· How you found this post: Though browsing for servers
· IC Name: Melissa Woods
· IC Age: 17
· Gender: Female
· Ambitions: Be a game designer/programmer
· Personality: Hipster-ish teenage girl with a bit of attitude
· Preferred Job: To work in the gaming industry as previously said as a programmer or a graphics designer
· Biography: (Explain how your character ended up here. NOTE: All characters start off in a small apartment with 100$. NOTHING ELSE.) Little Melissa was born in a middle class family. Her parents worked regular jobs received their paychecks once a week, you know just like a normal family. Nothing wrong happened in her life she was kind of spoiled actually. At fifteen years old she was forced to move away because her mother has given birth to new baby twins. They couldn't keep up with the costs for three children so one of them had to move away. She had it hard living on the streets with only a cellphone and a mac. She then took a little shack for rent with two seniors in high school. Her roommates treated her pretty nicely, she got a job as a waitress and drew in her free time. Her room mates taught her school related subjects because she didn't have enough money for school. But then one of her roomies started hanging with the wrong crowd and got involved with drugs. He stole from the house and even got as far as killing the other roommate. Melissa ran away. With her one thousand dollars she found a nice place to stay. She rented it and got one hundred back. What happens next is yet to be told. Melissa doesn't know what kind of town she is actually living in.
(excuse my spelling English is not my first language)
Only thing is, Why did he get kicked out of his house, Why exactly doesn't he have friends anymore, and maybe a little more about him becoming a bounty hunter, such as a few experiences, or how he started off. This is just my opinions as it is still a good app
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His dad owns money to a gang. He couldn't pay it so the gang killed the mother and father, took all valuable objects in the house and then burned it. James was at school when that happened. He came home, found out his parents are dead, ran away and was never seen by his relatives. He does not have friends because he failed to kill the target, everyone on his gang hated his guts and tried to kill him, he has plenty of enemies to go around and no friends. He had no experience, but the leader gave him a chance, he managed to kill his first target, and the more he kill, the more he gets better, and the gang leader starts giving him more important targets to kill until he failed. By the way, he is roaming the streets today because the gang knows where he lives and burned his house down, just like what happened to his parents.
His dad owns money to a gang. He couldn't pay it so the gang killed the mother and father, took all valuable objects in the house and then burned it. James was at school when that happened. He came home, found out his parents are dead, ran away and was never seen by his relatives. He does not have friends because he failed to kill the target, everyone on his gang hated his guts and tried to kill him, he has plenty of enemies to go around and no friends. He had no experience, but the leader gave him a chance, he managed to kill his first target, and the more he kill, the more he gets better, and the gang leader starts giving him more important targets to kill until he failed. By the way, he is roaming the streets today because the gang knows where he lives and burned his house down, just like what happened to his parents.
It is basically because her parents couldn't keep up with three kids so one had to go. Melissa was the oldest one so it was obvious which one would move away. Sorry If this sounds rude
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Previously Dodduri except someone decided to hack my account
It is basically because her parents couldn't keep up with three kids so one had to go. Melissa was the oldest one so it was obvious which one would move away. Sorry If this sounds rude
It's fine, it just sounds odd, as I haven't heard of people just getting rid of a child like that. Maybe you could say she ran away or that her parents put her up for adoption. I'm not sure, you'll have to ask a staff to be sure.
Would someone please tell me how I could improve with my BIO?
How did she managed to become a Pharmacist, Pharmacist is a very expensive program and I think 8 years of school, I am attending Pharmacy Technician and I am paying $15,000 tuition.
Then you said that she does not have enough money to go to school, If you are a pharmacist, you have enough money to go to school.
And since you are a pharmacist, your roomates should of told you to get pills from the pharmacy, cuz that is what most drug addict friends would ask if you work on a pharmacist or place that has bunch of drugs.
I re-read it and you said her friend thought her about pharmacy related stuff because she does not have money. Her friend must be very smart, and she must be very smart to pass the board exam by just tutors. and why isn't her friend a pharmacist? How did she managed to pay the boarding exam?
Minecraft Name: danielsun7 · Real life age: 16 · How you found this post: a friend suggested it to me · IC Name: Ryan Leclaire · IC Age: 22 · Gender: Male · Ambitions: To become a police man/guard to help protect/server the city well! · Personality: A very defensive outgoing man who doesn't take any chances. · Preferred Job: Guard/police officer
Minecraft Name: danielsun7 · Real life age: 16 · How you found this post: a friend suggested it to me · IC Name: Ryan Leclaire · IC Age: 22 · Gender: Male · Ambitions: To become a police man/guard to help protect/server the city well! · Personality: A very defensive outgoing man who doesn't take any chances. · Preferred Job: Guard/police officer
Ah sorry I was not sure what this meant. It's just that I'm not from an English speaking country and I don't really know about your jobs. Could you suggest something to me? I used a random job generator hahah.
hmm... lets see, since she does not have a lot of money, probably a cleaner, or a guard? a job that requires no education.
· Minecraft Name: kimonas12 · Real life age: 14 · How you found this post: i was looking for a good server · IC Name: Kimonas · IC Age: 22 · Gender: Male · Ambitions: Adventure and Anime/Manga · Personality: Helping ppl and looking for interesting life · Preferred Job: Teacher · Biography:He finisht collage and want to start a new life
· How you found this post: Though browsing for servers
· IC Name: Melissa Woods
· IC Age: 17
· Gender: Female
· Ambitions: Be a game designer/programmer
· Personality: Hipster-ish teenage girl with a bit of attitude
· Preferred Job: To work in the gaming industry as previously said as a programmer or a graphics designer
· Biography: (Explain how your character ended up here. NOTE: All characters start off in a small apartment with 100$. NOTHING ELSE.) Little Melissa was born in a middle class family. Her parents worked regular jobs received their paychecks once a week, you know just like a normal family. Nothing wrong happened in her life she was kind of spoiled actually. At fifteen years old she was forced to move away because her mother has given birth to new baby twins. They couldn't keep up with the costs for three children so one of them had to move away. She had it hard living on the streets with only a cellphone and a mac. She then took a little shack for rent with two seniors in high school. Her roommates treated her pretty nicely, she got a job as a pharmacist and drew in her free time. Her room mates taught her school related subjects because she didn't have enough money for school. But then one of her roomies started hanging with the wrong crowd and got involved with drugs. He stole from the house and even got as far as killing the other roommate. Melissa ran away. With her one thousand dollars she found a nice place to stay. She rented it and got one hundred back. What happens next is yet to be told. Melissa doesn't know what kind of town she is actually living in.
(excuse my spelling English is not my first language)
Your english is great in the application.
I think what the person means it. That job you picked is realistically impossible because most people that are 17 are in High School. I guess if you're 17 the job you could have it working for a company or business part time and then you go to school.
· Minecraft Name: _br0seph_
· Real life age: 15
· How you found this post: Just browsing through the Objective servers
· IC Name: President Theodore Brosephelt (President Brosephelt, President Teddy, Mr. President, Mr. Brosephelt)
· IC Age: 45
· Gender: Male
· Ambitions: Make Sherlock City the best country in Minecraftia, and also to make good decisions
· Personality: Wacky, wayward, unexpected, yet noble and wise (think Teddy Roosevelt)
· Preferred Job: I think it's obvious
· Biography: Theodore Brosephelt, born Theodore William-Kant-Mill Brosephelt, is an ambitious man. He was schooled at Harvard, where he got a master's degree in hunting and protecting. He left Harvard for one month, only to realize he had not learned enough. So he returned and got a masters degree in being wise and kind. His first career was a hunter for a small town outside of Dansville, Conneticut called Ashborough. That job taught him how to protect AND to serve, by killing harmful beasts, and also gathering savory meats for the townsfolk. His second job was not a job at all, after his hunting gig, he wanted to leave Ashborough, which he served for almost 19 years. He left Ashborough, not without first hunting exactly 176 squirrels for the townsfolk and attending a goodbye festival hosted by the mayor of the town, where he barbecued the 176 squirrels. So he left, and crossed oceans, traveling across the world, getting to know every single person around the globe. He traveled for 15 years, and went back home to Ashborough once more. He came back to see that Ashborough had been sold to a big city called Sherlock. He then found out all of the people from Ashborough had been given free apartments in Sherlock City, so he figured he'd go there, to see what oppurutnities lied in store.
Why do I? I have played Roles similiar to that in other Role-plays such as ones in SL (Second LIfe). I also was an applicant on the 2nd or 3rd page. First people start saying they have dead parents just like mine in some way shape for form, I changed my Biography because of that. Now people are doing Bounty Hunter for some reason and no way in h*ll will I change that. I am kinda sick of new applicants that are completely unoriginal.
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An eye for an eye, makes the whole world blind... - Mahatma Ghandi and Eliezer Danzinger
Why do I? I have played Roles similiar to that in other Role-plays such as ones in SL (Second LIfe). I also was an applicant on the 2nd or 3rd page. First people start saying they have dead parents just like mine in some way shape for form, I changed my Biography because of that. Now people are doing Bounty Hunter for some reason and no way in h*ll will I change that. I am kinda sick of new applicants that are completely unoriginal.
Happens all the time. IN a lot of RP servers I've seen, dead parents is an auto denial.
Whitelist Application: Minecraft Name: Grass02 Real life age: 16 How you found this post: Searching the MCF Objective Servers IC Name: Jack Grass IC Age: 18 Gender: Male Ambitions: Own a business, get rich, rule the world, have a wonderful life. Personality: Nice guy, tries to help others out when he can, and from time to time does some unexpected things to survive. Preferred Job: Wants to become a pharmacist to deal drugs. Biography: When Jack was young, his father abandoned him and his mother, leaving them alone and without any income in the small suburban town. Jack slugged his way through school with the help of friends, and he has just recently graduated high school with strong grades in math and science, which he enjoys so much. He wanted to go to college to get a degree in pharmacy, but he wasn't able to scrounge up the money to pay for college, and even the student loans weren't enough to pay. He decided to leave his home town and move to the big city of Sherlock. With the little money he had, he bought an apartment and is starting his day in search of a job and new friends. I see stuff about posting our email to get the IP? Well here mine is: [email protected]
: / Sigh... I hate how some with child's spelling of a 6 year old get accepted into this.. Server needs to make their Standards just a bit higher. I don't mind punctuation too much but, nonetheless I am slightly irritated.
Even the guy above me who wants to become a pharmacist to deal drugs are creative...
: / Sigh... I hate how some with child's spelling of a 6 year old get accepted into this.. Server needs to make their Standards just a bit higher. I don't mind punctuation too much but, nonetheless I am slightly irritated.
Even the guy above me who wants to become a pharmacist to deal drugs are creative...
I guess I should take that as a complement
I see your from Buffalo, and it's funny because I was going to include "Wanted to go to SUNY Buffalo for the pharmacy degree" but thought it wasn't necessary.
· Real life age: 15
· How you found this post: Though browsing for servers
· IC Name: Melissa Woods
· IC Age: 17
· Gender: Female
· Ambitions: Be a game designer/programmer
· Personality: Hipster-ish teenage girl with a bit of attitude
· Preferred Job: To work in the gaming industry as previously said as a programmer or a graphics designer
· Biography: (Explain how your character ended up here. NOTE: All characters start off in a small apartment with 100$. NOTHING ELSE.) Little Melissa was born in a middle class family. Her parents worked regular jobs received their paychecks once a week, you know just like a normal family. Nothing wrong happened in her life she was kind of spoiled actually. At fifteen years old she was forced to move away because her mother has given birth to new baby twins. They couldn't keep up with the costs for three children so one of them had to move away. She had it hard living on the streets with only a cellphone and a mac. She then took a little shack for rent with two seniors in high school. Her roommates treated her pretty nicely, she got a job as a waitress and drew in her free time. Her room mates taught her school related subjects because she didn't have enough money for school. But then one of her roomies started hanging with the wrong crowd and got involved with drugs. He stole from the house and even got as far as killing the other roommate. Melissa ran away. With her one thousand dollars she found a nice place to stay. She rented it and got one hundred back. What happens next is yet to be told. Melissa doesn't know what kind of town she is actually living in.
(excuse my spelling English is not my first language)
His dad owns money to a gang. He couldn't pay it so the gang killed the mother and father, took all valuable objects in the house and then burned it. James was at school when that happened. He came home, found out his parents are dead, ran away and was never seen by his relatives. He does not have friends because he failed to kill the target, everyone on his gang hated his guts and tried to kill him, he has plenty of enemies to go around and no friends. He had no experience, but the leader gave him a chance, he managed to kill his first target, and the more he kill, the more he gets better, and the gang leader starts giving him more important targets to kill until he failed. By the way, he is roaming the streets today because the gang knows where he lives and burned his house down, just like what happened to his parents.
Alright, I'd add that in, as I'm not staff.
Explain more on why she ran away at the beginning, it doesn't make much sense
It's fine, it just sounds odd, as I haven't heard of people just getting rid of a child like that. Maybe you could say she ran away or that her parents put her up for adoption. I'm not sure, you'll have to ask a staff to be sure.
How did she managed to become a Pharmacist, Pharmacist is a very expensive program and I think 8 years of school, I am attending Pharmacy Technician and I am paying $15,000 tuition.
Then you said that she does not have enough money to go to school, If you are a pharmacist, you have enough money to go to school.
And since you are a pharmacist, your roomates should of told you to get pills from the pharmacy, cuz that is what most drug addict friends would ask if you work on a pharmacist or place that has bunch of drugs.
I re-read it and you said her friend thought her about pharmacy related stuff because she does not have money. Her friend must be very smart, and she must be very smart to pass the board exam by just tutors. and why isn't her friend a pharmacist? How did she managed to pay the boarding exam?
· Real life age: 16
· How you found this post: a friend suggested it to me
· IC Name: Ryan Leclaire
· IC Age: 22
· Gender: Male
· Ambitions: To become a police man/guard to help protect/server the city well!
· Personality: A very defensive outgoing man who doesn't take any chances.
· Preferred Job: Guard/police officer
You forgot the Bio
hmm... lets see, since she does not have a lot of money, probably a cleaner, or a guard? a job that requires no education.
I'm no staff, but that app won't fly
Your english is great in the application.
I think what the person means it. That job you picked is realistically impossible because most people that are 17 are in High School. I guess if you're 17 the job you could have it working for a company or business part time and then you go to school.
· Real life age: 15
· How you found this post: Just browsing through the Objective servers
· IC Name: President Theodore Brosephelt (President Brosephelt, President Teddy, Mr. President, Mr. Brosephelt)
· IC Age: 45
· Gender: Male
· Ambitions: Make Sherlock City the best country in Minecraftia, and also to make good decisions
· Personality: Wacky, wayward, unexpected, yet noble and wise (think Teddy Roosevelt)
· Preferred Job: I think it's obvious
· Biography: Theodore Brosephelt, born Theodore William-Kant-Mill Brosephelt, is an ambitious man. He was schooled at Harvard, where he got a master's degree in hunting and protecting. He left Harvard for one month, only to realize he had not learned enough. So he returned and got a masters degree in being wise and kind. His first career was a hunter for a small town outside of Dansville, Conneticut called Ashborough. That job taught him how to protect AND to serve, by killing harmful beasts, and also gathering savory meats for the townsfolk. His second job was not a job at all, after his hunting gig, he wanted to leave Ashborough, which he served for almost 19 years. He left Ashborough, not without first hunting exactly 176 squirrels for the townsfolk and attending a goodbye festival hosted by the mayor of the town, where he barbecued the 176 squirrels. So he left, and crossed oceans, traveling across the world, getting to know every single person around the globe. He traveled for 15 years, and went back home to Ashborough once more. He came back to see that Ashborough had been sold to a big city called Sherlock. He then found out all of the people from Ashborough had been given free apartments in Sherlock City, so he figured he'd go there, to see what oppurutnities lied in store.
Why do I? I have played Roles similiar to that in other Role-plays such as ones in SL (Second LIfe). I also was an applicant on the 2nd or 3rd page. First people start saying they have dead parents just like mine in some way shape for form, I changed my Biography because of that. Now people are doing Bounty Hunter for some reason and no way in h*ll will I change that. I am kinda sick of new applicants that are completely unoriginal.
Happens all the time. IN a lot of RP servers I've seen, dead parents is an auto denial.
Minecraft Name: Grass02
Real life age: 16
How you found this post: Searching the MCF Objective Servers
IC Name: Jack Grass
IC Age: 18
Gender: Male
Ambitions: Own a business, get rich,
rule the world, have a wonderful life.Personality: Nice guy, tries to help others out when he can, and from time to time does some unexpected things to survive.
Preferred Job: Wants to become a pharmacist to deal drugs.
Biography: When Jack was young, his father abandoned him and his mother, leaving them alone and without any income in the small suburban town. Jack slugged his way through school with the help of friends, and he has just recently graduated high school with strong grades in math and science, which he enjoys so much. He wanted to go to college to get a degree in pharmacy, but he wasn't able to scrounge up the money to pay for college, and even the student loans weren't enough to pay. He decided to leave his home town and move to the big city of Sherlock. With the little money he had, he bought an apartment and is starting his day in search of a job and new friends.
I see stuff about posting our email to get the IP? Well here mine is: [email protected]
Even the guy above me who wants to become a pharmacist to deal drugs are creative...
I guess I should take that as a complement
I see your from Buffalo, and it's funny because I was going to include "Wanted to go to SUNY Buffalo for the pharmacy degree" but thought it wasn't necessary.