Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name?: fade.zigglehorn33. I would like to be told IGN if added.
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing an rp into someone else without giving them a chance to do anything.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: using out of character knowledge to aid you in RP
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: when i can be a character that i can be, and explore different life choices
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: NO ONE
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: If it your character has reason in rp to
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: when talking about an issue in an rp
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: yes
Who is allowed to use magic?: mage
Who are the Fallen?: an isolated nomadic race
When and how did our current government come to be?: in 169 A.R the chancellery rose to power because the linyera monarchy was defeated in 167 a.r
Who are the Order of Aradin?: brought to creation around 170 A.R to protect the chancellery from any type of attack
What are the Net and Essence?: Net=a type of barrier that has been there since the raising, that catches someone who may fall from an island and transports them back to the nearest island…….Essence= an energy you can obtain by overcoming basic things like…defeating monsters, mining ores, cooking foods…(prevents losing items from net
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: the land of yalin…rise of the elders…. akavir
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: the land of yalin=owner left…Rise of the elders=redoing lore and map…akavir= i want to find a different experience of role-play because all are the same, and this one has many features that intrigue me
Character Information
Name: Arianna "Ari" Fletcher
Age: 20
Class: ranger
Citizen of the Chancellery or a member of the Medori?: citizen of the chancellery
Physical description: 5'6, 115 lb, thin body ((not super thin, like kind of)) green eyes, with dark red hair
Screen capture of your skin: my skin is still being made, i will update the post with the screen shot when i make it.
Biography:
Arianna Fletcher was born into a richer upscale family, who didn’t appreciate her birth because they wanted a boy to live up the family’s legacy. Her parents had shunned her and didn’t even bother to give her a name. Her parent raised her till she was about five, calling her, ‘child’ and not even a proper name. After 5 years of being treated horribly, her parents finally gave her up. They left her on a road, not bothering to look back. As a toddler, she had no idea why her parents left her and she barely remembers them. After nearly three long hours of waiting, Arianna began to cry.
A group of men, in a small group bandits, had found the crying girl. Grinning, they decided to take her in. When they tried asking her for a name, she didn’t answer. After some time, they realized the girl didn’t have the name. One of the bandits suggested the name Arianna, which was his deceased wife’s name.
Growing up, at first, the bandits made her do chores in their facility, such as clean their weapons and tend to their every needs. She grew up extremely stubborn, and would try to escape every now and then. Though, every time she tried, she failed and Arianna was whipped and beaten severely.
As time went on, Arianna grew. As did the difficulty of the chores. Arianna remained stubborn and naive, believing she would eventually find a way to escape. This led to her punishments becoming worse. as a result of all the whippings, she has many scars and bruises from lashings and being beat.
Arianna as well as all of the other slaves, were under fed and dieting of starvation and sickness from the bad quality of the little food they had. Arianna was done with the treatment, she wanted out as soon as possible. when she was 18 she heard that some that a young slave girl named Kayla was grouping together a rebellion against the bandits, and she gladly joined. She began to construct a small dagger with some broken chains which were used to hold her still when she was whipped. after a year of preparing for the rebellion she was told one day in advanced that the next day, they would free themselves from their bondage. the next day, they split into small groups of 3 to 4 and began to move out.
all of the children began to move a the same time through the forest in silence. not after long scream to the sides of Arianna were heard and she turned to see her whole group had been captured, she was grabbed in the hand. Arianna turned to the man grabbing her arm, and struggled to escape, eventually stabbing him in the neck, grabbing the aviation goggles on his head as a token. she then sprinted as fast as her legs could take her and after a while of running, was free.
She was finally free, she was tired and thirsty, but happy it was all over. she then thought of all the children who may have died, she was a lucky one and she was grateful (to be continued)
What is your character’s main goal?: To become a respected person in her community.
Strengths: she is very confident in herself, and is very fit. makes up for weakness with agility and speed
Weaknesses: She tends to be clingy, barely any strength. Arianna is very weak, due to the fact that she has become weak from all of the whippings and beatings as a slave
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which?: Yes, Kayla (Tiffosaur). She introduced me to this server
In-Character-Responses:
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
Arianna noticed a group of armored men harassing a young girl and she approaches them with caution "excuse me, what are you doing to her?!?"
One of the men turns to arianna "this girl stole from a vendor"
Arianna takes out a rather large amount of money and throws it at the men, then goes over to the girl and takes her hand "Are you okay?"
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
Arianna: I'm sorry sir, I'm not sure i want to risk my life for a reward, and if you are asking me, i think you could do it yourself
The man continues to look for someone to do the deed for him
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
Arianna looks over to the man begging, then takes out some money and runs to the nearest market and buys some food. she returns to the man and kneels next to him and reaches out her hand with the food. "sir, i hope this helps you"
The man smiles at arianna with an immense joy as he takes the food "thank you miss"
Arianna continues with her day
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
Arianna looks over to the man as he says the joke and smiles at the man "sir, i think you have had 1 too many drinks, its time for you to get yourself home" she goes back to her drink ignoring the mans comments
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
Arianna walks through a local market looking for food to buy for her next meal, as she notices a young woman wearing a very expensive looking necklace, and accidentally bumps into her. "oh I'm so sorry miss"
Woman: no need to apologize i wasn't paying attention
Arianna focuses back on her necklace "miss that is a very nice necklace, may i ask where you purchased it"
The woman points down the street "i bought at a rare jewel salesmen over that way"
Arianna "thank you" walks down the street towards the shop
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? noOrionisy, repost
IGN: Orionisy
Real-Life Age: 15
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name?: fade.zigglehorn33. I would like to be told IGN if added.
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing an rp into someone else without giving them a chance to do anything.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: using out of character knowledge to aid you in RP
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: when i can be a character that i can be, and explore different life choices
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: NO ONE
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: If it your character has reason in rp to
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: when talking about an issue in an rp
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: yes
Who is allowed to use magic?: mage
Who are the Fallen?: an isolated nomadic race
When and how did our current government come to be?: in 169 A.R the chancellery rose to power because the linyera monarchy was defeated in 167 a.r
Who are the Order of Aradin?: brought to creation around 170 A.R to protect the chancellery from any type of attack
What are the Net and Essence?: Net=a type of barrier that has been there since the raising, that catches someone who may fall from an island and transports them back to the nearest island…….Essence= an energy you can obtain by overcoming basic things like…defeating monsters, mining ores, cooking foods…(prevents losing items from net
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: the land of yalin…rise of the elders…. akavir
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: the land of yalin=owner left…Rise of the elders=redoing lore and map…akavir= i want to find a different experience of role-play because all are the same, and this one has many features that intrigue me
Character Information
Name: Arianna "Ari" Fletcher
Age: 20
Class: ranger
Citizen of the Chancellery or a member of the Medori?: citizen of the chancellery
Physical description: 5'6, 115 lb, thin body ((not super thin, like kind of)) green eyes, with dark red hair
Screen capture of your skin: my skin is still being made, i will update the post with the screen shot when i make it.
Biography:
Arianna Fletcher was born into a richer upscale family, who didn’t appreciate her birth because they wanted a boy to live up the family’s legacy. Her parents had shunned her and didn’t even bother to give her a name. Her parent raised her till she was about five, calling her, ‘child’ and not even a proper name. After 5 years of being treated horribly, her parents finally gave her up. They left her on a road, not bothering to look back. As a toddler, she had no idea why her parents left her and she barely remembers them. After nearly three long hours of waiting, Arianna began to cry.
A group of men, in a small group bandits, had found the crying girl. Grinning, they decided to take her in. When they tried asking her for a name, she didn’t answer. After some time, they realized the girl didn’t have the name. One of the bandits suggested the name Arianna, which was his deceased wife’s name.
Growing up, at first, the bandits made her do chores in their facility, such as clean their weapons and tend to their every needs. She grew up extremely stubborn, and would try to escape every now and then. Though, every time she tried, she failed and Arianna was whipped and beaten severely.
As time went on, Arianna grew. As did the difficulty of the chores. Arianna remained stubborn and naive, believing she would eventually find a way to escape. This led to her punishments becoming worse. as a result of all the whippings, she has many scars and bruises from lashings and being beat.
Arianna as well as all of the other slaves, were under fed and dieting of starvation and sickness from the bad quality of the little food they had. Arianna was done with the treatment, she wanted out as soon as possible. when she was 18 she heard that some that a young slave girl named Kayla was grouping together a rebellion against the bandits, and she gladly joined. She began to construct a small dagger with some broken chains which were used to hold her still when she was whipped. after a year of preparing for the rebellion she was told one day in advanced that the next day, they would free themselves from their bondage. the next day, they split into small groups of 3 to 4 and began to move out.
all of the children began to move a the same time through the forest in silence. not after long scream to the sides of Arianna were heard and she turned to see her whole group had been captured, she was grabbed in the hand. Arianna turned to the man grabbing her arm, and struggled to escape, eventually stabbing him in the neck, grabbing the aviation goggles on his head as a token. she then sprinted as fast as her legs could take her and after a while of running, was free.
She was finally free, she was tired and thirsty, but happy it was all over. she then thought of all the children who may have died, she was a lucky one and she was grateful (to be continued)
What is your character’s main goal?: To become a respected person in her community.
Strengths: she is very confident in herself, and is very fit. makes up for weakness with agility and speed
Weaknesses: She tends to be clingy, barely any strength. Arianna is very weak, due to the fact that she has become weak from all of the whippings and beatings as a slave
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which?: Yes, Kayla (Tiffosaur). She introduced me to this server
In-Character-Responses:
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
Arianna noticed a group of armored men harassing a young girl and she approaches them with caution "excuse me, what are you doing to her?!?"
One of the men turns to arianna "this girl stole from a vendor"
Arianna takes out a rather large amount of money and throws it at the men, then goes over to the girl and takes her hand "Are you okay?"
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
Arianna: I'm sorry sir, I'm not sure i want to risk my life for a reward, and if you are asking me, i think you could do it yourself
The man continues to look for someone to do the deed for him
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
Arianna looks over to the man begging, then takes out some money and runs to the nearest market and buys some food. she returns to the man and kneels next to him and reaches out her hand with the food. "sir, i hope this helps you"
The man smiles at arianna with an immense joy as he takes the food "thank you miss"
Arianna continues with her day
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
Arianna looks over to the man as he says the joke and smiles at the man "sir, i think you have had 1 too many drinks, its time for you to get yourself home" she goes back to her drink ignoring the mans comments
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
Arianna walks through a local market looking for food to buy for her next meal, as she notices a young woman wearing a very expensive looking necklace, and accidentally bumps into her. "oh I'm so sorry miss"
Woman: no need to apologize i wasn't paying attention
Arianna focuses back on her necklace "miss that is a very nice necklace, may i ask where you purchased it"
The woman points down the street "i bought at a rare jewel salesmen over that way"
Arianna "thank you" walks down the street towards the shop
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? no
Alright. Your strengths and weaknesses are good now. But your bio and your ICRs are still VERY poor. For your bio, you basically just leeched off of Tiff, not adding much about what your character is actually like. You haven't really shown anything about her personality. Flesh her out more, give her some quirks and distinguishing attributes. Normally the ICRs help a lot to tell us what a character's personality is like, but seeing as yours were so bad, it didn't tell me much of anything. Please brush these up, make them a bit longer, and show more of your character's personality. Another thing was that a few things in your character's story just didn't make sense.. Like the way her parents abandoned her. Could they REALLY just do that without a second thought? Wouldn't it be difficult for them? And would they really even do it at all..? So they wanted a boy - I don't think they'd just throw there girl away, especially at such a young age. Another part that felt awkward was when she stabbed the man in the neck and stole his goggles. Wouldn't it be hard for her to kill someone for the first time? Show some emotion about her first kill - go into more detail with the struggle. It seems like you just did this because you want your character to wear goggles.. And if that's the case.. Well.. She could have just bought the goggles at a store or something after she escaped. >_>
A lot of things need worked on. My advice is to read your character's bio and ICRs outloud before posting your app again to check for any awkwardness. And just to reiterate, MORE EMOTION. Your character needs more personality.
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Stoutgutt
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: yeppers
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing rp onto an unwilling
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: using knowledge that the character does not have
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: to experience another life through your imagination.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: no one can yay!
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: when the roleplay calls for it
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: certain cases where u need to resolve a problem or in one the separate chats.
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: yes
Who is allowed to use magic?: mages
Who are the Fallen?: a nomadic tribe who isolates themselves from the chancellery
When and how did our current government come to be?: linyera monarchy was defeated in 167 AR and lead to the chancellery coming to power in 169 AR
Who are the Order of Aradin?: Knights who are sworn to protect the chancellery from harm
What are the Net and Essence? The Net is a magically barrier that catches people from dying in the endless void. Essence is the character's experience manifesting in the world
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: had a long break from rping but ive rped in many mc servers, WC3, WOW, D&D, and other such games where u can make some good rp
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: dont quite remember all the names but usaully left because the server died or the people werent that friendly
Character Information
Name: Ryan Mc' Collon
Age: 21
Class: Swordsman
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Citizen of the Chancellory
Physical description: 6 foot 4 inches high. Broad Shouldered. His build is slightly muscled due to his training in the sword but still has some flab due to his weakness for sweets :). But his gaze is one of exhaustion from long nights guarding his brother from any harm. Hair : Reddish gold. Eyes: light blue. Skin : Pale white due to armour covering it.
Screen capture of your skin: and i have no clue where i put that but i can give a description. It is a Dark gold plate armour with visible chain mail hanging
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Ryan and his brother moved into the capital as the outerlying towns began decline in population. During the move their airship hit the side of an island causing the boat the shake wildly in air. Once the captain got the ship under control their parents were lost. Many supposed the fell off with a few others during the turbulance. Since their parents were gone Ryan developed a paranoia of losing his younger brother and took many strides both good and bad to protect his brother. This reason is why he picked up the sword art and joined the local guard. He and his brother now live in the capital living out their lives to the ever changing currents of the capital.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): To ensure his Brother protection.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Strong, Motovated, has a slight sense of justice.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): Sweets, his paranoia over his brothers protection, does not like magic being done around him.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Soon to be posted Micky Mc' Collon
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl. Yells " Get away from her" rushes in and attempts to push the men away from her. One pulls out a sword and snarls " This girl stole from our boss!" "That doesn't matter!" Ryan shouted back. He unsteathed his sword and struck at the man's sword hand.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. "Well im sorry sir but i have guard duty tonight maybe you can get a local drunk at the tavern to do" Dismisses him and walks away.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. Ryan Sees the old man in the refuses and feels guilt well up in him. He walks over to the old man and gives him a few silver coins, mumbles "he's just a poor old man" and pulls out his secret stash of sweets and gives him half.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. " Well my mother is bloody dead you son of a cow" Smacks him upside the head knocking him to the ground. As the drunk stumbles back up Ryan hands him another ale. " Here take it get more drunk and forget what happened,sorry."
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. Looks at the beautiful necklace and compliments the woman on it. "Why such a lovely necklace Madam." " Stop looking you bloody pervert!" "Only compliment Ma'm. Only Complimenting."
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?
not really Other notes
stoutgutt_yes- I'm sorry, you didn't make the cut. This app was honestly sad. You had a few things wrong in your OOC section, in fact, you copy+pasted one definition from the OP and put it into your application here. The bio has to be 400 words long at least, it says that in the app itself. You didn't even write 100 words, man, come on.. The story itself was very poor and generic as well, and the ICRs were sub-par as well. Please do not post your application again. Anyway.. Thanks for filling out the app as much as you did.. I guess.. Good luck finding another RP server.
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): No
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing RP on a character who doesn't agree on it.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using out of character knowledge to RP
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Simulating in a realistic, fun lifestyle.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: no one
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: Only under RP.
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: Only to dissolve disputes, or privately in a seperate chat.
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yes
Who is allowed to use magic?: Mages
Who are the Fallen?: Isolated Nomadic Tribe
When and how did our current government come to be?: Linyera monarchy was overthrown 167AR shortly after 169 AR the chancellor came to power.
Who are the Order of Aradin?: Knights sworn to protect and serve the Chancellery.
What are the Net and Essence?: The Net is a force that protects people from falling forever, but items are removed from the player. The essence is character experience similar to magic.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: Some
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: Off hand RP
Character Information
Name: Mickey Mc 'Collon
Age: 16
Class: crafter
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Citizen of the Chancellory.
Physical description: Height-68 inches
eye color- brown
hair color- dark brown
race- human
skin color- light tan Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Mickey Mc 'Collon and Ryan Mc 'Collon were from an outlying village with their parents. They left the village as its population was decreasing. As the family left on their airship, they bumped into a nearby floating island which caused the brothers' parents to fall off the airship never to be seen again. The brothers move to the capitol where Ryan looks after his younger brother Mickey. Mickey takes up the position as a crafter to provide his brother and himself with weaponry and to make money to support them both.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): To make the best of his life.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Tolerant person has great physical strength, runs decently fast. Doesn't tire easily, works well alone or with others.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): On the rare occasions that someone manages to get him angry, he doesn't have complete control of himself. He doesn't fear death, but approaches it recklessly often putting himself and his brother in danger.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Younger brother to Ryan Mc.'Collon (simultaneously yet to be accepted)
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armored men harassing a young girl. Knowing taking on the armored men would be foolish, Mickey creates a distraction. He runs up to the men and yells "Help! There's people raiding that store, defend the Capitol!" The fooled men arm themselves as they run from the girl to find this imaginary menace. He then ques the girl to escape with the wink of an eye as he flees the scene.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. Mickey asks "what am exactly am I retrieving for you?" After the man explains, Mickey mindlessly runs to Bloodstone not thinking of the dangers ahead. He makes sure to leave a note for his brother telling him where he's gone to.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. Mickey checks himself for any money or supplies. He hands the old man some of today's profits and some the only food he has with him. After handing them to the old man, he gives a smile and walks back to the workshop.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. Mickey having lost his mother takes it personally and instinctively strikes the man. As the man falls to the ground he continuously beats the man even as bystanders try to calm him down. He only stops when his brother arrives to remind him of his priorities.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. Mickey stares with curiosity and awe, gaining the attention of the woman herself. Noticing her, Mickey raises his brows, smiles, and compliments her necklace and the effect it has on her. Charmed, the woman smiles back with much thanks.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? No
Alright, this is a big one. The last guy to post an app like this got rejected on the spot. I decided not to do this to yours, and to give you a chance to try again. And to REALLY try. I'm sorry if this seems a bit harsh, but this app looks like it lacks ANY sort of effort. It also looks like you didn't even read the instructions on how to make an app. Lets break it down shall we?
First, people are only allowed to kill each other IC if both consent to the action. Second, players can only use magic if they complete the correct courses at the Acadamy. PLEASE read the rules and lore properly.
Moving on to the bio. It's too short. And thats an understatement. Minimum wording is 400 and this looks like 100. Your bio is very important, as it sums up your characters entire LIFE up until present moment. It gives reason for their personality and goals, and is usually creative and interesting. This goes for the IC responses too. Also, the person who was going to be your brother has been rejected, so you may have to rethink things there.
Your goal is too short and overdone. Think about this again after re-doing your bio. It needs more interest and story to go with it. Be creative.
Your strengths are ok, but adding to them is wise. Your weaknesses however, need a lot more added to them. It looks like one thing that you just repeated with the whole "anger" thing.
In the ICR, the armed men are not guards, why would they defend the Capitol? The other responses are dull and short, and need to be more creative.
I hope you realize I am not trying to be rude or mean, but the other Whitelisters would have rejected you on the spot. Please have a look at past apps that have been accepted to get an idea. Go over all the stuff on the list above, and make an effort on it. It is a lot of work but if you really want to join us, its worth the extra hard work. However I will issue a warning. Since this app was really rejection worthy, I will only give you ONE chance to re-do this. I wish you the best of luck.
Physical description: Approximately 6’1 in height, nice silky milk chocolate brown hair, He has an extremely nice muscle cut for his size (his muscles being a bit bulky but not too much). He usually wears his grandfathers goggles with a luxurious brown leather jacket. A lot of people would call him abnormally handsome. He has no facial hair currently but may choose to grow some.
Screen capture of your skin: (It is not done yet)
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Born to an extremely wealthy family Preston never had any financial troubles growing up. His father was a pretty well known noble/knight and his mother worked a tailor shop. As a young child Preston often wandered away from home and exploring the world all by himself. His mother worried often when he left home and worried each day weather her young boy would come back. As soon as she could Preston's Mother put him in school to become a scholar. Preston enjoyed learning but he did not wish to be a scholar. He wanted to create something, Something that would possibly have his name known all over. Growing up Preston obtained as much knowledge as he could in many subjects. At the age of 13 he often met with a blacksmith who taught him the basics of smithing. His father being a knight taught him a lot about marksmanship. Though Preston was extremely profound with bow by the age of 16, he soon started comming up with concepts for a new type of bow. Preston begin to spend a lot of time looking into trinkets, and gadgets, so he decided he wanted to know a lot more about them. He met a engineer name Matthias Theinvield and together they began researching the different trinkets and gadgets, begging to come up with new concepts combining them. They spent most of their days researching and attempting to come up with new ways to do common things. The more and more Preston learned about the crafting the more fascinated and curious he became. By the age of 20 Preston knew tons of things about about mechanisms and simple machines but he felt there was alot more he could learn about the subjects. One day in travels he met a aspiring airship captain named Crador. Preston and Crador began traveling together and begin to become closer and closer. They eventually became the best of friends and the amongst the most competitive of rivals. As Preston grew closer to his mid 20’s he began to work out and gain strength. He decided that he wanted his body as healthy and perfect as one could be. He worked out with all his might each day until he felt that he was fine with his body. His rival Crador being 1 year older also begin working out with all his might. Together they turned simple muscle building into a competition. Preston and Crador continue to travel with each other exploring everything they can and chasing women.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): To excel over Crador and become a world renowned engineer and to possibly create some of the greatest inventions the world has ever seen. Strengths (Both physical and personality): He is very good getting others to do what he wants them to do with his words. He also is rather strong for a man and can fend for himself. He is very good with a bow as his father taught him everything he knows. Also, if he needs to he can smith his own armor and weapons with the basics he learned from the blacksmith. He is very creative and can easily outsmart anyone against him.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality): He gets distracted very easily and often this keeps him off his goals. He isn’t the best with words and can be rash. It takes a lot for him to become enraged but once he is enraged it takes a lot for him to be calmed. He has a deep addiction to alcoholic beverages.(Alchoholic) He can be very arrogant and he gets jealous very easily. He has a scar on back from being burned by the furnace of the blacksmith while he was being careless.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): No but he might have a connection to a character who is applying.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armored men harassing a young girl. Preston is doing one of his daily thought strolls, pondering all the possibilities of new mechanisms he can create, when he sees a couple of rugged men picking on a young girl. He approaches the men politely and ask them to leave the girl alone for it makes them seem a bit barbaric. The men look at him a bit confused so he hands them each a few coins and tells them to go purchase whatever they would like with his good money. The men shrug and waltz away like children in a toy store.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. He glares at the man as if he were crazy. He simply shakes his head at the man and begins to walk away. On his walk back to his domain he begins to think about Bloodstone and how there has to be a way to safely get there and retrieve the item. When, he gets to his house he sits and thinks hard about different ways to safely retrieve an item from such a horrid place without ever stepping foot there.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. Tosses the man some bread and tells him to go find some work. He explains that it isn't that hard if you put your mind to it and that age shouldn't stop him from becoming something great.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. Preston refuses to ignore the comment and continues to drink his ale. As he sips he slowly becomes drunk and angry. He approaches the man hits him dead in his nose and insults the mans mother. He is then removed from the bar by some of the citys guards and taken to his home.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. He begins to chat with the woman flirting with her a bit. He tells her his fascination of her necklace and asks her to draw a quick sketch. He begins coming up with ideas to make the necklace even better. He puts his ideas together creating the ultimate necklace and gives it to the woman for allowing him to take a sketch of her necklace.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? No.
The Meaning of Life, the Universe, and Everything.
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silentstealth - Your character is rather OP, considering he can wield weapons as well as make them. While a craftsman could probably swing a hammer or something quite well, the whole point of classes is to balance characters. Just power him down and flesh out the ICRs some more, and you should be fine.
Many, many things went wrong with you app. Lets start from the beginning, shall we?
For starters, many of your OOC answers were extremely weak. For example: "Who can use magic?: Mages." While not technically incorrect, we would have liked for you to give more concise and in-depth answers. As to which questions, pretty much all of them. Moving on.
Now we are in the land of IC. First off, while not technically disallowed, unique names that AREN'T YOUR IGN are a big bonus. We like interesting, well thought out characters here, not ones whose names are fairly drab and boring or just taken from something else (In this case, a slightly modified version of your IGN). Moving on down the list, my gosh, but your character is one tall fifteen year old. Six seven? Not likely. You also cannot start out as any of the classes that require a scholarship at the Academy unless you have been explicitly told by the all mighty Welknair, Baeshra, or anyone else of similar importance. Or a lore master. They work too. Unfortunately for you, you lacked this permission, so right off the bat your character is a no no. You also must be a Chancellory citizen or a Medori to play. You didn't even answer the question, which required a specific answer, correctly. It was not an optional thing. Your bio was honestly a pain to read, mainly because of the complete lack of spaces after any form of punctuation, on top of the unnecessary number of commas.. Not fun to read. Your bio was also extremely unrealistic. For instance, you say he was eight and already a great alchemist? Even if he was taught since he was four, that's still not that long to learn such a complex thing, especially for a child. You also say that the bandits decided to KILL EVERYONE except the TEN YEAR OLD CHILD AND HIS FAMILY, opting instead to force him to kill them so that he could join their merry band. Real talk. He's ten. He wouldn't kill his family so that he could be forced into slave labour. That makes absolutely no sense. Also, the world of TAC takes place on multiple small to medium sized floating islands. A horde of bandits couldn't simply wander around literally destroying towns without the Chancellory finding out and crushing them like the ants they are. Finally, your ICRs. Wow. Weak. We want actions, dialogue, the whole bit. Not just a single sentence of what your character says.
You also stated you played on two other "strict" servers. While I don't see us as being strict per se, we almost certainly are tough to get into and could be precieved as being strict. I'm assuming you left those other servers because you found them strict, so we probably aren't the best for you right now.
Thank you for showing interest in TAC and best of luck in finding a new server. Please do NOT contact myself or any other staff members about this app. Please do not reapply or post hate on either our forums or this thread.
Thank you for showing interest in TAC and best of luck in finding a new server. Please do NOT contact myself or any other staff members about this app. Please do not reapply or post hate on either our forums or this thread.
Oh yes it has Zek. in fact, on of our server threads got shut down for a couple days because of the amount of off topicness, mostly caused by angry people and very excited players. It was quite the adventure.
Physical description: Approximately 6’1 in height, nice silky milk chocolate brown hair, He has an extremely nice muscle cut for his size (his muscles being a bit bulky but not too much). He usually wears his grandfathers goggles with a luxurious brown leather jacket. A lot of people would call him abnormally handsome. He has no facial hair currently but may choose to grow some.
Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Born to an extremely wealthy family Preston never had any financial troubles growing up. His father was a pretty well known noble/knight and his mother worked in a tailor shop. As a young child Preston often wandered away from home and exploring the world all by himself. His mother often worried when he left home and worried each day weather her young boy would come back. As soon as she could Preston's Mother put him in school to become a scholar. Preston enjoyed learning but he did not wish to be a scholar. He wanted to create something, Something that would possibly have his name known all over. Growing up Preston obtained as much knowledge as he could in many subjects. At the age of 13 he often met with a blacksmith who taught him the basics of smithing. His father being a knight taught him a lot about marksmanship. Though Preston was never profound with a bow by the age of 16 he knew how a bow worked in and out, he soon started coming up with concepts for a new type of bow. Preston begin to spend a lot of time looking into trinkets, and gadgets, so he decided he wanted to know a lot more about them. He met a engineer name Matthias Theinvield and together they began researching the different trinkets and gadgets, begging to come up with new concepts combining them. They spent most of their days researching and attempting to come up with new ways to do common things. The more and more Preston learned about the crafting the more fascinated and curious he became. By the age of 20 Preston knew tons of things about about mechanisms and simple machines but he felt there was alot more he could learn about the subjects. One day in travels he met a aspiring airship captain named Crador. Preston and Crador began traveling together and begin to become closer and closer. They eventually became the best of friends and the amongst the most competitive of rivals. As Preston grew closer to his mid 20’s he began to work out and gain strength. He decided that he wanted his body as healthy and perfect as one could be. He worked out with all his might each day until he felt that he was fine with his body. His rival Crador being 1 year older also begin working out with all his might. Together they turned simple muscle building into a competition. Preston and Crador continue to travel with each other exploring everything they can and chasing women.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): To excel over Crador and become a world renowned engineer and to possibly create some of the greatest inventions the world has ever seen. Strengths (Both physical and personality): He is very good getting others to do what he wants them to do with his words. He also is rather strong for a man and can fend for himself. He is very intelligent. Also, if he needs to he can come up with concepts to craft special armor and weapons specified for different needs. He is very creative and can easily outsmart anyone against him.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality): He gets distracted very easily and often this keeps him off his goals. He isn’t the best with words and can be rash. It takes a lot for him to become enraged but once he is enraged it takes a lot for him to be calmed. He has a deep addiction to alcoholic beverages.(Alchoholic) He can be very arrogant and he gets jealous very easily. He has a scar on the back from being burned by the furnace of the blacksmith while he was being careless.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): No but he might have a connection to a character who is applying.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armored men harassing a young girl. Preston is doing one of his daily thought strolls, pondering all the possibilities of new mechanisms he can create, when he sees a couple of rugged men picking on a young girl. He approaches the men politely and ask them to leave the girl alone for it makes them seem a bit barbaric. The men look at him a bit confused so he hands them each a few coins and tells them to go purchase whatever they would like with his good money. The men shrug and waltz away like children in a toy store. He comforts the girl and makes sure she gets home safely from any further harassment.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. He glares at the man as if he were crazy. He simply shakes his head at the man and begins to walk away. On his walk back to his domain he begins to think about Bloodstone and how there has to be a way to safely get there and retrieve the item. When, he gets to his house he sits and thinks hard about different ways to safely retrieve an item from such a horrid place without ever stepping foot there. When he gets home he begins to draw up elaborate plans, that may either work perfectly or fail.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. Is walking through the city square when he sees an elderly man who is begging for food. He reaches in his rucksack pulling out a loaf of bread and some pork. He hands the old man the fresh food and makes the old man promise to get a job. In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. Preston refuses to ignore the comment and continues to drink his ale. As he sips he slowly becomes drunk and angry. He approaches the man hits him dead in his nose and insults the man's mother. He is then removed from the bar by some of the city's guards and taken to his home.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. He begins to chat with the woman flirting with her a bit. He tells her his fascination of her necklace and asks her to draw a quick sketch. He begins coming up with ideas to make the necklace even better. He puts his ideas together creating the ultimate necklace and gives it to the woman for allowing him to take a sketch of her necklace.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? No.
Many, many things went wrong with you app. Lets start from the beginning, shall we?
For starters, many of your OOC answers were extremely weak. For example: "Who can use magic?: Mages." While not technically incorrect, we would have liked for you to give more concise and in-depth answers. As to which questions, pretty much all of them. Moving on.
Now we are in the land of IC. First off, while not technically disallowed, unique names that AREN'T YOUR IGN are a big bonus. We like interesting, well thought out characters here, not ones whose names are fairly drab and boring or just taken from something else (In this case, a slightly modified version of your IGN). Moving on down the list, my gosh, but your character is one tall fifteen year old. Six seven? Not likely. You also cannot start out as any of the classes that require a scholarship at the Academy unless you have been explicitly told by the all mighty Welknair, Baeshra, or anyone else of similar importance. Or a lore master. They work too. Unfortunately for you, you lacked this permission, so right off the bat your character is a no no. You also must be a Chancellory citizen or a Medori to play. You didn't even answer the question, which required a specific answer, correctly. It was not an optional thing. Your bio was honestly a pain to read, mainly because of the complete lack of spaces after any form of punctuation, on top of the unnecessary number of commas.. Not fun to read. Your bio was also extremely unrealistic. For instance, you say he was eight and already a great alchemist? Even if he was taught since he was four, that's still not that long to learn such a complex thing, especially for a child. You also say that the bandits decided to KILL EVERYONE except the TEN YEAR OLD CHILD AND HIS FAMILY, opting instead to force him to kill them so that he could join their merry band. Real talk. He's ten. He wouldn't kill his family so that he could be forced into slave labour. That makes absolutely no sense. Also, the world of TAC takes place on multiple small to medium sized floating islands. A horde of bandits couldn't simply wander around literally destroying towns without the Chancellory finding out and crushing them like the ants they are. Finally, your ICRs. Wow. Weak. We want actions, dialogue, the whole bit. Not just a single sentence of what your character says.
You also stated you played on two other "strict" servers. While I don't see us as being strict per se, we almost certainly are tough to get into and could be precieved as being strict. I'm assuming you left those other servers because you found them strict, so we probably aren't the best for you right now.
Thank you for showing interest in TAC and best of luck in finding a new server. Please do NOT contact myself or any other staff members about this app. Please do not reapply or post hate on either our forums or this thread.
NOTE: Since this application was written for a side character (I've already been accepted and am staff), I left out the OOC part. If you need me to add it again, I shall do so.
Character Information
Name: Cicero DeHaine
Age: 29
Class: Alchemist
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Citizen of the Chancellory
Physical description: Cicero is 5’10, and an albino. He is slightly thinner than the average person of his height. His hair is a little longer than normal length, and he usually wears a purple cloak. He has “lazy eye” (amblyopia) in his left eye, and his general expression normally lacks emotion.
Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.):
Cicero DeHaine was born in the countryside, in a small shack. His father, Jacob, was a priest, and his mother, Annaleigh, was a very skilled alchemist who studied in the academy before marrying. Jacob and Annaleigh’s parenthood was not planned, so the discovery of Annaleigh’s pregnancy came as a nasty shock to them. Discovering that their child was small and sickly (and not to mention unusual-looking, being an albino), did little to improve their parental sentiments.
It just so happened that a small rift opened a few days after Cicero was born, and so some of the first images he saw in the world were images of the fiery vortex. The rift (and Cicero’s frailness) made Jacob and Annaleigh decide to move into the capital so that they’d have better access to care for their child. Cicero’s father became a priest of the church while his mother set up an alchemist’s shop. Cicero often watched his mother brew her potions, becoming fascinated with alchemy. Over the first seven or so years of his life, he also developed an obsession with fire, intrigued by it’s consuming and all-powerful nature. His parents slowly grew closer and closer to seeing him as just another normal human being, identifying him as their child as opposed to just an Albino. He grew up as a rather lonely child, but at least his parents accepted him.
At the age of fifteen, that began to change. A few months after Cicero’s 15th birthday, he began to show signs of schizophrenia. He began to notice that sometimes, lights would be too bright and sounds too loud. Other times, he would feel a simple feeling of detachment with his life. He would also be very hypersensitive to criticism, and began to experience moods wings. The extreme symptoms began when Cicero’s mother began to teach him alchemy. From time to time, he would experience the erratic and unusual fear that people could read his mind and thoughts. All it took was a small glance, and suddenly, he would wonder if his privacy was being breached. One day, during an alchemy lesson, Cicero's mother was running through the different types of base potions when suddenly he had one of his irrational fears. Something told Cicero to grab a harmful potion from his mother’s “off-limits” shelf. When his mother told him to put the potion down, he shouted back that she was reading his thoughts and that she should stop. Extremely confused, his mother tried to reason with him, but something kept telling him to hold onto the potion. It was then that he realized that it was a voice speaking to him, as opposed to just himself. The voice seemed nice. The voice seemed like it knew what it was talking about. The voice said to throw the potion, and Cicero did.
His mother was badly scarred and sent to an infirmary. Jacob, furious, threw Cicero out of the house after Cicero tried to explain the voices to him, calling him a madman and telling him never to come back. Cicero moved into the streets, alone, with only the voices in his head to talk to. The following ten years of Cicero’s life would prove to be difficult. He would always look for work, and sometimes find it, but eventually, his schizophrenia would catch up to him and cause him to lose everything that he’d gained. He didn’t understand why the voices were a problem--nobody else wanted to talk to him and be his friend but them. Whenever he needed advice, they were there for him. Although those ten years were years of failure in the area of finding and keeping a job, Cicero did slowly begin to improve in the area of alchemy. Sometimes, the voices in his head (which slowly grew to be two distinct voices and personalities, one male and the other female), would persuade him to attempt to steal a book or two from a library. Other times, he would spend his money on books instead of food. Through many methods, he built up an understandings of the basics of alchemy.
When Cicero was twenty five, after much struggle, he began to reach out to other people, after being extremely introverted for a long while. He would force himself to stay in taverns and inns and attempt to flirt with girls or simply make new friends. Although it was an extremely slow process, over the next four years he grew to become more and more social and less reliant on the voices. Sometimes, he would even ignore them. Without a doubt, they were still a large part of his life, but he was making steps in the right direction. When Cicero was twenty nine, news of the academy’s reopening spread throughout the capital. He decided to take his chances at becoming an alchemy student there, already having a foundation to build upon. He knew that his disorders might make it harder for him, but nevertheless, he was determined to try.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): Cicero does not have many goals, but one of them is to simply be accepted by society, and to be seen for who he is as opposed to just the labels put on him (albino, mentally ill, etc.). He also has ambitions in the realm of alchemy, hoping to become a great potion master because he believes that this will cause people to respect him.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Cicero is resourceful, and normally thinks ahead. He is also fairly fast and calculating. When he wants to/can be, he can be charming.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): Being a schizophrenic brings many weaknesses to Cicero. The symptoms from these two disorders are seemingly random. From time to time, he hears voices and hallucinates. Over time, he has come to have a sort of dependency on these voices, who normally come to him when he is lonely.He also has trouble speaking and organizing thoughts at times. He cares about how others view him, and so he is extra sensitive to criticism. He is not the strongest person either. He has also shown signs of paranoia, but that condition is still progressing. Being an albino, the sunlight tends to bother his skin if he is out for too long, and his eyesight is nowhere near perfect.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Nope.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
Cicero is in one of his unstable states at the moment, and is interacting with the voices in his head. He takes a few steps back from the scene, fear rising within him. He begins to murmur to himself: “I should go help the girl, shouldn’t I?” He waits for one of his voices to help him. There is no response. “Hello?” he asks quietly, surprised that the voices have suddenly stopped. “I need help! What do I do? Do I help the girl? Or not?” There is still a silence. Cicero kicks the sidewalk. “Don’t leave me! Where are you?” When there is still no response, he cries out: “Help me!” The two men turn to him and away from the girl momentarily. When Cicero sees that he’s been noticed, the turns and sprints away as quickly as he can, forgetting about the girl in an instant.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
Cicero frowns after being asked the question. “I don’t know, what do you think?” The man glances at him oddly. “What was that?” “I wasn’t talking to you.” You shouldn’t, a voice in Cicero’s mind says. The man raises an eyebrow. “All right...” “No, I’m not going to go to Bloodstone.”
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
Cicero ignores the man, walking past them. He’s not your responsibility, he thinks to himself. The voices agree.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
Cicero takes another swig of his drink and then turns to the man, his red eyes narrowing. “That wasn’t nice. Take it back. TAKE IT BACK.” Cicero then stands up in his chair and in a mad rage, jumps at the man. Why he took so much offense to the man’s comment, even he cannot explain, but the voices cheered him on, so it must have been the right choice. *** Cicero wakes up an indefinite time later, covered in bruises and just outside the tavern.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
Cicero glances at the necklace for a moment. He is in a normal state right now, and in a rather good mood, so he attempts to flirt with the woman, starting with: “Hello, nice necklace you’ve got there...”
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? Nein.
Note: My character hasn't diagnosed his conditions, so he really doesn't understand why he is the way he is. I just thought that I'd clear that up: I don't believe that schizophrenia is a known illness at this point.
gamer9726- A very interesting character. Glad to see somebody else take up the position of Schizo this server, didn't wanna have to re-boot Ben. ;P
Thanks!
Also, does anybody know if Welk has made a Planetminecraft post for us, or created a server on servers.minecraftforum.net? If not, we should probably ask him to.
Let it be done.
I'm so excited for this!
IGN: Orionisy
Real-Life Age: 15
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name?: fade.zigglehorn33. I would like to be told IGN if added.
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing an rp into someone else without giving them a chance to do anything.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: using out of character knowledge to aid you in RP
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: when i can be a character that i can be, and explore different life choices
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: NO ONE
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: If it your character has reason in rp to
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: when talking about an issue in an rp
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: yes
Who is allowed to use magic?: mage
Who are the Fallen?: an isolated nomadic race
When and how did our current government come to be?: in 169 A.R the chancellery rose to power because the linyera monarchy was defeated in 167 a.r
Who are the Order of Aradin?: brought to creation around 170 A.R to protect the chancellery from any type of attack
What are the Net and Essence?: Net=a type of barrier that has been there since the raising, that catches someone who may fall from an island and transports them back to the nearest island…….Essence= an energy you can obtain by overcoming basic things like…defeating monsters, mining ores, cooking foods…(prevents losing items from net
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: the land of yalin…rise of the elders…. akavir
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: the land of yalin=owner left…Rise of the elders=redoing lore and map…akavir= i want to find a different experience of role-play because all are the same, and this one has many features that intrigue me
Character Information
Name: Arianna "Ari" Fletcher
Age: 20
Class: ranger
Citizen of the Chancellery or a member of the Medori?: citizen of the chancellery
Physical description: 5'6, 115 lb, thin body ((not super thin, like kind of)) green eyes, with dark red hair
Screen capture of your skin: my skin is still being made, i will update the post with the screen shot when i make it.
Biography:
Arianna Fletcher was born into a richer upscale family, who didn’t appreciate her birth because they wanted a boy to live up the family’s legacy. Her parents had shunned her and didn’t even bother to give her a name. Her parent raised her till she was about five, calling her, ‘child’ and not even a proper name. After 5 years of being treated horribly, her parents finally gave her up. They left her on a road, not bothering to look back. As a toddler, she had no idea why her parents left her and she barely remembers them. After nearly three long hours of waiting, Arianna began to cry.
A group of men, in a small group bandits, had found the crying girl. Grinning, they decided to take her in. When they tried asking her for a name, she didn’t answer. After some time, they realized the girl didn’t have the name. One of the bandits suggested the name Arianna, which was his deceased wife’s name.
Growing up, at first, the bandits made her do chores in their facility, such as clean their weapons and tend to their every needs. She grew up extremely stubborn, and would try to escape every now and then. Though, every time she tried, she failed and Arianna was whipped and beaten severely.
As time went on, Arianna grew. As did the difficulty of the chores. Arianna remained stubborn and naive, believing she would eventually find a way to escape. This led to her punishments becoming worse. as a result of all the whippings, she has many scars and bruises from lashings and being beat.
Arianna as well as all of the other slaves, were under fed and dieting of starvation and sickness from the bad quality of the little food they had. Arianna was done with the treatment, she wanted out as soon as possible. when she was 18 she heard that some that a young slave girl named Kayla was grouping together a rebellion against the bandits, and she gladly joined. She began to construct a small dagger with some broken chains which were used to hold her still when she was whipped. after a year of preparing for the rebellion she was told one day in advanced that the next day, they would free themselves from their bondage. the next day, they split into small groups of 3 to 4 and began to move out.
all of the children began to move a the same time through the forest in silence. not after long scream to the sides of Arianna were heard and she turned to see her whole group had been captured, she was grabbed in the hand. Arianna turned to the man grabbing her arm, and struggled to escape, eventually stabbing him in the neck, grabbing the aviation goggles on his head as a token. she then sprinted as fast as her legs could take her and after a while of running, was free.
She was finally free, she was tired and thirsty, but happy it was all over. she then thought of all the children who may have died, she was a lucky one and she was grateful (to be continued)
What is your character’s main goal?: To become a respected person in her community.
Strengths: she is very confident in herself, and is very fit. makes up for weakness with agility and speed
Weaknesses: She tends to be clingy, barely any strength. Arianna is very weak, due to the fact that she has become weak from all of the whippings and beatings as a slave
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which?: Yes, Kayla (Tiffosaur). She introduced me to this server
In-Character-Responses:
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
Arianna noticed a group of armored men harassing a young girl and she approaches them with caution "excuse me, what are you doing to her?!?"
One of the men turns to arianna "this girl stole from a vendor"
Arianna takes out a rather large amount of money and throws it at the men, then goes over to the girl and takes her hand "Are you okay?"
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
Arianna: I'm sorry sir, I'm not sure i want to risk my life for a reward, and if you are asking me, i think you could do it yourself
The man continues to look for someone to do the deed for him
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
Arianna looks over to the man begging, then takes out some money and runs to the nearest market and buys some food. she returns to the man and kneels next to him and reaches out her hand with the food. "sir, i hope this helps you"
The man smiles at arianna with an immense joy as he takes the food "thank you miss"
Arianna continues with her day
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
Arianna looks over to the man as he says the joke and smiles at the man "sir, i think you have had 1 too many drinks, its time for you to get yourself home" she goes back to her drink ignoring the mans comments
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
Arianna walks through a local market looking for food to buy for her next meal, as she notices a young woman wearing a very expensive looking necklace, and accidentally bumps into her. "oh I'm so sorry miss"
Woman: no need to apologize i wasn't paying attention
Arianna focuses back on her necklace "miss that is a very nice necklace, may i ask where you purchased it"
The woman points down the street "i bought at a rare jewel salesmen over that way"
Arianna "thank you" walks down the street towards the shop
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? noOrionisy, repost
IGN: Orionisy
Real-Life Age: 15
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name?: fade.zigglehorn33. I would like to be told IGN if added.
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing an rp into someone else without giving them a chance to do anything.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: using out of character knowledge to aid you in RP
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: when i can be a character that i can be, and explore different life choices
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: NO ONE
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: If it your character has reason in rp to
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: when talking about an issue in an rp
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: yes
Who is allowed to use magic?: mage
Who are the Fallen?: an isolated nomadic race
When and how did our current government come to be?: in 169 A.R the chancellery rose to power because the linyera monarchy was defeated in 167 a.r
Who are the Order of Aradin?: brought to creation around 170 A.R to protect the chancellery from any type of attack
What are the Net and Essence?: Net=a type of barrier that has been there since the raising, that catches someone who may fall from an island and transports them back to the nearest island…….Essence= an energy you can obtain by overcoming basic things like…defeating monsters, mining ores, cooking foods…(prevents losing items from net
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: the land of yalin…rise of the elders…. akavir
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: the land of yalin=owner left…Rise of the elders=redoing lore and map…akavir= i want to find a different experience of role-play because all are the same, and this one has many features that intrigue me
Character Information
Name: Arianna "Ari" Fletcher
Age: 20
Class: ranger
Citizen of the Chancellery or a member of the Medori?: citizen of the chancellery
Physical description: 5'6, 115 lb, thin body ((not super thin, like kind of)) green eyes, with dark red hair
Screen capture of your skin: my skin is still being made, i will update the post with the screen shot when i make it.
Biography:
Arianna Fletcher was born into a richer upscale family, who didn’t appreciate her birth because they wanted a boy to live up the family’s legacy. Her parents had shunned her and didn’t even bother to give her a name. Her parent raised her till she was about five, calling her, ‘child’ and not even a proper name. After 5 years of being treated horribly, her parents finally gave her up. They left her on a road, not bothering to look back. As a toddler, she had no idea why her parents left her and she barely remembers them. After nearly three long hours of waiting, Arianna began to cry.
A group of men, in a small group bandits, had found the crying girl. Grinning, they decided to take her in. When they tried asking her for a name, she didn’t answer. After some time, they realized the girl didn’t have the name. One of the bandits suggested the name Arianna, which was his deceased wife’s name.
Growing up, at first, the bandits made her do chores in their facility, such as clean their weapons and tend to their every needs. She grew up extremely stubborn, and would try to escape every now and then. Though, every time she tried, she failed and Arianna was whipped and beaten severely.
As time went on, Arianna grew. As did the difficulty of the chores. Arianna remained stubborn and naive, believing she would eventually find a way to escape. This led to her punishments becoming worse. as a result of all the whippings, she has many scars and bruises from lashings and being beat.
Arianna as well as all of the other slaves, were under fed and dieting of starvation and sickness from the bad quality of the little food they had. Arianna was done with the treatment, she wanted out as soon as possible. when she was 18 she heard that some that a young slave girl named Kayla was grouping together a rebellion against the bandits, and she gladly joined. She began to construct a small dagger with some broken chains which were used to hold her still when she was whipped. after a year of preparing for the rebellion she was told one day in advanced that the next day, they would free themselves from their bondage. the next day, they split into small groups of 3 to 4 and began to move out.
all of the children began to move a the same time through the forest in silence. not after long scream to the sides of Arianna were heard and she turned to see her whole group had been captured, she was grabbed in the hand. Arianna turned to the man grabbing her arm, and struggled to escape, eventually stabbing him in the neck, grabbing the aviation goggles on his head as a token. she then sprinted as fast as her legs could take her and after a while of running, was free.
She was finally free, she was tired and thirsty, but happy it was all over. she then thought of all the children who may have died, she was a lucky one and she was grateful (to be continued)
What is your character’s main goal?: To become a respected person in her community.
Strengths: she is very confident in herself, and is very fit. makes up for weakness with agility and speed
Weaknesses: She tends to be clingy, barely any strength. Arianna is very weak, due to the fact that she has become weak from all of the whippings and beatings as a slave
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which?: Yes, Kayla (Tiffosaur). She introduced me to this server
In-Character-Responses:
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
Arianna noticed a group of armored men harassing a young girl and she approaches them with caution "excuse me, what are you doing to her?!?"
One of the men turns to arianna "this girl stole from a vendor"
Arianna takes out a rather large amount of money and throws it at the men, then goes over to the girl and takes her hand "Are you okay?"
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
Arianna: I'm sorry sir, I'm not sure i want to risk my life for a reward, and if you are asking me, i think you could do it yourself
The man continues to look for someone to do the deed for him
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
Arianna looks over to the man begging, then takes out some money and runs to the nearest market and buys some food. she returns to the man and kneels next to him and reaches out her hand with the food. "sir, i hope this helps you"
The man smiles at arianna with an immense joy as he takes the food "thank you miss"
Arianna continues with her day
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
Arianna looks over to the man as he says the joke and smiles at the man "sir, i think you have had 1 too many drinks, its time for you to get yourself home" she goes back to her drink ignoring the mans comments
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
Arianna walks through a local market looking for food to buy for her next meal, as she notices a young woman wearing a very expensive looking necklace, and accidentally bumps into her. "oh I'm so sorry miss"
Woman: no need to apologize i wasn't paying attention
Arianna focuses back on her necklace "miss that is a very nice necklace, may i ask where you purchased it"
The woman points down the street "i bought at a rare jewel salesmen over that way"
Arianna "thank you" walks down the street towards the shop
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? no
Biggy33/Orionisy-
Alright. Your strengths and weaknesses are good now. But your bio and your ICRs are still VERY poor. For your bio, you basically just leeched off of Tiff, not adding much about what your character is actually like. You haven't really shown anything about her personality. Flesh her out more, give her some quirks and distinguishing attributes. Normally the ICRs help a lot to tell us what a character's personality is like, but seeing as yours were so bad, it didn't tell me much of anything. Please brush these up, make them a bit longer, and show more of your character's personality. Another thing was that a few things in your character's story just didn't make sense.. Like the way her parents abandoned her. Could they REALLY just do that without a second thought? Wouldn't it be difficult for them? And would they really even do it at all..? So they wanted a boy - I don't think they'd just throw there girl away, especially at such a young age. Another part that felt awkward was when she stabbed the man in the neck and stole his goggles. Wouldn't it be hard for her to kill someone for the first time? Show some emotion about her first kill - go into more detail with the struggle. It seems like you just did this because you want your character to wear goggles.. And if that's the case.. Well.. She could have just bought the goggles at a store or something after she escaped. >_>
A lot of things need worked on. My advice is to read your character's bio and ICRs outloud before posting your app again to check for any awkwardness. And just to reiterate, MORE EMOTION. Your character needs more personality.
IGN: stoutgut
Real-Life Age: 16
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Stoutgutt
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: yeppers
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing rp onto an unwilling
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: using knowledge that the character does not have
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: to experience another life through your imagination.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: no one can yay!
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: when the roleplay calls for it
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: certain cases where u need to resolve a problem or in one the separate chats.
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: yes
Who is allowed to use magic?: mages
Who are the Fallen?: a nomadic tribe who isolates themselves from the chancellery
When and how did our current government come to be?: linyera monarchy was defeated in 167 AR and lead to the chancellery coming to power in 169 AR
Who are the Order of Aradin?: Knights who are sworn to protect the chancellery from harm
What are the Net and Essence? The Net is a magically barrier that catches people from dying in the endless void. Essence is the character's experience manifesting in the world
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: had a long break from rping but ive rped in many mc servers, WC3, WOW, D&D, and other such games where u can make some good rp
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: dont quite remember all the names but usaully left because the server died or the people werent that friendly
Character Information
Name: Ryan Mc' Collon
Age: 21
Class: Swordsman
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Citizen of the Chancellory
Physical description: 6 foot 4 inches high. Broad Shouldered. His build is slightly muscled due to his training in the sword but still has some flab due to his weakness for sweets :). But his gaze is one of exhaustion from long nights guarding his brother from any harm. Hair : Reddish gold. Eyes: light blue. Skin : Pale white due to armour covering it.
Screen capture of your skin: and i have no clue where i put that but i can give a description. It is a Dark gold plate armour with visible chain mail hanging
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Ryan and his brother moved into the capital as the outerlying towns began decline in population. During the move their airship hit the side of an island causing the boat the shake wildly in air. Once the captain got the ship under control their parents were lost. Many supposed the fell off with a few others during the turbulance. Since their parents were gone Ryan developed a paranoia of losing his younger brother and took many strides both good and bad to protect his brother. This reason is why he picked up the sword art and joined the local guard. He and his brother now live in the capital living out their lives to the ever changing currents of the capital.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): To ensure his Brother protection.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Strong, Motovated, has a slight sense of justice.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): Sweets, his paranoia over his brothers protection, does not like magic being done around him.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Soon to be posted Micky Mc' Collon
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl. Yells " Get away from her" rushes in and attempts to push the men away from her. One pulls out a sword and snarls " This girl stole from our boss!" "That doesn't matter!" Ryan shouted back. He unsteathed his sword and struck at the man's sword hand.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. "Well im sorry sir but i have guard duty tonight maybe you can get a local drunk at the tavern to do" Dismisses him and walks away.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. Ryan Sees the old man in the refuses and feels guilt well up in him. He walks over to the old man and gives him a few silver coins, mumbles "he's just a poor old man" and pulls out his secret stash of sweets and gives him half.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. " Well my mother is bloody dead you son of a cow" Smacks him upside the head knocking him to the ground. As the drunk stumbles back up Ryan hands him another ale. " Here take it get more drunk and forget what happened,sorry."
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. Looks at the beautiful necklace and compliments the woman on it. "Why such a lovely necklace Madam." " Stop looking you bloody pervert!" "Only compliment Ma'm. Only Complimenting."
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?
not really
Other notes
stoutgutt_yes- I'm sorry, you didn't make the cut. This app was honestly sad. You had a few things wrong in your OOC section, in fact, you copy+pasted one definition from the OP and put it into your application here. The bio has to be 400 words long at least, it says that in the app itself. You didn't even write 100 words, man, come on.. The story itself was very poor and generic as well, and the ICRs were sub-par as well. Please do not post your application again. Anyway.. Thanks for filling out the app as much as you did.. I guess.. Good luck finding another RP server.
Real-Life Age: 18
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): No
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing RP on a character who doesn't agree on it.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using out of character knowledge to RP
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Simulating in a realistic, fun lifestyle.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: no one
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: Only under RP.
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: Only to dissolve disputes, or privately in a seperate chat.
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yes
Who is allowed to use magic?: Mages
Who are the Fallen?: Isolated Nomadic Tribe
When and how did our current government come to be?: Linyera monarchy was overthrown 167AR shortly after 169 AR the chancellor came to power.
Who are the Order of Aradin?: Knights sworn to protect and serve the Chancellery.
What are the Net and Essence?: The Net is a force that protects people from falling forever, but items are removed from the player. The essence is character experience similar to magic.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: Some
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: Off hand RP
Character Information
Name: Mickey Mc 'Collon
Age: 16
Class: crafter
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Citizen of the Chancellory.
Physical description:
Height-68 inches
eye color- brown
hair color- dark brown
race- human
skin color- light tan
Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Mickey Mc 'Collon and Ryan Mc 'Collon were from an outlying village with their parents. They left the village as its population was decreasing. As the family left on their airship, they bumped into a nearby floating island which caused the brothers' parents to fall off the airship never to be seen again. The brothers move to the capitol where Ryan looks after his younger brother Mickey. Mickey takes up the position as a crafter to provide his brother and himself with weaponry and to make money to support them both.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): To make the best of his life.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Tolerant person has great physical strength, runs decently fast. Doesn't tire easily, works well alone or with others.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): On the rare occasions that someone manages to get him angry, he doesn't have complete control of himself. He doesn't fear death, but approaches it recklessly often putting himself and his brother in danger.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Younger brother to Ryan Mc.'Collon (simultaneously yet to be accepted)
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armored men harassing a young girl. Knowing taking on the armored men would be foolish, Mickey creates a distraction. He runs up to the men and yells "Help! There's people raiding that store, defend the Capitol!" The fooled men arm themselves as they run from the girl to find this imaginary menace. He then ques the girl to escape with the wink of an eye as he flees the scene.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. Mickey asks "what am exactly am I retrieving for you?" After the man explains, Mickey mindlessly runs to Bloodstone not thinking of the dangers ahead. He makes sure to leave a note for his brother telling him where he's gone to.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. Mickey checks himself for any money or supplies. He hands the old man some of today's profits and some the only food he has with him. After handing them to the old man, he gives a smile and walks back to the workshop.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. Mickey having lost his mother takes it personally and instinctively strikes the man. As the man falls to the ground he continuously beats the man even as bystanders try to calm him down. He only stops when his brother arrives to remind him of his priorities.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. Mickey stares with curiosity and awe, gaining the attention of the woman herself. Noticing her, Mickey raises his brows, smiles, and compliments her necklace and the effect it has on her. Charmed, the woman smiles back with much thanks.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? No
Other notes:
Alright, this is a big one. The last guy to post an app like this got rejected on the spot. I decided not to do this to yours, and to give you a chance to try again. And to REALLY try. I'm sorry if this seems a bit harsh, but this app looks like it lacks ANY sort of effort. It also looks like you didn't even read the instructions on how to make an app. Lets break it down shall we?
First, people are only allowed to kill each other IC if both consent to the action. Second, players can only use magic if they complete the correct courses at the Acadamy. PLEASE read the rules and lore properly.
Moving on to the bio. It's too short. And thats an understatement. Minimum wording is 400 and this looks like 100. Your bio is very important, as it sums up your characters entire LIFE up until present moment. It gives reason for their personality and goals, and is usually creative and interesting. This goes for the IC responses too. Also, the person who was going to be your brother has been rejected, so you may have to rethink things there.
Your goal is too short and overdone. Think about this again after re-doing your bio. It needs more interest and story to go with it. Be creative.
Your strengths are ok, but adding to them is wise. Your weaknesses however, need a lot more added to them. It looks like one thing that you just repeated with the whole "anger" thing.
In the ICR, the armed men are not guards, why would they defend the Capitol? The other responses are dull and short, and need to be more creative.
I hope you realize I am not trying to be rude or mean, but the other Whitelisters would have rejected you on the spot. Please have a look at past apps that have been accepted to get an idea. Go over all the stuff on the list above, and make an effort on it. It is a lot of work but if you really want to join us, its worth the extra hard work. However I will issue a warning. Since this app was really rejection worthy, I will only give you ONE chance to re-do this. I wish you the best of luck.
Name:
Preston Regaled
Age:
23
Class:
Craftsman
Physical description:
Approximately 6’1 in height, nice silky milk chocolate brown hair, He has an extremely nice muscle cut for his size (his muscles being a bit bulky but not too much). He usually wears his grandfathers goggles with a luxurious brown leather jacket. A lot of people would call him abnormally handsome. He has no facial hair currently but may choose to grow some.
Screen capture of your skin:
(It is not done yet)
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.):
Born to an extremely wealthy family Preston never had any financial troubles growing up. His father was a pretty well known noble/knight and his mother worked a tailor shop. As a young child Preston often wandered away from home and exploring the world all by himself. His mother worried often when he left home and worried each day weather her young boy would come back. As soon as she could Preston's Mother put him in school to become a scholar. Preston enjoyed learning but he did not wish to be a scholar. He wanted to create something, Something that would possibly have his name known all over. Growing up Preston obtained as much knowledge as he could in many subjects. At the age of 13 he often met with a blacksmith who taught him the basics of smithing. His father being a knight taught him a lot about marksmanship. Though Preston was extremely profound with bow by the age of 16, he soon started comming up with concepts for a new type of bow. Preston begin to spend a lot of time looking into trinkets, and gadgets, so he decided he wanted to know a lot more about them. He met a engineer name Matthias Theinvield and together they began researching the different trinkets and gadgets, begging to come up with new concepts combining them. They spent most of their days researching and attempting to come up with new ways to do common things. The more and more Preston learned about the crafting the more fascinated and curious he became. By the age of 20 Preston knew tons of things about about mechanisms and simple machines but he felt there was alot more he could learn about the subjects. One day in travels he met a aspiring airship captain named Crador. Preston and Crador began traveling together and begin to become closer and closer. They eventually became the best of friends and the amongst the most competitive of rivals. As Preston grew closer to his mid 20’s he began to work out and gain strength. He decided that he wanted his body as healthy and perfect as one could be. He worked out with all his might each day until he felt that he was fine with his body. His rival Crador being 1 year older also begin working out with all his might. Together they turned simple muscle building into a competition. Preston and Crador continue to travel with each other exploring everything they can and chasing women.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation):
To excel over Crador and become a world renowned engineer and to possibly create some of the greatest inventions the world has ever seen.
Strengths (Both physical and personality):
He is very good getting others to do what he wants them to do with his words. He also is rather strong for a man and can fend for himself. He is very good with a bow as his father taught him everything he knows. Also, if he needs to he can smith his own armor and weapons with the basics he learned from the blacksmith. He is very creative and can easily outsmart anyone against him.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality):
He gets distracted very easily and often this keeps him off his goals. He isn’t the best with words and can be rash. It takes a lot for him to become enraged but once he is enraged it takes a lot for him to be calmed. He has a deep addiction to alcoholic beverages.(Alchoholic) He can be very arrogant and he gets jealous very easily. He has a scar on back from being burned by the furnace of the blacksmith while he was being careless.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.):
No but he might have a connection to a character who is applying.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armored men harassing a young girl.
Preston is doing one of his daily thought strolls, pondering all the possibilities of new mechanisms he can create, when he sees a couple of rugged men picking on a young girl. He approaches the men politely and ask them to leave the girl alone for it makes them seem a bit barbaric. The men look at him a bit confused so he hands them each a few coins and tells them to go purchase whatever they would like with his good money. The men shrug and waltz away like children in a toy store.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
He glares at the man as if he were crazy. He simply shakes his head at the man and begins to walk away. On his walk back to his domain he begins to think about Bloodstone and how there has to be a way to safely get there and retrieve the item. When, he gets to his house he sits and thinks hard about different ways to safely retrieve an item from such a horrid place without ever stepping foot there.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
Tosses the man some bread and tells him to go find some work. He explains that it isn't that hard if you put your mind to it and that age shouldn't stop him from becoming something great.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
Preston refuses to ignore the comment and continues to drink his ale. As he sips he slowly becomes drunk and angry. He approaches the man hits him dead in his nose and insults the mans mother. He is then removed from the bar by some of the citys guards and taken to his home.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
He begins to chat with the woman flirting with her a bit. He tells her his fascination of her necklace and asks her to draw a quick sketch. He begins coming up with ideas to make the necklace even better. He puts his ideas together creating the ultimate necklace and gives it to the woman for allowing him to take a sketch of her necklace.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?
No.
Other notes: No.
silentstealth - Your character is rather OP, considering he can wield weapons as well as make them. While a craftsman could probably swing a hammer or something quite well, the whole point of classes is to balance characters. Just power him down and flesh out the ICRs some more, and you should be fine.
I'm a man of few words and many voices.
AllenCreeper
Many, many things went wrong with you app. Lets start from the beginning, shall we?
For starters, many of your OOC answers were extremely weak. For example: "Who can use magic?: Mages." While not technically incorrect, we would have liked for you to give more concise and in-depth answers. As to which questions, pretty much all of them. Moving on.
Now we are in the land of IC. First off, while not technically disallowed, unique names that AREN'T YOUR IGN are a big bonus. We like interesting, well thought out characters here, not ones whose names are fairly drab and boring or just taken from something else (In this case, a slightly modified version of your IGN). Moving on down the list, my gosh, but your character is one tall fifteen year old. Six seven? Not likely. You also cannot start out as any of the classes that require a scholarship at the Academy unless you have been explicitly told by the all mighty Welknair, Baeshra, or anyone else of similar importance. Or a lore master. They work too. Unfortunately for you, you lacked this permission, so right off the bat your character is a no no. You also must be a Chancellory citizen or a Medori to play. You didn't even answer the question, which required a specific answer, correctly. It was not an optional thing. Your bio was honestly a pain to read, mainly because of the complete lack of spaces after any form of punctuation, on top of the unnecessary number of commas.. Not fun to read. Your bio was also extremely unrealistic. For instance, you say he was eight and already a great alchemist? Even if he was taught since he was four, that's still not that long to learn such a complex thing, especially for a child. You also say that the bandits decided to KILL EVERYONE except the TEN YEAR OLD CHILD AND HIS FAMILY, opting instead to force him to kill them so that he could join their merry band. Real talk. He's ten. He wouldn't kill his family so that he could be forced into slave labour. That makes absolutely no sense. Also, the world of TAC takes place on multiple small to medium sized floating islands. A horde of bandits couldn't simply wander around literally destroying towns without the Chancellory finding out and crushing them like the ants they are. Finally, your ICRs. Wow. Weak. We want actions, dialogue, the whole bit. Not just a single sentence of what your character says.
You also stated you played on two other "strict" servers. While I don't see us as being strict per se, we almost certainly are tough to get into and could be precieved as being strict. I'm assuming you left those other servers because you found them strict, so we probably aren't the best for you right now.
Thank you for showing interest in TAC and best of luck in finding a new server. Please do NOT contact myself or any other staff members about this app. Please do not reapply or post hate on either our forums or this thread.
~ Mallachie
Wait. Has that happened before? O . o
Name:
Preston Regaled
Age:
23
Class:
Craftsman
Physical description:
Approximately 6’1 in height, nice silky milk chocolate brown hair, He has an extremely nice muscle cut for his size (his muscles being a bit bulky but not too much). He usually wears his grandfathers goggles with a luxurious brown leather jacket. A lot of people would call him abnormally handsome. He has no facial hair currently but may choose to grow some.
Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.):
Born to an extremely wealthy family Preston never had any financial troubles growing up. His father was a pretty well known noble/knight and his mother worked in a tailor shop. As a young child Preston often wandered away from home and exploring the world all by himself. His mother often worried when he left home and worried each day weather her young boy would come back. As soon as she could Preston's Mother put him in school to become a scholar. Preston enjoyed learning but he did not wish to be a scholar. He wanted to create something, Something that would possibly have his name known all over. Growing up Preston obtained as much knowledge as he could in many subjects. At the age of 13 he often met with a blacksmith who taught him the basics of smithing. His father being a knight taught him a lot about marksmanship. Though Preston was never profound with a bow by the age of 16 he knew how a bow worked in and out, he soon started coming up with concepts for a new type of bow. Preston begin to spend a lot of time looking into trinkets, and gadgets, so he decided he wanted to know a lot more about them. He met a engineer name Matthias Theinvield and together they began researching the different trinkets and gadgets, begging to come up with new concepts combining them. They spent most of their days researching and attempting to come up with new ways to do common things. The more and more Preston learned about the crafting the more fascinated and curious he became. By the age of 20 Preston knew tons of things about about mechanisms and simple machines but he felt there was alot more he could learn about the subjects. One day in travels he met a aspiring airship captain named Crador. Preston and Crador began traveling together and begin to become closer and closer. They eventually became the best of friends and the amongst the most competitive of rivals. As Preston grew closer to his mid 20’s he began to work out and gain strength. He decided that he wanted his body as healthy and perfect as one could be. He worked out with all his might each day until he felt that he was fine with his body. His rival Crador being 1 year older also begin working out with all his might. Together they turned simple muscle building into a competition. Preston and Crador continue to travel with each other exploring everything they can and chasing women.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation):
To excel over Crador and become a world renowned engineer and to possibly create some of the greatest inventions the world has ever seen.
Strengths (Both physical and personality):
He is very good getting others to do what he wants them to do with his words. He also is rather strong for a man and can fend for himself. He is very intelligent. Also, if he needs to he can come up with concepts to craft special armor and weapons specified for different needs. He is very creative and can easily outsmart anyone against him.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality):
He gets distracted very easily and often this keeps him off his goals. He isn’t the best with words and can be rash. It takes a lot for him to become enraged but once he is enraged it takes a lot for him to be calmed. He has a deep addiction to alcoholic beverages.(Alchoholic) He can be very arrogant and he gets jealous very easily. He has a scar on the back from being burned by the furnace of the blacksmith while he was being careless.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.):
No but he might have a connection to a character who is applying.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armored men harassing a young girl.
Preston is doing one of his daily thought strolls, pondering all the possibilities of new mechanisms he can create, when he sees a couple of rugged men picking on a young girl. He approaches the men politely and ask them to leave the girl alone for it makes them seem a bit barbaric. The men look at him a bit confused so he hands them each a few coins and tells them to go purchase whatever they would like with his good money. The men shrug and waltz away like children in a toy store. He comforts the girl and makes sure she gets home safely from any further harassment.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
He glares at the man as if he were crazy. He simply shakes his head at the man and begins to walk away. On his walk back to his domain he begins to think about Bloodstone and how there has to be a way to safely get there and retrieve the item. When, he gets to his house he sits and thinks hard about different ways to safely retrieve an item from such a horrid place without ever stepping foot there. When he gets home he begins to draw up elaborate plans, that may either work perfectly or fail.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
Is walking through the city square when he sees an elderly man who is begging for food. He reaches in his rucksack pulling out a loaf of bread and some pork. He hands the old man the fresh food and makes the old man promise to get a job.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
Preston refuses to ignore the comment and continues to drink his ale. As he sips he slowly becomes drunk and angry. He approaches the man hits him dead in his nose and insults the man's mother. He is then removed from the bar by some of the city's guards and taken to his home.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
He begins to chat with the woman flirting with her a bit. He tells her his fascination of her necklace and asks her to draw a quick sketch. He begins coming up with ideas to make the necklace even better. He puts his ideas together creating the ultimate necklace and gives it to the woman for allowing him to take a sketch of her necklace.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?
No.
Other notes: No.
Your answer was at the top of the page.
silentstealth - Much better, and thank you for being so cooperative.
I'm a man of few words and many voices.
Character Information
Name: Cicero DeHaine
Age: 29
Class: Alchemist
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Citizen of the Chancellory
Physical description: Cicero is 5’10, and an albino. He is slightly thinner than the average person of his height. His hair is a little longer than normal length, and he usually wears a purple cloak. He has “lazy eye” (amblyopia) in his left eye, and his general expression normally lacks emotion.
Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.):
Cicero DeHaine was born in the countryside, in a small shack. His father, Jacob, was a priest, and his mother, Annaleigh, was a very skilled alchemist who studied in the academy before marrying. Jacob and Annaleigh’s parenthood was not planned, so the discovery of Annaleigh’s pregnancy came as a nasty shock to them. Discovering that their child was small and sickly (and not to mention unusual-looking, being an albino), did little to improve their parental sentiments.
It just so happened that a small rift opened a few days after Cicero was born, and so some of the first images he saw in the world were images of the fiery vortex. The rift (and Cicero’s frailness) made Jacob and Annaleigh decide to move into the capital so that they’d have better access to care for their child. Cicero’s father became a priest of the church while his mother set up an alchemist’s shop. Cicero often watched his mother brew her potions, becoming fascinated with alchemy. Over the first seven or so years of his life, he also developed an obsession with fire, intrigued by it’s consuming and all-powerful nature. His parents slowly grew closer and closer to seeing him as just another normal human being, identifying him as their child as opposed to just an Albino. He grew up as a rather lonely child, but at least his parents accepted him.
At the age of fifteen, that began to change. A few months after Cicero’s 15th birthday, he began to show signs of schizophrenia. He began to notice that sometimes, lights would be too bright and sounds too loud. Other times, he would feel a simple feeling of detachment with his life. He would also be very hypersensitive to criticism, and began to experience moods wings. The extreme symptoms began when Cicero’s mother began to teach him alchemy. From time to time, he would experience the erratic and unusual fear that people could read his mind and thoughts. All it took was a small glance, and suddenly, he would wonder if his privacy was being breached. One day, during an alchemy lesson, Cicero's mother was running through the different types of base potions when suddenly he had one of his irrational fears. Something told Cicero to grab a harmful potion from his mother’s “off-limits” shelf. When his mother told him to put the potion down, he shouted back that she was reading his thoughts and that she should stop. Extremely confused, his mother tried to reason with him, but something kept telling him to hold onto the potion. It was then that he realized that it was a voice speaking to him, as opposed to just himself. The voice seemed nice. The voice seemed like it knew what it was talking about. The voice said to throw the potion, and Cicero did.
His mother was badly scarred and sent to an infirmary. Jacob, furious, threw Cicero out of the house after Cicero tried to explain the voices to him, calling him a madman and telling him never to come back. Cicero moved into the streets, alone, with only the voices in his head to talk to. The following ten years of Cicero’s life would prove to be difficult. He would always look for work, and sometimes find it, but eventually, his schizophrenia would catch up to him and cause him to lose everything that he’d gained. He didn’t understand why the voices were a problem--nobody else wanted to talk to him and be his friend but them. Whenever he needed advice, they were there for him. Although those ten years were years of failure in the area of finding and keeping a job, Cicero did slowly begin to improve in the area of alchemy. Sometimes, the voices in his head (which slowly grew to be two distinct voices and personalities, one male and the other female), would persuade him to attempt to steal a book or two from a library. Other times, he would spend his money on books instead of food. Through many methods, he built up an understandings of the basics of alchemy.
When Cicero was twenty five, after much struggle, he began to reach out to other people, after being extremely introverted for a long while. He would force himself to stay in taverns and inns and attempt to flirt with girls or simply make new friends. Although it was an extremely slow process, over the next four years he grew to become more and more social and less reliant on the voices. Sometimes, he would even ignore them. Without a doubt, they were still a large part of his life, but he was making steps in the right direction. When Cicero was twenty nine, news of the academy’s reopening spread throughout the capital. He decided to take his chances at becoming an alchemy student there, already having a foundation to build upon. He knew that his disorders might make it harder for him, but nevertheless, he was determined to try.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): Cicero does not have many goals, but one of them is to simply be accepted by society, and to be seen for who he is as opposed to just the labels put on him (albino, mentally ill, etc.). He also has ambitions in the realm of alchemy, hoping to become a great potion master because he believes that this will cause people to respect him.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Cicero is resourceful, and normally thinks ahead. He is also fairly fast and calculating. When he wants to/can be, he can be charming.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): Being a schizophrenic brings many weaknesses to Cicero. The symptoms from these two disorders are seemingly random. From time to time, he hears voices and hallucinates. Over time, he has come to have a sort of dependency on these voices, who normally come to him when he is lonely.He also has trouble speaking and organizing thoughts at times. He cares about how others view him, and so he is extra sensitive to criticism. He is not the strongest person either. He has also shown signs of paranoia, but that condition is still progressing. Being an albino, the sunlight tends to bother his skin if he is out for too long, and his eyesight is nowhere near perfect.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.):
Nope.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
Cicero is in one of his unstable states at the moment, and is interacting with the voices in his head. He takes a few steps back from the scene, fear rising within him. He begins to murmur to himself:
“I should go help the girl, shouldn’t I?” He waits for one of his voices to help him. There is no response.
“Hello?” he asks quietly, surprised that the voices have suddenly stopped. “I need help! What do I do? Do I help the girl? Or not?” There is still a silence. Cicero kicks the sidewalk. “Don’t leave me! Where are you?” When there is still no response, he cries out:
“Help me!” The two men turn to him and away from the girl momentarily. When Cicero sees that he’s been noticed, the turns and sprints away as quickly as he can, forgetting about the girl in an instant.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
Cicero frowns after being asked the question. “I don’t know, what do you think?”
The man glances at him oddly. “What was that?”
“I wasn’t talking to you.” You shouldn’t, a voice in Cicero’s mind says.
The man raises an eyebrow. “All right...”
“No, I’m not going to go to Bloodstone.”
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
Cicero ignores the man, walking past them. He’s not your responsibility, he thinks to himself. The voices agree.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
Cicero takes another swig of his drink and then turns to the man, his red eyes narrowing.
“That wasn’t nice. Take it back. TAKE IT BACK.” Cicero then stands up in his chair and in a mad rage, jumps at the man. Why he took so much offense to the man’s comment, even he cannot explain, but the voices cheered him on, so it must have been the right choice.
***
Cicero wakes up an indefinite time later, covered in bruises and just outside the tavern.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
Cicero glances at the necklace for a moment. He is in a normal state right now, and in a rather good mood, so he attempts to flirt with the woman, starting with: “Hello, nice necklace you’ve got there...”
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?
Nein.
Note: My character hasn't diagnosed his conditions, so he really doesn't understand why he is the way he is. I just thought that I'd clear that up: I don't believe that schizophrenia is a known illness at this point.
gamer9726- A very interesting character. Glad to see somebody else take up the position of Schizo this server, didn't wanna have to re-boot Ben. ;P
Thanks!
Also, does anybody know if Welk has made a Planetminecraft post for us, or created a server on servers.minecraftforum.net? If not, we should probably ask him to.