy.”(Her eyes fill with the wanting of me so I pull her close) “Would my maiden want a kiss?” (Again I flash a smile to seal the deal) “Why yes I would.” (She bends down and locks lips with mine at this time I slowly move my hands up her back. At this she pulls closer to me and I reach her necklace. I slowly unclaspe it from her neck at the shift of weight I apply little pressure to her neck to make it un-notice able. I then move my hands down her hips and place the necklace in to my pocket.) (I end the kiss with a brief hug and release she blushes hard and asks for me to go away. I pocket the necklace and sell it.)
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? What is the currency in this server? I might’ve skipped over it but I didn’t see it.
Other notes: For the character sketch I submitted my MC skin. note: screenshot wouldn’t work (sorry bout that) so all I have is my template and I am currently making a different skin maybe a more evil ranger style one idk. (that and i used paranthese to show what my character was doing during the scenes ie necklace stealing part.) But hope you like my backstory.
noticed that the template didn't load will fix mc and post it A.S.A.P sorry.
A good first try but we have some issues that need addressing,
For the first question you didn't mention the OOC chat channel that is public. You haven't stated whether or not you have read the primary lore of our server or agreed to RP in accordance with it and on the last question you have half of the needed answers, there's another type of spellcaster with a religious element to it that our lore mentions.
Regarding your biography, it's currently at 398 words when we have a minimum of 400. We need you to flesh it out a little more. We don't really know much about Cyril at this point. The backstory of his village being attacked comes off as cliche at the moment and we've stated explicitly your bio "cannot include loved ones being killed...unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner." I would like you to rewrite the biography and go into detail on Cyril. What is his personality like? What was his home life like? Can you go into detail more on his father being a wanted criminal? What was his relationship with his other family members like?
In addition, there are numerous grammatical errors throughout the biography and in character responses that interrupt the flow of the application. Usually in roleplay you write in the third person but you refer to Cyril in first-person quite often throughout the app.
Your app is missing the "Strengths and Weakness" section as well as the Character-Linking section and the Motivation section, I ask that you add these sections in as an incomplete application will never be accepted. The entire app form can be found on the original post on the first page.
Finally the skin you uploaded is not an actual image but the location of the image on your computer's hard-drive. You can visit tinypic.com or imgur.com to upload images for free and link to the image in your app instead.
Repost your app in a new post when you have made the changes. Best of luck to you!
-Kriegger
Real-Life Age: 13
Previous Application: http://goo.gl/9kIhUY
Character Information
Name: Oakley
Age: 19
Class: Ranger
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?:
Citizen of the Chancellory
Physical description:
Pale skin, Hair is messy and unkept, and is a deep shade of brown, almost a black. His eyes are deep green colour, and he has dark bags under them. He’s quite tall, and is moderately well-built. He is always seen wearing a dark green cloak, matching his eyes, which covers much of his face.
Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliché manner.):
Oakley was abandoned at the streets at the age of seven. His parents had tried saving Oakley releasing him to the streets, telling him to run away from the men attempting to burgle their home. His father fought valiantly against them, but being no warrior, he was killed, as was his wife. Oakley grew up, believing his parents abandoned him on the streets because they didn't have enough money to support another member of the family, never knowing what really happened on that day. Oakley was never taken in by any of the citizens, and was often treated roughly by the other children for smelling bad and having ripped clothes. He tried to ignore it at first, but the tormenting went on and on, for about six years, surviving offs only the fruits off the trees, until he began to really crack.
It was when Oakley was around the age of thirteen to fourteen that he began to fight back. The anger he bottled in from all the pain he had received, he has released. The children preyed on him became the prey. He thought with no mercy, a small punch thrown would end up with his opposition’s arm being broken, sometimes his own. He hated them; he hated the others, but most of all, he hated his parents for putting him here in the first place. So much so, he changed his name to what it is now, he has forced himself to forget his previous name. The reason he named himself Oakley was because of one reason only. When he was fifteen, he was kicked outside the walls, into the slums, as there were too many complaints from the children’s mothers, saying there children were being hurt by him. So, Oakley began to steal small things, sticks from bundles, string and flint from houses, until him able to make a small shoddy bow. But, Oakley knowing that beggars can’t be choosers used it anyways. He made this bow, this bow made of oak, so that he could take his anger out on other things, birds, cows, and pigs, anything that could be harmed. And this bow, this bow was his relief; it brought him happiness hurting things like he had been hurt. This is why he called himself, Oakley.
Oakley still began to steal, his clothes were getting way too small for him, and his pants were at his knees. So Oakley searched for something to wear, until he stumbled upon something that took his liking. A long, dark green cloak, which shields his face from wandering eyes, this cloak, he wears to this very day. Oakley was eighteen when he decided to return back into the capital, knowing after four years of theft, someone is bounded to notice his crimes. But he had changed, his face had turned pale and his eyes had bags from the sleepless nights, his cheekbones were high in his face. He looked so different from the boy he was only five years ago, and so, no one recognised that hooded character that had suddenly appeared in the capital.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation):
Oakley has no real goal, other than living a life where he isn’t endanger of being sent to jail, and wants to live a more normal life.
Strengths (Both physical and personality):
He knows how to emotionally and mentally harm someone, as he had himself. He is also able to slip into the shadows and go unnoticed in the crowd his cloak, and is very careful with what people say, often carefully analysing what they say before he responds.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.):
Phoenix is extremely poor and doesn’t have very good social skills, as he had been living alone for most off his life, his temper is also very short, as he was bullied as a child, and he is illiterate, as he had no education during his life, other than those seven years he had with his parents. Due to him being abandoned and bullied, he also has unstable mental health; he constantly gets flashbacks of his childhood. He is also extremely malnourished as he had little food to eat growing up.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.):
None.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
He stares at the girl and the men, and the scene reminds him of his childhood
He draws his bow, hidden under his cloak, and takes aim, and fires and arrow at one of the guards.
The other rushes over at his bleeding friend trying to help him, until he turns back to Oakley. But he had no one to turn back to.
Oakley was gone with the girl, blending in with the passing crowd. As soon as there safe, he leaves her.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
’’Hmm, I don’t care what the reward is, if you’re asking me to go to Bloodstone rather than yourself, I would think that it must be a dangerous place, possibly risking my life. And I, for one, don’t want to die.’’
Oakley brushes past the man abruptly, most likely causing him to fall over
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
Oakley chuckles as he passes the beggar.
’’I was a lot like you at one point old man. Except I was seventy years younger and knew how to take care of myself’’
Oakley chuckles a bit more then walks past the beggar.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
Oakley’s brow grows black
’’I can tell you are quite drunk from the slur in your voice’’
Oakley stands up from his chair
’’And, for all you know, I may not even has a mother, not that I’ll ever know. So, I won’t break your arm today, and keep your opinions to yourself… or next time’’
He moves his finger across his throat then walks out of the bar
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
Oakley stares at the beautiful necklace, but quickly pulls his gaze away, quickly dismissing the thought of theft.
’’I’ve already committed 4 years’ worth of theft. Better not risk it anymore.’’ He says under his breath.
He hurriedly passes the women, most likely startling her.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?
None at all.
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This is my second character on the Anerian Chronicles. Here is a link to my first one: http://goo.gl/9kIhUY
CloudySkies / Over_Fractured:
Good application :). You are my IRL friend but I did use the same reviewing as I review everyone else, just to make it fair. But I did like the application and such. The strengths and weaknesses are balanced, the ICRs are good. The bio could use a tad bit more detail but it's still good enough to pass. If you have any questions feel free to contact any of the staff. You already know the website ;D.
Sure. Remember to take all the advice he said :D.
Btw you have to >Repost< the app, not edit your current one
Hey Minercraft901,
Don't worry about this.
Jaeden told me that the person we speak of has already been WLed on the server, and this is only a new character biography that he is creating. That's why he hadn't filled out most of the OOC questions, because he is already part of the community. Thank you for noticing though, but don't worry, we got this covered.
And please realize that we Whitelisters are ALSO staff. If you have something that is bothering you, please report straight to us, and not the rest of the staff. Whitelisting is our job, and any complaints about how we do it should be given straight to us.
BOOMbox52 - I'm sorry, but I simply cannot grade this app until it is in a readable format. Please either edit the post with proper formatting or repost, but make sure that it no longer looks like that. Also, please post an actual screenshot of your skin. They are nice to have, and it only takes a few seconds on imgur.
I'm a man of few words and many voices.
SplinterZero / ZionSype:
Your application was fairly good overall. I just had a problem with the ICRs. There needs to be MUCH more detail in the ICRs. It recommends at least a paragraph on EACH one. But if you could fix these up according to your character with much more detail then that would be dandy! Hehe.
Thanks in advance and hope to see your next application!
~Jaeden
Have you joined our website?
IGN: BlackAce111
Real-Life Age: 15
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Sir Clockwork
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yerp
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Power gaming is forcing rp on someone.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using ooc info rply.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: To take on the persona, history, and emotions of another person.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: None
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: Only if they agree
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: While using parentheses
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yerp
Who is allowed to use magic?: Only people who train with it.
Who are the Fallen?: They are the medori. The medori are a superstitious, natural people. They stayed away from the Chancellery, due to their knowledge of them. However, they recently became loosely tied allies.
When and how did our current government come to be?: 169 AR; at the fall of the former ruling government.
Who are the Order of Aradin?: A group of knights that were formed to protect the islands from monsters.
What are the Net and Essence? Net catches people who fall off the islands, and takes all their items, unless they have 3 lvls worth of experience. Essence is xp gathered from most basic tasks. It can be used to save your items from the net or can be canned in emeralds then sold.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: I have played on many rp serves and enjoy playing dnd-esq games.
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: Lord of the Craft not enough fun; Aurora Craft just got bored;
Character Information
Name: Leon the Wise
Age: 19
Class: Laborer
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Chancellory
Physical description: A tall silver haired youth. Skinny but not unhealthy. Pale. Grey misty eyes. Wears long , royal blue robes with a gold trim.
Screen capture of your skin: http://minecraft.novaskin.me/skin/4935451609661440/BlackAce111
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Leon was born to two no name merchants. Although he was born with silver hair and grey eyes, his parents still loved him. He grew up surrounded by other children. The problem was, although he was the same age as them, they were all so much bigger! They were bigger and stronger for sure, but Leon was more agile and seemingly more intelligent. His parents brought in a decent income so they always had enough and then some. They saved up their money hoping to make of their son a great knight. However, this was not to be. When he was young, he took a liking to something quite odd. Books. Neither of his parents were great fans of books, yet that were his life; reading and collecting odd trinkets. Soon, all of his friends jokingly named him Leon the Wise as he always had his head in a book. By the age of 15 he decided he wanted to make a giant archive; a place to store all the knowledge in the world. He also decided to become a mage of sorts, and start a mage guild. He began to study books of knowledge that his parents reluctantly bought for him. Although he began to understand the basics of magic, he was still a long way off. After a while, his parents came to see his knowledge not as a curse but a gift. Sure, their son would not be a knight, but he could be so much more! They bought him more and more books until his room was filled to the brim with them. He worked alongside his parents during the day, helping them earn keep. By night he studied to light of small magical rocks. By the age of eighteen, he figured out that making a guild would be tough. First he would have to become a great mage. Then he would have to make tons of money to buy the necessary documents and land. Even after all that, he would still have to convince other freelance mages to join him. This drove him to work even harder. He would go days without coming out of his room, for studying. His skin became pale, and he grew skinny, although not unhealthy. He became so intoxicated in his studies, that a year passed and he was now 19. His parents, deciding he was ready, bought him a pair of beautiful blue and gold trimmed robes and sent him off to school. And that is where his story begins.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): My character’s goal is create a mage guild and “The Archives.”
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Extremely intelligent and dexterous.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): Is not very strong. Has a great fear of deep water. Is a money hoarder. Would do anything to save knowledge or books.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armored men harassing a young girl. You duck into an alley and watch the girl struggle. “Stop,” she screams and continues to punch and quick but is easily restrained. “Don worry little girl, we jus want to hab some fun,” says one of the men. As the streets are deserted, and no one else is around to help, you decide to have some fun. You pull out a spellbook you got from school, and start looking through it. “Mmmm let’s see,” you whisper. You land on a page with an electricity spell. “Perfect!” you think to yourself, “With that armor…” You begin casting the spell, aiming it at the man who just spoke. You fire and it shoots off towards him. Then you fire several more, and run out of mana. The first bolt hits the intended target knocking him to the ground and stunning him. The same happens for the rest. As the last bolt hits, you run out of the alley, grab the girl, and take off sprinting. After a time of talking at your small hovel, she sets off, this time with a dagger in hand, and quite the mindset about her.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. You think to yourself, “Do I really need this money?” You figure you don’t, and you aren’t much of an adventurer either. “No thank you sir; such a journey is not for one like me.” He looks at you pleadingly but you shake your head and walk away, deciding to live at least another day.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. Out of your pocket, you pull a small bun, wrapped in paper. As you hold it out to him, he stands up much more quickly then he should be able to. He grabs your throat and attempts to strangle you. You swiftly kick him in the shin and as he falls down, you pin him down with your foot. You look down at him and notice he was actually on of the local gang. You learn you’ll have to be more careful next time.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. He had been going this all night, to each man that entered the bar. Finally, you have had enough. “Tender?” “Yes?’ the bar tender answers. “Would you be too amiss, if that man left?” you ask with a twinkle in your eye. “Not at all, as he be driving way my customers. Hell I may eben pay you too.” He chuckles loudly as you stride over to the man. The man looks up. “Oi! Is you again. Ha, habent had enoubh? Well you moter dint eder.” As he says this you pull out your dagger and, with the hilt, hit him in the jugular. He is instantly out like a light. “That’s what you get..” The bartender still grinning and chuckling drags the man out of the establishment, with a roar of approval from those in the bar. You sit back down, and have a drink on the house. “What a good way to end the night!”
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. Although you’ve never tried stealing anything, you know you are quite agile and should be able to grab it. You walk up beside her and trip her. Then you make to help her up with one hand. With the other, you cut her necklace. She doesn’t notice and thanks you. Then she walks away, leaving you with your prize.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? Is this based on The Edge Chronicles?
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BlackAce111- Most of your Application was fine, including both OOC and IC parts. I was a bit upset you had a somewhat short Biography, but it was otherwise good. Your ICRs were not we were asking for though. You seemed to have gotten the idea, but you put it in the wrong format. Here's an example of how the ICRs should be done/look like:
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. *Ronja stands still for a moment, and then crouches down on her knees next to the man* “Aren’t you.. Ronja Raquita?” *He asks, his face stern and somewhat agitated. She shakes her head, trying to look down to hide her face, while rummaging through her sack* “No. No, I’m afraid I am not that woman.” *She hands the man a stale bread, and gets up in a rush, leaving him thankful but confused.*
This is my own example, but you should be writing up how your character would react to the situation in a similar manner to that. So you should write these ICRs up as if you were "Leon the Wise". Now I'd also like to quickly point out that in one of you ICRs you have the person use magic. This is not allowed unless you have gotten permission to be a mage/other user of magic before applying; Otherwise you must attend academy lessons once you have joined the server to do so. (You got the answer right in the OOC section of the App, so I was wondering if you misunderstood. It's alright though, just letting you know.) So there we have it. If you could try fixing up your ICRs, and keep what I've said in mind, I'm sure you'll make it through!
And no, to answer your question, this server is not based on The Edge Chronicles.
IGN: BlackAce111
Real-Life Age: 15
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Sir Clockwork
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yerp
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Power gaming is forcing rp on someone.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using ooc info rply.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: To take on the persona, history, and emotions of another person.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: None
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: Only if they agree
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: While using parentheses
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yerp
Who is allowed to use magic?: Only people who train with it.
Who are the Fallen?: They are the medori. The medori are a superstitious, natural people. They stayed away from the Chancellery, due to their knowledge of them. However, they recently became loosely tied allies.
When and how did our current government come to be?: 169 AR; at the fall of the former ruling government.
Who are the Order of Aradin?: A group of knights that were formed to protect the islands from monsters.
What are the Net and Essence? Net catches people who fall off the islands, and takes all their items, unless they have 3 lvls worth of experience. Essence is xp gathered from most basic tasks. It can be used to save your items from the net or can be canned in emeralds then sold.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: I have played on many rp serves and enjoy playing dnd-esq games.
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: Lord of the Craft not enough fun; Aurora Craft just got bored;
Character Information
Name: Leon the Wise
Age: 19
Class: Laborer
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Chancellory
Physical description: A tall silver haired youth. Skinny but not unhealthy. Pale. Grey misty eyes. Wears long , royal blue robes with a gold trim.
Screen capture of your skin: http://minecraft.novaskin.me/skin/4935451609661440/BlackAce111
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Leon was born to two no name merchants. Although he was born with silver hair and grey eyes, his parents still loved him. He grew up surrounded by other children. The problem was, although he was the same age as them, they were all so much bigger! They were bigger and stronger for sure, but Leon was more agile and seemingly more intelligent. His parents brought in a decent income so they always had enough and then some. They saved up their money hoping to make of their son a great knight. However, this was not to be. When he was young, he took a liking to something quite odd. Books. Neither of his parents were great fans of books, yet that were his life; reading and collecting odd trinkets. Soon, all of his friends jokingly named him Leon the Wise as he always had his head in a book. By the age of 15 he decided he wanted to make a giant archive; a place to store all the knowledge in the world. He also decided to become a mage of sorts, and start a mage guild. He began to study books of knowledge that his parents reluctantly bought for him. Although he began to understand the basics of magic, he was still a long way off. After a while, his parents came to see his knowledge not as a curse but a gift. Sure, their son would not be a knight, but he could be so much more! They bought him more and more books until his room was filled to the brim with them. He worked alongside his parents during the day, helping them earn keep. By night he studied to light of small magical rocks. By the age of eighteen, he figured out that making a guild would be tough. First he would have to become a great mage. Then he would have to make tons of money to buy the necessary documents and land. Even after all that, he would still have to convince other freelance mages to join him. This drove him to work even harder. He would go days without coming out of his room, for studying. His skin became pale, and he grew skinny, although not unhealthy. He became so intoxicated in his studies, that a year passed and he was now 19. His parents, deciding he was ready, bought him a pair of beautiful blue and gold trimmed robes and sent him off to school. And that is where his story begins.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): My character’s goal is create a mage guild and “The Archives.”
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Extremely intelligent and dexterous.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): Is not very strong. Has a great fear of deep water. Is a money hoarder. Would do anything to save knowledge or books. Is very shy around girls.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armored men harassing a young girl.
*Leo approaches them. He notices that she is a childhood friend, Cairo, and the men are also his childhood bullies. She sees you and yells out* “Leo, please help me!” *Just then the others to notice him* “Well look who it is,” *says Butch, the leader.* “ I thought I left you drowning in a lake” *his eyes glint with evil. Leo looks at him and in reply* “Yes, you did. Just like your mom left you in the orphanage.” *Butch goes beet red and runs at him. Leo, knowing there is a wall behind him, steps out of the way at the last second. When Butch hits the wall, he falls back and lands on his back. His nose is gushing blood but he is knocked out. The others pick him up and start to drag him away. One stays behind and threatens* You got lucky dis time leo. Your wiseness ain gonna help you next time.” * As he walks away you go help Cairo up* “Thanks leo…. Would you walk me home?” * she asks. You nod your head in reply and beckon her to lead, not trusting your words. On the way there….. (Next rp part continues story)
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
*As Leo is walking Cairo home, a rather shifty looking man slips out of an alley way. Cairo yelps and hides behind you but the man holds up his hands as a sign of peace. “I just need some help please. You see I was out at de bloodstone and I dropped my favorite coin. If ye could go get it for me, I’ll pay ye…. 50 gold pieces?” * He grins and holds out a small bag. Leo rubs his chin appraisingly and wonder why this man loves the coin so much. However in the end he decides he need the money* “Sure I’ll take your job. Where is this coin that you left?” * The man points back into the alley he just came out of and tells Leo there is a map in his house down the alley. Leo looks down the alley, and as he is used to reading books in the dark, he notices something most men wouldn’t have; an armed thug, waiting in the shadows. Leo decides he doesn’t need the coin that much and says* “Actually, I need to get this one home first. However I will be back.” *The man frowns, obviously unhappy that Leo wouldn’t go now. However, he nods and waves you on, thankfully not attacking Leo and Cairo. He continues his walk through the deserted streets, Cairo now clinging to his arm, and Leo once again at a loss for words.*
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
*Leo just dropped off Cairo at her house, and she gave him some salted beef for all his trouble. He decides that he isn’t very hungry and that it would serve the man better than he. He holds out his hand to the man offering the beef.* “Here sir, take this.” * The man reaches up and takes the beef, takes a bite of it, and cries out.* “Oh thank you sir, oh thank you indeed. I thought I was going to die out here, cold and hungry. Here, it’s not much but its all I have.” * He hands Leo a book and he reads the title. It’s a First Edition Mosntrunomicon! It is so rare that it goes for 100,000 gold pieces! Leo decides, against his will that he can’t keep it; it is too rare. Instead he tells the man the value and gives it back. He then walks off, ready to get a drink at the local bar; the night has been too stressful.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
*This man has been going on all night about people’s mothers, and Leo decides he’s had enough. He walks over to the man and sits down.* “Whadya want eh?!’’ “Sir, I ask that you might calm yourself. It is obvious that you have had too much to drink, and you are disturbing everyone else.” *He looks you in the eyes and pulls out a dagger. Leo knows he could best him in a fight, but you were getting tired anyways. Leo put your hands up in submission, but the man stands up as Leo does, and jabs at him. Leo grabs the man’s wrist and crushes it with what strength he has. The man drops the dagger and cowers away. Leo feels pitty for the drunken brute, but is too tired to deal with any more of this. He walks away, leaving the man with whatever dignity he has left. What a strange night you think to yourself. What a strange night indeed*
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
*After the violent night Leo has had, the last thing he expects to see as he exits the bar is a beautiful woman walking by. Even less does he expect to see the beautiful necklace around her neck. He isn’t a thief by trade but knows he can easily take it. He slips up his hood and trips the woman. She cries out in pain as she hits the cobbled road. He extends his hand to help her up* “Oh mam, are you well? These damnable roads will trip you up quite well.” *She looks at him oddly and then curtsies.* “Yes good sir, I am well. And indeed these roads are treacherous. I must be off though,” *she gets up and continues on her way, leaving Leo with his prize. He had used his dagger to cut her necklace as he helped her up and she hadn’t even noticed! Although he is excited, he knows he must get home and get to bed, because school begins again tomorrow.
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