((@Epicat. In case you hadn't gotten that this is in the fan art section, that the reply you quoted was from about a month ago and that the majority of posts in this thread are not actually discussing running a server, Get this hint:
(Final fact, this is not a server and never will be. Find them in the beta servers section).
This is a thread RP.
And DarkJames, Its looking a lot like you are writing English as a second language, sorry to tell you this but thread RPs often have a high standard for grammar and I've seen others who whack their words onto an online translator and come out with writing skill that simply lacks what is required. This is often a sad thing as they sometimes put a lot of effort into applications, you're no exception. If it is true that you are using an online translator, its probably better if you search the internet for thread RP sites in your native language. If English is your native language then you really need to improve your grammar.))
Marlin could react to Deepton this time. Swinging his broadsword up his left side with both hands and crouching in the same movement, Marlin was able to parry and duck Deepton's incoming swing with a clang of metal. The greatsword, that Deepton seemed to had summoned into his hand, radiated heat as it flew over Marlin's head in a fraction of a second. Marlin seized the opportunity and sprung up to shoulder-barge Deepton in his chest...
The moral of these stories? Play God, and there is a 100% chance you will be mauled to death by leopard men.
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((What I want to know is, WHY IS EVERY APPLICATION HAPPENING JUST AS I BECAME TEMPORARILY IN CHARGE!?! Maddening! It's as though they think I'll be more likely to let them in than Absolete.))
Deepton was hit by the shoulder-barge in the chest, slightly knocking him back a fraction. He was hardly stunned, though, and attacked with a pommel strike directly at Marlin's head.
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I'm always happy just 'cause there isn't a reason to be sad.
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
Marlin wasn't expecting to be whacked in the forehead by Deepton so suddenly, he staggered back and tried to retain balance. Crafty bugger... why is my head so warm? Marlin thought, oblivious to the fact that the blow that he had ducked just before had ignited the blue horse-hair on his helmet in a spectacular fashion.
His heart pounding, Marlin stepped in close and feigned a swing at Deepton's side before pursuing to strike Deepton in the face with his gauntlet...
The moral of these stories? Play God, and there is a 100% chance you will be mauled to death by leopard men.
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including one not even in our group (Arinaisia? WHO?).
[- _ - Your in charge of the RP, but you forget all the members.... Really..? Ari is knocked unconscious until you finish with Deepton. :I The fact that somebody not in the RP knows my character and you don't... Well... I'm a sad panda now ;A; ]
((Don't worry Feo, we all still love you. Have bamboo sad panda ==== (<-- Bamboo).))
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The moral of these stories? Play God, and there is a 100% chance you will be mauled to death by leopard men.
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((Yeah, it's like as Azilla said. I only knew her as Ari, not Arinaisia. Sorry! *Gives Feokris a bamboo*))
Deepton went to block the attack with his broadsword, only to be punched in the face. The punch connected, his nose now bent and bleeding along with a cut or two on his face from the gauntlet Marlin wore.
Deepton then kicked straight at Marlin's face, kung-fu style, faster than any normal person could do. ((Essentially, extremely fast.))
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I'm always happy just 'cause there isn't a reason to be sad.
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
((Probably because we had to say "THIS ISN'T A SERVER" so much all the search engine read was "SERVER"))
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I'm always happy just 'cause there isn't a reason to be sad.
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
Marlin's rise in confidence with a successful attack was taken down just as quickly as he stumbled back and fell over from Deepton's payback, in the form of a quick kick to the head. Marlin's concussion agonisingly throbbed some more in his head as he tried to get himself up again. He raised his head to see Deepton stepping towards him, bleeding from the nose.
((Marlin's spending his turn getting up. He's stumbled about 4 meters from Deepton so the general probably has time to try and land a blow before Marlin rises again. Heavy armour be Heavyin'.))
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The moral of these stories? Play God, and there is a 100% chance you will be mauled to death by leopard men.
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((Oh wow this would look like a GREAT RP to join! I've got a great idea for a character who would be a shapeshifter, but with a curse set upon him. Anyways I hope i'll be able to join and i'll set to work on my application to join, it sounds great!))
((EDIT: Although I realized that this would probably be a little late to send in a app to join since your probably be finishing soon.. .-.))
Species: Human (But is stuck as a feline due to a mishap while testing magic.)
Class: Shapeshifter
Skills: Nightwind is an able Hunter who can easily stalk through the shadows and kill his prey silently and swiftly. Also he can use mindspeak since he is not able to speak Human.
Appearence: Nightwind is a Shapeshifters version of a Cat. He is around the size of a Lynx and has smooth black fur. His eyes are blue and he has several scars over his muzzle. He has razor sharp claws around the size of half a pencil and he has very sharp teeth.
Biography: Nightwind used to be a human but that was a long time ago. Nightwind's human name was Aeran and he lived in the small city of Dunberg. He tutored under a master of shapeshifting for a few years until he decided that he should go off on his own and study shapeshifting. One day around the time he was 19 he suffered a fatal mistake while practicing shapeshifting. He soon got over being an animal but he still regrets the fact that he hastily prepared the spell and he has learned from it. To this day he lives out in the wild as a Warrior Cat.
((Anyways I hope you accept! I got the idea from a book series called Warrior Cats and I just love cats so much so I thought I should be one in this RP. Oh and !#!))
((You guys have put forward some good apps. I'm sort of only an unofficial janitor here so I can't accept you, but I can give you advice:
Nicknick11. Just a couple of things you need to do, firstly add a short bit at the end of your biography as to how he has reached the place that we are at the moment. Secondly, You really need to take the time to do a quick proof-read, we all go a bit Grammar-Nazi around new applications, your most common mistake is not capitalising all of your I s, but there are a few jumbled sentences that look like they need rewriting.
Beowulf. Your enthusiasm is good, so is your writing. We just need a few more details about the development of your character's personality in the biography section; is he an angry man because of his transformation? Or has it made him more reclusive? Anything goes. Also, I hope to all higher deities that your character can communicate with us, otherwise we'll all probably just be like "AH! WILD MONSTER-CAT! KILL IT! KILL IT!".
The moral of these stories? Play God, and there is a 100% chance you will be mauled to death by leopard men.
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((You guys have put forward some good apps. I'm sort of only an unofficial janitor here so I can't accept you, but I can give you advice:
Nicknick11. Just a couple of things you need to do, firstly add a short bit at the end of your biography as to how he has reached the place that we are at the moment. Secondly, You really need to take the time to do a quick proof-read, we all go a bit Grammar-Nazi around new applications, your most common mistake is not capitalising all of your I s, but there are a few jumbled sentences that look like they need rewriting.
Beowulf. Your enthusiasm is good, so is your writing. We just need a few more details about the development of your character's personality in the biography section; is he an angry man because of his transformation? Or has it made him more reclusive? Anything goes. Also, I hope to all higher deities that your character can communicate with us, otherwise we'll all probably just be like "AH! WILD MONSTER-CAT! KILL IT! KILL IT!".
EDIT: Remember...
))
((Oh I put in that he can mindspeak since there would be no other way for him to talk. .-. But thanks i'll put in more for Nightwinds character and personality and I think he'll be over the fact that he's now a cat.))
((EDIT: Also so tired. x.x Maybe I shouldn't stay up this late to look at RP's. It's hard to concetrate when your so tired.))
((Hmm... I'd accept, I'm more just scared Absolete (the original owner of the thread) would be angry I accepted someone he would not. Meh, I'll think about it.
@Nicknick11, Your app is actually pretty good, but your grammar is a little sub-par. Work on that and I'll be more likely to accept you.
@Beowolf, I was almost about to accept you when you said you were a Warriors fan. I just flash-backed to reading the books in school. :tongue.gif:. As MuttonHawk said, work on the bio a bit more. Just don't add anything that involves divine intervention from Starclan or something. :tongue.gif: I feel like such a nerd now. >.>
On a side note, Beowolf's most recent post is the 1000th of this thread! Congratulation! You have win! (old Nintendo reference)))
Deepton saw his blow had connected and Marlin on the ground, ripe for a finishing blow. Lifting up his broadsword, he prepared to bring it down on him...
...Just as James finally caught up to them. James, now directly behind Deepton, delivered a straight kick down low at the back of Deepton's right knee, causing Deepton to fall to his knees, essentially stumbling. He quickly got up, though, and gave James a nice present. And by "present" I mean "punch to the face." The result of Deepton's speed and strength was James flying back a bit, being knocked out cold for a few seconds.
((My turn is essentially also getting up, but now Marlin should have had enough time to get up.))
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I'm always happy just 'cause there isn't a reason to be sad.
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
((It was actually less your spelling and more your grammar I was worried about. Mostly, the lack of punctuation. There are quite a few missing periods and a lot of missing commas. Ah, whatever. You're descriptive when you write, among other qualities, so I'll let you in on the fun, I guess. Accepted.
*Hopes Absolete doesn't kill me for this*))
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I'm always happy just 'cause there isn't a reason to be sad.
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
((Nick, here are a few heads up about Zayces since your character is one.
1. They have a strange color of hair, and color changing eyes that can be any color at all.
2. They are not supposed to exist, and therefore there are not that many of them.
3. They are all mages and can technically have infinite powers. Each of them have "rage mode" and a "special attack," but will faint from loss of energy when they're done with either of them. Their special attack can only be used when their life is threatened. (in this case, mine is becoming invisible and being able to go through things.) The more they practice, the more powers they have.
4. Once they reach a certain age, they posses evil power. (like yours) I, not my character, am the only person that knows why, and the story will soon tell.
5. Most Zayces don't know that they are a separate race.
I didn't notice you breaking any of these rules or whatever you can call them, but I felt you should keep these in mind since you chose a complicated race.))
((Generally, it's complicated crap like that which makes me prefer being a human, Azilla. :tongue.gif: ))
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I'm always happy just 'cause there isn't a reason to be sad.
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
This is a thread RP.
And DarkJames, Its looking a lot like you are writing English as a second language, sorry to tell you this but thread RPs often have a high standard for grammar and I've seen others who whack their words onto an online translator and come out with writing skill that simply lacks what is required. This is often a sad thing as they sometimes put a lot of effort into applications, you're no exception. If it is true that you are using an online translator, its probably better if you search the internet for thread RP sites in your native language. If English is your native language then you really need to improve your grammar.))
Marlin could react to Deepton this time. Swinging his broadsword up his left side with both hands and crouching in the same movement, Marlin was able to parry and duck Deepton's incoming swing with a clang of metal. The greatsword, that Deepton seemed to had summoned into his hand, radiated heat as it flew over Marlin's head in a fraction of a second. Marlin seized the opportunity and sprung up to shoulder-barge Deepton in his chest...
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Deepton was hit by the shoulder-barge in the chest, slightly knocking him back a fraction. He was hardly stunned, though, and attacked with a pommel strike directly at Marlin's head.
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
His heart pounding, Marlin stepped in close and feigned a swing at Deepton's side before pursuing to strike Deepton in the face with his gauntlet...
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[- _ - Your in charge of the RP, but you forget all the members.... Really..? Ari is knocked unconscious until you finish with Deepton. :I The fact that somebody not in the RP knows my character and you don't... Well... I'm a sad panda now ;A; ]
~DED
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<- Please. ._.
Deepton went to block the attack with his broadsword, only to be punched in the face. The punch connected, his nose now bent and bleeding along with a cut or two on his face from the gauntlet Marlin wore.
Deepton then kicked straight at Marlin's face, kung-fu style, faster than any normal person could do. ((Essentially, extremely fast.))
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
Found this.
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
((Marlin's spending his turn getting up. He's stumbled about 4 meters from Deepton so the general probably has time to try and land a blow before Marlin rises again. Heavy armour be Heavyin'.))
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((EDIT: Although I realized that this would probably be a little late to send in a app to join since your probably be finishing soon.. .-.))
My tail... it's so... fluffy. <;o
Name: Nightwind
Age: 23
Species: Human (But is stuck as a feline due to a mishap while testing magic.)
Class: Shapeshifter
Skills: Nightwind is an able Hunter who can easily stalk through the shadows and kill his prey silently and swiftly. Also he can use mindspeak since he is not able to speak Human.
Appearence: Nightwind is a Shapeshifters version of a Cat. He is around the size of a Lynx and has smooth black fur. His eyes are blue and he has several scars over his muzzle. He has razor sharp claws around the size of half a pencil and he has very sharp teeth.
Biography: Nightwind used to be a human but that was a long time ago. Nightwind's human name was Aeran and he lived in the small city of Dunberg. He tutored under a master of shapeshifting for a few years until he decided that he should go off on his own and study shapeshifting. One day around the time he was 19 he suffered a fatal mistake while practicing shapeshifting. He soon got over being an animal but he still regrets the fact that he hastily prepared the spell and he has learned from it. To this day he lives out in the wild as a Warrior Cat.
((Anyways I hope you accept! I got the idea from a book series called Warrior Cats and I just love cats so much so I thought I should be one in this RP. Oh and !#!))
My tail... it's so... fluffy. <;o
Nicknick11. Just a couple of things you need to do, firstly add a short bit at the end of your biography as to how he has reached the place that we are at the moment. Secondly, You really need to take the time to do a quick proof-read, we all go a bit Grammar-Nazi around new applications, your most common mistake is not capitalising all of your I s, but there are a few jumbled sentences that look like they need rewriting.
Beowulf. Your enthusiasm is good, so is your writing. We just need a few more details about the development of your character's personality in the biography section; is he an angry man because of his transformation? Or has it made him more reclusive? Anything goes. Also, I hope to all higher deities that your character can communicate with us, otherwise we'll all probably just be like "AH! WILD MONSTER-CAT! KILL IT! KILL IT!".
EDIT: Remember...
))
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((Oh I put in that he can mindspeak since there would be no other way for him to talk. .-. But thanks i'll put in more for Nightwinds character and personality and I think he'll be over the fact that he's now a cat.))
((EDIT: Also so tired. x.x Maybe I shouldn't stay up this late to look at RP's. It's hard to concetrate when your so tired.))
My tail... it's so... fluffy. <;o
@Nicknick11, Your app is actually pretty good, but your grammar is a little sub-par. Work on that and I'll be more likely to accept you.
@Beowolf, I was almost about to accept you when you said you were a Warriors fan. I just flash-backed to reading the books in school. :tongue.gif:. As MuttonHawk said, work on the bio a bit more. Just don't add anything that involves divine intervention from Starclan or something. :tongue.gif: I feel like such a nerd now. >.>
On a side note, Beowolf's most recent post is the 1000th of this thread! Congratulation! You have win! (old Nintendo reference)))
Deepton saw his blow had connected and Marlin on the ground, ripe for a finishing blow. Lifting up his broadsword, he prepared to bring it down on him...
...Just as James finally caught up to them. James, now directly behind Deepton, delivered a straight kick down low at the back of Deepton's right knee, causing Deepton to fall to his knees, essentially stumbling. He quickly got up, though, and gave James a nice present. And by "present" I mean "punch to the face." The result of Deepton's speed and strength was James flying back a bit, being knocked out cold for a few seconds.
((My turn is essentially also getting up, but now Marlin should have had enough time to get up.))
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
*Hopes Absolete doesn't kill me for this*))
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
1. They have a strange color of hair, and color changing eyes that can be any color at all.
2. They are not supposed to exist, and therefore there are not that many of them.
3. They are all mages and can technically have infinite powers. Each of them have "rage mode" and a "special attack," but will faint from loss of energy when they're done with either of them. Their special attack can only be used when their life is threatened. (in this case, mine is becoming invisible and being able to go through things.) The more they practice, the more powers they have.
4. Once they reach a certain age, they posses evil power. (like yours) I, not my character, am the only person that knows why, and the story will soon tell.
5. Most Zayces don't know that they are a separate race.
I didn't notice you breaking any of these rules or whatever you can call them, but I felt you should keep these in mind since you chose a complicated race.))
<- Please. ._.
Don't take this as there is nothing that could cause sadness. I just mean it's pointless to dwell on it. I mean, depression is so boring.
<- Please. ._.