My name is Thoren. I was given the name because I am a great warrior, having saved the people of my city many times. I had saved the city from the great war over Nether. It all started when one man read up on mysterious anomalies. His name: Alexander.
He read and read, and stopped once he found something on another realm, called the Nether, or in many people's opinion, Heaven. That was when it went wrong. He accidentally miss-heard that it was Heaven. He researched it for many years trying to find a way to get to the Nether. One day, he found a book called Netherworld. He flipped through it and soon found a page with a diagram of the portal. He grabbed flint and steel and went on a journey for a lost resource, long ago had been destroyed. It was obsidian. Nobody knew why all of it had been destroyed, and who had destroyed it. The land was explored for billions upon billions of chunks, more than reachable in a Human year. Minecraftians knew of the Gods, which there where millions of, called Humans. One of them, the greatest of all, was named Notch.
He was the one who was told to have come down in Minecraftian form to destroy all obsidian for unknown reasons. Then came Alexander. He spawned at the very center of the great city. He became determined after 4 Minecraftian years of life. He traveled and traveled to find obsidian. Some Time Lag, as they call it, where everything freezes for a second, happened. It only happened when some lava hit water, or new land was generated. Or, in this case, both...
Alexander brought in torches into a nearby cave. He saw some light. He thought, "aww man, someone already here..." But it was lava. Colliding with water. There, he saw a dark purple rock. A lot of it. He blocked the flow of water, and began to mine. He got 4 pieces when an arrow flew past his head! 3 skeletons standing in the entrance to the cave! Alexander pulled out his Diamond sword and used brute force to take them down, lighting up the rest of the cave with torches. He continued to mine the obsidian as nightfall came. He gathered a full stack, as the obsidian was in a huge deposit. Daylight came by again, and he went out to find a cliffside. He built a 4-meter wide frame, then 5 meters tall. Then filled the top part. He used the Flint and Steel to light the portal.
That's when the beginning of the end occurred. And when the warrior named Thoren spawned...
Part 2 will come later today. Hope you enjoy the first part.
Edit: why is it in this forum? Move it to the Survival Single Player thread please. Unless since it has to do with the Nether, then leave it here. You decide, mods. Either move it to SSP forum or leave it put.
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"It's not nice to hate anybody, unless the person you hate is a complete idiot."
I want Thoren and Alexander to have an epic battle at or near the end
Woah, I am definately going to do that. I was just thinking that Alexander could become evil in the Nether.
SPOILER!
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GENERATION 18: The first time you see this, copy it into your sig on any forum and add 1 to the generation. Social experiment.
Umm
Heres an Idea
Alexander enters this "Heaven" and realizes its hell on.. dimension.
He finds resources that he thinks could be used in the real world, and he brings them back to sell them.
But the next few times he enters, It just gets crazier and crazier, where he finds zombie pigmen and ghasts, all having havoc in the world of The Nether, which leads him to craziness, making money off of it only to be closer to death each time, He releases the hell monsters into the real world, going crazy, causing havoc himself, trying to take over the minecraft world.
Any thoughts?
I know, I'm bad.
I like it. I want to see more! I'd love to read any story that can figure out the Nether...go for it!
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Present to me danger.
Present to me a real element.
Show me your power. Show me what it is that makes you so fierce.
Is this all you've got, dear Nether?
Is this all you've got? Click me! Save the slimes!
Well then, nevermind my story. I will not continue to write this due to bad ratings.
Still write it! Keep going but just think about what went wrong and make it better.
I suggest making some small slow bits in the story but not many, if you were always high on the excitement it would become average.
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Talent didn't go anywhere, it just gets lost in all the noise. You have to find it.
Well then, nevermind my story. I will not continue to write this due to bad ratings.
Still write it! Keep going but just think about what went wrong and make it better.
I suggest making some small slow bits in the story but not many, if you were always high on the excitement it would become average.
But I need more suggestions, and some constructive criticism to help me improve.
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"It's not nice to hate anybody, unless the person you hate is a complete idiot."
My name is Thoren. I was given the name because I am a great warrior, having saved the people of my city many times. I had saved the city from the great war over Nether. It all started when one man read up on mysterious anomalies. His name: Alexander.
He read and read, and stopped once he found something on another realm, called the Nether, or in many people's opinion, Heaven. That was when it went wrong. He accidentally miss-heard that it was Heaven. He researched it for many years trying to find a way to get to the Nether. One day, he found a book called Netherworld. He flipped through it and soon found a page with a diagram of the portal. He grabbed flint and steel and went on a journey for a lost resource, long ago had been destroyed. It was obsidian. Nobody knew why all of it had been destroyed, and who had destroyed it. The land was explored for billions upon billions of chunks, more than reachable in a Human year. Minecraftians knew of the Gods, which there where millions of, called Humans. One of them, the greatest of all, was named Notch.
He was the one who was told to have come down in Minecraftian form to destroy all obsidian for unknown reasons. Then came Alexander. He spawned at the very center of the great city. He became determined after 4 Minecraftian years of life. He traveled and traveled to find obsidian. Some Time Lag, as they call it, where everything freezes for a second, happened. It only happened when some lava hit water, or new land was generated. Or, in this case, both...
Alexander brought in torches into a nearby cave. He saw some light. He thought, "aww man, someone already here..." But it was lava. Colliding with water. There, he saw a dark purple rock. A lot of it. He blocked the flow of water, and began to mine. He got 4 pieces when an arrow flew past his head! 3 skeletons standing in the entrance to the cave! Alexander pulled out his Diamond sword and used brute force to take them down, lighting up the rest of the cave with torches. He continued to mine the obsidian as nightfall came. He gathered a full stack, as the obsidian was in a huge deposit. Daylight came by again, and he went out to find a cliffside. He built a 4-meter wide frame, then 5 meters tall. Then filled the top part. He used the Flint and Steel to light the portal.
That's when the beginning of the end occurred. And when the warrior named Thoren spawned...
Part 2 will come later today. Hope you enjoy the first part.
Edit: why is it in this forum? Move it to the Survival Single Player thread please. Unless since it has to do with the Nether, then leave it here. You decide, mods. Either move it to SSP forum or leave it put.
Search it on Youtube.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lejd4UFbYSU
Woah, I am definately going to do something similar to that.
SPOILER!
^Clicky^Clickly^Clickly^
GENERATION 18: The first time you see this, copy it into your sig on any forum and add 1 to the generation. Social experiment.
Heres an Idea
Alexander enters this "Heaven" and realizes its hell on.. dimension.
He finds resources that he thinks could be used in the real world, and he brings them back to sell them.
But the next few times he enters, It just gets crazier and crazier, where he finds zombie pigmen and ghasts, all having havoc in the world of The Nether, which leads him to craziness, making money off of it only to be closer to death each time, He releases the hell monsters into the real world, going crazy, causing havoc himself, trying to take over the minecraft world.
Any thoughts?
I know, I'm bad.
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Present to me a real element.
Show me your power. Show me what it is that makes you so fierce.
Is this all you've got, dear Nether?
Is this all you've got?
Usually if you get writers block this early in any story, it's not going to be a very good story.
I also tend to find your writing style a bit melo-dramatic. EVERY point is a dramatic point, if you know what I mean.
Still write it! Keep going but just think about what went wrong and make it better.
I suggest making some small slow bits in the story but not many, if you were always high on the excitement it would become average.
http://www.minerwars.com/?aid=640
But I need more suggestions, and some constructive criticism to help me improve.