The Journal of Detah Ramet Written by Austin “Deathtamer666” Sherwood Based off the video game Minecraft, a game created by Markus “Notch” Persson and Mojang Specifications
Day 1: I woke up in a strange place with this journal and several filled inkwells and a quill. I see vast amounts of trees. I attempt to take down one of the trees with my hands. I am successful in this endeavor (coming to the revelation that the logs are incredibly soft) and tear apart the logs into what resembles planks. I see the sun set and decide to dig a pit and cover it the mankshift planks.
Day 2: I was unable to sleep due to the moans, hissing, and what sounded like clanking bones. I am afraid to leave my pit. I overcome my fear and leave to collect more wood. I see what resembles coal near my pit. I try to make pickax from the wood I have been collecting to collect some coal. I am succeful in this and return to my pit. On my way back to my pit I see what looks like a giant spider. I try to avoid the massive spider (trying not to scream or pass out from the pure terror. The spider doesn’t seem to notice me as I return to my pit. I tear the remaining planks into crude sticks and tie the coal chunks to the sticks using some of the thread from my shirt. I manage to light the torch and I stick it into the dirt wall of my pit, illuminating the pit. I look out of my pit only to see that it is sunset. I cover the exit of my pit up with dirt and attempt to fall asleep.
Day 3: I couldn’t fall asleep again, more of those fear inducing sounds. I left the pit in search of food and something to drink. I travel what felt like 3 miles befor I found a river. I drink the waters of the river, savoring their pure taste. I see a lone pig along the riverside and I attempt to kill it. I sneak up behind the wild pig and attempt to break the pig’s neck. I am unsuccessful in this and am left hungry. I return to the pit. On my way back I find what looks like wild wheat. I take the wheat and eat the grains, saving some of the grain for re-planting. I return to the pit as the sun sets.
Day 7: During the past few days I was attacked by what looked like a group of skeletons with bows and lost the pit along with most of my supplies. I ran away from the pit, to the river. The skeletons are far behind me by I am still shaken from this event but I’ve been gathering wood to make a better shelter.
Day 8: Ive started to make a small hut out of the wood.
Day 10: I finished my hut (with torches).
Day 11: Ive started to make wall around my hut. Went to sleep early.
Day 12: Ive made a discovery: The skeletons hate light; this could help me defend my hut.
Day 14: Ive finished my wall. Went to sleep early.
Day 15: Started to farm the wheat I found.
Day 16: Found a cave with what looked like iron ore and coal veins
Day 18: Found a heard of sheep, gathered wool for a bed.
Day 25: The resent days have been filled with fruitful labor. I’m going to take a few days of to relax and explore the cave I found earlier
Day 26: I started to explore the cave. At the end of the cave I found a chest, inside the chest I found a book with the title: The book of the Fanatikern. I dragged the chest along with the book back to the hut.
Day 27: I started to read the book I had found. The book appears to be a book of worship about a man known as Notch. According to the book Notch created this world and a world known as The Nether and created and enchanted various creatures of this world. The book also gave instructions on how to make a shrine to Notch that required diamond. The more of this book I read, the more I believed in Notch and revered him as a god.
Day 30: My break is over and I shall start to mine downward in search of diamond for the shrine
Day 50?: Ive been mining non-stop, only returning to the surface for food and water. I have lost count of the days and have stopped counting.
Day ???: I have finally found enough diamond to make the shrine.
Day ???: I have started the shrine to Notch.
Day ???: I have finally finished the shrine to Notch
Day ???: [the page is stained with blood] A Skeleton breached my defenses along with what looked like a four legged, green creature. Green creatur exploded. Skeleton sot me. dying.
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not gonna lie, it was rather unimpressive, it was too Wall'o'Texty for me to finish the entire thing, and after half of the story, i just started skimming. There appeared to be alot of Typos which any aspiring story writer should eradicate in a simple 5 minute proofread, and there wasnt alot that went into the story after the first few entries, it basically became : "did what any normal minecraft player did today, Plan on doing the same tomorrow" honestly, the best way to get a well written and interesting story is to add pictures of your experiences, have a specific scenario in mind about what you want to do with the story and the world, and just be alot more descriptive with your stories and each entry, make them longer and try to fix the flow, add a good beginning to each day and a good end to each night
not gonna lie, it was rather unimpressive, it was too Wall'o'Texty for me to finish the entire thing, and after half of the story, i just started skimming. There appeared to be alot of Typos which any aspiring story writer should eradicate in a simple 5 minute proofread, and there wasnt alot that went into the story after the first few entries, it basically became : "did what any normal minecraft player did today, Plan on doing the same tomorrow" honestly, the best way to get a well written and interesting story is to add pictures of your experiences, have a specific scenario in mind about what you want to do with the story and the world, and just be alot more descriptive with your stories and each entry, make them longer and try to fix the flow, add a good beginning to each day and a good end to each night
1. the errors were intentional, as this is supposed to be a journal. people make errors when writing in a journal
2. would you say this is a bad fan-fic or just a mediocre fanfic
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Founder, Leadership Organizer, Original Leader, and Occasional Diplomat of P.A.E.C.T
Written by Austin “Deathtamer666” Sherwood
Based off the video game Minecraft, a game created by Markus “Notch” Persson and Mojang Specifications
Day 2: I was unable to sleep due to the moans, hissing, and what sounded like clanking bones. I am afraid to leave my pit. I overcome my fear and leave to collect more wood. I see what resembles coal near my pit. I try to make pickax from the wood I have been collecting to collect some coal. I am succeful in this and return to my pit. On my way back to my pit I see what looks like a giant spider. I try to avoid the massive spider (trying not to scream or pass out from the pure terror. The spider doesn’t seem to notice me as I return to my pit. I tear the remaining planks into crude sticks and tie the coal chunks to the sticks using some of the thread from my shirt. I manage to light the torch and I stick it into the dirt wall of my pit, illuminating the pit. I look out of my pit only to see that it is sunset. I cover the exit of my pit up with dirt and attempt to fall asleep.
Day 3: I couldn’t fall asleep again, more of those fear inducing sounds. I left the pit in search of food and something to drink. I travel what felt like 3 miles befor I found a river. I drink the waters of the river, savoring their pure taste. I see a lone pig along the riverside and I attempt to kill it. I sneak up behind the wild pig and attempt to break the pig’s neck. I am unsuccessful in this and am left hungry. I return to the pit. On my way back I find what looks like wild wheat. I take the wheat and eat the grains, saving some of the grain for re-planting. I return to the pit as the sun sets.
Day 7: During the past few days I was attacked by what looked like a group of skeletons with bows and lost the pit along with most of my supplies. I ran away from the pit, to the river. The skeletons are far behind me by I am still shaken from this event but I’ve been gathering wood to make a better shelter.
Day 8: Ive started to make a small hut out of the wood.
Day 10: I finished my hut (with torches).
Day 11: Ive started to make wall around my hut. Went to sleep early.
Day 12: Ive made a discovery: The skeletons hate light; this could help me defend my hut.
Day 14: Ive finished my wall. Went to sleep early.
Day 15: Started to farm the wheat I found.
Day 16: Found a cave with what looked like iron ore and coal veins
Day 18: Found a heard of sheep, gathered wool for a bed.
Day 25: The resent days have been filled with fruitful labor. I’m going to take a few days of to relax and explore the cave I found earlier
Day 26: I started to explore the cave. At the end of the cave I found a chest, inside the chest I found a book with the title: The book of the Fanatikern. I dragged the chest along with the book back to the hut.
Day 27: I started to read the book I had found. The book appears to be a book of worship about a man known as Notch. According to the book Notch created this world and a world known as The Nether and created and enchanted various creatures of this world. The book also gave instructions on how to make a shrine to Notch that required diamond. The more of this book I read, the more I believed in Notch and revered him as a god.
Day 30: My break is over and I shall start to mine downward in search of diamond for the shrine
Day 50?: Ive been mining non-stop, only returning to the surface for food and water. I have lost count of the days and have stopped counting.
Day ???: I have finally found enough diamond to make the shrine.
Day ???: I have started the shrine to Notch.
Day ???: I have finally finished the shrine to Notch
Day ???: [the page is stained with blood] A Skeleton breached my defenses along with what looked like a four legged, green creature. Green creatur exploded. Skeleton sot me. dying.
Leadership Organizer, Original Leader,and Occasional Diplomatof P.A.E.C.T1. the errors were intentional, as this is supposed to be a journal. people make errors when writing in a journal
2. would you say this is a bad fan-fic or just a mediocre fanfic
Leadership Organizer, Original Leader,and Occasional Diplomatof P.A.E.C.T