Hi, I'm really sorry about this, but Nolan should not have accepted you and I'm not sure why he did.
There's still 3 things:
You have 1 to many SPECIAL points.
You need to have some dialogue in your RP example, look at other accepted apps for examples.
And lastly, you need to completely redo your bio, since the Enclave are no longer a faction. I spologize for not having taken the lore down sooner. Your bio didnt really fit with our Enclave anyways though.
Once again I apologize for the false acceptance and inconvenience and do hope that you will apply again!
His app is far from the best, but giving him a chance when the server starts won't be so bad, if he can RP.
Have you played any Fallout games? Which one(s): Fallout 1,2,Tactics,Fallout 3 and New Vegas.
Why do you want to play on this server?: Because I believe it would be very fun to play on a server with such immersive factions and community. I also have always had a spot for the enclave in my heart but none of the fallout games let you join the enclave. This one does.
What lies in the shadow of the statue?: He who will save us all
Have you read the lore?: I have read and loved the lore. I have also read the fallout timeline at least 20 times.
IC- The more detail, the better!
Name: Shaun Smith/Akakios
Nickname (optional): The Philosophe
Motto (optional): None
Age: 22
Gender: Male
Height: 6'0
Weight: 200 lbs
Personality: Hardened,Cold,Ruthless,Loner keeps to himself
Character's SPECIAL (max total: 40):
Strength- 6
Perception- 5
Endurance- 5
Charisma- 6
Intelligence- 6
Agility-5
Luck- 7
Character's skills: Speech,Guns,Medicine
Weaknesses: Fire,Gun Damage,
Karma: Neutral,leans to evil.
Character's appearance: Short brown hair,sparkling green eyes,average build,somewhat muscled
Worn cloths/accessories: Vault 13 Jumpsuit
Gear/weapons: 10mm pistol
Dislikes: Degenerates,Mutants,Weak People,Ghouls,
Likes: Rome,Pre War stuff,Nuka Cola,Raiders,Food
Any condition's/ disorder's (optional): None,Healthy
Spawn Location: In the city
RP example (At least 2 paragraphs):Today was the day. Today was the day that I leave Vault 13. I always loved life in the vault but he thought it was time to leave. I had uncovered old documents in the vaults terminal about the outside being habitable. I wanted to see the world and see what has happened. I grabbed a security pistol,some ammo,nuka cola,medical supplies,my books on history and survival and left. I proceeded that night to find my way to the atrium and escape. On my way I got myself in trouble with the Vault security guards. "He's leaving the Vault,Stop him!" I proceed to crouch down behind the overseers desk and shot at the guards. Whilst hacking into his terminal and trying to stop them from killing me. Deep down inside me I prayed to Ares for guidance. The prayer to the Ancient worlds gods seemed to work. The guards were shot by my hand and fell onto the vaults floor. I managed to open the vault door and I left.
The moonlight shined into my eyes. Years of being in the vault hurt my eyes. But it didn't matter. I proceeded to take the long walk East. I hoped to find what was left of the city of Denver. I hoped to meet up with other wastelanders and do trade. Eventually it turned to day. The sunlight blinded my eyes. I knew I was in what once Arizona. I walked by and saw men in Roman Styled attire. I smiled knowing that the old ways were not lost. I had a feeling there was more of them in Denver. "Salutations!" I said. They gave me and odd look. "What brings you here traveler?" He asked. "I would like to purpose a trade." I said. "I'll give you 5 cans of my Beans,1 book on ancient greece,a holotape with the best of Elvis Presley and gumdrops for some of those fine gold coins you have there,your odd looking fruit,and a suit of your Roman armor. "You have a deal stranger. But first I would like to tell you if you come from those vaults things have changed out here. Be on your guard and by Apollo make sure you if you see any legionnaires be on your best behavior. We might even let you in our ranks." I thanked him as a I grabbed my bags and left Flagstaff.
Character back-story: Shaun was born in Vault 13 in 2262. His father was the vaults doctor and his mother worked in the maintenance department. Sadly shortly after he was born his mother died in labor. As a infant Shaun showed much interest in playing with pre-war army toys such as GI Joe and model tanks. At the age of 5 he began to read. He loved reading books about the past and what life was like before the war. He also loved reading classics like homer and Plato. He developed a strong love for the Ancient Greeks and Romans. He liked the Greeks a little better though. The Vault stopped contact with the outside in 2245. From what they knew about the outside they knew about settlements like Shady Sands and the NCR.
By the age of 10 the teacher in the Vault 13 thought Shaun was a genius. He excelled in English,History,Science and Math. He was a well rounded student and his teacher thought he would be the new successor to the overseer. In his teen years he began to seclude himself and think about leaving the Vault. When he was 16 when he took the G.O.A.T and was appointed to be a Vault Security Officer. In these years he would usually keep to himself and hang out in the Vaults diner. He remained engrossed in his books and would practice shooting his 10 mm
At the age of 21 Shaun
would drink to his hearts content. His favorite beverage was Beer. Sometimes he would slip some Vodka into his Nuka Cola and keep to himself in his quarters. He and the overseer began to have arguments on opening the Vault up again once more and resuming trade with the hub. He refused and Shaun grew more angry He saw the whole Vault as blinded mindless idiots and not willing to follow with the vaults original purpose,to restore civilization. He then converted to the Ancient Greek religion and made a small shrine to Apollo,Mars and Poseidon in his closet. He also gave himself a 2nd name. Akakios.
On his 22nd Birthday Shaun was ding some routine work in the overseers office when he discovered a secret compartment In it was a pre-war terminal. He spent 2 hours trying to hack it and found his way in. He found out that the wastes were habitable and had plenty to offer. The overseer had actually been sending scouts out into the wastes recently and was making limited trade with the hub. Shaun grew angry that none of the citizens were informed about this. He quickly realized it was time to leave. He grabbed a leather bag and packed it with the supplies he needed,Nuka cola,Pork N Beans,Stimpacks,Buffout,Beer,Cram,10MM Pistol,Ammo,Laser Gun,Energy cells and some mementos from his childhood for good measure.
He set out for the Journey into the wasteland. He made contact with the Hub and did some trade and got some caps. He moved further East making contact with New Vegas. He heard of the infamous courier and his exploits. He hoped he would one day be like him. He then moved further East and took a route through Arizona,He traded with the legion He continued East when he finally made it over the Rockies and to Denver. On his way to the airport he made more trade and traded some of the stuff he got from the Legion outpost in northern Arizona. He continued to look and survive.
I guess I'll be taking this response back, and getting someone else to review your app, one of the people who so horridly complained how repulsive accepting this was, sorry.
Sorry for the last complications but there are multiple little things that still need to be changed.
First thing, Legionnaires aren’t that friendly and won’t give you directions. If they saw you in a Vault jumpsuit they would have most likely captured you. Which brings me to the second point; you don’t really join Legion, they make you join by enslaving you and beating you into a legionnaire or being born into the legion. Legionnaires don’t worship Apollo but Mars because some of them believe Caesar is his son.
Now for your backstory; cut the Fallout 3 rip-off at the beginning with the Vault Doctor Dad and the mother dead in labor. Also I seriously doubt a 5 yo would be reading Plato. Try to make your character a little less perfect because it doesn’t fit his S.P.E.C.I.A.L. You claim he’s a genius in everything but he has only 6 Intel. Also he has Speech in his skill yet he is a loner that keeps to himself. You made him worship Greek gods but he worship Mars, who is a roman god. The situation in which he decides to turn to Greek religion is a little weird, I mean he consider others to be close-minded so he turns to a thousand year old religion.
Anyway don't give up and if you fix those little things we will be good to go.
I'm trying to think of a good character to be a legionare. And I can't have it that I'm already in the legion? My idea is that he ends up leaving the vault much earlier say 13 or so. He is captured by the Legion,enslaved and built up to be a legionare. Can I do that?
I'm trying to think of a good character to be a legionare. And I can't have it that I'm already in the legion? My idea is that he ends up leaving the vault much earlier say 13 or so. He is captured by the Legion,enslaved and built up to be a legionare. Can I do that?
No, you can't. You cannot be in a faction from the outset of the server. You must work your way in AFTER the server goes up. And, as the leader of the Legion on this server, I suggest you brush up on your Legion lore a bit. I prefer people who know what they're doing and know a little bit about the faction they want to join. Helps a lot, trust me, especially if you're going to be working with me.
EDIT: And I most DEFINITELY suggest you come up with a more original backstory than that. Your bio has many parallels to Fallout 3. It would help your app get accepted if you were more original. If you need some ideas, you can always PM me at this account, and I'd be glad to help out.
I'm trying to think of a good character to be a legionare. And I can't have it that I'm already in the legion? My idea is that he ends up leaving the vault much earlier say 13 or so. He is captured by the Legion,enslaved and built up to be a legionare. Can I do that?
Pyro recommended above that you should improve your knowledge on Caesar's Legion, so: http://fallout.wikia...ar's_Legion
That should help you know the way of the legion.
Also, I would recommend your character be somewhat pure (Atleast not a rapist-chem user), possibly gullible/loyal, the legion recruits whole tribes for their main recruitment thing, maybe a lone tribal if you know how to RP one.
Have you played any Fallout games? Which one(s): Fallout 3 and New Vegas.
Why do you want to play on this server?: Because I believe it would be very fun to play on a server with such immersive factions and community.
What lies in the shadow of the statue?: He who will save us all
Have you read the lore?: I have read and loved the lore. I have also read the fallout timeline at least 20 times.
IC- The more detail, the better!
Name: Kye Beatty
Nickname (optional): Gearhead
Motto (optional): Don't kill, unless they deserve it... or if you have to... well, if it is convenient.
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Height: 6'0
Weight: 200 lbs
Personality: Hardened,Cold,Ruthless,Loner keeps to himself
Character's SPECIAL (max total: 40):
Strength- 6
Perception- 5
Endurance- 5
Charisma- 6
Intelligence- 6
Agility-5
Luck- 7
Character's skills: Speech,Guns,Medicine
Weaknesses: Fire,Gun Damage,
Karma: Neutral,leans to evil.
Character's appearance: Short brown hair, gray eyes, average build, beard
Worn cloths/accessories: Vault 67 jumpsuit
Gear/weapons: 10mm pistol
Dislikes: NCR, stubborn people, nukes, weapons of mass destruction
Likes: The Brotherhood of Steel, psyco
Any condition's/ disorder's (optional): A.D.D.
Spawn Location: In the city
RP example (At least 2 paragraphs):"No please! Im begging you! I cant go back out there!" I screamed at the elder"im sorry but you cant stay here the rules state that no outsiders are allowed to use our resources." "Do I look like im going to sabotage whatever your doing down here? all I want is to have somewhere to sleep at night, please!""im sorry but you have to go" at that the elder pushed me out of the bunker door into the wastes.
at the moment I just stood there awestruck that I no longer had a home, I couldent believe that I had just been kicked out. then it hit me, all the rage and fear that the elder gave me just exploded into my consios and I kicked the metal door and puched at it. after about a minute of this I realized that no one cared the ruckus that I was making and I just sat down, leaning against the door and crying "what am I going to do now?".
Character back-story: I never knew my parents, never thought much of it either. at the age of 7 I had learned to hunt, defend myself and scavenge, I didn't ever know a life that was anything but bare minimal survival. that was until the brotherhood came along, they pitied me and took me into their chapter, they raised me and I was happy but their elder did not like what they did for me and forced me to leave. since then I have roamed the wastes looking for a place to call home.
Hum I feel you just copied the last app and changed some stuff so I suggest filling the blank version of the application. Also your backstory is ridiculously short, your rp example is also too short. Have atleast 3 paragraphs for your backstory and a longer rp example.
Have you played any Fallout games? Which one(s): A bit of Fall out 3 and las vegas.
Why do you want to play on this server?: I used to be the owner of this ip, i had a server running and everything. Finally, i got
tired of running a server and quit, letting the server die. Now, this server had the same ip and i want to play for fun. I want to play on a good server and this seems like it will be great!
What lies in the shadow of the statue?: He who will save us all!
Have you read the lore?: Yes, it is long but it is great and in detail!
IC- The more detail, the better!
Name: Ishaan
Nickname (optional):
Motto (optional):
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Personality: Happy, funny but has a short temper.
Character's SPECIAL (max total: 40):
Strength- 7
Perception- 6
Endurance- 7
Charisma- 5
Intelligence- 6
Agility- 7
Luck- 3
Character's skills: He is fast, good with the sword and average with the bow.
Weaknesses: He has a soft spot for friends
Karma: The good things hes done, never come back. He has not done anything bad.
Character's appearance: He looks well dressed, but is angry.
Worn cloths/accessories: He wears a suit and carries a gun.
Gear/weapons: A pistol and an ak47
Spawn Location: An abandoned jail.
RP example (At least 2 paragraphs):
Ishaan looks out his prison cell, remembering the day he was sentenced to 5 years in jail. He was wrongly convicted. Ishaan had never done a bad thing in his life, forgetting about murdering anyone. He was angry, he used to be a hero, praised by his friends, and now, he was crap. No one came to his trial, he had to be his own lawyer. Ishaan cried until he could cry no more. Then we realized he was being watched by his fellow prisoners. "WHy you cryin Ishaan?" John said. "Ain't there nothing to cry about. Ishaan looked at john, then slept.
Ishaan woke up to a loud siren blazing through the jail, he heard, "There has been a bomb!" Ishaan jerked up to see prisoners running out of their cells. Some how someone had gone to the wardens office and unlocked the cells! Ishaan tried to get out, but his cell was jammed! He cried out for help, but was drained out by the prisoners screaming there heads off. Ishaan saw as the prisoners ran out, leaving him in the dark, by himself, in the middle of the night.
Character back-story (At least 3 paragraphs with no assuming faction roles):
Ishaan's mom died in child birth, and his dad was to busy grieving to take care of Ishaan, so Ishaan ran away from home at the age of 7. He found shelter near a farm and lived there, secretly killing animals for food. When Ishaan turned 14, he looked for work, and found one being a thief. He got payed good money. He bought himself a small house until he turned 16.
When Ishaan turned 16, he was enlisted for the "war". It was just an illegal shooting range where Ishaan had to shoot innocent people. When Ishaan thought he was doing right, he was doing wrong. Ishaan was innocent. While being in the "war", Ishaan made some friends who helped him climb through his troubles. He was Happy. Everthing was going right. Ishaan was discharged at 19.
When Ishaan was 20, he was stalked by a mysterious person. When Ishaan was reading to beat the crap out of him, the man said he wanted Ishaan to kill someone for him. Ishaan said no way, he would never do such a thing. He told Ishaan it was for the good of the country. When Ishaan was about to say no again, the man shot and killed an innocent passerby, gave Ishaan the gun and ran away. Ishaan stood there in shock until the police came and took him away. He was sentenced for 5 years in jail...
What faction and position are you applying for?: New California Republic, Faction leader/faction mod (Whatever one you give me)
Why should we let you have a leadership position in this faction?: I will play everyday, I also will be a good faction leader and help my fellow faction members. I can also build the faction. I can run the faction and will give 2 trusted people faction mods so they can help me. I can have a powerful faction and I will follow the lore. I will do whatever you guys tell me. I am a leader, not a follower. Do you have any experience with anything like this? Give specifics: I have played on 15+ servers. On my server, i ruled the faction Eastmarch, we had a lore and we were the most powerful faction. We build a castle that no one could penetrate. On a different server i used to play on, I was a faction mod in a faction called Legion, i handpicked special pvpers that could fight. We only had about ten people but we held our own. On a server called Graverunner that shut down, i was the leader in a faction called Adathion, and we were the 3rd strongest faction with the 3rd most power. We attacked many factions and took their lands. Have you ever played on any Fallout role-play servers? Give specifics: No, i haven't sorry. How much experience do you have in Fallout?: I have played the game 5-6 times so i know the story line and stuff like that. Write a good 2 paragraphs, one including a brief history of the faction, and the other connecting your character to the faction: NCR was not brand new when Ishaan escaped the Jail, but it was just starting out, NCR has no purpose, had no where it was going. It was just there, it was how it always was. When Ishaan stumbled upon it, he thought it was a great place to get revenge on the people who had done wrong. The people of NCR saw how skilled Ishaan was in fighting, and they took notice in him. Ishaan was at their center of attention. Ishaan was fueled by anger, and nothing would stop him from bringing justice to the man who framed him and everyone in the land. Ishaan had a vision that NCR would become the most powerful in the land. And Ishaan was the one who wanted to make that happen. The people of NCR bought it to his ideas, and they made him their unofficial leader. They listened to him. Ishaan showed them new ways. Finally, Ishaan became a hero again. Skype username: theboss0260
Edit: I am banned by TwizlerLord for: Have a nice day.
Idk why, i haven't even gone on the server yet. The only reason i know the ip is because it used to be my servers ip.
Your app sounds alot more like a PVP player app than a RPer app. Also the bow and sword thing is a little odd since we does arent really present in the Fallout universe. In your RP example you talk about being alive when the bomb fell. Thing is unless you are a ghoul you would be dead since the bomb fell more than 200 years before the time we are set in. Your fallout knowledge seems really limited so I suggest learning some more about the lore on the wiki here: http://fallout.wikia.com/wiki/Timeline
Your backstory is short but has also nothing to do with the Fallout universe, same thing with the faction app. These faction are there more for RP purposes than PVP purposes and you seem to have no idea what the NCR is. The NCR also already have a leader anyway.
So take a look at the timeline and read some more informations and make a more complete application.
Edit: You also have to remove 1 point from your SPECIAL since you are at 41.
OOC- Remember the rules!
In game name:fraggyfrag
Age:16
Gender:male
Country or time-zone:central
Have you played any Fallout games? Which one(s):fallout,fallout:New Vegas, and a little bit of fallout tacticts at Bethesda booth at Quakecon.
Why do you want to play on this server?:my friend tyler had been playing on this server and is now known as the head admin.also Im a huge lover of fallout for the storyline and the steampunk art that is strewn throughout the game
What lies in the shadow of the statue?:he who shall save us all
Have you read the lore?:yes
the B.O.M.B was launched and soon people stirred at the thought of nuclear war coming any second.Soon they built the fallout shelters also known as vaults and were all numbered such as the famous vault 101.So as expected by the people nuclear war was strewn throughout all of the world turning it into rubble and ash.Soon after the attacks people left the vaults and roamed the radiated and destroyed world.
IC- The more detail, the better!
Name:greed
Nickname (optional):the first
Motto (optional):
Age:26
Gender:male
Height:5'9
Weight:150
Personality:Greedy
Character's skills:
Weaknesses:losing caps and bandits
Karma:nuetral
Character's appearance:suave guy usually in a silk suit
Worn clothes/accessories:he wears a platnium watch that he got from his mom after her death
Gear/weapons:caps and a 10mm pistol for safety
Dislikes:bandits
Likes:getting caps and casinos
Any condition's/ disorder's (optional):he has a scar down his right eye from a bad deal
Spawn Location:on top of a building
RP example (At least 2 paragraphs):*he walked down the desolate streets of Denver caps in pocket......he hears a noise that brings his head up to see a gang of bandits....'I hate bandits' he puffed out under his breath.....He moved his hand over to his pistol and kept moving forward....... soon the bandits approached him with their cheshire cat grin 'Hey look' said the skinny one with a big gap in his teeth ' looks like we got ourselves some 'new meat' they grabbed his silk jacket 'and a rich and juicy one at that' said the bandit who somehow stayed obese throughout these days........ 'what do the three stooges want today' greed said in his calm voice 'well your caps of course you can hear that crap jingling down the street' greed then looked back and saw the rubble piled streets now remembering what got him in this mess 'well i guess your right these streets are a bit desolate today' ......... they then started to fumble through his pockets finding the caps and soon finding his lucky pistol.......' would you look at his boss' said the obese one' i think he planned on shooting us'........greed agreed with the oaf and said' yep I planned to shoot you but i cant do it with a confetti gun' he than gave a smirking chuckle the oaf then looked at him thinking he was joking and went back to tinkering with it ...'trust me you know what to show you i'm telling the truth point it to your head and pull the trigger if you die it was real if you live and you hear the confetti then it the confetti gun'...........and as planned the stupid oaf put it to his head and pulled the trigger killing him self and on he then grabbed his last cap and shoved it down the skinny ones throat killing him off the pulling it right back out......' money can kill' he said then grabbed his pistol and gingerly walked away from the bandits bleeding corpses.
Character back-story (At least 3 paragraphs with no assuming faction roles): Greeds father was rushing his wife into the the vaults she was pregnant with greed and was trying to keep pace even when it was a time to rush. they finally made it to the vaults and to their demise their was a group of bandits at guard taking peoples money just to get in the vault they got to the door and the bandits held out their hand for cash which of course Greeds father handed over all his money to the bandit the bandit counted and said "only one of you can pass due to you have three people".Greeds father looked confused and said "there is only 2 here" then realizing that his wife was in labor then looked to her and said "you go ahead ill try to make a deal with them" she went ahead and didn't look bad having faith in her husband she ran down into the vault and then heard a yell and a single pistol shot. she gasped and kept running she held the platnium watch that he had given her before they left to go to the vault tighter. The doors of the vault closed to no sign of greeds father and she was then rushed into the deepest part of the vault for safety she cried as she ran the tears blurring her vision in the dimmly lit hallways. she reached the room and got in the corner the bombs then shaking the structure of the vault. days past food was given evenly and the people began to become calmer since the bombing. soon greeds mom had a new born son and he came out with ease and was taken care of by the vaults doctors. the baby grabbed at all the shiny trinkets around his mothers neck and arms and was pleased by the touch of the metal she then saw him as a greedy child and gave him the rightful name of greed as a joking name. He grew up in the vault he was a smart child but a deviant one at that he usually stole some food or other pieces without nobody knowing he found doing this suiting to his name and he did this for years. One day he was caught whenever he was stealing a bandits jet from his pocket. The bandit picked him up and started punching him furiously. Out of nowhere greeds mother grabbed the bandit punched his left cheek possibly breaking it and greed fell to the floor with a shattering thunk. the bandit has gotten up to now face greeds mother with fire for revenge about her assault to his face.He grabbed a pipe off the ground and swung at greeds mother. his mother fell to the floor and was beat to death even more and right in front of greeds eyes she was then raped and murdered by the bandit.The bandit afterwards was going to then kill greed but then walked past him to make him feel even more sorrow as he crawls over to his mothers unmoving body. HE sobbed at her body for hours and whenever he had run out of tears to spare he then grabbed the watch out of her hand and then walked away knowing that even if he did try to move the body the Elders would just toss it aside like a piece of garbage.he went back to his room and threw up all over the floor and then was knocked out cold. He woke up to the infirmary soon being assaulted by doctors asking him questions that meaned nothing to him he answered them and then wandered out of the infirmary and found where the bandit form yesterday he then grabbed his fathers pistol form his old suitcase and then loaded it with 1 bullet he then walked down the hallway pistol in hand and headed to the bandits. he then saw his target and now aiming down the sights of the 10mm pistol fired at the bandit killing him with a bullet to the head then alerting all bandits.he then ran turning corners and then getting lost in a area unknown to him it was a big door and soon he knew what it was."the vault door" he said astonished. the bandits then came around the corner furiously he grabbed the lever to open the vault door and pulled down as hard as possible then running through the light that blinded his vision. He kept running and then fell down and tumbled down the stairs he was no i pain and was crawling to a big figure overshadowing the light he then found a handle and grabbed it and pulled and then went inside the unknown place closing the door he then was knocked out by the bloodrush. When he woke up he then saw what had been a bar in front of him and then looked around more and saw machines the had a handle on them to pull and of course he pulled it to see hat it does it didn't do much but make him angry he then walked around more and saw a room that said manger only he of course decided to go in he found a chair and a wardrobe and going through the wardrobe found some silvery suit his through one on to get warmer and then walked out the room then read a sign saying "Denver Royal Casino" he then found a couch and laid down his head and went back to sleep.
A fair application, although there are a few things to be fixed and expanded.
1) For your characters name, please put his birth name, not nickname. 2) Please expand your:
Personality
Weaknesses
Appearance
Worn Clothes / Accessories
3) Please say what type of pistol for your gear / weapons/ (ex: 10mm, 9mm, revolver, etc) 4) In worn cloths / accessories, you state "he wears a platinum watch that his father gave him before the war"
The war was in the year 2077, Reclamation takes place in 2284. Please revise. 5) Your back story is loaded with grammar errors, and sentences that make little sense. Please fix.
Have you played any Fallout games? Which one(s): Fallout 3 and Fallout New Vegas
Why do you want to play on this server?: I've known twizzler for a while and this server looks like it's going to be amazing.
What lies in the shadow of the statue?: He who will save us all.
Have you read the lore?: Yes. It asks to list the lore in your words so:
Fallout Reclamation takes place in 2284 in Colorado wastes. Dog City got overran by feral dogs and the people of dog city had to hide up in high buildings because of the dogs, the raiders, and the Legion. North east has the radiated ruins of Boulder, which is completely filled with a deadly new plague, and is not safe to travel through without a very strong hazmat suit.
Weaknesses: He has bad eye-site and can't see far because of an accident that happened when he was younger.
Karma: neutral
Character's appearance: Long white hair, wearing a red beret and has red eyes. He is tan and wears a Black coat with a white and wrap that goes around his body from his left shoulder down to his right hip and around his waist he's also wearing gray jeans.
Worn cloths/accessories: I said it in the appearance.
Gear/weapons: no
Spawn Location: A small snowy town in the mountains, untouched by the bombs and people, but left to weather
RP example (At least 2 paragraphs):
*Chris and Cid are walking around a town in Salt Lake city*
Chris: Cid.
Cid: Yeah?
Chris: You see that guy in that corner that looks like he's trippin' bad?
Cid: Yeah, so?
Chris: And you see that guy in a black coat going over to 'em?
Cid: Yeah..?
Chris: He's gonna try to sell drugs to him. We're low on caps...so.. when he sells it to the addict, want to go mug him?
Cid: No, Chris! What the hell is wrong with you?
Chris: Alright Cid. We'll find another way of getting food then.
Cid: What if I wasn't here? You would have mugged him for the caps, wouldn't you?
Chris: Yeah, shuttup.. let's go find some food, ok?
*Chris and Cid go into the deserts and find some food*
Character back-story (At least 3 paragraphs with no assuming faction roles):
Chris and Cid are brothers, born in Salt Lake City, and born on the same days too. Cid died at only 18, and he was the one keeping Chris in check for a while. Chris would have been a rebel, if it wasn't for his brother. Chris learned because of Cid, Chris would have probably been dead if it wasn't for Cid, Cid was the best thing for Chris, and he would do anything to have Cid back. Chris still dreads the day Cid died.. Cid died, with Chris. They were traveling to Colorado, to meet some old friends from when they were younger, and a rad scorpion came up and stabbed Cid in the leg, leaving a gashing hole. Chris didn't notice that, and he went on ahead of Cid, didn't even notice he wasn't following him. Once he noticed, he ran back to where the scorpion was, saw that Cid was still alive, lying on the ground crying holding his stomach. Chris panicked didn't have anything for the poison. Chris picked up Cid, and ran as fast as he could with Cid on his back, he ran to the closest city he could find, it was about 3 miles away. When they were about 10 minutes away from the city, he stopped hearing his brother cry, but didn't stop running. He refused to stop, by the time they got to city, it was too late.. Cid was gone.. Chris was looking around and found a wastelander and asked what city they were in, and he told Chris, "Son, you're in Denver."
Now, you may be wondering why they were such close brothers, and what happened to Chris that made his eyes red and his hair white. Well, it all starts from when he was younger. Cid was born about an hour before Chris, and Cid as a kid always bragged about being the older brother, and Chris didn't care that much. Cid was more of the goody-goody, nerdier brother, while Chris has always been more of the better at sports, stronger, but not as smart as his other brother, type of kid. Chris was a kid who liked to cause a lot of mischief but Cid always helped him and told him what was the right thing to do in the situation, so they were the perfect team. They got so close because, well, they had no other thing to do. They were at such a young age when their parents died. They were about 10 at the time their mother died, but their father died when they were only 8. Their mother was sick for a few months and that's when they became very close. They went out and always hunted the food together. Cid would make traps while Chris would just go out and hunt the bigger animals. But being together and catching their food together was something they liked doing. But one day, Chris got lost in the wastelands and was hearing a very strange sound. Like somebody, or something vomiting. He went around to check it out, and got ambushed by a group of 8 giant evolved centaurs and was knocked out by a pit full of radiated water slowly sending radiation into Chris' body. Cid realized that Chris was gone and ran looking for him, and found him with the centaur's around him. Cid killed them, all of them. He went to wake up Chris and something changed.. He had white hair, and glowing red eyes. He seemed stronger, but his perception seemed a lot lower.
There was other activities they participated in together while hunting they would go look for cannabis and on the way home smoke a few joints which really helped with their bonding. At first it was just for fun, but then their mother died because of her sickness. Then it became an anti-depressant, and they also started wrestling and fighting with each other. Chris was teaching Cid how to fight and be stronger while Cid tried teaching Chris to be smarter, and use more logic when he fights. Eventually they got bored with that and started hunting more and more as they got older. They met some people when they were younger and found a note from when they met saying visit whenever with an address. So they chose to go that way, and the tragic event of Cid's death happened.
Alright, so this is a pretty good app, and I love you for actually including the lore in your own words rule that so many people seem to skip over, but theres just a couple things you need to correct before I can accept you.
Alright first off, there aren't really bows and swords in Fallout. So please redo and expand your character skills.
Secondly, your SPECIAL skills are a bit off balance. 10 is a ridiculously high number for strength, and you didn't really give a good reason for him being that ridiculously strong in your bio, so please fix that one way or another. Also, you mention him having really bad eyesight, but his Perception was still 4. It sounds like it should be more like a 2 or 3, 4 is a bit high for how you describe it.
And lastly, lemme just say that I did enjoy your bio. It was pretty good and I liked the way you had it set up. This is just a small thing, and an optional one to, so you don't really have to do it. But "So they chose to go that way, and the tragic event of Cid's death happened." is just kind of awkward way to end a bio. I get how it works, but if its possible to change that so it just doesnt seem as abrubt of an ending, that would be great haha. But once agin, optional, you can just leave that if you want.
So until those things are fixed,
In that case I might wait for the BOS lore then decide Legion or BOS.
His app is far from the best, but giving him a chance when the server starts won't be so bad, if he can RP.
Spawn Location: In the city
Now you're talking !!!
Sorry for the last complications but there are multiple little things that still need to be changed.
First thing, Legionnaires aren’t that friendly and won’t give you directions. If they saw you in a Vault jumpsuit they would have most likely captured you. Which brings me to the second point; you don’t really join Legion, they make you join by enslaving you and beating you into a legionnaire or being born into the legion. Legionnaires don’t worship Apollo but Mars because some of them believe Caesar is his son.
Now for your backstory; cut the Fallout 3 rip-off at the beginning with the Vault Doctor Dad and the mother dead in labor. Also I seriously doubt a 5 yo would be reading Plato. Try to make your character a little less perfect because it doesn’t fit his S.P.E.C.I.A.L. You claim he’s a genius in everything but he has only 6 Intel. Also he has Speech in his skill yet he is a loner that keeps to himself. You made him worship Greek gods but he worship Mars, who is a roman god. The situation in which he decides to turn to Greek religion is a little weird, I mean he consider others to be close-minded so he turns to a thousand year old religion.
Anyway don't give up and if you fix those little things we will be good to go.
No, you can't. You cannot be in a faction from the outset of the server. You must work your way in AFTER the server goes up. And, as the leader of the Legion on this server, I suggest you brush up on your Legion lore a bit. I prefer people who know what they're doing and know a little bit about the faction they want to join. Helps a lot, trust me, especially if you're going to be working with me.
EDIT: And I most DEFINITELY suggest you come up with a more original backstory than that. Your bio has many parallels to Fallout 3. It would help your app get accepted if you were more original. If you need some ideas, you can always PM me at this account, and I'd be glad to help out.
Pyro recommended above that you should improve your knowledge on Caesar's Legion, so: http://fallout.wikia...ar's_Legion
That should help you know the way of the legion.
Also, I would recommend your character be somewhat pure (Atleast not a rapist-chem user), possibly gullible/loyal, the legion recruits whole tribes for their main recruitment thing, maybe a lone tribal if you know how to RP one.
In game name: _VitrifiedSword_
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Country or time-zone: USA
Have you played any Fallout games? Which one(s): Fallout 3 and New Vegas.
Why do you want to play on this server?: Because I believe it would be very fun to play on a server with such immersive factions and community.
What lies in the shadow of the statue?: He who will save us all
Have you read the lore?: I have read and loved the lore. I have also read the fallout timeline at least 20 times.
IC- The more detail, the better!
Name: Kye Beatty
Nickname (optional): Gearhead
Motto (optional): Don't kill, unless they deserve it... or if you have to... well, if it is convenient.
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Height: 6'0
Weight: 200 lbs
Personality: Hardened,Cold,Ruthless,Loner keeps to himself
Character's SPECIAL (max total: 40):
Strength- 6
Perception- 5
Endurance- 5
Charisma- 6
Intelligence- 6
Agility-5
Luck- 7
Character's skills: Speech,Guns,Medicine
Weaknesses: Fire,Gun Damage,
Karma: Neutral,leans to evil.
Character's appearance: Short brown hair, gray eyes, average build, beard
Worn cloths/accessories: Vault 67 jumpsuit
Gear/weapons: 10mm pistol
Dislikes: NCR, stubborn people, nukes, weapons of mass destruction
Likes: The Brotherhood of Steel, psyco
Any condition's/ disorder's (optional): A.D.D.
Spawn Location: In the city
RP example (At least 2 paragraphs):"No please! Im begging you! I cant go back out there!" I screamed at the elder"im sorry but you cant stay here the rules state that no outsiders are allowed to use our resources." "Do I look like im going to sabotage whatever your doing down here? all I want is to have somewhere to sleep at night, please!""im sorry but you have to go" at that the elder pushed me out of the bunker door into the wastes.
at the moment I just stood there awestruck that I no longer had a home, I couldent believe that I had just been kicked out. then it hit me, all the rage and fear that the elder gave me just exploded into my consios and I kicked the metal door and puched at it. after about a minute of this I realized that no one cared the ruckus that I was making and I just sat down, leaning against the door and crying "what am I going to do now?".
Character back-story: I never knew my parents, never thought much of it either. at the age of 7 I had learned to hunt, defend myself and scavenge, I didn't ever know a life that was anything but bare minimal survival. that was until the brotherhood came along, they pitied me and took me into their chapter, they raised me and I was happy but their elder did not like what they did for me and forced me to leave. since then I have roamed the wastes looking for a place to call home.
Hum I feel you just copied the last app and changed some stuff so I suggest filling the blank version of the application. Also your backstory is ridiculously short, your rp example is also too short. Have atleast 3 paragraphs for your backstory and a longer rp example.
OOC- Remember the rules!
IC- The more detail, the better!
Name: Ishaan
Character back-story (At least 3 paragraphs with no assuming faction roles):
Why should we let you have a leadership position in this faction?: I will play everyday, I also will be a good faction leader and help my fellow faction members. I can also build the faction. I can run the faction and will give 2 trusted people faction mods so they can help me. I can have a powerful faction and I will follow the lore. I will do whatever you guys tell me. I am a leader, not a follower.
Do you have any experience with anything like this? Give specifics: I have played on 15+ servers. On my server, i ruled the faction Eastmarch, we had a lore and we were the most powerful faction. We build a castle that no one could penetrate. On a different server i used to play on, I was a faction mod in a faction called Legion, i handpicked special pvpers that could fight. We only had about ten people but we held our own. On a server called Graverunner that shut down, i was the leader in a faction called Adathion, and we were the 3rd strongest faction with the 3rd most power. We attacked many factions and took their lands.
Have you ever played on any Fallout role-play servers? Give specifics: No, i haven't sorry.
How much experience do you have in Fallout?: I have played the game 5-6 times so i know the story line and stuff like that.
Write a good 2 paragraphs, one including a brief history of the faction, and the other connecting your character to the faction:
NCR was not brand new when Ishaan escaped the Jail, but it was just starting out, NCR has no purpose, had no where it was going. It was just there, it was how it always was. When Ishaan stumbled upon it, he thought it was a great place to get revenge on the people who had done wrong. The people of NCR saw how skilled Ishaan was in fighting, and they took notice in him. Ishaan was at their center of attention.
Ishaan was fueled by anger, and nothing would stop him from bringing justice to the man who framed him and everyone in the land. Ishaan had a vision that NCR would become the most powerful in the land. And Ishaan was the one who wanted to make that happen. The people of NCR bought it to his ideas, and they made him their unofficial leader. They listened to him. Ishaan showed them new ways. Finally, Ishaan became a hero again.
Skype username: theboss0260
Edit: I am banned by TwizlerLord for: Have a nice day.
Idk why, i haven't even gone on the server yet. The only reason i know the ip is because it used to be my servers ip.
Your app sounds alot more like a PVP player app than a RPer app. Also the bow and sword thing is a little odd since we does arent really present in the Fallout universe. In your RP example you talk about being alive when the bomb fell. Thing is unless you are a ghoul you would be dead since the bomb fell more than 200 years before the time we are set in. Your fallout knowledge seems really limited so I suggest learning some more about the lore on the wiki here: http://fallout.wikia.com/wiki/Timeline
Your backstory is short but has also nothing to do with the Fallout universe, same thing with the faction app. These faction are there more for RP purposes than PVP purposes and you seem to have no idea what the NCR is. The NCR also already have a leader anyway.
So take a look at the timeline and read some more informations and make a more complete application.
Edit: You also have to remove 1 point from your SPECIAL since you are at 41.
In game name:fraggyfrag
Age:16
Gender:male
Country or time-zone:central
Have you played any Fallout games? Which one(s):fallout,fallout:New Vegas, and a little bit of fallout tacticts at Bethesda booth at Quakecon.
Why do you want to play on this server?:my friend tyler had been playing on this server and is now known as the head admin.also Im a huge lover of fallout for the storyline and the steampunk art that is strewn throughout the game
What lies in the shadow of the statue?:he who shall save us all
Have you read the lore?:yes
the B.O.M.B was launched and soon people stirred at the thought of nuclear war coming any second.Soon they built the fallout shelters also known as vaults and were all numbered such as the famous vault 101.So as expected by the people nuclear war was strewn throughout all of the world turning it into rubble and ash.Soon after the attacks people left the vaults and roamed the radiated and destroyed world.
IC- The more detail, the better!
Name:greed
Nickname (optional):the first
Motto (optional):
Age:26
Gender:male
Height:5'9
Weight:150
Personality:Greedy
Character's SPECIAL (max total: 40):
Strength-5
Perception-7
Endurance-4
Charisma-8
Intelligence-7
Agility-4
Luck-5
Character's skills:
Weaknesses:losing caps and bandits
Karma:nuetral
Character's appearance:suave guy usually in a silk suit
Worn clothes/accessories:he wears a platnium watch that he got from his mom after her death
Gear/weapons:caps and a 10mm pistol for safety
Dislikes:bandits
Likes:getting caps and casinos
Any condition's/ disorder's (optional):he has a scar down his right eye from a bad deal
Spawn Location:on top of a building
RP example (At least 2 paragraphs):*he walked down the desolate streets of Denver caps in pocket......he hears a noise that brings his head up to see a gang of bandits....'I hate bandits' he puffed out under his breath.....He moved his hand over to his pistol and kept moving forward....... soon the bandits approached him with their cheshire cat grin 'Hey look' said the skinny one with a big gap in his teeth ' looks like we got ourselves some 'new meat' they grabbed his silk jacket 'and a rich and juicy one at that' said the bandit who somehow stayed obese throughout these days........ 'what do the three stooges want today' greed said in his calm voice 'well your caps of course you can hear that crap jingling down the street' greed then looked back and saw the rubble piled streets now remembering what got him in this mess 'well i guess your right these streets are a bit desolate today' ......... they then started to fumble through his pockets finding the caps and soon finding his lucky pistol.......' would you look at his boss' said the obese one' i think he planned on shooting us'........greed agreed with the oaf and said' yep I planned to shoot you but i cant do it with a confetti gun' he than gave a smirking chuckle the oaf then looked at him thinking he was joking and went back to tinkering with it ...'trust me you know what to show you i'm telling the truth point it to your head and pull the trigger if you die it was real if you live and you hear the confetti then it the confetti gun'...........and as planned the stupid oaf put it to his head and pulled the trigger killing him self and on he then grabbed his last cap and shoved it down the skinny ones throat killing him off the pulling it right back out......' money can kill' he said then grabbed his pistol and gingerly walked away from the bandits bleeding corpses.
Character back-story (At least 3 paragraphs with no assuming faction roles): Greeds father was rushing his wife into the the vaults she was pregnant with greed and was trying to keep pace even when it was a time to rush. they finally made it to the vaults and to their demise their was a group of bandits at guard taking peoples money just to get in the vault they got to the door and the bandits held out their hand for cash which of course Greeds father handed over all his money to the bandit the bandit counted and said "only one of you can pass due to you have three people".Greeds father looked confused and said "there is only 2 here" then realizing that his wife was in labor then looked to her and said "you go ahead ill try to make a deal with them" she went ahead and didn't look bad having faith in her husband she ran down into the vault and then heard a yell and a single pistol shot. she gasped and kept running she held the platnium watch that he had given her before they left to go to the vault tighter. The doors of the vault closed to no sign of greeds father and she was then rushed into the deepest part of the vault for safety she cried as she ran the tears blurring her vision in the dimmly lit hallways. she reached the room and got in the corner the bombs then shaking the structure of the vault. days past food was given evenly and the people began to become calmer since the bombing. soon greeds mom had a new born son and he came out with ease and was taken care of by the vaults doctors. the baby grabbed at all the shiny trinkets around his mothers neck and arms and was pleased by the touch of the metal she then saw him as a greedy child and gave him the rightful name of greed as a joking name. He grew up in the vault he was a smart child but a deviant one at that he usually stole some food or other pieces without nobody knowing he found doing this suiting to his name and he did this for years. One day he was caught whenever he was stealing a bandits jet from his pocket. The bandit picked him up and started punching him furiously. Out of nowhere greeds mother grabbed the bandit punched his left cheek possibly breaking it and greed fell to the floor with a shattering thunk. the bandit has gotten up to now face greeds mother with fire for revenge about her assault to his face.He grabbed a pipe off the ground and swung at greeds mother. his mother fell to the floor and was beat to death even more and right in front of greeds eyes she was then raped and murdered by the bandit.The bandit afterwards was going to then kill greed but then walked past him to make him feel even more sorrow as he crawls over to his mothers unmoving body. HE sobbed at her body for hours and whenever he had run out of tears to spare he then grabbed the watch out of her hand and then walked away knowing that even if he did try to move the body the Elders would just toss it aside like a piece of garbage.he went back to his room and threw up all over the floor and then was knocked out cold. He woke up to the infirmary soon being assaulted by doctors asking him questions that meaned nothing to him he answered them and then wandered out of the infirmary and found where the bandit form yesterday he then grabbed his fathers pistol form his old suitcase and then loaded it with 1 bullet he then walked down the hallway pistol in hand and headed to the bandits. he then saw his target and now aiming down the sights of the 10mm pistol fired at the bandit killing him with a bullet to the head then alerting all bandits.he then ran turning corners and then getting lost in a area unknown to him it was a big door and soon he knew what it was."the vault door" he said astonished. the bandits then came around the corner furiously he grabbed the lever to open the vault door and pulled down as hard as possible then running through the light that blinded his vision. He kept running and then fell down and tumbled down the stairs he was no i pain and was crawling to a big figure overshadowing the light he then found a handle and grabbed it and pulled and then went inside the unknown place closing the door he then was knocked out by the bloodrush. When he woke up he then saw what had been a bar in front of him and then looked around more and saw machines the had a handle on them to pull and of course he pulled it to see hat it does it didn't do much but make him angry he then walked around more and saw a room that said manger only he of course decided to go in he found a chair and a wardrobe and going through the wardrobe found some silvery suit his through one on to get warmer and then walked out the room then read a sign saying "Denver Royal Casino" he then found a couch and laid down his head and went back to sleep.
A fair application, although there are a few things to be fixed and expanded.
1) For your characters name, please put his birth name, not nickname.
2) Please expand your:
4) In worn cloths / accessories, you state "he wears a platinum watch that his father gave him before the war"
The war was in the year 2077, Reclamation takes place in 2284. Please revise.
5) Your back story is loaded with grammar errors, and sentences that make little sense. Please fix.
Until these things are corrected, you are Denied
In game name: alexheiker
Age: 15, 16 in December.
Gender: Male
Country or time-zone: USA, Eastern
Have you played any Fallout games? Which one(s): Fallout 3 and Fallout New Vegas
Why do you want to play on this server?: I've known twizzler for a while and this server looks like it's going to be amazing.
What lies in the shadow of the statue?: He who will save us all.
Have you read the lore?: Yes. It asks to list the lore in your words so:
Fallout Reclamation takes place in 2284 in Colorado wastes. Dog City got overran by feral dogs and the people of dog city had to hide up in high buildings because of the dogs, the raiders, and the Legion. North east has the radiated ruins of Boulder, which is completely filled with a deadly new plague, and is not safe to travel through without a very strong hazmat suit.
IC- The more detail, the better!
Name:Chris Coffin
Nickname (optional):
Motto (optional):
Age: 21
Gender: Male
Personality: Honest, and has a short-temper.
Character's SPECIAL (max total: 40):
Strength- 10
Perception- 4
Endurance- 5
Charisma- 4
Intelligence- 4
Agility- 5
Luck- 8
Character's skills: Good with a bow, and a sword.
Weaknesses: He has bad eye-site and can't see far because of an accident that happened when he was younger.
Karma: neutral
Character's appearance: Long white hair, wearing a red beret and has red eyes. He is tan and wears a Black coat with a white and wrap that goes around his body from his left shoulder down to his right hip and around his waist he's also wearing gray jeans.
Worn cloths/accessories: I said it in the appearance.
Gear/weapons: no
Spawn Location: A small snowy town in the mountains, untouched by the bombs and people, but left to weather
RP example (At least 2 paragraphs):
*Chris and Cid are walking around a town in Salt Lake city*
Chris: Cid.
Cid: Yeah?
Chris: You see that guy in that corner that looks like he's trippin' bad?
Cid: Yeah, so?
Chris: And you see that guy in a black coat going over to 'em?
Cid: Yeah..?
Chris: He's gonna try to sell drugs to him. We're low on caps...so.. when he sells it to the addict, want to go mug him?
Cid: No, Chris! What the hell is wrong with you?
Chris: Alright Cid. We'll find another way of getting food then.
Cid: What if I wasn't here? You would have mugged him for the caps, wouldn't you?
Chris: Yeah, shuttup.. let's go find some food, ok?
*Chris and Cid go into the deserts and find some food*
Character back-story (At least 3 paragraphs with no assuming faction roles):
Chris and Cid are brothers, born in Salt Lake City, and born on the same days too. Cid died at only 18, and he was the one keeping Chris in check for a while. Chris would have been a rebel, if it wasn't for his brother. Chris learned because of Cid, Chris would have probably been dead if it wasn't for Cid, Cid was the best thing for Chris, and he would do anything to have Cid back. Chris still dreads the day Cid died.. Cid died, with Chris. They were traveling to Colorado, to meet some old friends from when they were younger, and a rad scorpion came up and stabbed Cid in the leg, leaving a gashing hole. Chris didn't notice that, and he went on ahead of Cid, didn't even notice he wasn't following him. Once he noticed, he ran back to where the scorpion was, saw that Cid was still alive, lying on the ground crying holding his stomach. Chris panicked didn't have anything for the poison. Chris picked up Cid, and ran as fast as he could with Cid on his back, he ran to the closest city he could find, it was about 3 miles away. When they were about 10 minutes away from the city, he stopped hearing his brother cry, but didn't stop running. He refused to stop, by the time they got to city, it was too late.. Cid was gone.. Chris was looking around and found a wastelander and asked what city they were in, and he told Chris, "Son, you're in Denver."
Now, you may be wondering why they were such close brothers, and what happened to Chris that made his eyes red and his hair white. Well, it all starts from when he was younger. Cid was born about an hour before Chris, and Cid as a kid always bragged about being the older brother, and Chris didn't care that much. Cid was more of the goody-goody, nerdier brother, while Chris has always been more of the better at sports, stronger, but not as smart as his other brother, type of kid. Chris was a kid who liked to cause a lot of mischief but Cid always helped him and told him what was the right thing to do in the situation, so they were the perfect team. They got so close because, well, they had no other thing to do. They were at such a young age when their parents died. They were about 10 at the time their mother died, but their father died when they were only 8. Their mother was sick for a few months and that's when they became very close. They went out and always hunted the food together. Cid would make traps while Chris would just go out and hunt the bigger animals. But being together and catching their food together was something they liked doing. But one day, Chris got lost in the wastelands and was hearing a very strange sound. Like somebody, or something vomiting. He went around to check it out, and got ambushed by a group of 8 giant evolved centaurs and was knocked out by a pit full of radiated water slowly sending radiation into Chris' body. Cid realized that Chris was gone and ran looking for him, and found him with the centaur's around him. Cid killed them, all of them. He went to wake up Chris and something changed.. He had white hair, and glowing red eyes. He seemed stronger, but his perception seemed a lot lower.
There was other activities they participated in together while hunting they would go look for cannabis and on the way home smoke a few joints which really helped with their bonding. At first it was just for fun, but then their mother died because of her sickness. Then it became an anti-depressant, and they also started wrestling and fighting with each other. Chris was teaching Cid how to fight and be stronger while Cid tried teaching Chris to be smarter, and use more logic when he fights. Eventually they got bored with that and started hunting more and more as they got older. They met some people when they were younger and found a note from when they met saying visit whenever with an address. So they chose to go that way, and the tragic event of Cid's death happened.
Alright, so this is a pretty good app, and I love you for actually including the lore in your own words rule that so many people seem to skip over, but theres just a couple things you need to correct before I can accept you.
Alright first off, there aren't really bows and swords in Fallout. So please redo and expand your character skills.
Secondly, your SPECIAL skills are a bit off balance. 10 is a ridiculously high number for strength, and you didn't really give a good reason for him being that ridiculously strong in your bio, so please fix that one way or another. Also, you mention him having really bad eyesight, but his Perception was still 4. It sounds like it should be more like a 2 or 3, 4 is a bit high for how you describe it.
And lastly, lemme just say that I did enjoy your bio. It was pretty good and I liked the way you had it set up. This is just a small thing, and an optional one to, so you don't really have to do it. But "So they chose to go that way, and the tragic event of Cid's death happened." is just kind of awkward way to end a bio. I get how it works, but if its possible to change that so it just doesnt seem as abrubt of an ending, that would be great haha. But once agin, optional, you can just leave that if you want.
So until those things are fixed,